Wait until you actually read the shittiness of the last couple sections. Then you'll really be complaining.

EDIT: With the note-taking I had done prior to working on typing up (some) of the CS I had originally written on paper and the time spent actually typing it up, as well as doing revisions, I've spent the past thirteen straight hours writing non-stop with no breaks. I forgot to have dinner. I'm now hungry and tired, and my muscles ache from being in relatively the same position for too long. Definitely time to crash.

Nightraider said Personally, I'm not going to try and change my characters story to fit yours if you've mostly copied yours from a wikia, regardless if it's what you wanted anyway. I'm not trying to sound like an asshole, but I put some effort into this, and while it may not be 100% unique, it is mostly all my own idea, with only references to in-universe characters from the wikia. Sorry Matt, but I'll leave mine as it is and let EE decide. If you win, power to you.

I didn't 100% copy my CS from the Wiki. I copied a paragraph about his early life, i said that he had a very similar upbringing to his comic counterpart. They shared a similar life, up until a certain point, after which, my Hulk went one way, and Stan's Hulk went another. That's it, what happens after that is completely my own idea's. And again, nobody at any point stated that, as a rule, we're not allowed to take liberties from the comics. That's like complaining about how Drew's Spider-Man lost his parents and was taken in by Uncle Ben and Aunt May. Of course we are going to take liberties from the stories, because those stories are good. We want to make characters that stay true to the mythos, whilst being completely our own, which, in my opinion, is exactly what a re-imagining should be.

Also, if you read my proposal, you would note that it doesn't involve changing your character to fit mine, it's changing my character to fit yours. I was just wondering if you were ok with this idea.

All-Star Marvel Application[B]

[B]Player Name: Nightrunner

Character You Wish To Play: Peter Benjamin Parker

Moral Alignment (Hero, Villain, Walking the Line): Hero

Affiliation (what group/team/organization, if any, is your character affiliated with?): Formerly he was an Oscorp employee.

Character Origin & Backstory: Born in Queens, New York, Peter Parker was raised by Richard and Mary Parker. He'd been very intelligent as a young boy. Even in his toddler years, his family knew he was gifted. He never stopped asking his father, who had won the Nobel Prize, the question: Why. He was always dreaming of the future and what he could do one day, how he could carry on the Parker legacy, and what all he could give to the world. He was often taken to see his Aunt May and Uncle Ben, and his significantly younger cousin Mayday, who lived down the street from them. Uncle Ben was Richard's brother, and they didn't always see eye to eye. Richard lived by the law and science, while Ben put his faith in basic human decency.

In school, Peter was never particularly athletic. He wasn't particularly suave or socially graceful. What he was, was a nerd. Peter constantly had his nose buried deep in the pages of his textbooks, and when it wasn't, it was in a comic book. After school, he'd often put an hour or two towards earning some college degrees over the internet. Otherwise, Peter was striking out with girls he never honestly had a chance with. His friend, who he often tutored, was the son of one of New York's richest men, Norman Osborn, CEO and founder of Oscorp. Norman's son, Harry, often defended Peter from the insults that came with being smart in school. Harry always invited Peter to his parties, which was likely the only reason Peter wasn't completely alone socially.

Peter graduated as the valedictorian of Midtown High. His parents were very proud of him, and so was his aunt and uncle. Harry's father suggested that he tell Peter about about a job at Oscorp just for him. Harry and Peter got jobs the same day. Peter, as a geneticist, and Harry in the management department. On the first day, like magic, Harry found a girlfriend in Lilly Hollister, a coworker in Oscorp's PR department. But Peter also found love. Oscorp's facility was ginormous. It was one of the city's tallest towers, and every square inch of it was dedicated to a better tomorrow. It was just like a dream.

In a few weeks time, Peter had already developed a cure for patients who'd lost their limbs in a war across seas or through any other accident. The test patient was Kurt Connors, a former Iraq veteran who'd lost his arm in a minefield before barely escaping with his life. Through the use of aa retrovirus based on the DNA sequences of an Iguana, Peter managed to provide a way to give those not lucky enough to have an X-Healing factor a means to regenerate any part of their body in a day's time.

The discovery made Peter an instant success. For the first time in his life Peter felt loved by people in general. He appeared on talk-shows, magazine interviews, and was featured on the cover of Time. One day, when he completed a lab report about the effects of 'P-2016', as his healing virus had been labeled, he was met by Lilly Hollister, who Peter'd heard of before, but had never met.

She took him too a sub basement of the facility. And when she took Peter inside, he was astounded. The basement was teaming with humanoid animal hybrids. Right off the bat, Peter saw a Puma pacing back and forth in its cage. When Peter asked Lilly why he'd never seen this project before. She told him that it was because it was a secret contract for the military, to create the next-generation of super soldiers. She called it, "The Zoo-per Soldier Project." Peter asked how the animals could ever act as soldiers. Lilly told him that they were given augmented intelligences to outclass any pureblood humans on the fields. Peter was silently shocked, it took all the honor out of fighting a war. But then Lilly then offered Peter a position as the lead geneticist in the department.

Peter declined, on the grounds of decency towards other nations. But then, in a final offer, Lilly said that it wouldn't be exclusive to the US, that they'd sell them to whoever needs it, or whoever can pay for them. Peter declined again, on the grounds of not wanting to commit treason.

So Lilly said, "Well. It's not for everyone." Then she knocked Peter out cold before dragging his body onto an operating table, strapping him down, and waiting for him to wake up. When he woke up, Lilly started talking. "Rise and shine, Mr.Parker. Today, you've volunteered for the Zoo-per Soldier Project. I lied earlier when I said we made animals smarter. We just augment humans and take their freewill. Believe it or not, you actually paved the way for this. It's wrapped up in two simple steps: First I have to alter your DNA, which is going to hurt. A lot. Then we lobotomize you." She jumped up and down, clapping.

She looked for the most unusual sserum she could find, avoiding ones such as the Tiger-serum, the Squirrel-Serum, the Octopus-Serum, and so forth. Then she found an incomplete project, the Spider-Serum. She chose it for two reasons, it seemed befitting of a man who was so socially awkward, and, being incomplete, would possibly have painful side effects. When she injected it into Peter's vein, he began to emit a green foam from his mouth. Lilly backed up, not knowing what it was. As it leaked down the side of his face, it ate at the table that was holding him. It ate the restraints off of his body, and it dissolved a bit of the concrete floor. Lilly ran away, believing that Petee might destroy himself and everything in the room.

It took him a minute to be able to think clearly and not want to smash everything. But once he did, Peter decided that he needed to get away from the place. Just walking out of the place Peter shoved some thingsmuch harder than intended, looked closely at things that weren't previously visible, ran very quickly, and leaked a sticky web out of his wrist. Just leaving the facility, he discovered most of his other genetic variances. Peter wasn't unsurprised by them at all, he was just being too objective to stop and marvel at them. On the way home, he just fell asleep. He didn't wake up for days.

However, days later, when he finally did make it to his house. There was police tape blocking the door. He also went to his parents house, which also was blocked. He didn't know what was going on. So he went to the library, where he used a computer to look up the news. It was a front page story.

Peter Parker: Fugitive. The Daily Bugle, New York's premier news source (sponsored by Oscorp), said that Peter Parker, former Oscorp employee, had allegedly murdered his parents using a trained animal. Then, after he'd committed the crime, he ran away. At the moment, Peter Benjamin Parker was the most wanted man in New York City. Peter looked around to see several people on their phones while they looked at him. So: Before the police could arrive, Peter got up and started running away like a madman.

Once he was alone, Peter thought about how he could prove his innocence, so he decided he would have to take on the case from a legal standpoint. He'd have to use forensic evidence to disprove the public's claims. But, Peter knew that it must've been Oscorp who'd framed him. So he decided that he'd, in the meantime, take Oscorp down with him. Specifically Lilly Hollister.

So, in the fashion of many superheroes before him, he created a costume and alias. He'd be Spider-Man, dressed in a dark blue Halloween costume with red features. But he realized he couldn't be Spider-Man all the time, so he created another alias, as a civilian he'd be Ben Reilly. He died his hair blonde and got a job at the Daily Bugle as an investigative journalist.

As Spider-Man and Ben Reilly, he's begun gathering evidence to prove his innocence and Oscorp's responsibility. He has yet to actually fight a supervillain or destroy any of Oscorp's work.

Powers and Abilities (What can you're character do? What can't they do?):
▪Agility: Peter is double-jointed, highly flexible, and has faster reflexes than almost any other human on the planet. He can jump over one hundred feet high as well as two hundred feet wide.
▪Binocular-Vision: He can see extra far distances that allow him to precisely choose a point to jump onto. As a bonus, it pretty much allows him to look extra far for any reason.
▪Intelligence: Peter is a world class genius with degrees he earned from home in Genetics, Physics, Engineering, and Biology.
▪Night-Vision: Peternis capable of seeing in low-level conditions due to specialzedncells within his pupils that gather light more effectively than in a human.
▪Spider-Sense: Using short little hairs on the back of his neck, Peter can feel vibrations from the ground he is standing on or traveling through the air. They act as an early warning sense to anything that would rapidly approach him.
▪Strength: When pushing himself to his limit, Peter can lift five tons (10K lbs).
▪Swiftness: With the (significantly less than) proportional speed of a spider, Peter is capable of running at speeds up to 100 miles per hour.
▪Venom: From specialized glands in his jaw, Peter can secrete an acidic biotoxin from his canines capable of eating through steel in seconds. It has no effect on his cells or body, despite seem its caustic nature.
▪Water Walking: He is fully capable of walking, running, and floating on water by subconsciously manipulating the surface tension.
▪Wall-Crawling: He is capable of ascending vertical surfaces and crawling across ceilings using the hairs on his feet, fingertips, and palms. The most obvious limitations to this ability are the fact that he tends to wear shoes and that his gloves may be too thick at times, and the surfaces he chooses to attach to. If they are hot, cold, slick or pointy, he will likely have a bit of trouble.
▪Web Generation: He can launch web of varying density based on how he flexes a specialized muscle in his wrist. The web is not made from nothing however, and requires that Peter create large amounts of protein. He cannot swing for a long time, such would require him to stop and eat or take frequent breaks.

Sample Post (This is used as an introduction to your writing – try to keep it to around three paragraphs or more and try to include dialogue):

Manhattan, New York

A lot of people think it would be really cool to have the proportional strength of a spider. Who am I kidding, no American citizen would ever naturally think that anything having to do with a proportion is cool. The point is, no matter what they offer you, be it a candy bar, a dollar, or a job, never trust a corporate blonde.

*Thwip!*

A runny yet sticky semisolid lurched out of a small hole in my wrist. It felt chilly and slimy every time it slithered out. It's like putty coming out your nose, then hardening in seconds. It's easier to not feel disgusted by myself if I don't think about it.

But that's just it. Every time I move, I feel it.

*Thwip*

And when I don't move, I can feel everyone else. No matter what I do, I'm stuck feeling like a freak. It's almost like nothing's changed since high school. I'm still a nerd with a disturbed psyche and abnormal physiology.

"Hey, baby. Gimme some sugar." I heard a voice call down a narrow alleyway.

"Ugh! Get a job, loser!" The woman, disgusted, snapped.

"I got one. I take pictures. A lovely lady like yourself would make a fine centerfold."

Sounds like trouble to me. So, instead of working my wrist muscles purposelessly, I turned directions and swung off the side of a building and landed on top of a short little coffee shop. The man and damsel in distress were right there, thirty feet away.

As they walked by, in the relative safety offered by the sidewalk, many citizens actually saw the man walking up towards the woman. One stopped for a second. He turned towards the two, but then someone bumped into him. So he turned his way and followed his path.

I have no faith in humanity.

"Come on babe. Just one click. It's all I want."

"Get lost, perv!"

"Babe, I could get lost in you.." he said, inching closer.

"Get away from me!" The woman screamed.

So I intervened. I jumped off the roof of the coffee shop and onto the damp, litter-coated pavement below. I landed on the balls of my feet, leaning forward and balanced on my fingertips.

"Hey, guy. You need some help?" I said, deepening my voice to sound like a fellow thug while I strolled up behind him.

"Wha-" the man turned around with his jaw dropped, like he was saying hello to my gloved fist. He spun on the tips of his toes before hitting the ground. So I looked up towards the woman, smiling under my mask.

She screamed and sprinted out of the alley.

"This guy comes and you talk. I knock him out and you run away. Typical!"

mattmanganon said
I didn't 100% copy my CS from the Wiki. I copied a paragraph about his early life, i said that he had a very similar upbringing to his comic counterpart. They shared a similar life, up until a certain point, after which, my Hulk went one way, and Stan's Hulk went another. That's it, what happens after that is completely my own idea's. And again, nobody at any point stated that, as a rule, we're not allowed to take liberties from the comics. That's like complaining about how Drew's Spider-Man lost his parents and was taken in by Uncle Ben and Aunt May. Of course we are going to take liberties from the stories, because those stories are good. We want to make characters that stay true to the mythos, whilst being completely our own, which, in my opinion, is exactly what a re-imagining should be.Also, if you read my proposal, you would note that it doesn't involve changing your character to fit mine, it's changing my character to fit yours. I was just wondering if you were ok with this idea.

The problem isn't the content - if none of us borrowed from the continuity then we'd have far different characters rolling around. It's the fact that you took a user of that wiki's work as your own.

You've fixed it now as you've said but I'm not sure if I should accept you when it's finally accepting time. I don't feel that you have the right attitude for an advanced-level game.

Nightrunner said
Hero Formerly he was an Oscorp employee. Born in and . He'd been very intelligent as a young boy. Even in his toddler years, his family knew he was gifted. He never stopped asking his father, who had won the Nobel Prize, the question: Why. He was always dreaming of the future and what he could do one day, how he could carry on the Parker legacy, and what all he could give to the world. He was often taken to see his and , and his significantly younger cousin , who lived down the street from them. Uncle Ben was Richard's brother, and they didn't always see eye to eye. Richard lived by the law and science, while Ben put his faith in basic human decency.In school, Peter was never particularly athletic. He wasn't particularly suave or socially graceful. What he was, was a nerd. Peter constantly had his nose buried deep in the pages of his textbooks, and when it wasn't, it was in a comic book. Otherwise, Peter was striking out with girls he never honestly had a chance with. His friend, who he often tutored, was the son of one of New York's richest men, , CEO and founder of . Norman's son, , often defended Peter from the insults that came with being smart in school. Harry always invited Peter to his parties, which was likely the only reason Peter wasn't completely alone socially.Peter graduated as the valedictorian of . His parents were very proud of him, and so was his aunt and uncle. Harry's father suggested that he tell Peter about about a job at Oscorp just for him. Harry and Peter got jobs the same day. Peter, as a geneticist, and Harry in the management department. On the first day, like magic, Harry found a girlfriend in , a coworker in Oscorp's PR department. But Peter also found love. Oscorp's facility was ginormous. It was one of the city's tallest towers, and every square inch of it was dedicated to a better tomorrow. It was just like a dream.In a few weeks time, Peter had already developed a cure for patients who'd lost their limbs in a war across seas or through any other accident. The test patient was , a former Iraq veteran who'd lost his arm in a minefield before barely escaping with his life. Through the use of aa retrovirus based on the DNA sequences of an Iguana, Peter managed to provide a way to give those not lucky enough to have an X-Healing factor a means to regenerate any part of their body in a day's time.The discovery made Peter an instant success. For the first time in his life Peter felt loved by people in general. He appeared on talk-shows, magazine interviews, and was featured on the cover of Time. One day, when he completed a lab report about the effects of , as his healing virus had been labeled, he was met by Lilly Hollister, who Peter'd heard of before, but had never met.She took him too a sub basement of the facility. And when she took Peter inside, he was astounded. The basement was teaming with humanoid animal hybrids. Right off the bat, Peter saw a pacing back and forth in its cage. When Peter asked Lilly why he'd never seen this project before. She told him that it was because it was a secret contract for the military, to create the next-generation of super soldiers. She called it, Peter asked how the animals could ever act as soldiers. Lilly told him that they were given augmented intelligences to outclass any pureblood humans on the fields. Peter was silently shocked, it took all the honor out of fighting a war. But then Lilly then offered Peter a position as the lead geneticist in the department.Peter declined, on the grounds of decency towards other nations. But then, in a final offer, Lilly said that it wouldn't be exclusive to the US, that they'd sell them to whoever needs it, or whoever can pay for them. Peter declined again, on the grounds of not wanting to commit treason.So Lilly said, "Well. It's not for everyone." Then she knocked Peter out cold before dragging his body onto an operating table, strapping him down, and waiting for him to wake up. When he woke up, Lilly started talking. "Rise and shine, Mr.Parker. Today, you've volunteered for the Zoo-per Soldier Project. I lied earlier when I said we made animals smarter. We just augment humans and take their freewill. Believe it or not, you actually paved the way for this. It's wrapped up in two simple steps: First I have to alter your DNA, which is going to hurt. A lot. Then we lobotomize you." She jumped up and down, clapping.She looked for the most unusual sserum she could find, avoiding ones such as the , the , the , and so forth. Then she found an incomplete project, the . She chose it for two reasons, it seemed befitting of a man who was so socially awkward, and, being incomplete, would possibly have painful side effects. When she injected it into Peter's vein, he began to emit a green foam from his mouth. Lilly backed up, not knowing what it was. As it leaked down the side of his face, it ate at the table that was holding him. It ate the restraints off of his body, and it dissolved a bit of the concrete floor. Lilly ran away, believing that Petee might destroy himself and everything in the room.It took him a minute to be able to think clearly and not want to smash everything. But once he did, Peter decided that he needed to get away from the place. Just walking out of the place Peter shoved some thingsmuch harder than intended, looked closely at things that weren't previously visible, ran very quickly, and leaked a sticky web out of his wrist. Just leaving the facility, he discovered most of his other genetic variances. Peter wasn't unsurprised by them at all, he was just being too objective to stop and marvel at them. On the way home, he just fell asleep. He didn't wake up for days.However, days later, when he finally did make it to his house. There was police tape blocking the door. He also went to his parents house, which also was blocked. He didn't know what was going on. So he went to the library, where he used a computer to look up the news. It was a front page story. The Daily Bugle, New York's premier news source (sponsored by Oscorp), said that Peter Parker, former Oscorp employee, had allegedly murdered his parents using a trained animal. Then, after he'd committed the crime, he ran away. At the moment, Peter Benjamin Parker was the most wanted man in New York City. Peter looked around to see several people on their phones while they looked at him. So: Before the police could arrive, Peter got up and started running away like a madman.Once he was alone, Peter thought about how he could prove his innocence, so he decided he would have to take on the case from a legal standpoint. He'd have to use forensic evidence to disprove the public's claims. But, Peter knew that it must've been Oscorp who'd framed him. So he decided that he'd, in the meantime, take Oscorp down with him. Specifically Lilly Hollister.So, in the fashion of many superheroes before him, he created a costume and alias. He'd be Spider-Man, dressed in a dark blue Halloween costume with red features. But he realized he couldn't be Spider-Man all the time, so he created another alias, as a civilian he'd be Ben Reilly. He died his hair blonde and got a job at the Daily Bugle as an investigative journalist.As Spider-Man and Ben Reilly, he's begun gathering evidence to prove his innocence and Oscorp's responsibility. He has yet to actually fight a supervillain or destroy any of Oscorp's work.▪Agility: Peter is double-jointed, highly flexible, and has faster reflexes than almost any other human on the planet. He can jump over one hundred feet high as well as two hundred feet wide.▪Binocular-Vision: He can see extra far distances that allow him to precisely choose a point to jump onto. As a bonus, it pretty much allows him to look extra far for any reason.▪Night-Vision: Peternis capable of seeing in low-level conditions due to specialzedncells within his pupils that gather light more effectively than in a human.▪Spider-Sense: Using short little hairs on the back of his neck, Peter can feel vibrations from the ground he is standing on or traveling through the air. They act as an early warning sense to anything that would rapidly approach him.▪Strength: When pushing himself to his limit, Peter can lift five tons (10K lbs).▪Swiftness: With the (significantly less than) proportional speed of a spider, Peter is capable of running at speeds up to 100 miles per hour.▪Venom: From specialized glands in his jaw, Peter can secrete an acidic biotoxin from his canines capable of eating through steel in seconds. It has no effect on his cells or body, despite seem its caustic nature.▪Water Walking: He is fully capable of walking, running, and floating on water by subconsciously manipulating the surface tension.▪Wall-Crawling: He is capable of ascending vertical surfaces and crawling across ceilings using the hairs on his feet, fingertips, and palms. The most obvious limitations to this ability are the fact that he tends to wear shoes and that his gloves may be too thick at times, and the surfaces he chooses to attach to. If they are hot, cold, slick or pointy, he will likely have a bit of trouble.▪Web Generation: He can launch web of varying density based on how he flexes a specialized muscle in his wrist. The web is not made from nothing however, and requires that Peter create large amounts of protein. He cannot swing for a long time, such would require him to stop and eat or take frequent breaks.-WIP-

Wow. That's kind of creepy isn't it...

Edit: Alright; I've read everyone's sheets so far now. Could everyone who is yet to please get their sample posts up within the next 24-or-so hours. I'll make the tough calls at this point.

I'll have access to a computer in an hour and I'll be able to finish the cs so you can actually judge it.

Rade said
I'll have access to a computer in an hour and I'll be able to finish the cs so you can actually judge it.

Fair enough. What actually is the problem with the computer, if you don't mind my asking?

I'll have access to a computer in an hour and I'll be able to finish the cs so you can actually judge it.

I'll have access to a computer in an hour and I'll be able to finish the cs so you can actually judge it.

Wow, ignore those extra posts. Site going down screwed that up. I'll delete them when able.

My laptop has a problem with an internal component that causes the backlights not to function. Meaning I can't see anything on the screen.

Rade said
Wow, ignore those extra posts. Site going down screwed that up. I'll delete them when able. My laptop has a problem with an internal component that causes the backlights not to function. Meaning I can't see anything on the screen.

Just stick a flashlight up to the screen. You'll be able to see fine if you look really closely.

Rade said
Wow, ignore those extra posts. Site going down screwed that up. I'll delete them when able. My laptop has a problem with an internal component that causes the backlights not to function. Meaning I can't see anything on the screen.

"Yeh, try and talk something out."

Ahhh. Have you tried hooking it up to a spare monitor? My brother had a set up like that going for a while.

Yeah, a spare monitor doesn't sound too absurd I did that for awhile as well. Working on CS's tonight, EE.

Gowi said Working on CS's tonight, EE.

Same.

I'll try and at least get one done here anyway.

Gowi said
Yeah, a spare monitor doesn't sound too absurd I did that for awhile as well. Working on CS's tonight, EE.

My mom did too actually. We ordered another screen for her laaptop off a certain worldwide networking resource.

I'm hoping to have my Cap CS finished up tonight. If not, It'll definitely be done tomorrow.

Regarding flashlight: probably meant as a joke, but it doesn't work like that.

Regarding a spare monitor: I do not have another monitor, nor would that entirely work as there are other issues with the laptop that have persisted for a long time. The backlight issue is just the most recent. In fact, it might not even be the backlight after all as it was 'repaired' over three months ago and the problem returned days later. I'm still waiting to hear back from the guy to see what had happened.

Anyways, I'm just waiting on my brother to stop watching livestreams and get off his laptop.

ErsatzEmperor said
The problem isn't the content - if none of us borrowed from the continuity then we'd have far different characters rolling around. It's the fact that you took a user of that wiki's work as your own.You've fixed it now as you've said but I'm not sure if I should accept you when it's finally accepting time. I don't feel that you have the right attitude for an advanced-level game.

I will admit, it has been a while since i was in an Advanced RP... The only long running Advanced RP i was in was on an old Star Trek forum that died back in 2009. All the rest of the Advanced RP's i was in died pretty quickly. But i am positive i can deliver in the IC.

Also, i editted my CS to fit with Raiders.

Rade's profile is making me feel like I shouldn't bother aiming for Spider-Man. His just makes it clear he knows exactly what to do with the character. Meanwhile I didn't have much planned, so I concede my Spider-Man profile, leaving my Iron Man profile there instead.

DrewVonAwesome said
Rade's profile is making me feel like I shouldn't bother aiming for Spider-Man. His just makes it clear he knows exactly what to do with the character. Meanwhile I didn't have much planned, so I concede my Spider-Man profile, leaving my Iron Man profile there instead.

Look at the bright side, now you only have to focus on one character. It's better to do 1 character well, than a load of characters badly...