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@Jbcool Ah, thank you!
I'll start working on the rest, although I must admit describing personalities is not my strong suit. In regards to equipment, is what I have at the moment okay? I was thinking a Shock Maul as-well, but I want to leave some equipment that I can look forward to acquiring in the RP so i was planning on leaving it with what's already there.
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@Kingfisher You just happen to pop up in threads I monitor, huh

Interest here. I was in a Dark Heresy roleplay before this, I think I might be alright here.


The oracles of the space time continuum once blessed me with omnivision in return for my mortal soul. I watch you always, especially whilst you're in the shower.

I dunno, I guess we have similar interests.

@Jbcool @Hank Hope you both find my CS to be acceptable!



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@Kingfisher What an outlandish character. I love it.

@Pripovednik and @Lone Wanderer; your characters are (so far) fine, but I have to ask you to clean up your writing. Both of you string together impossibly long sentences through the prolific abuse of commas -- and, aside from the length, often group sentences together that are unrelated, which is just shoddy writing.

At risk of sounding pedantic and patronizing, I advise you to read your sheets as if you were speaking the sentences out loud. You'll find that you're not making the right pauses in the right places.

Well, in my opinion, anyway.
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@Hank I'll get around to making it legible when I find the time

Edit: Don't expect perfection, I have a lot to do aside from RP.
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@Hank I am aware of my rather free use of commas and would like to point out that what is on the CS is more of a draft than finished product, and as such has yet to be fully proofread and improved upon. Nevertheless, I'll make the requested changes and criticism is welcomed but I'd prefer it be sent via PM as to appear more constructive and less condescending.
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@Kingfisher What an outlandish character. I love it.


I'm very glad that you do. I'm hoping that Nisvilia makes the cut, and that I get the opportunity to be equally outlandish amidst this increasingly awesome looking crew.

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There is something to be said for working with a Rogue Trader. You get to meet some interesting people.
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Does anyone have any opinions on my CS in terms of content etc.? (criticism & praise is welcome) :)
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@Flagg You're hired, welcome aboard. :)

@KingfisherIt's terrible! Nah, I jest, I love it. Welcome aboard, Kingfisher.

@Lone Wanderer@PripovednikThank both; what is put in your CS now is really so that we know more for later. I like both your character's, and with a couple of tweaks I reckon we'll be good to G.O.
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@Flagg You're hired, welcome aboard. :)

@KingfisherIt's terrible! Nah, I jest, I love it. Welcome aboard, Kingfisher.

@Lone Wanderer@PripovednikThank both; what is put in your CS now is really so that we know more for later. I like both your character's, and with a couple of tweaks I reckon we'll be good to G.O.


Many thanks! I can't wait to get going with this.
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I'll be posting my character sheet this afternoon after I get out of school.
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I have edited my text, I hope it is...adequate?
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@Flagg You're hired, welcome aboard. :)

@KingfisherIt's terrible! Nah, I jest, I love it. Welcome aboard, Kingfisher.

@Lone Wanderer@PripovednikThank both; what is put in your CS now is really so that we know more for later. I like both your character's, and with a couple of tweaks I reckon we'll be good to G.O.


Great! looking forward to starting this.
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<Snipped quote by Hank>

I'm very glad that you do. I'm hoping that Nisvilia makes the cut, and that I get the opportunity to be equally outlandish amidst this increasingly awesome looking crew.


Just read your CS and laughed out loud- fantastic stuff. Aryon and Nisvilia should get along famously.

All the CSes are super-strong, looking forward to this.
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<Snipped quote by Kingfisher>

Just read your CS and laughed out loud- fantastic stuff. Aryon and Nisvilia should get along famously.

All the CSes are super-strong, looking forward to this.


Thank you muchly! They both seem like oddballs amidst the Grim Darkness of the 41st millennium, so I feel like they'll get along well.
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Accepted? Yay or Nay...
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Here is mah person

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@Hank
Edit: Don't expect perfection, I have a lot to do aside from RP.


So does everyone else, but this is Advanced.

I just came back from a rather harrowing flight and emergency landing. I'll give feedback tomorrow.
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@PripovednikI'll wait for Hanko to give his feedback, but it's a yes from me.

@DurandalFelt like I was back in Uni reading an essay! :D You're hired!

@HankAye, don't rush yourself laddie, don't start til Wednesday anyhow.
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@Jbcool I'll take that as a compliment. :P
Glad you liked it. Time for the unfaithful to burn! :D
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