Are we allowed to make more than one character? Just thought I'd ask before starting anything.

Chev said
Are we allowed to make more than one character? Just thought I'd ask before starting anything.

Yes.

And Kaitou that was a great temp!

hmm, a few things.

For the Fallen's Eyes KG, I'm not sure why they need to be able to see chakra networks. I'm seeing that a bit too much often, which is weird since it's meant to be something monopolized by the Hyuga clan.

Hornet Style: Decapitating Scissor. You mentioned ice here, did you mean water? Since I'm pretty sure ice is something that can only be made through a certain KG.

Plasma Release: Asteroid. Some of the wording confused me here. "A concussion blast is released from Remi smashing two Plasma Release: Asteroid jutsus together." I don't really know what even one of these jutsu does, so it's quite hard to get a grasp of it's effect.

Sorry, I went through a few different ideas and I guess I missed these changes in my clean up. I'll change those really quickly.

I have a little bit of freetime. I think I will give this a shot, if you still are looking for characters?

Durnehviir said
I have a little bit of freetime. I think I will give this a shot, if you still are looking for characters?

Go ahead, just be mindful of the rules.

Durnehviir said
I have a little bit of freetime. I think I will give this a shot, if you still are looking for characters?

we could use some Empire characters since a lot people decided to go with the rebels

Piercing Light said
hmm, a few things.For the Fallen's Eyes KG, I'm not sure why they need to be able to see chakra networks. I'm seeing that a bit too much often, which is weird since it's meant to be something monopolized by the Hyuga clan.Hornet Style: Decapitating Scissor. You mentioned ice here, did you mean water? Since I'm pretty sure ice is something that can only be made through a certain KG.Plasma Release: Asteroid. Some of the wording confused me here. "A concussion blast is released from Remi smashing two Plasma Release: Asteroid jutsus together." I don't really know what even one of these jutsu does, so it's quite hard to get a grasp of it's effect.

made my changes

SoleAccord said
And Kaitou that was a great temp!

Thank you. It is a character that I've had in my back log of needed to be used characters. Changed a few things to fit the rp and voila. I hope my posts live up to my sheet. Only been a few months since Guildfall as they call it but, talent can slip when not used.

Also that avy. Just half of Sasuke's face is cute. haha

SoleAccord said
Go ahead, just be mindful of the rules.

Dat avi, dat Sasuke.
Sasuke is my fav.

Thinking of making an Empire OC any ideas what to incorporate?

Masaki Haruna said
Dat avi, dat Sasuke.Sasuke is my fav.Thinking of making an Empire OC any ideas what to incorporate?

Drop a pm to me, we can talk.

Tetsujin, Iyana.




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Name: Shuya Hieantayatu
Title/Nickname: Crashwhite
Age: 17
Gender: Female

Appearance: Link

Personality: Shuya is a good girl with good girl morals. She’s a hardworker and somewhat paranoid. She’s innocent and naive when it comes to dealing with others. She spent most of her life with only her small family and often times is awkward and ignorant of outside cultures. She can say things randomly that make little sense and she talks to herself aloud a lot. She is a little clumsy around boys and girls her own age and can come off overly respectful to those older than her or in a position of authority over her. Despite her country girl upbringing she is somewhat of a tyrant in battle emphasising pulverizing the opponent with little mercy and the focused intent to break them. She is a complete brute in a fight, which completely contrasts her awkward outward appearance and personality. Her strength is greater than normal and her skill is more instinct than it is practiced and trained arts. Although powerful, skillful, violent and explosive, she values life above all else. She does not kill, not even an enemy, and it would take her a great deal of stress to ever kill someone and would forever regret such an action having had to endure so much death in her lifetime.

One key part of her character is that she misses her older brother deeply, but hides it well. She has the strength to punch a crater in a tree or wrestle a bear until he taps out, yet the slightest reminder of her brother could bring a tear to her eye and shake her heart. She’s quite emotional, especially in regards to her family, and protective over things she cares about. She holds somewhat of a sacrificial-impulsive persona in which she’d throw herself in the flames to protect a loved one. This is especially true for her mother, whom she’d do anything for. She has an enormous heart and sometimes has trouble hiding the fact that she does.

Recent History: Shuya was born on the outskirts of what was formerly the land hidden in the grass. Her family have always done everything that they could to be separate from politics, nindo and the demands of the state. It has been like that for an uncounted generations that their kind were always isolated and distanced from most of civilization. Their lives were poor and humble and highly ethical and moral. However, when the war took the world their family was called to fight.

It was during the war that Shuya demonstrated her incredible capacity for...Violence. Along side her older brother, with whom she would always spar with, the two were quite the disastrous pair. However, they were not ninja and her brother, father, and younger sister were all killed during the war. Shuya was drafted into a short, yet strict, rehabilitation program and now is a subservient participant of the Empire. She doesn’t like the Empire, but she doesn’t wish to stand against them again. They have made threats against her mother before and she doesn’t want to lose the last bit of family that she has left. So, she does whatever the Empire says so long as it closely follows the morals she was raised into.

Over the passed couple months she’s been branded a ninja of the empire, or weapon of the empire, and given the rank of Chuunin, because she can easily beat up Chuunin and Genin alike, and works the occasional mission that they require of her. Due to working under the Empire she will beat the crud out of any rebels that she needs to, simply because it is the most beneficial for her mother and the least stressful for herself.

Allegiance: Empire [Loosely]

Chakra Nature: None

Rank: Chuunin [Not a Ninja]





Skills:

•Hand to hand combat emphasis - fist fighting, athletics, acrobatics, agility, endurance/stamina, grappling, wrestling, and reflex. She has good physical strength to the point that it’d be hard to best her in a arm wrestling contest. She isn’t just strong but she’s agile and quick on her feet.

•Intellect - good with maps, good with tactics and physical practicals, somewhat charismatic, knowledge of traps and general ninja tricks and mannerisms. Excellent test taker and knows some bits about biology, ecology, and geology. She has good senses too. She can sometimes feel the sensation of being watched or sense that moment right before stepping into a trap. She has an intuition not to be ignored.

Tools:
•Some generic medical supplies -gauze, bandages, wraps, antiseptic, wipes, tissues.

Shuriken

Other:
-There are antidotes to SPI, which would make the user mostly immune to the flu-like symptoms that follow and resistant, not entirely, to the damaging effect of the toxins.

-Animals do not like Shuya.

-Shuya is terrible with genjutsu and, despite having excellent chakra control, terrible with elemental ninjutsu. (She actually does not have an elemental affinity at all).

-Shuya, due to her ability, must wear gloves all the time.

-Shuya was given a ninja rank as a formality. She doesn’t actually practice ninjutsu nor does she possess the stealth or slooth of one. However, she possess the strength of a Chuunin comparable, thus the Empire branded her with a Chuunin rank and send her on Chuunin missions from time to time. Shuya never attended a ninja academy or a promotional exam. As such, she will mostly likely never attain a Jounin comparable rank.

Did you get the name Crash from Fairy Tail? Not to say that it's not a commonly used word but, the way it destroys things give me that idea. I really love it though, Durn. So thorough. Puts my sheet to shame. Heh

Iyana is clearly a boy with boobs.

@Kaitou Kid, nope! I haven't read Fairly Tail since the D*****s came back from the past. It was getting so painfully predictable. I can't think of where Crash is from, especially if it happened prior to the tournament.

So...I was looking through the characters and the rest of the thread to see if i missed something and I saw something I thought i needed to comment on extensively for the GM and everyone else's benefit. I know I'm just a player and just now showed interest/put up a CS, but I hope these points will be read and considered. Otherwise things in the RP's IC could get really...out of hand really fast...and not in the good way either. Not saying all the points are correct, just making observations from the information presented.

[hider=Worrisome Part 1]
Excerpts all from Hyakune su Jikankizami, Ra.

Kuroi Kamen said Each of these bolts are sealed to allow no passage of chakra into them, but to allow chakra out, and are surprisingly difficult to cut through (they resist most swords easily). In addition to this aspect of the veil, it is also a mask that covers Ra’s ears, mouth, nose and eyes. This mask is covered in seals that filter out any harmful substances that would enter Ra’s body, in addition to dampening any particularly loud sounds or sounds designed to have an adverse effect on the body.

So it filters pretty much anything harmful to her in the entire area of her head, more or less. She can't be poisoned, drowned, influenced by sound-based genjutsu, deafened, blinded, etc etc. Anything that you decide is harmful is filtered by the seals on the fabric. She can even potentially block swords (and likely other weapons) with it, even though it's simple cloth (inscribed with fuuinjutsu of course). I bet the momentum/inertia in those weapons or blows is also nullified by the seals because it's "harmful."

Tōsei no Eien; Tenchi Gensō said Some techniques, such as genjutsu, can be forced upon victims if they are simply in range of the aura.

So wait, let me get this straight. The aura allows the user to activate their jutsu anywhere within it/from any point of it the user chooses? That would include jutsu utilzied through the Chigoku Inkan I presume, which means if you're standing within 20 ft of Ra, you can suddenly be on fair, or be paralyzed, or...just be dead. I mean, she's a kage level ninja, she likely has an amount of chakra capable of fueling a seal that is marked "death," not to mention a seal that has a more specific/elaborate method of execution, pun intended.

In addition to that, you can force people into genjutsu if they're merely within range. That's devious and kinda...broken tbh.

However, it's made worse by this methinks:

Tenchi Gensō said Through the Tenchi Gensō, the user is easily able to lull people into genjutsu as long as they are within the chakra aura, and minor [B-Ranked or less] genjutsu can be forced onto an opponent simply by pointing at them.

B ranked techniques are jounin level, more or less, meaning genjutsu utilized by the typical jounin (who are...kinda elite) can simply be handwaved upon someone as long as they're within 20 ft. Idk what's worse, the fact that this sentence exists, or the fact that it was blindly accepted :/

地 said The true strengths of the technique lie in its subtle abilities to manipulate illusions, as well as blur the boundary in the mind that separates illusion from reality.

It goes on to explain that the Chi (earth) aspect more or less makes the user's genjutsu more believable. They aren't infallible, just harder to notice and thus break. This is compounded on the fact that Ra can handwave people into B rank or lower genjutsu techniques.

Yeah, let that sink in.

天 said With Ten, two things happen: Ra transcends the traditional plane in terms of genjutsu, and can no longer become subject to any genjutsu bar her own under any circumstances.

If you're confused, this means that the Ten(Heaven) aspect makes Ra completely immune to all genjutsu except her own, not to mention that her veil pretty much does that already. She had redundant defenses against genjutsu. She can also influence the genjutsu of other people making it possible for her to hijack other people's genjutsu. Oh yeah, and if you read the first part of her Kekkei genkai, this means that she could potentially hijack the chakra of these genjutsu as well and repurpose it either with her immense chakra control and/or her second Kekkei genkai, the Chigoku Inkan. Oh yeah, this also means that any genjutsu someone tries to cast on her not only will not effect her, but she can (and probably will) gain control of it.

However, this aura comes at a steep cost: As the Kekkei Genkai manifests and the user gains their unique version, they are locked into that "version"'s jutsu style and become unable to utilise their chakra for anything outside of it. Ra's Tenchi Gensō has locked her in to the fields of Genjutsu and Fuuinjutsu, and she is unable to use her chakra for any purpose outside of this bloodline, genjutsu or fuuinjutsu.

This really isn't much of a weakness/cost considering all of the things that her two kekkei genkai can do (not to mention her taijutsu, which seems to just hide in the background as an irrelevant detail somehow...).

Chigoku Inkan said However, the power of the kanji is only as powerful as the chakra used to create it and the meaning of the word E.G. - Using the word ‘Fire’ is a dilute meaning as it can encompass anything - however, Inferno, Scorch, Blaze, et cetera are more specific and can produce more powerful effects, but do cost more chakra. The longer the word, or even a chain of words is/are, the more influence the user has but they cost more chakra to use. Some kanji, such as “invincible”, are not feasible simply because the user does not have enough chakra in their body to create such an effect. While the technique is versatile, it is not overly powerful.

I'm pretty sure I already went over this, but while this does limit it a bit, it only limits the intensity somewhat. Plus, if the kanji are arranged properly specific effects might not cost more chakra, same goes for powerful ones. It's all about how the jutsu are created, which is why this Kekkei genkai is just as bad as the first one in terms of brokenness.

Chigoku Inkan Weakness said The seals are constructs of pure chakra, brought into existence by the force of will of the user. In order to exert their effect upon an opponent, the Kanji must touch them. This can be done within half a foot of the user, or the Kanji can be launched at an opponent. As constructs of chakra, the seals are easily overpowered by a burst of foreign chakra. As the power of the seal is derived from its purity of shape, a well-controlled burst of chakra will split its form and break its power, rendering it useless. In addition, the user may not create kanji for elemental techniques of a chakra nature that they do not possess. The Chigoku Inkan does not, in of itself [I.e. there is not a technique in the jutsu section that says otherwise] possess the ability to infract upon the laws of the realm it is used in: I.e., it cannot defy physics. It cannot make you invincible. It cannot create black holes.

Yeah, but Ra also has her other Kekkei genkai. Idk if this is the case, but that Kekkei genkai states that the user can activate jutsu at any point within the aura. So I figure that'd apply to this as well, right? If so, that's...terrifying, and no fun for anyone fighting this character.[/hider]

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[hider=Worrisome Part 2]Ra has 29 custom jutsu + all canon genjutsu that aren't tied to a bloodline. Consider that.

Saimin Suimin said The Saimin Suimin is a very useful genjutsu that works by separating an opponent from their motor controls and rendering them unconscious. The technique is resistible as it works via an ‘addiction’ method of induction - looking at the chakra which Saimin Suimin stems from leaves the image of a swinging golden pendant that leaves a delicate golden trail - the more you look at it, the more you want to look at it, and if you stare for long enough [7-8 seconds is enough for A ranked nin if Ra uses a moderate amount of Chakra] then you are placed under the genjutsu’s effect.

Of a "moderate amount of chakra" makes the technique A rank, that's okay to some degree, but that means anything and anyone below that could be handwaved into falling unconscious/losing control of their motor abilities. Is it apparent why the whole aura thing is a problem yet?

Also, considering how skilled Ra is stated to be in terms of manipulating people, chakra, not to mention her potent use of yin/genjutsu the weakness of this technique is subverted completely.

Ome Itetsuku said This jutsu causes the victim’s vision to be literally frozen....

No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem.

Kui-Hikari said Creates an endless flash of light that normal vision will struggle to see through, and can disorient mentally weaker people.

No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem.

Shūhen Kagizaki said ....

No shown rank, but can probably be handwaved onto someone. No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem.

Ippan-Kagami Gekai said ....

No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem.

Tsu no Hikari de Ni said ....

No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem.

Zenkei Ome Itetsuku said Much like the normal Ome Itetsuku, however, the Zenkei Ome Itetsuku causes the entire landscape around a user to be frozen in place rather than the sole image they were concentrating on at the time.

No real problem with the technique, it's the handwave part that is the problem. Aka, everything around them appears as if frozen in time even though they can move, the world appears unchanged.

Satsuriku said Satsuriku induces a killing frenzy unto the enemy, and removes inhibitions/cautions that would otherwise keep a person from doing anything brash. The genjutsu itself depends on the victim, but generally shows the death of everyone dear to the victim at the hands of the caster.

This makes the effect the genjutsu more realistic and thus possible. Thus it is less likely to be spotted as a genjutsu on top of the fact that Ra's genjutsu are naturally harder to spot as genjutsu. Oh yeah, and it can be handwaved.

Gensoku Jikan said The Gensoku Jikan is a peculiar genjutsu allowing Ra to control an opponent’s sense of time.

While the concept is awesome, this is OP even without the possibility of handwaving. Reason being if someone is slashing at you, or if you're running towards a cliff and your sense of time is incorrect, you'll get the timing wrong and shit will go south real quick....

Genmetsu no Geijutsu said This peculiar Genjutsu allows the user to “disillusion” shapes the victim sees - causing one shape to appear to be another.

I feel like I should have other problems with this, but I can't think of what they'd be. Regardless, it can be handwaved.

Tsurara Suimin said Forces an opponent to believe that they are sleeping, and that they wake up suddenly only to be impaled by an array of icicles.

It can cause a heart attack in the victim due to shock. Aka, it's a genjutsu that can kill you...as a potential side effect. Did I mention the handwave?

Shosai no Kogeru said This genjutsu, simply enough, allows the user to erase memories separately from the, so long as they know the memory they are to erase.

Discount Sharingan: Genjutsu. What if the user erased the memory associated with the moment someone was born and learned to breath? It can be handwaved.

Sakuran said This genjutsu is specialised to break through even the strongest of resistances over time, and Ra will often leave people with it for days without food to break their minds.

The whispers are tuned to the victim, and are always relevant to horrible things that have happened to them in the past. The whispers pick at the flaws of the victim, and due to the nature of the genjutsu, are always very relevant and very effective.

How are they always relevant? How does Ra have the knowledge to cause that. A genjutsu isn't sentient, it can't adapt without the user doing so manually. Making a genjutsu, or any other jutsu, that adapts according to who it is used on automatically is straight up OP. It'd have a pretty much 100% chance of succeeding...AND IT CAN BE HANDWAVED.

Rei Yakedo said Rei Yakedo is a very powerful genjutsu when used correctly - It forces the sensation of the opponent’s entire chakra and chakra system being burned into their mind.

No real problems though that's some crazy shit haha.

Gōmon Weakness said Can be resisted if the victim is particularly strong-willed, but not while Saimin Suimin is active.

The use of just that other genjutsu ontop of this means it cannot be resisted. Additionally, the jutsu itself is not very specific in how it tortures the mind or body, just that it does so...somehow.

Kyōzō said A second ability of the Kyōzō exists that does not require touch, and is a simple illusion that causes any pain/damage the user would take to appear have been taken by the enemy instead. Upon use of the illusion there is no cue and the victim cannot sense they are in illusion without a specific ability to do so. While under the Kyōzō, the victim cannot move or process thoughts outside of the illusion and any attack they believe they inflict within the illusion do not actually happen.

Self explanatory.

Keikan Weakness said The user is able to, with their own volition, remove the crown and end the genjutsu at any time.

Except it's incredibly unlikely that anyone would ever realize they were in the genjutsu due to Ra's aforementioned capabilities.

Setsuri no Hametsu said Additionally, Ra is also able to force the target’s body to move according to the plan while the genjutsu is in place should she desire.

Sounds like an excuse to powerplay/puppet someone's character.

Zensekai Gensō said The illusion is completely infallible, and no doujutsu or illusion removal technique can pierce it while the victim is within the boundaries of the Tenkan no Inkan.

Weakness: Devastating chakra loss; bound to a very specific area.

It's totally unavoidable and inescapable and its weakness is untrue due to the fact that the Tenkan no Inkan are placed by the user. As a note, I don't see that jutsu or item anywhere on the CS. What is this "Tenkan no Inkan," exactly?

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Eien no Inkan said The Eien no Inkan allows the user complete control over their 5 senses.

She could even make her senses stronger, with no ill effects to herself due to her veil and the modifiable nature of this technique. Oh yeah, and it's a third defense against genjutsu.

Shiketsutai no Inkan said A powerful and unique seal that prevents all passage of chakra across its boundary.

Weakness: The seal will only last for ten minutes unless placed on the body, where it will last for up to 48 hours.

For some reason it lasts twice as long as is necessary to kill the person it is placed on not to mention it is capable of blocking all types of jutsu, including taijutsu. It makes Ra even more untouchable than she already was.

Jiryoku no Fū said When she focuses her chakra into it, it glows with a faint blue colour and the next object Ra touches with her left hand will be attracted to the seal on her palm.

Not a problem on its own, but due to the fact that Ra is skilled at taijutsu, this means she can create a pull of unknown strength towards her once the seal is on you. Oh yeah and once you're within 20 ft she can handwave you into any of her genjutsu that are B rank and below. Or she can pull you into the "Tenkan no Inkan," and activate Zensekai Gensō. The seal is also attracted to the Sekiryoku no Fū in addition to the seal on her left hand. Aka, with both seals on you, she can double the pull or push of either technique. She can also attract or repel attacks to her.

Sekiryoku no Fū said When she focuses her chakra into it, it glows with a faint red colour and the next object Ra touches with her right hand will be repelled by the seal on her right hand.

Not a problem on its own, but due to the fact that Ra is skilled at taijutsu, this means she can create a push of unknown strength towards her once the seal is on you. She could use this to push you into the "Tenkan no Inkan". The seal is also attracted to the Jiryoku no Fū in addition to the seal on her left hand. Aka, with both seals on you, she can double the pull or push of either technique. She can also attract or repel attacks to her.

Idōsō no Fū said Paralysis of a sort(paraphrased)

No...real problems I suppose.

Chigoku Inkan: Kami no Sakura said A simple seal that stores another completed jutsu inside it.

Allows her to store ninjutsu or other techniques she has captured via many different means, I imagine. She could even use her repel or attract seals to get the ninjutsu, IN BATTLE. Oh yeah, and she could use things like Idōsō no Fū immediately if she stored it in one of these.

Kyōsei Keiyaku Kuchiyose no Jutsu said Thusly, if the user acquires the blood of a victim they may summon the victim to them or they may reverse-summon themselves to the victim. This costs no more than a normal summoning jutsu and can be used anywhere, at any time.

No. Why? Because it allows the user to do so much that's it's totally unreasonable to say yes. They can be handwaved into genjutsu, hit by a touch-based fuuinjutsu, etc etc.

Saiketsu Fū said A simple seal that is connected to the user’s bloodstream.

Takes away the time that is used to break the skin for summoning. No real problem with that, but I thought I'd mention it.

-Consider the fact that the Zensekai Gensō allows Ra to put someone into any of her genjutsu no matter their rank onto someone as long as they're in its area of effect, which is vague, adjustable, and inescapable once you're in it.[/hider]

Jesus.

Thanks for the concern dude but calling someone out like this wasn't the right way to do it. I've already gotten word about what problems this can cause from someone else. Please copy/paste and send it to Piercing Light and myself, and remove it from the thread. We don't need people singled out and feeling bad when this could've been handled in a much more dignified manner.

Name: Taho
Title: n/a
Age: 14
Gender: Male
Appearance:

He has brown hair, messy and spiky brown hair. His clothes are simply, usually a bright t-shirt and jeans; he
doesn’t have a belt or place to keep many things. Taho’s eyes are a deep lavender color, unnatural but beautiful. Most notable about him though is his smile, it is infectious and yet almost unnerving at times, it is the smile of someone who literally doesn’t have a care in the world. Well there is his smile and the fact that he is missing his right arm, but people tend not to stare at the empty sleeve and noticeably blank space where his arm should be, that would be rude. Taho is about normal height for his age, and is a little on the scrawny side, but not so much that he stands out.

Personality:

Taho is carefree to the point of it being a vice. So much so that he doesn’t bother concerning himself with consequences. Often times he is violent, but this isn’t out of malice so much as having no fear of retribution. Taho is extremely short sighted and optimistic, in fact one might be hard pressed to find him without a smile on his face, but he is also pretty quick to get fed up with things. If something is not constantly providing him with stimuli he becomes bored quickly and he hates getting lectured or having to deal with complicated problems.

Not having a lot of his memory doesn’t really seem to bother Taho, but it might help to explain his personality. He often times is detached from the world, or at the very least the concept of consequences and rewards in the future, and given no context for these things he seeks only immediate gratification. There is only ever the current moment for him and he isn’t good at denying his impulse within that moment.

Despite his selfish attitude he can be swept up in other people’s problems rather easily, provided he feels outraged at whoever is causing it, and often times tries to solve this problem with his fist. Likewise he is able to occasionally make friends regardless of his constant amnesia, although he is likely to forget about them if too much time passes between visits.

Recent History:

The earliest memory Taho has is lying on the cold earth of a battlefield and dimly, detachedly watching men kill other men. His chest feeling the warm, fresh blood that leaked through his clothes as his body became cold. He had to get up, he remembers thinking that was the most important thing, but his body felt heavy as lead. Cold, heavy, and dead. The pool of blood reached his neck and face, it was warm for only a moment but it failed to dispel the cold that gripped his body.

His right arm was missing, he knew that without having to look, without having to see, but to this day he can’t remember when it was taken. It hurt, not just where it had been cut off but everywhere his arm should have been, and yet he did not have the energy to react to it. His mouth tasted like dirt, his ears heard only the clamor of steel clashing and dull explosions and his eyes were glazed. Even though he saw everything his mind processed nothing, they battle that played out before him was distant and detached, and even though he was right there nothing was important.

Taho couldn’t tell you how long this memory lasts, only that at some point he was in a hospital. It wasn’t waking up in a hospital, when the memory starts he is already awake. Awake and watching a meager meal silently. The place his limb had been severed was now wrapped in bandages, it had been treated, and he had an I.V. hooked up to his remaining arm. The boy was looking at his still food intently, quietly, cautiously, as if he expected the jello to move. Taho couldn’t tell you how he got to the hospital, or how he got out. Vaguely he remembers nurses walking towards and away from him, but he can’t remember their faces.

Taho doesn’t remember leaving the hospital, only arriving in a small village at some point dressed in the hospital gown. It wasn’t covered in blood or anything, and his arm stump seemed better, even if the missing part seemed to constantly hurt. There was a barn in the outskirts of the village that had been abandoned. It would serve as a good place to sleep.

In that barn Taho met a man, one whose face and name he can’t recall but he remembered the man had a strange mark on his neck. The man was scared, and threatening at first, but Taho’s cheerful nature and stature made the man less suspicious. He was allowed to sleep there for the night. During the night three men came for the man, the man fought back.

During that violence Taho’s Phantom Arm was formed. It was surprising to everyone including Taho himself, but he used it naturally. He managed to beat one easily, crushing his skull before the ninja could grasp the situation. The second one he fought was much harder, but eventually he managed to kill him as well. The third ninja had been killed by the man with the mark. The man with the mark ran immediately, but Taho stayed and slept in the barn. The next day he took the clothes of the ninja who was closest to his body size and left.

Taho stopped at many small villages on his way to Konohana, although he can’t remember why he wanted to go there. He did remember that he is supposed to go there though. There are many blank spots in his memories, and some fights that are of no consequence to him. Actually there were quite a few fights, involving local authorities, random civilians, bandits, and just about anyone else you could think of. Taho would use his Phantom Arm at the drop of a hat, whether it was to protect someone who had managed to earn his pity or attack someone that had made him angry. In fact he even attacked people for things like free food and board, and got in lots of trouble with local law enforcement more than once.

When Taho finally arrived in Konohana he was admitted to an orphanage, however was quickly kicked out due to his violent nature. He then met a slightly older girl who would sing to him. Although he can’t remember her name or face he remembers that she had long brown hair and a beautiful voice. She provided the young man with a place to stay, as well as helping him to find a job and making sure that he didn’t act violently. She explained the rules of the world to him.

He would get in trouble a lot, whether at his job or in public. She would always apologize for him and help him get through it. The young boy liked her a lot, and felt better when she was around. Without meaning to he caused a lot of trouble for her, but she never complained and always looked out for him. Then one day she was no longer around.

Currently he is living semi-peacefully within Konohana, and remembers some days while forgetting others.

Allegiance: Unaligned

Chakra Nature: Unknown (Unique)

Rank: None

Kekkai Genkai:

Phantom Cloak – The technique called Phantom Hand is actually an application of the Phantom Cloak, an ability that creates constructs made from pure chakra. These constructs are physical and solid in nature; however they possess a fluidity that allows for their form and shape to be changed at will. Because of this the phantom hand can move in ways that normal arms can’t. The constructs themselves have to always remain attached at some point to the user, otherwise the user will lose control and the construct will dissipate, and can only be stretched about fifteen feet away from the user.

At present Taho is only able to use this technique to recreate his missing hand, although it tends to be larger than his original hand, and alter that as he sees fit. This was done almost subconsciously, since he is unaware of the technique as a whole and has no idea how to create anything else. His phantom hand is considerably stronger than a human’s, able to crush rocks and plow through walls with ease, and by increasing its size and toughness he is able to use it as a wrecking ball.

The Chakra itself is also special in that it can absorb any chakra that comes into contact with it, or the chakra of a person it has touched. If enough chakra is absorbed it can even affect the nature of the hand, depending on the element of the chakra. However the absorbed chakra is kept in the construct, in this case the hand, and not the main body itself, so if the construct is dispelled then the absorbed chakra will dissipate. Since the chakra can’t be used to cast techniques, and the hand’s functionality is mostly the same, this ability serves as no real advantage other than to weaken foes’ techniques or act to drain them.

Jutsu: None (can't perform hand seals)
Skills: Forgetting things. He fights erratically and often times unpredictably with his Phantom Arm, which can move in ways that a normal arm can not. Taho is also very agile and quick, and possesses really good reflexes. If he was good at anything else he forgot about it, he is good at that too.
Tools: None

I think pointing it out in the OOC is pretty dignified.
It is for the discussion of characters and abilities, no? It also allows future players to know their own limits by seeing what is allowed and what is not. If I see an ability that looks unfair I should have a right to say I think it is unfair and everyone can agree or just call me a whiner. If everything is handled in via PMs then we won't know our own limits when creating newish characters. Though I would also agree that if you aren't a mod it really isn't your place to do any critiquing in the first place.

That's my opinion anyway.

Durnehviir said
I think pointing it out in the OOC is pretty dignified. It is for the discussion of characters and abilities, no? It also allows future players to know their own limits by seeing what is allowed and what is not. If I see an ability that looks unfair I should have a right to say I think it is unfair and everyone can agree or just call me a whiner. If everything is handled in via PMs then we won't know our own limits when creating newish characters. Though I would also agree that if you aren't a mod it really isn't your place to do any critiquing in the first place. That's my opinion anyway.

I don't want people to feel singled out, nor a shitstorm to brew because two players have disagreements.If you feel something's unjust, then you're better off telling the leader (Pierce) or co-lead (me) in a pm to spare a possible meltdown. Whether I agree or not, it's easier on us so we don't have to deal with one big argument in the OOC. You have your 'rights' but exercise them while thinking of fallout next time. You can have your opinion on characters, and as I said we were already approached by someone else about this template and would've gotten it under control soon.

Just discuss it in private to the people who can fix it instead of shining a huge spotlight on their eyes while you break their kneecaps.