I concur.

I changed the cold radiance and changed the hand to hand and sword skills so she's not a professional hand to hand fighter or swordsman. @leaves@Scarifar

Still is a superhuman that is 5x as strong as a normal person plus all other junk. Without racial buffs though it seems fine to me.

Still is a superhuman that is 5x as strong as a normal person plus all other junk. Without racial buffs though it seems fine to me.

Could balance that and say he needs to eat 5x as much as a normal person, and sleep 5x as much. Giving him permenant sleep-depredation because there is literally not enough hours in the day.

@Lunar

Well, it is rather difficult to gauge exactly how to make your character "balanced". Hell, I'm playing a demonic character and even with his Gift he's probably about 3 times as strong and fast as a normal human.

Your character is, without a doubt, still very much OP. Moving so fast you're basically teleporting and having a "crazy amount of strength", just to name a couple examples. That's not even mentioning your extraordinarily acute senses that can pinpoint an enemy's location. She's basically a Mary Sue. Ya gotta remember that all of us are still Level 1, so we're not meant to be that powerful just yet.

What really makes it difficult is that we know nothing about your character's bio, so we can't tell what kind of knowledge she is meant to have.

The bio is supposed to be secretive. @Scarifar

@Lunar

I dunno. To me, it just says "lazy", which I can relate to about writing bios.

However, I'm 95% sure you're not actually being lazy about the bio, but it really doesn't help the people trying to judge your cs. At the very least, it doesn't help me. If you still prefer showing the bio in the ic, though, I won't stop you.

Anyway, enough about the bio, that's just a minor concern. You should balance your character's abilities.

I changed more, I'm not good at this whole dumbing down thing. @Scarifar

I just think you need to either drop your martial arts skills or your racial buffs. Either set of things seems reasonable for the start.

Try not to think of it as dumbing down! You can write about the growth of the abilities throughout the roleplay. You may find that, as you write, you want to go in a different direction anyway. It's also a blast to see how your character responds to getting stronger. Maybe just lock away the martial arts or the buff for now, and learn them later? I'm not getting the impression that you have to trash these permanently - just that they're too much for now. :)

Like, I made Egwene's gift with plenty of growth. She can grow seven more tails over the course of the rp, and at the 9th, tail, well....https://www.youtube.com/watch?..

But what if.... you became the ten tails? TURN IT UP TO 11!

Mmmm...What I would do to 'nerf' the character would be, first of all, drop the 'Blink' ability. That is a short-range teleportation spell whichever way you look at it, and I'm sure you didn't have a 'mage' in mind when creating the character. Secondly, her healing factor. How strong is it exactly? Give an example, like how well does it mend wounds? How long would it take to close severe injuries? that kind of stuff. Needless to say if it is 'Wolverine-level' healing then that is off the table right from the strat.

Faster and stronger than your average human? Sure, sure. Better reflexes, better sense of smell, good tracking skills. Sounds about alright so long as you dont OVERPLAY them. The part about her skin being cold yet radiating heat and stuff, I belive what you meant by it is that...her body temperature is naturally on the lower side (making sense if one is to assume she is some kind of Northern fantasy-race), something purely 'cosmetic' which won't really matter in combat situations.

As for her other 2 techniques? Well... they are not BAD or particularly OP, in my oppinion but, again, they feel more like something a 'mage' would use. Couldn't you just see a wizard pulling an ethereal sword out of thin air and swing it around? Maybe change them into something more closely resembling of a 'special move' kind of stuff? I dunno.

But hey, those are just my few cents '''^^

@Lunar

I think I'll throw in my own personal thoughts now too, I mean I really don't have the authority to declare anything but I just want to say something at this point. So yeah I agree with Eklipse, you either need to stick with her martial techniques or her racial advantages, just you probably shouldn't have both. Personally I would consider those racial benefits to be more like a gift and should be listed as such.

Also I know Scarifar has already said that the way you have the bio, or lack of, is fine just it does make it hard to decide if she's actually balanced. From what I understand she does know how to fight, which in of itself is perfectly okay, but since we don't have a bio those skills of hers are honestly hard to judge. You have to remember that most characters used to be normal humans before they died, and typically everyday folk don't know swordsmanship or martial arts, these are things that have to be specifically trained for in today's modern world.

For example my character is ideally one day going to be a skilled and badass warrior, just right now she barely even knows how to swing a sword and definitely lacks the confidence or knowledge to just throw herself into combat. She basically has to grow into the role and that's just going to take character development. So maybe try applying this philosophy to your own character? Think about how she can simply grow into what you want rather than trying to start the RP as such.

Ok I'll do that, thx @Damiann47

But what if.... you became the ten tails? TURN IT UP TO 11!

a Ten-tailed Kitsune doesn't exist in mythos. There was only ever one Nine-Tailed Fox at a time, and that was Omniscient. Basically a Fox God.

Ok I added a bio and brought down her stuff. I hope I'm finished.

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a Ten-tailed Kitsune doesn't exist in mythos. There was only ever one Nine-Tailed Fox at a time, and that was Omniscient. Basically a Fox God.

That's why you need to forge your own legend. The legend of the ten tail fox. Defy the old reign. IMAGINE THE POWER AND TAKE IT FOR YOUR OWN!

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That's why you need to forge your own legend. The legend of the ten tail fox. Defy the old reign. IMAGINE THE POWER AND TAKE IT FOR YOUR OWN!

And go what? Super Fox God Super Fox?

Why stop at mere godliness? Become some of that DC/Marval almighty x3 exsisting omniomni thingy. You're not cool until someone has to make up a new word to describe you.