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First, I want to apologize for not reporting back. I've become distracted by other things and have a bit forgotten about this, but now as it has become clear that the other RP I've used this base concept will never start, I'm back and (hopefully) prepared:

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Currently in the middle of finals, I'll catch back up with everything on Friday.
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@Fetzen hey!

I like Ava approve the character!

Tomorrow is my last final exam. I'll write and intro for you after that!
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Finally finished it. Between @RokkuHoshi and @Belwicket being away so much, it's been difficult on me.
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Name: Aeron Stormhawk

Age: 28

Gender: Male

Species: Homo-Spiritus (A human that can utilize the spirits of the dead to do great feats.)

World of Origin: Elgard (A D&D-like world full of many different species where magic is free-flowing.)

Are you a member of TRIDENT? If so, what is your job/specialty? No.

Are you one of those seemingly normal people? If so, what do you do? No.

Appearance: He stands 6'2" with an athletic build. He has shoulder-length, spiky, silver hair and normal, blue eyes. He clothes are not easy to describe.


Abilities and skills: Aeron is good with any sword, though could still use improvement, and can utilize energy rather efficiently. He is also rather proficient in crafting and cooking. He still retains his dexterity and sleight-of-hand from when he was a child, living on the streets. To use his full power, Aeron must allow one of his contracted spirits shared control, giving him access to the spirit's abilities. While Aeron himself controls the physical movements, the spirit is the one controlling the energy to increase the damage. When he first gains a contract with a spirit, there is always a learning curve to allow them to get to know how to battle together. He currently has 5 spirits contracted with him that he can call to him.

Torth: Nicknamed the King of the Mountain, Torth is very strong but not very bright. He knows what he needs to know and helps Aeron when called upon, giving him the power to easily lift and move objects that he would otherwise be unable to. He also allows him to deal and take great damage, though he's very slow. He can also control earth. His weakness is water.

Aeryus: Aeryus is an air spirit, giving Aeron speed, though lowers his defense, and allows Aeron to control the air around him. Aeryus is rather childish and fun-loving, having been given the moniker Stormchild because of it. His weakness is Earth.

Ophrita: A phoenix called the Empress of Embers, Ophrita allows Aeron to utilize her speed and ferocity, though he cannot touch water without being hurt. With Ophrita, Aeron can control fire and fly, though not for long distances. When with her, he is easy to anger.

Ludin: She allows Aeron to move more gracefully, allowing him to dodge more attacks and make it a little harder to hurt him. However, he can't deal as much damage. With her, he can control water but has a weakness to lightning.

Valmore: Valmore is a genderless spirit of the element of spirit. They allow Aeron to heal faster, though doesn't really help with combat.

Strengths and Weaknesses: While faster and stronger than a normal human, not to mention an other-worldly sense on others who can use magic and/or energy, he can be killed just as easily as a normal human. While having a spirit with him, Aeron becomes weak to the opposite element than what the spirit gives him.

Equipment Requests: Nothing.

History: Aeron grew up from a young age living on the streets of the big city, Durendel. He's been able to use energy for as long as he can remember, which made survival a lot easier for him. He contracted his first spirit, Aeryus, at 12. With Aeryus as his friend, growing up on the streets became easier for him, until they met Ludin 4 years later. Ludin helped the pair grow up a little, allowing Aeron to turn from a child to a young man. He met his next 2 spirits when he was 20 and 24, giving him fire and earth respectfully. A week before being torn through the rift, he found his fifth and final spirit, Valmore.

Personality: He's mostly carefree, fun-loving, and easygoing. However, when he does get serious, he becomes very scary. During a fight, he is often acting the smart-ass and turning his opponent's words against them. He's very intelligent, though doesn't always show it, and can make plans and strategies on the fly.


Hey hey! Thanks for finishing the cs!

I like the concept, but, this character is over powered for the current level of this game. They have fighting skills, energy skills, slight of hand, and all the powers that come with each "summon". He has a lot going on that isn't described in depth.

What do you think about picking a specialty for your character and then fleshing that out?
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My last finals are tomorrow! I'll have a post after that stress is dropped.
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<Snipped quote by KazeXDZ>

Hey hey! Thanks for finishing the cs!

I like the concept, but, this character is over powered for the current level of this game. They have fighting skills, energy skills, slight of hand, and all the powers that come with each "summon". He has a lot going on that isn't described in depth.

What do you think about picking a specialty for your character and then fleshing that out?


Each spirit gives him a different power set with new strengths and weaknesses. The actual character can only use swords, sleight of hand, and energy. The rest of what he does is with the help of a spirit and each strength a spirit gives, he also gains a weakness.
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The trouble for me is that it has not gone into enough depth and seems to assume a lot. For example, contracting a spirit. What does that entail? Is it a mutual agreement, or does the spirit have to first be dominated before it becomes compliant? How do the spirits appear? Do they have a corporeal form when they are not sharing his body? If so, is there range they can be from him? How quickly can he switch between spirits? Is there a recovery time after being possessed? Is there a psychological cost to it? It’s mentioned that his race can utilise the spirits of the dead, is that inherent or does it have to be taught? He can use energy, but how does that manifest? I use energy to walk, but I’m assuming that’s not what is meant here. Once the strengths and limitations are clearer, then a much fairer process of balancing can take place, if keeping all the spirits is truly necessary. In its current state, however, it is looking to be over-powered for this setting.

Kaze, it should also be considered that as this rp is not going to be 100% action constantly, the history section might want to be fleshed out. At the moment it is not clear what your character’s motives are, or if he even has any. If you explore where he’s been, you might better understand where he’s going. However, the biggest problem right now is the relative strength of your character.
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Each spirit gives him a different power set with new strengths and characters. The actual character can only use swords, sleight of hand, and energy. The rest of what he does is with the help of a spirit and each strength a spirit gives, he also gains a weakness.


Yes. But I would prefer one character to a 5-in-1 character.

I also support everything JDH said.
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@Eyeris@jdh97 Now he wants to fuse a Super Saiyan and an Avatar. Nevermind, he's going with his Miraculous character. I'll help him get started on it in a bit.
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I've moved the CS to the character tab as it seems @jdh97 accepts him as well (correct me if I'm wrong! I'm just assuming because there was no objection). I'm looking forward to the intro.
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I've moved the CS to the character tab as it seems @jdh97 accepts him as well (correct me if I'm wrong! I'm just assuming because there was no objection). I'm looking forward to the intro.

Your assumption is correct.
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Name: Thomas "Tommy" Oliver AKA Silver Fang

Age: 19

Gender: Male

Species: Human

World of Origin: Earth of Miraculous - In this world there are items known as the Miraculouses. Each one takes the form of a piece of jewelry or something similar. Each Miraculous is paired with a Kwami, a small fairy-like being. With the help of the power of the Kwami, a Miraculous wielder can turn into a super-enhanced person. With this power, they can either be a hero or a villain. Each Miraculous has their own set of powers and abilities it gives their user. Each Miraculous is animal based, which defines their powers and abilities. Otherwise, this world is identical except to our own.

Are you a member of TRIDENT? If so, what is your job/specialty? No

Are you one of those seemingly normal people? If so, what do you do? No

Appearance: Tommy is a tall boy at 6'0" and very muscilar, though not too broad. He wears t-shirts and jeans, though has been known to wear a Karate Gi.
As Silver Fang, his suit is a lot like Chat Noir's, complete with wolf ears, with the addition of fur between his wrists and elbows as well as from his knees to his ankles. On the front of each boot, he has 3 claws. His wristband sits on his right wrist.

Abilities and skills: As Tommy, he is slightly stronger and faster than average, as well as skilled in Karate, cooking great meals, and drawing.

As Silver Fang, he has 1 active power and multiple passive powers.

Active: Falling Stars - Weakens evil and strengthens allies as he sees them as well as heals all physical injuries of anyone and anything touched by the drops. It appears as glowing silvery blue drops of water that washes over what it touches that rain over a 100 foot radius for 10 seconds. He can only use this power once per transformation, after which he has 5 minutes before he transforms back.
Passive: Strength increased by 30%, Speed increases by 30%, Night Vision, Canine Hearing, Canine Smelling, Alpha Mentality (He has the feel of a good leader.)

Strengths and Weaknesses: Karate, Empathy/Sympathy, Strategising. Can't talk to girls as himself, Acident Prone as himself, Headstrong and Stubborn.

Equipment Requests: A large bag of Jerky.

History: Tommy comes from a broken home. His father had gotten kicked out the Piscataway tribe before he was born, meaning Tommy doesn't have the help of the tribe. His mother, being a rich business woman, has bought him many things, though his father usually turns around and sells it to try to pay the bills. Because of this, Tommy doesn't get along with his deadbeat father. His father does own a small shop that sells natural remedies but, because very few people visit it, he doesn't make much money. Despite his irascible pique on his father selling the gifts from his mother, Tommy is rather fond of the little shop, doing what he can to bring in more customers. On the rare occasion he sees his mother, He becomes withdrawn. He doesn't blame her for leaving him behind, knowing it would've been harder with both his brothers there as well. Despite trying to help them behave and be less of a hassle on their mom, his younger brothers have never liked him. He's a 1st degree Black belt in Karate, thanks to his mom paying for his classes.

Though, his life was changed when he found his Miraculous in his drawer. He listened to his Kwami, Marrok the Wolf, about how the Miraculous worked. The first thing he did was test it out. Then he began acting as a hero with a team. After a few years, a rift opened up near them. With his team focused on the victim, he decided to check it out. However, upon entering the rift, his timer ran out to de-transform. Marrok was able to stay awake and hide in the pack of Jerky Tommy always carried around.

Personality: Tommy is easily classified as a gentle giant. He cares for others, though isn't afraid to fight if he needs to. He's stern and stubborn but will put the well being of others before himself. He despises bullies, though tries to help the kids being bullied stand up for themselves instead of stopping the bully himself, unless things get physical. While he doesn't like to hurt others, he can and will if he thinks they will learn from it. He's also very philosophical. As himself, he can't talk to girls without mumbling and acting awkward. Many accidents happen around him, causing him to be a bit jumpy. He can also be very headstrong and reckless. Despite being a good tactician and strategist, Tommy has a hard time admitting he's a leader type.

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Name: Marrok
Appearance: Marrok looks like a tiny wolf with a giant head. He has 3 tails that are constantly moving. He has a pair of small antennae coming off his ears.
Personality: Marrok is more mature and understanding of everyone. However, he won't give you an easy answer, preferring you to figure it out on your own. He likes when people overcome obstacles and, against his better judgement, has challenged his heroes too hard before, allowing him to learn for the next one. He is also one of the few Kwami that can deny transformation, though doesn't do this often.
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Sorry for the post delay. My keyboard busted. Got new one! Wohooop!
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@Eyeris@jdh97 Is my character good?
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@Eyeris@jdh97 Is my character good?


I noticed it was the last thing you added. I would like more details about the powers. It seems like he has a very broad spectrum of abilities, similar issue to the last character.
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@Fetzen I wrote your character in!

So the deal is that all the other-world-persons who did not already talk to MERCY are getting interviewed and de=briefed by Winston to make sure they are not hostile/one of the ritual sits/see if they know what is going on.

I'll leave it up to you if you want to play that out, or we could summarize/time skip to get your character to the meeting.

Edit: So we are way underwater and no one can tell (But you). When everything else was going on before this it was daytime, so your character naturally didn't wake up as they were in a weakened state, everyone who came through the rift was kind of beat up anyway. Then perhaps now it is night-time and your character has regained strength and woken up etc etc etc. Sound legit?
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Sounds legit :)

I'd like to play it out, but perhaps we can do a collab (PM, Titanpad, whatever you like) and then post it as a retrospective so we won't disturb the flow of time that much.
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I'm not sure that will work my schedule is REALLY wacky.

I'll do my best to reply quick! like right now!
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I noticed it was the last thing you added. I would like more details about the powers. It seems like he has a very broad spectrum of abilities, similar issue to the last character.


Have you seen Miraculous? The active power he listed is once per transformation and gives him 5 minutes before he transforms back. The passive powers are minor, like 10%-30%.
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