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@DrugMother and @TheWizardLizard
Fantastic character sheets! You both wrote your sample posts very impressively, too. It just makes me want to read more and more, so I can't wait to see you posting in the IC once it's up and running.

Unfortunately, I'm not able to accept either sheet in their current form and will suggest that you both re-read the rules in the OP.


Right, right, right, forgot about that one. Fixed it.
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@DrugMother and @TheWizardLizard
It brings me great pleasure to announce that you are the first players accepted into the roleplay. Please go and post your character sheets in the character deposit (not in a hider please, just post the sheets!). Thank you both for submitting such fantastic and interesting characters. They are refreshingly unique and I can't wait to roleplay with them.

@He Who Walks Behind
That sounds interesting. Show us what you come up with and we'll get feedback to you tomorrow.
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We really love that you embraced the opportunity to be creative and experimental with your power..! It's definitely unlike anything we have heard before. Our main concern with the power is that it may become difficult to play, especially as the roleplay focusses on interactions between characters. We also think that the mucus has more potential than is currently being explored.

We feel it would be best if she did not live in a sentient bubble of mucus that might eat her. Instead, we think the power would be best explored in a different format: we suggest that she walks around normally, and is able to secrete the mucus from her skin. She is able to secrete different kinds of mucus that could be devised by you, we were thinking things along the line of a 'healing mucus', a 'corrosive mucus', etc. There would also be scope for you to 'squirt' mucus, like a aquakinetic might shoot jets of water. We think that the 'bubble' could still come into play, but would more likely be her body's response to a near-death experience; she would produce a bubble of mucus that sustains her and nurses her back to health. Please let us know what you think about these suggestions.

We appreciate that your sheet is unfinished, but we also need to see a Personal Statement and a Sample Post before we can approve your application.


//cries thank lord I procrastinated on writing the PS lmao. But oh gosh thanks! And yeah, I suppose the whole not covered in sentient bubble of mucus that might eat her would be a lot more practical... I honestly just chose having her live in a bubble because it'd be more fun ffff-- And I did think about the whole secreting and squirting (kehehe) mucus, but I thought it'd be too much added onto the bubble of safety. Nixing that though, I guess the book definition of mucus manipulation will be okay!

And I totally like your idea of keeping the bubble for near death experiences, that's such a good idea I'm kind of angry I didn't think of it myself!!>:0 But that said, can I keep her basic regenerative abilities? Or nah? Wait actually I just thought of another cool idea which I'll write down first and dazzle you with (hopefully lmao) later.

I'll get to working on the sheet now!! = 0 =
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((To help filter through some of the unreliable narration, I'm going to put stuff that was officially filled out, a la her parole officer/psychologist in juvy in blue and have the regular text be what Lynn wrote. Okay, I'm colorblind, so I THINK it's blue but it may not be hahaha. Let me know if this works, and if not, what needs to be fixed!))

PITY -Court-Mandated Application for Academic Year 2015/2016

Student Name:
Cordelia Lynn Holmes. (Nickname: Lynn).

Gender:
Female.

Nationality:
American

Age:
17

D.O.B.:
Exact date unknown due to poor documentation of early years-she names December 31st, 1998.


Appearance
[Please attach a photographic image of yourself for our records]




Hair Color:
Brown. Hair color is subject to frequent and unpredictable change when powers are used.

Eye Color:
Blue. Similar to hair in color variation..

Ethnicity:
Caucasian. Exact ancestry unknown.

Height:
5'2

Weight:
100.


Powers & Abilities

Power Name:
Oh, they're supposed to have names? Um, shit. Uh, the flame...no that's dumb. Gimme a minute.
Lynn's mutation is dubbed "Phoenix".

Power Description:
I'm a phoenix, or whatever.
Lynn is capable of igniting into a phoenix-like state; she does not undergo a major transformation, but her body ignites in flame.

Abilities:
Are there a lot more sections? Because I'm already tired of this. Fine. The highlights. Basically I'm like a phoenix or something. Got the tats to match it. Whenever I get all fired up (hah that wasnt even intentional) I start to smolder up a bit. Hair lights up and stuff. Makes me tougher. I get angry enough or scare-uh, serious enough, goes all out. Ignite more, helps amp me up. I think I heal quicker from stuff but I don't really know. Not like that movie with the guy with the claws. Wounds and stuff usually calterize I guess. My hair and my eyes change color sometimes. Red, white, blue, yellow, fire stuff. So that's pretty dope. Oh and stuff around me is...hotter? Nah that's not right. Like shit warms up more easily. Water boils faster. Shot a gun one time, barrel was warped as all hell. Guess the heat and cold don't bother me a whole lot either. But that could be a side effect of my other power, not being a little bitch.
Lynn is capable of drawing upon the Phoenix to offer several advantages. When "dormant", she maintains an unusually high body temperature. This gives her some degree of resistance to bacterial infections and denaturalizes some substances, which helps explain how she's managed to scrape by without major health complications from the streets. When drawing upon her powers, Lynn begins to heat up considerably. At a certain point, she ignites entirely-her hair elongates and bursts into flame, as do her eyes. They match each other in hue, shifting from white/red/violet etc. While in this state, Lynn gains more strength-this is nothing phenomenal, but she's able to hit harder than a 100 lb. girl should be able to. Additionally, she gains a degree of durability and stamina. She also causes things to ignite more easily around her-this is a passive ability. Water boils at a lower temperature, guns fire at extremely dangerous temperatures (barrels can warp and it may case premature ignition of the bullets in the magazine), and objects are much more flammable. Similar to a phoenix, she has some degree of healing capabilities. It appears that the majority of this power goes into staving off the effects of malnutrition and sleep deprivation. When injured, her flames will generally cauterize the wound. These abilities are not rapid-she is not capable of recovering immediately from serious wounds. She does appear capable of bouncing back more quickly from major wounds-she would spend less time in the hospital, for instance. She also appears to be immune to extreme heat or cold, Lynn did not seem to notice when he adjusted her cell's air conditioning to laughable extremes.

Drawbacks & Weaknesses:
Well normally my clothes aren't non-flamamable. So that sucks. I burn out too. Dunno how to describe it. I get hit too hard or go too long and I just...skin starts peeling off like ash. Fire sputters and goes out. Hair falls out, my vision gets all weird. Cold. Really cold. Like beyond temperature cold, you know, like something...I dunno. Start thinking about dark shit. It's not fun. So on general principle I avoid getting my ass kicked. Happens if I get hurt real bad too, the...burnout. When I'm trying to warm back up (takes a while) it's not...I dunno what happens if something happens then. I guess I burnout for real, you know? Never played with it much to find out. And I go through cigarettes real fast. It sucks. I can't like control it either, I'm not like those guys from that cartoon with the bald kid. Whenever we get fucked up we watch that sometimes. Also, whenever I let the fire-stuff start happening, I get, like, super hungry afterwards. And I'm usually pretty hungry. So that's saying something.
Lynn can't extend the immunity to flame to other objects-burning through clothing could be...problematic. Additionally,her powers take a considerable toll on her (already strained) metabolism. She doesn't have enough raw material to power her abilities, full-throttle, for long periods of time. When exhausted, the flame will go out and she becomes greatly fatigued. Her regenerative abilities also have their breaking point-when confronted with extreme trauma, her flame will similarly go out, and Lynn reports extreme coldness. This coldness is, apparently, psychological to a degree, as she becomes extremely withdrawn and timid until she warms back up. In this state, she is very, very vulnerable, and none of her usual fighting spirit or vitality seems present. She lacks the biological materials to sustain her abilities for very long. While not a supernatural weakness, her lack of schooling, paranoia, and pride seem to constitute character flaws. The latter of these two are exacerbated by her "burned out" state-when observed in this state, she curled up in the fetal position and trembled for several hours until her flame returned, little by little. Physical or psychological stresses can bring about this state: whether it's being severely harmed, fatigued, or shell-shocked. Burning out comes with a total loss of morale, hindered senses, and loss of fine motor skills.


About You

Family:
None. Really appreciate the reminder, though, thanks.
Lynn was seemingly left at the orphanage as a young child, presumably by her father. Her mother suffered severe burns during childbirth and her paternity is unknown-to what degree Lynn is aware of this is unknown. Sensitive about the family issue.

Personal Statement:
[INDENT]The hell is a personal statement. Fine. My name is Lynn. I do not like filling out applications. Pretty sure I spelled half this shit wrong. But half right for somebody who dropped out of high school's pretty alright. Reading is stupid and gay anyways, I don't need to be good at it. I am a dear friend of the Chicago Police Department and they really like reminding me I have one year unil I start going to big girl prison. I like reminding them their wives are probably out sleeping with police officers from a city that doesn't suck so much. But now I'll be in New York in your school or whatever so that's cool. School's kinda pointless, but the judge said it was this or juvy and I did juvy before and it was boring as all hell. So I guess I'll stick around your school long enough to get a degree so I can be a happy member of the real world. What? That not enough? Fine. I don't play well with others. Most people are dicks and most people deserve what's coming to them. I don't like cops, rich people, and have been told I have "trouble with authoritity". I'm kind of a loner. Most people get on my nerves. Most people don't have to deal with real shit, so most people aren't worth talking to. Here's my daily routine. I wake up at whatever time I wake up at and then go to the nearest TV and watch the news to see if I recognize any names on there. Usually a few people show up. Then they cut to the royal baby or some shit, which is just wonderful. Then I'll go and find food somewhere. Sometimes I skip this step. Uh, usually I skip this step. Normally try and figure out where I'm stayin' that night early on. Word gets out I'm a mutant, it's a lot harder to find places. I've got too many tattooes to really get a lot of help from shelters, plus I've been in one or two once and a few jackasses came looking. Don't want to get anybody else caught up in all that you know. Then I'll try and earn some cash, I got a few people who are cool with the mutant thing cause I do good work. I got quick hands, all I'll say about that. Then I'll get some food if I can, try and spend the rest of the doing whatever. Every now and then when I'm feeling like a functional member of society I'll go try and get a job. That usually ends up the same way. Dropout mutant with no references and criminal history? Yeah can't imagine why Hobby lobby didn't want me working a register. It's whatever though. I do pretty fine. Try and avoid familiar places. Where I grew up-piece of shit orphanage with piece of shit nuns in charge of it-or school. Couple teachers there were pretty decent. Don't like seeing them. Or kids I used to go to school with. Wasn't a mutant before I dropped out, just...hung with the wrong crowds, went down a slippery slope, all that other shit they throw at you in PSAs. But I'd do it all again you know. People always talk shit about drug dealers or whatever. Not all bad. A few assholes, but I know some good guys. Tough to earn respect being a skinny ass white girl but I made it work. Damn I rambled. So yeah accept me to your school or whatever, I dunno. Im sure your guidance counselor will turn my life around. Assuming your school is not full of rich fucks Ill make friends, do all my work on time (unless its retarded) and be like the coolest person ever. Yeah. Woooooo. I dont know how long that old-ass judge wanted this thing to be. He only said i had to APPLY to get out of goin to juvy. I'm pretty sure. Wait, shit, he might not have. I shoulda taken this more seriously. Uh okay. talents. Im okay at singing. Mostly rap. I write some too. I guess I'd be alright at sports, I got quick eyes and reflexes. Also I'm pretty good at picking up on whenever people are lying because Ive spent a lot of time around teachers and cops. I keep my word and stuff. Also I'm not bad at like fighting and stuff. No, shit, I can't say that to a school. Uh. Um. I'm very determined...and keep on going no matter what life throws at me. Yeah. That sounds right. I'm also poor as hell and bisexual after a few drinks so yeah wooohooo I'll make your demograph dimograp fuck whatever that word is-numbers look really good if you take me.

((STORM))

Despite our-repeated-insistences, Lynn does not appear to have taken this application seriously. This is not a surprise-perhaps as a result of dealing with less-than-reputable types for so long, she is extremely headstrong and confrontational. She will reject orders from authority figures simply to cause controversy. This appears to be saving face-when one on one with her parole officer or myself (Chicago Youth Correctional Center, Criminal Psychologist) she is more leery than outright aggressive. She possesses a deep cynicism of society, particularly those whom she views are more privileged or powerful-hence the trouble with authority. This stems from empathy-she mentions lost friends quite frequently, and bitterly questions why money is spent on X and not helping others. She displays genuine concern for others, albeit is careful not to let it show-while in juvy, several younger girls were harassed by the older inmates. Over the course of several weeks, each of the older inmates were overheard discussing that the water in the showers was blisteringly hot. Despite her lack of much formal education, she is perceptive and intelligent-Lynn is quick-witted, and several police reports have shown her ability not only to twist the letter of the law to her advantage, but to come out on top of gang members/lowlifes who harassed her. She also displays a fondness for art, although is extremely protective about it-Lynn very visibly does not want anyone knowing of her more personal side, and took care to ensure her poems and sketches were promptly destroyed before someone else was able to read them. The few that we recovered mostly seem to deal with issues of loss/fear/family. Tends to avoid actual conflict-she tries to avoid fights whenever possible, but her pride does not always permit this-visibly does not enjoy violence, however. Showed considerable protective instincts for younger girls in juvy and was repeatedly overheard trying to talk them out of whatever they'd done, help with whatever issues they posssessed. When apprehended, several filled out job applications were found in her belongings, along with a very battered, old teddy bear, which had a faded tag attached: To Delly, From Mom. While physically unassuming, she is cunning and determined, and has learned brutality is at times necessary. This being my main point of concern, and the reason I'm passing along this application (which is example enough of her anti-authority stance) to your institution: her parole officer was able to talk the judge into offering her the choice of juvy or going to your institution. A quick, by-the-numbers summation of her life follows:

December 1998: A woman in the Chicago area, possibly Lynn's mother, dies from severe, unexplained burns during childbirth. Mutations generally do not peak until puberty, which would explain how this outlier slipped past CPD's eye.
December 1998: Lynn is found by St. Theresa's Home for Disadvantaged Youth. No official documentation beyond a note with her name.
May 2002: Lynn is enrolled in kindergarten. Performs admirably, model student.
June 2004: Lynn becomes more reclusive, sullen. Performance in school slips.
July 2004: Lynn begins interfering with the nuns' carrying out of punishment, becomes increasingly more argumentative. Slowly but steadily Lynn begins acting out more and more. An escape attempt.
September 2006: Mutants attack White House. Public backlash ensues.
November 2006: Internal Review of St. Theresa's finds the disciplinary practices of some of the nuns to be needlessly cruel. These are fixed, but Lynn remains hesitant: doesn't act out as much as before, but remains reclusive. Has trouble connecting with the other children.
January 2007: Lynn attempts another escape-after several years of disciplinary struggles and paperwork, Lynn is shifted into a foster home.
March 2007: Lynn's foster parents register as sponsors of HAM. Lynn's school performance is acceptable, but seems to have trouble focusing.
August 2013: Lynn becomes a freshman in a Chicago High School. Reserved. Takes a large number of extracurriculars, notably ones which keep her at school and away from home as long as possible.
September 2013: Lynn volunteers at the concessions stand of her high school for football games. Large discrepancy in sales begin showing up.
September 2013: St. Theresa's reports a break-in. Nothing reported stolen, although nuns find large quantities of candy. For fears of it being poisoned/"razor blades in the apples", candy's confiscated.
December 2013: Lynn attends a New Year's party, during which time she becomes intoxicated. Returning home, foster parents are furious-relations begin to become increasingly strained.
February 2014: First of Lynn's friends to be arrested for misdemeanors. Lynn's schoolwork begins slowly slipping. Loses interest in extracurriculars. Does not pursue a driver's license.
April 2014: Lynn is caught trying to break into St. Theresa's; fallout at home, school, and with the law follow. No formal charges issued but Lynn receives suspension. Marked drop in school performance afterwards.
June 2014: Lynn begins smoking cigarettes.
July 2014: Foster family's donations to HAM increase. While Lynn does not out herself as a mutant at this time, there are noticeable discrepancies. Lynn's reports about her family become shorter and shorter. Relations extremely strained.
August 2014: One of Lynn's known associates receives 10 years in prison for drug-related crimes.
August 2014: Lynn receives her first tattoo. This goes over poorly with foster parents.
September 2014: Lynn attempts to join an afterschool program, a la "Big Brothers/Big Sisters", application rejected.
September 2014: Lynn's grades drop further. Struggling to pass at this point. Several classes dropped.
November 2014: Local mutant girl beaten, raped, and left for dead in the street. Aggressors unknown, but suspected gang affiliation.
November 2014: A local trap house burns down. No gang members were present, owing to a series of bizarre events that led to everyone leaving the house. Several thousand dollars worth of illicit materials are suspected to be lost in the fire. Lynn sent to school therapist for irritability and jumpiness in the following week.
December 2014: Following a run-in with the police over driving over the limit without a license, Lynn is kicked out of her foster home.
December 2014: Lynn arrested for setting off fireworks on New Years from a water tower. Curiously, police did not locate a lighter or matches on the scene. Community service is the sentence.
January 2015: St. Theresa's children continue to receive little presents. Local toy stores and candy shops report minor break-ins with minimal losses.
January 2015: Gang war escalates. Numerous gangs in Chicago suffer casualties, some at the hand of local law enforcement.
February 2015: Lynn caught trying to break into a police car. She is carrying felony-level quantities of cocaine (albeit no trace in her system) at the time. Pleads not guilty, refuses to speak during hearing, spends next months in juvy.
March 2015: Lynn's behavior in juvy noted as standoffish but not necessarily hostile. Does not shy away from conflict-several fights reported, most of which Lynn emerges the victor from. Several guards accused of sexually harassing inmates and several inmates with a reputation for brutality begin to suffer from mysterious burns.
June 2015: Lynn released from juvy. Presumably out of shame, visits to St. Theresa's stop.
June 2015: Girl matching Lynn's description narrowly avoids apprehension following reports of pickpocketing.
July 2015: Lynn, as per the sample post, misses a parole hearing, and fills out application for PITY.

There is not a clear correlation between these events-at least, not one that the CPD has discovered. It's my suspicion that, if Lynn spends time in a hostile environment for more months on end, it will become exponentially more difficult for her to recover. While convicted of past crimes, Lynn is not violent; repeatedly, she's demonstrated attempts to avoid direct conflict when possible. While troubled, and confrontational, she doesn't appear beyond recovery-all reports of her, from her school psychiatrist, to foster care report letters, to my own assessments, indicate more of a troubling reclusive nature. I firmly believe if she is surrounded by criminal elements for the next five months, she'll emerge a much more hardened individual. Given that she already resists attempts to receive help, this is obviously not ideal: accepting her to your institution would offer a much better environment for her. This would serve several advantages: primarily, Lynn's future. Academic probation would serve as a good motivator for her, and while resuming life in school would be difficult, I think an atmosphere of similarly abled (and, I suspect, similarly isolated) individuals would help her regain some semblance of normalcy. Furthermore, the current atmosphere towards mutants is...volatile. If allowed to go unchecked, it's possible Lynn will wind up committing more violent crimes-as any in her situation would do. She has repeatedly shown an aversion to using her abilities unless pushed to the breaking point, but does not hold back when that point is reach. While not to the same degree as the White House attacks, your institution does have the opportunity to avert more mutant backlash in one of the largest cities in America. While Lynn has committed wrongdoings in the past, I've looked through files of mutants in other cities and seen she is not an isolated incident-helping her recover could offer a foot in the door for enacting similar programs for kids in similar situations. Her crimes have not been of malice, and her motives, if flawed, are understandable-she's been hurt, and is attempting to deal with it in the only way she knows. Show her another way.

Considering the extenuating circumstances, I ask you to consider accepting Miss Holmes to your institution-I and her parole officer will maintain correspondence with your disciplinary staff and Miss Holmes to ensure her adherence to any guidelines. She is well aware of the legal repercussions facing her should any illegal activity be continued while at the university.


((This is a fair deal longer than 2-3 paragraphs-I apologize for that just started and it kept on going. Normal posts won't be such a tank, I promise))


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Application is done (made on mobile so I'll be editing typos when I see them). I'll finish up the sample post tomorrow. Thanks for the tips BTW!
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@He Who Walks Behind and @Liriia
Your revised character sheets are looking so promising that I can physically feel my excitement for getting this roleplay underway. The cast is really shaping up to be something quite special!

I will let you make the finishing touches to your applications (Sample posts, formatting etc) and then I will re-read them tomorrow with Shard and send you your feedback. I just felt compelled to let you both know that whatever you're doing, it's working for me.
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Glad to hear it! Looking forward to the RP as well, we seem to have a pretty great cast!
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So I know I made this big deal about my ghost-guy character, but I think I've changed my mind and I'm gonna use something else.
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So I know I made this big deal about my ghost-guy character, but I think I've changed my mind and I'm gonna use something else.


Haha, alright. I look forward to seeing what you come up with.
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Edited up my last post with the sample, so that's my completed template.
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Added a few bullets to give specific usage of Devin's power. Would love feedback on the character sheet please.
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I've read through your sheets now and I am very happy with what I've seen, well done both of you. I am very positive to your sheets, but as Tyler said, we will discuss it together before making a decision on anything. Either way, I want you both to pat yourself on the shoulder because you've done a really great job.

As for Lynn, I can really tell from the way you've written that she knows that she is being informal and doesn't 'give a shit'. I love that you added her therapists notes to it as a 'saving touch' to get her into the school. She obviously needs some assistance on formality and professionalism. I like how you wrote this, well done.

I will discuss this with Tyler later today and if there are any changes to be made, we will inform you ^^.

@World Traveler

I like that you've added the bullets, it makes everything easier to understand. I have one question concerning your explosion power. How powerful is it? Can it blow a metal door off its hinges or is it more of a "force push" kind of thing. Can it blow people up or does it push them back?
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We love your application so far. We like that, though her guises are seemingly endless, she does not 'gain' anything from them. I.e. she can turn into a huge bodybuilder, but the amount of weight she is able to lift does not change. That is a good balance of the power and you have thought it through well. We have a few questions about the nature of the power:

• How long does it take for her to transform between appearances?
• Is she limited to human-only transformations, or can she turn into animals etc.?
• Can she only turn into people she sees (i.e. uses them as a 'reference'), or does she have free control to change her body at will? (I.e. she could remain her 'regular self' but taller, for instance.)

Your personal statement is a good start, but we expect the most detail in this field of the application. It is your character's chance to really tell his story to the academy and convince them he needs a place. You can look at the character sheets Shard and I have posted for an example of the content we would like.


So, questions first I guess.

She can transform within just a few seconds, and if you're watching her as she transforms you may just notice her like blur out of focus or something like that. Also it doesn't make any sound when she changes, so she could change and no-one would notice if they weren't paying attention. She could change into anything that she can imagine, so long as it's humanoid. She can't actually change into an animal because she can't change her weight or physical strength to accommodate that form. She'd probably end up hurting herself if she tried.

Oh, is it ok if she can accurately copy someone's voice just as well as their appearance?

as for the personal statement, I'll get that done tomorrow hopefully.
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It is completely fine that her transformations are rather instant given the fact that her power is more of a visual illusion than anything else. I personally do not see much of an issue with her voice changing, but I will discuss it with Tyler and one of us will get back to you.
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@Shard

Thanks for the speedy reply. Answers to your question below.

In regards to power I hadn't really thought that far ahead. If you have a look at my sample post my characters stress over the alarm clock caused his power to make it explode when he touched it to turn off. This is about how far I thought about the power. I am thinking that, because dark matter will go through the process of annihilation, that the explosion isn't a catastrophic type (This would kill him too!) but more a controlled explosion going outward from where it originates on his body. I would think at his PEAK ability maybe blowing a door off its hinges could be possible? He isn't going to be blowing people away just by shaking their hands but maybe cause burns if he loses control when someone shakes his hand too strong maybe. There aren't going to be massive explosions erupting from his hands every time he gets angry or something.

I would say my final thoughts on it are it is more the force push as the annihilation process doesn't actually involve heat so much as a reverse in pressure. Simply put if he were to put a bunch of the dark matter in his fist and then punch someone the person would be thrown back before his fist hit them. Instead they would be hit with the dark matter which would then annihilate (aka collapsing in on itself causing an explosion and the force of that would throw them backwards.)

Does that answer the question? Since this is a new power I am thinking up I am not completely confident in everything as it is a work in progress.
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It does, thank you for the explanation ^^. I will talk with Tyler later today.

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I'm going to revise my character now, planning to change his power also, thanks for the feedback!
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@Tyler
There did some editing to the sheet.
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I'm at school so I'll finish the Sample at home. For now, I've redone Jinkee's profile and feedback is welcome!!!
An early apology for the length it didn't feel that long when I was writing it grrrr--
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How do you feel about a character being able to manipulate how perceptible he is to people? Say he could make himself completely imperceptible, where people are completely unaware of him, unable to touch see or sense him in any way. Perhaps even be unable to recall him. On the other extreme he'd be really obvious. People would just sense him even if not looking at him, they'd pay him attention over other people, his voice would drown out that of others. I'm still thinking on the limits and whether this ability also affects machines such as cameras, microphones, and and other recording/detection equipment, but what do you think?


Didn't get any feedback on this so I thought you might've missed it. I'd like to know if this type of power is acceptable before I get to work on the rest of a CS.
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