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@Partisan
Your posts are excellent, especially for solo posts. No criticism from me.

@liferusher
I'm going to put a pin in that for now. We have a lot of members (more than I initially expected), and I don't want things moving along too quickly. If some people never show up and spots open up, I can get ahold of you.

@HellHoundWoof
I saw your CS and have discussed it with Dark Wind. Unfortunately, we have some problems that we think can be fixed easily. First of all, we find it hard to believe that Victor would have such a violent personality (and be a killer) while being a member of The Lost Ones. After all, they stress no killing as one of their rules. Instead your character can be a member of the Wolves (although we are quite packed as is). Another concern is Victor's right arm. It could become overpowered since it's machinery and isn't very limited (not to say you would powerplay, but it is a bit of an unfair advantage). For now, your CS is not accepted.

@Yosh
I guess I'll leave Dark Wind to answer that one, then. I'll also add to our collab in a bit.
And for everyone else... I'm writing a post now. Lol
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Well maybe some things I could improve on? I can learn a lot from people and vice versa, so I'd appreciate if we'd help each other :)
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Name: Victor Sageas
Nickname: Metal
Gender: Male
Age: 16
Gang: The Amaranth Wolves

Height: 6ft
Weight: 130lbs (140lbs with his robotic arm on)

Appearance:

His right arm.



Personality: He's a killer, with little regard for the lives of the gangs enemies. He is extreme in all things he does, those he loves he loves without falter, those he hates he hates with a passion, and he has no problem stomping in the skull of anyone who disrespects his leader and his brothers.

Short History: He was born to an alcholic father who was an enforcer for the Amaranth Wolves, with the drinking came beatings, with beatings came a disenchantment with the reality of the real world. Vic knew they were poor, he knew his mother was in the ground, he was never told how she died but from his fathers words when drunk he figured it had to do with him, he knew his dad was on a warpath with the Wolves but he couldnt help but continue to be a bad kid. He would steal, he would get into knife fights, he would beat kids senseless, he had a reputation for being a cold bastard by the time he was 13. He wasnt top shit but he wasnt anywhere near the bottom, his only real problem in life was his father. The bastard beat him, he slapped him around, and one day his father attacked him in the kitchen. He grabbed Victor's necklength hair and pulled him back slamming him to the floor, Victor had tried to crawl away but his father flipped him over and sat on his chest. He felt the pressure on his ribs, his diaphragm was being crushed as his father slammed his fists into his face.

As Victor grasped for breath he tried to push his father off his chest but couldnt, and his hand's slipped across his fathers stomach. He felt his thumb catch the grip of his fathers pistol, he saw his opportunity and everything his father had ever done was imprinted in his brain. He remembered the beatings, the drinking, being blamed for his mother, the frustration when trying not to end his father's life before. But this time he let himself slip, he grabbed the pistol in his right hand and pulled it from his fathers belt line. His father froze raising a bloody fist, he looked down at his son's hands and saw the pistol's barrel resting against his stomach. Victor looked up at his father and squeezed the trigger, the bang was first then a small splatter of blood. His father retracted and tumbled to the side, Victor stood and wiped his mouth and nose with his arm, he looked down at his bloody hand. He saw his father crawling away and spit at him, blood and saliva hit his fathers face as he propped himself up in the corner of the kitchen. He raised the pistol and aimed directly at his father's face, he fired once and watched the bullet tear through his fathers forehead and blood splatter against the white cabinet door behind him as his body let out one final shiver. He threw the pistol aside and walked over to his father, he raised his left leg and began pounding his boot heel into his fathers skull.

"Bastard," He said with a kick, "Drunkard! Piece of Garbage! How dare you! You dont deserve the power you have! You dont deserve the Amaranth Wolves!"

He kept on until he heard sirens, he wiped tears from his eyes and grabbed the keys. He sprinted out, he threw open the door to the garage and started up his father's muscle car. It was from 2010, a Dodge Charger. He shoved the keys into the ignition and turned it, he sped off out of the driveway and into the street. He continued down the road his foot firmly planted on the gas, he knew he wasnt going to dare touch the brake until he couldn't hear any kind of noise. He looked down at the radio and fiddled with its controls till he found a suitable station, it was playing some old rock the heavy stuff like he liked. He gripped the wheel and looked up, he saw he was heading to an intersection, at the next intersection sat a police roadblock. He grimaced and sped onward, he had come across the first intersection and saw blinding light speeding towards him, he barely had time to make the first syllable of the word 'Shit' before the impact hit him. The right car door was brought to him through the force of impact, he felt himself being crushed then he felt inertia as the car was overturned onto its side, he felt metal pierce his shoulder and reach into his right side. He would have screamed in pain but couldn't manage to get a breath out. He felt his hunk of scrap metal stop being pushed but it still moved, he felt it slowing and decided to open his eyes. He looked into the shattered windshield and couldnt even see the cops anymore, he saw residential houses and that the front of the car had been bent into almost nothing. He felt his own blood run across his chest and looked down, his right arm had metal running through it, nothing remained of it, just torn fragments of bone and flesh and metal. He saw blackness cloud his vision as he drifted into unconsciousness.

When Victor awake he was in a bright room, with white walls, white sheets, and medical monitors next to him. He tried to raise himself up but felt his left wrist had something keeping him down, he looked down and saw a set of handcuffs had him stuck to the bed, he tried to reach across with his right arm and didnt see it move across his to it. He looked down at his right side and saw nothing there, he stared for a moment and saw a sleeve pinned to the top of his shirt shoulder. He sat there and looked forward, he heard footsteps coming into the room. He looked up to see a nurse, she was rather pretty, busty with fair skin and a nice smile. He watched her as she came to bed side, she put her hand on his right shoulder and smiled down at him.

"How are you feeling?" She asked genuinely, "I know it cant be easy to deal with but you'll get used to it. Most amputee's prefer robotic arms as opposed to nothing, we have one lined up for you."

Victor didnt say anything, but he just stared at her. She knew he had nothing to say, what could he say, he had lost his arm, he didnt have anyone to give a damn either. His old man was probably in the coroner's office, being examined. He just couldnt say anything so he stared, she understood. She leaned down and kissed him on the cheek, she whispered in his ear.

"You chose to hunt, and you will be rewarded." She said into his ear, "We will be here for you when you get out."

He smiled and watched as she walked away, he knew he would be okay when he got out of prison. He knew what would fill his time, getting ready for The Amaranth Wolves to use him as a tool, for him to be one of them and serve. He spent 3 years and 6 months in Federal Prison, when he got out he was initiated into the Amaranth Wolves and soon became a well known soldier among his brothers and sisters.

Other: He parties hard. His arm doesnt function as though it is that much stronger than a humans, it is barely a handicap whether it is on or off.
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Blitz: I addedded moare XD
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YoshiSkittlez said
Dark Wind I have a question. Would it be within The Lost Ones for small groups of the gang to get together and take over little abandoned places that no one would notice got taken over? I'm just trying to think of situations where some Lost Ones could get together rather than have everyone spread out all over the city doing their own thing.


I figured they would be in small groups. While they are all somewhat lonely individuals, the point of the gang is that they come together to do small group missions like the idea you mentioned.
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How would they know when and where to get together though? Does their current leader just find one of them, tell them what needs to be done and expect that one Lost One to relay the message?
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I'm really digging the RP so far, it's been pretty cool to read and to write. Though I shouldn't write at 02:00..
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Don't feel bad, I was up till catching up on an RP an then writing a few pages of it.
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Heh, generally the quality of post doesn't get better in the middle of the night. :P
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Sorry guys!! I've been afk for the past few days!! Catching up and writing a post now :D
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Loving everyones posts so far!
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YoshiSkittlez said
How would they know when and where to get together though? Does their current leader just find one of them, tell them what needs to be done and expect that one Lost One to relay the message?


Seems you're here to make me think Yoshi. Good question.

They wouldn't expect one Lost One to relay the message. That would be dreadfully inefficient, and very dangerous. Especially if that message never got relayed. We are in the future, so I suspect some technology might be around that they could use to pass messages back and forth. It's easy to do it that way. But… sometimes in literature technology bores me.

I'm thinking the leader plants a message in a place at secret locations. And the others find it and look at it, then try to accomplish the mission. And, the leader always moves in a group to make sure the message is delivered outside of Amaranth territory and so they can avoid being stopped. It's not wholly developed in my mind yet, do you have a suggestion? Haven't had much time to work this out.
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Look at my post on the last page. I explained the changes me and Dark Wink think you should make to your CS before joining.

I'm loving everyone's posts too. I'm pretty impressed that everyone's been writing really good quality stuff. :D
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Psst! Blitz! I added more :)

Edit: oh! And Dark Wind! Sorry for making you think lol I just didn't want to write something up and then have you be all "nope, incorrect" and then re-write it XD Honestly the ONLY thing I can think of as far as communication would be something like a wrist band that gets hot or cold on their wrist when their leader puts a message in their 'drop location' thus alerting them to go check out what needs to be done. *shrug* sounds lame I know, but it's all I got haha

Edit Edit: Posted for Deserae. I left out Jillian though because she hasn't posted yet. Only figured that to be fair.
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I dont know what to do about his arm, I mean its not any kind of massive mechanical. It has no boost of strength it works just like a human arm its just got a metal casing and some innerworkings.
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HellHoundWoof said
I dont know what to do about his arm, I mean its not any kind of massive mechanical. It has no boost of strength it works just like a human arm its just got a metal casing and some innerworkings.



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It doesnt have any combat cabalities its just like the kind you'd give an amputee. Not for combat, no blades, no flamethrower, no lasers. Though it would be cool to be a Jensen, it is not practical, nor fair to other players.
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YoshiSkittlez said
Psst! Blitz! I added more :)Edit: oh! And Dark Wind! Sorry for making you think lol I just didn't want to write something up and then have you be all "nope, incorrect" and then re-write it XD Honestly the ONLY thing I can think of as far as communication would be something like a wrist band that gets hot or cold on their wrist when their leader puts a message in their 'drop location' thus alerting them to go check out what needs to be done. *shrug* sounds lame I know, but it's all I got hahaEdit Edit: Posted for Deserae. I left out Jillian though because she hasn't posted yet. Only figured that to be fair.


Well, since there's multiple groups around as a subgroup of The Lost Ones (i.e the guys that sit in the bodyshop, or Nagami's small group) it would be pretty easy to contact them either personally or by means of leaving a message. Groups usually hang around at the same spot, so you'd reach someone right? And if it's a simple mission like ''hand out ___ to the Lost Ones'' anyone can accomplish it, so it wouldn't matter who got the message. And for personal missions (say D.J had to go check out Deon's cagefight on orders of the leader) he could just walk up to her since most groups do still hang out in Lost Ones territory.

Also I hope you guys don't mind if I say stuff about your characters that aren't true. It's just Minato trying to figure out facts from rumors. So if I'd say that Angel was a whore, that doesn't mean it's true. And if you DO mind I could just say nice things ''Oh Angel? Yeah she's practically got that name because of her personality. She's trying to do charity for the rich people to give money to the poor! That's what the Wolves are, a charity group!''
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Also I hope you guys don't mind if I say stuff about your characters that aren't true. It's just Minato trying to figure out facts from rumors. So if I'd say that Angel was a whore, that doesn't mean it's true. And if you DO mind I could just say nice things ''Oh Angel? Yeah she's practically got that name because of her personality. She's trying to do charity for the rich people to give money to the poor! That's what the Wolves are, a charity group!''


I for one, do NOT mind. That's where I was coming from when I had Deserae talk about the members of the Wolves, since I don't really know ANYTHING about the Wolves other than Angel and Deon. So...yeah...
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I noticed, it was kinda my incentive to ask. Considering it's just rumors, etc, it probably wouldn't mind much since it's for Minato only. But it's always better to ask if you're not sure than to assume it's okay.
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