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*Viran and Chev both see DeathStroke's latest post and they both read it. They both crack their knuckles.*...DeathStroke...Grant doesn't lead the team. Drakel's character does. Which means that Grant can't exactly give orders. If Grant...never mind. Not gonna go there. Back on topic. Grant shouldn't be giving orders since he just got back to the team and I'm not sure he still a member of the team to be honest. I'd recommend editing your post immediately.


Ok. Let me tackle this:

Grant is mentally ill at this point. He has a hallucination of Mason that he talks to. Yes, were he normal, he would follow the chain of command, and act accordingly. Besides, he said "You can follow me or not, I don't give a damn." I left there room for people to say that they won't follow him, but obviously, there seems to be trouble. What would you recommend go into the edits?
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Ok. Let me tackle this: Grant is mentally ill at this point. He has a hallucination of Mason that he talks to. Yes, were he normal, he would follow the chain of command, and act accordingly. Besides, he said "You can follow me or not, I don't give a damn." I left there room for people to say that they won't follow him, but obviously, there seems to be trouble. What would you recommend go into the edits?


...Why don't we wait for Drakel to post? :) He has a plan and we should wait for him to post before we go the Sentinel's base.
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I'm sorry to jump into this, but mentally ill or not, Grant includes the other characters into his own idea of being the leader. At the same time he does so at a time where people will have little to no choice to say no, because they are all going the same place and have the same objective.
In my opinion it is pushing it too far to order them to do things and refer to them as "my team" in advance, but I suppose that is only my opinion. I would take Chev's advice and alter your post to a point of not "forcing" people to follow you. At this point we want to keep this plot going and continue to the next part and arguments between characters won't help with that.
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I edited, hope that's better. And thank you Chev, Thank you Mina for catching that. I was thinking the post was supposed to show that he'd changed over the time away, but I'm sorry, I obviously went too far.
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I'm not even going to begin in this right now.

I'll finish my post (which is almost done and would've been posted six hours ago if I didn't have work) exactly how I planned it and that will be that.
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He said, six hours ago. Drakel stop teasing me TwT
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He said, six hours ago. Drakel stop teasing me TwT


Had to make some edits and then got distracted by porn a friend I haven't saw in a really long time.
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Had to make some edits and then got distracted by a friend I haven't *seen* in a really long time.


Ftfy.

Also, hurry up and post. We all wait with bated breath to see what prose Drakel weaves.
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Whoooooooooooppooo! Hahahaha. I knew you could do it, Drakel. Wow. Just....Wow. That......was.....AWESOME.
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Nice post Chev, and I edited my last post to where Grant wasn't ordering so much as telling them what he was going to do. I don't think you saw the edit so I'm letting you know.

My next post: Grant does his last job as a Mercenary before turning his full attention to the titans and his plan!

He regains his Enhanced strength and stamina!
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I've posted. Yan is going to be personal space invader from now on :D
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Fun xP
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Fun xP


Be careful what you wish for >:)
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There's nothing you could do that I wouldn't enjoy, Reaper-chan~
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.....just don't invade Grant's personal space.....not only will he get mad at you, but the ex-Russian Spy that fell in love with him but never confessed her feelings will be INSANELY jealous. And possibly homicidal.
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There's nothing you could do that I wouldn't enjoy, Reaper-chan~


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Did a lot of thinking, and I want a speedster. I have a CS I'm drawing up and I'll have it up soon.
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Hold off on that DeathStroke.
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Chev said
Hold off on that DeathStroke.


Ok. I don't have a problem holding off.
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I am working on a post, but school starting soon-ish and work it may take a while.
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