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Lets just blame Palpatine for kicking us off Coruscant.
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Lets just blame Palpatine for kicking us off Coruscant.


Blame Anakin for stopping Mace from killing the evil Palpy.
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We are forgetting that it was all Jar Jar Bink's fault for giving Palpy Emergency Powers in the first place!
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We are forgetting that it was all Jar Jar Bink's fault for giving Palpy Emergency Powers in the first place!


and it was all Qui Gons fault for saving Jar Jar.
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and it was all Qui Gons fault for saving Jar Jar.


It was all Palpatine's fault for sending Qui-Gon.

Ooops, I guess it was his fault all along.
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"Yeah, blame someone far enough back and some cell gets blamed for splitting in two."

Five points to whoever gets the quote.
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"Yeah, blame someone far enough back and some cell gets blamed for splitting in two."Five points to whoever gets the quote.


You realize with the advent of Google, those points are worthless, so you can stick 'em where the sun don't shine: Seattle, Washington. Google that reference.
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Well obviously not or you would have told me what it was from.

Points still apply.
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Well obviously not or you would have told me what it was from.Points still apply.


Saul Tigh. I'll take those points now.
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I'm guessing this is a closed rp if not ill post a char sheet.
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Nope, welcome to join up. Pro-Jedi, Anti-Jedi, Jedi.
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name: Adrian Cade
age: 17
gender: male
species: human
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weapons:

blades are silver
other equipment: holocommunicator and vibroknife
history: He never knew his parents or his home planet, but when he was a child his master found him to be force sensitive and brought him before the council, they agreed to let her raise and train him. When he went into the caves to find a crystal he was in tune with(on his masters orders) he found rare crystals of pure silver. While rare this was not unheard of and he was allowed to use these crystals to make his blades. Modeling his first lightsaber off of his masters in an almost exact copy except with a longer hilt and the second was purely of his own design. Throughout his life his master had guided him and taught him the ways of the force and she had become almost like a mother to him. Adrian was a jedi padawan and fought with his master alongside clones. They had been to many planets and fought on many fields sometimes with other jedi and sometimes they battled alone fighting alongside one another and fueling off one another. When order 66 was given his master sensed it and pushed him off a cliff into an ocean, but died defending her padawan. Adrian was distraught at the death of his master because he had been raised by her since he was a boy. He was now stuck on a hostile world with a battalion of clone troopers and was completely on his own. Adrian infiltrated the clone base in the dead of night and stole a small ship to return to the temple, but along the way realized that what had befallen his master had probably befallen many more so he decided to search for survivors that he can bring together and defend. Adrian sets out to find other survivors of order 66 and to protect and safeguard the way of the jedi.
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drallinix said
name: Adrian Cadeage: 17gender: malespecies: humanappearance: weapons: except both are redother equipment: holocommunicator, vibroknife, and two silver crystals that are hidden inside his bracershistory: He was originally a jedi padawan but his master fell before clone troopers and as he was overcome with rage he slaughtered them. After doing this he searched archive after archive until he found a way to grow synthetic crystals. He was able to grow two red saber crystals and replaced his own silver ones with them so as to blend in with sith and try to avoid being a target. He is tainted by the dark side and has the customary yellow eyes, but he remembers his jedi training and tries his best to be a good person. He wishes to one day kill the emperor and avenge his master even though he knows it is against his teachings.


A) We're only a short time after Order 66 so he hasn't had enough time to grow cyrstals.
B) You would still be targeted by the Sith as Palps would see you as a threat either way.
C) The whole thing with the Dark Side, as though you start off wanting to do the good thing it deteriorates and your view becomes twisted. You instead want to control things as you think you can make them better, and you basically go down that path and get to different levels of severity.
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I corrected it and it wasn't for tricking people like palpatine or Anakin they were meant to trick basic imperials, smugglers, and normal citizens but I got rid of that.
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drallinix said
I corrected it and it wasn't for tricking people like palpatine or Anakin they were meant to trick basic imperials, smugglers, and normal citizens but I got rid of that.


Imperials would still know, as those who are allowed such weapons are Imp Agents and have ID beyond a lightsaber.

However by fixing it you just made it shorter.

Some back story dude, I'm not looking for a lot. Just look at what other people have put down. I mean you're a Jedi and there was a war just on.
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ok well I edited and attempted to flesh out the character some
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First of all drallinx. I just want to remind you that this is casual, so I'd like to remind you to use capitals or at least try to use them where appropriate (Name:, Age: etc.)

Now onto your history. I'll break it down to point out the main concerns I have.

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history: He never knew his parents or his home planet, but when he was a child his master found him to be force sensitive and brought him before the council, they agreed to let her raise and train him.


Knowing your parents isn't really a major issue, however you would not be raised by one master. You would be part of one of the clans that younglings form and live with switching between many different teachers. One of the reasons for this is so that attachments aren't formed and people do not gain father or mother figures.

Drallinx said When he went into the caves to find a crystal he was in tune with(on his masters orders) he found rare crystals of pure silver. While rare this was not unheard of and he was allowed to use these crystals to make his blades. Modeling his first lightsaber off of his masters in an almost exact copy except with a longer hilt and the second was purely of his own design.


Upon becoming a Padawan you would not instantly construct two lightsabers. Why? Because you would not know any lightsaber form capable of wielding two lightsabers.

Drallinx said Adrian was a jedi padawan and fought with his master alongside clones. They had been to many planets and fought on many fields sometimes with other jedi and sometimes they battled alone fighting alongside one another and fueling off one another.


An example mission wouldn't go amiss here. You don't need to write an AAR but it would help.

Drallinx said When order 66 was given his master sensed it and pushed him off a cliff into an ocean, but died defending her padawan.


Very few Jedi managed to sense it however as she was pushing you off a cliff not doing anything major I will allow that. However don't go sensing everything.

Drallinx said Adrian infiltrated the clone base in the dead of night and stole a small ship


A little more on this. You were just pushed off a cliff. How did you survive?

I want you to think for a moment. Whether or not you believe you know enough on the franchise. If you don't you can go for an even younger player and actually learn IC or you can hop on the IRC or start a PM conversation with myself and we'll help you out. However at this rate I'm coming close to outflat denying you and I just want you to know that.
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Sep said
Well obviously not or you would have told me what it was from.Points still .


Well apparently when I google it, you come up Sep...
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Tis all right. Captain Jordan has already claimed the points. Colonel Saul Tigh. Battlestar Galactica.
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Well, that took longer than it should have... ^_^'
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