Alice, you can post 'The Cover' now, if you so desire

Roran Hawkins said
Allright, I like your character, but I don't like that Kekkei Genkai. What you are doing is literally nigh impossible in the real world, and it is so extreme it'd probably be the same in the Naruto world. I'm no rocket scientist and even after browsing the internet to fill up my knowledge on the subject of turning heat, which is an energy, into matter, I can't tell jack shit about it.In any case, every situation where energy is turned into matter required extremely advanced equipment due to the extreme conditions required to form this. I don't think I can accept that kekkei genkai based on the fact that:A) I question the physical possiblity of converting heat into matter. B) I question the amounts of heat required to create a certain amount of matter.C) I find it too complicated.D) I find it overpowered. This is essentially Gaara's sand with the addition that here you can create it out of heat which is pretty much everywhere a human can survive, and it turns into heat again when it falls apart, allowing you to freely control said matter as 'sand' and then have it become the equivalent of a teleporting forge in which to bake your enemies while doing everything Gaara can do with his sand.Result: I would heavily modify and clarify said kekkei genkai in detail, or just discard the entire idea. I don't want to sound rude or harsh, but I can't accept that if I am ignorant about what it does/can do. Example: If I accepted this anyways and suddenly you, who knows more of it, starts I don't know, taking away all heat around a person and insta-freeze him, your character would be blatantly OP.

Thanks! I'm on my phone and at work so it's pretty hard to formulate myself properly but whatever. First of all, it's not harsh at all. I'm thankful you took your time to analyze it. As for the physical properties, it's definitely not possible but chakra isn't the most realistic of resources, imo.

I should have clarified better but in order to shape something the user needs a lot of heat; gathering heat simultaneously from a human's armpits, groin, palms and head is equal to a spear, while the user needs to be essentially engulfed in flames to create an armor.

The releasement of heat upon breaking is my fault - I forgot to expand on that.

Heat can only be transformed into hard items/objects and it's impossible to use it in the same way as Gaara would freely manipulate sand, but I see your point. I had no intention of making it complicated, the only use I thought of during development was for the user to be able to fashion weapons and armor and serve as a sort of resistance against fire, nothing more. I could clarify that in the text if you'd like. Of course, I'm also fine with trashing it. Thanks yet again!

I would also like to point out it is difficult to review the character because the sheet has absolutely no jutsu on it...

He doesn't have any jutsu, tho.

Not even the techniques required by the Academy to graduate

Addendum: It also states in his history that he is "well versed in his clan's techniques" so that too.

You don't need to write down the academy jutsus.
Clan's techniques is the kekkai genkai, my bad.

I cannot accept that. A Kekkei Genkei is an ability, it gives your character an extra skill to work with but it doesn't say what a character can actually do with that skill. Its like having someone with Crystal release saying: "I have Crystal Release and that is it. I don't need any other jutsu." Crystal release is not a jutsu, its a release that allows certain jutsu. Get what I am trying to say?

So just like all the other people with KG's I want you to write up jutsu that use the ability that the KG gives you and shows us what your character can do. I can drop some examples on you if you are not sure what to do and you can of course always ask ^^

Oh and welcome ^^

Ah, yeah, I understand. Sorry, should've done that from the beginning. I'll edit tomorrow. Thanks!

Niji is taking the news very well...now time to stab...just kidding...or am I?

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Anyway I will try to post soon enough. Im pretty busy for the next few days.

Later I will try to prep a post for : Hiron, Takeru and maybe one or two more characters.

@ Little Alice: If you want you can post the 'cover' collab now

@ Shadowcatcher: Please reply to our collab

Awwwwww Ryo.... That was super sad Gero.

I will get a post up after dinner.

(The GM's already know this so they can diregard this message)

Tomorrow I am going on holiday (together with Roro who is probably too lazy to say that). I'll gone till the 29th of July. In my absence I leave my characters in the, hopefully, capable hands of the people below. So if you are looking for something to do with my chara's you can contact them.

Hisoka - Lesli
Ryoku, Sho - Alice
Midori - Gerontis
Eiji - Mr Nim

As for Nami, I would prefer if no one would write for her, but if necessary anyone could move her. As long as they don't say what she is thinking or fight with her.

I hope to see you guys in 2 weeks ^^

Have fun Fiery (And Roro)!

Have fun Fiery-sama and Tummy Cat! ^^ ~

I will send a pm this evening to Team 13, Ryoku and to Team 2. I have been a bit absent, but am kind of missing some posts.

Sorry for not posting. I've been busy with a 30 hour work week (and a few extra days) plus 3 days of college, plus a giant amount of homework, plus...well, you get it. I'll try to post tomorrow since its the first day I've had off in roughly 7 days. Plus no classes Friday. Yay!

News

A new team will be opening up in Konohagakure. There are presently two genin spots available. That is all.

Gamer geek said
Sorry for not posting. I've been busy with a 30 hour work week (and a few extra days) plus 3 days of college, plus a giant amount of homework, plus...well, you get it. I'll try to post tomorrow since its the first day I've had off in roughly 7 days. Plus no classes Friday. Yay!

Liar! Anyway I'm seriously trying to post but I've been unbelievably tired. The same guy has called off for the last 3 days and I have to cover them plus do my own. Basically I'm getting nearly 20 hours of overtime.