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Dead Cruiser Dishonour Before Death / Better You Than Me

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What do I know of cultured ways, the gilt, the craft and the lie?
I, who was born in a naked land and bred in the open sky.
The subtle tongue, the sophist guile, they fail when the broadswords sing;
Rush in and die, dogs—I was a man before I was a king.











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Minato Namikaze The Yellow Flash of the Leaf

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Alright, so, I had a closer look at your writeup, and I have some more detailed notes for you. If anyone else wants to have a look, I've underlined general worldbuilding stuff that is Neat To Look At.



I'll amend these changes, then get my CS up.
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Aaaand, here she is!



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Okay, I have to ask - have you been playing a lot of Dominions? Because I have been playing a shitload of Dominions lately, and I can't help but notice a lot of similar themes/locations (Atlantis, Lemuria.) Might just be my imagination.

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Once I finish drafting a character sheet, I'm planning on tossing my hat into the ring.

brace yourselves, nerds
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I'm more than a bit interested, still mulling over what sort of character I'd like to write (I have a couple of ideas), but this looks promising. :D
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Reserving a spot for a ranger-esque character here. Should have it up by tonight.
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I'm feeling the beginnings of an alchemist, but we'll see how that goes.
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Alrighty, I've got my WIP in a decent, just-about-complete state, and I'd appreciate seeing peoples' comments and criticisms on it (especially the latter). I also need to find a good image, hopefully. I'm going for the idea of if you took a DnD character, gave them some decent starting stats, and then poured everything into charisma from then on.
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I think there may be some issues with people's timelines. If I understand correctly, the current era, the Age of Dawn, is in its 56th year.

Which suggests that the Scourge (although still present as a lesser threat) and the fall of Altantis, Iiram and Thule occurred some 56 years ago. Given that the Years of Dusk occurred during the last ten years of the last era (Age of Steel).
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Yeah, I was confused as to how the various events on the timeline fit together. The original interest-check bit made it sound like we were just emerging into the Age of Dawn, but looking at the glossary now I've also spotted the 56-year thing. I suppose a reworking of the ol' backstory will be necessary.
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If I may offer a suggestion? Could Markus not simply be the bastard son of one of the kings of one of the many minor kingdoms that arose from the shattered remains of Thule?

This particular king might even have claimed to be the true descendant from the last great king of Thule or rumors and beliefs that suggest the same could be widely held by the common folk.

If you then change the fall of Thule in his backstory to the fall of this minor kingdom (occurring at some when it works best), you'd leave Markus with the same motivation to restore Thule to greatness and a fairly similar claim to the throne.
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Perhaps, perhaps. The entire background needs reworking in any case. I'll probably get working on it later, or maybe
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Ah. I, too, was laboring under the impression that this whole 'Age of Dawn' thing was relatively new - missed the '56 years' thing. I'll give the backstory a rework in a bit to account for that.
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There is hope, given that it says:

In the Age of Dawn, only the vestiges of the Scourge remain, as Mutants carrying the disease can spread the foul miasma to the uninfected, enforcing the vitality of burning the bodies of slain Beastmen.


I think your backstory largely works?
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Here's a question: We know that the Age of Dawn has been going on for fifty years. How long was the Age of Dusk before that? The glossary makes it sound like a sudden eruption of all sorts of cataclysmic events over a relatively short period of time, but I don't know.
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The Years of Dusk should have lasted ten years based on the codex, after which, I presume the Age of Dawn started, but as to how long the Year of Steel (the previous era) lasted, I don't believe it is specified.

I made a terrible diagram to try and understand things myself:

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56th year = present
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There is hope, given that it says:

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I think your backstory largely works?


Ah. Good point. I guess I'll wait for GM approval as to whether or not a large outbreak like that would still be possible - if so, I'll just modify it a little accordingly. If not, it may have to undergo some more serious reworking.
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