Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Spoopy Scary
Raw
Avatar of Spoopy Scary

Spoopy Scary ☠️🌸soft grunge🌸☠️

Member Seen 15 days ago

<Snipped quote by POOHEAD189>

Totally being accused of murder isn't a big deal.


Finch just stole bad literature and they can't even prove it. :^)
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Dervish
Raw
GM
Avatar of Dervish

Dervish Let's get volatile

Member Seen 1 mo ago

@ConstableWalrus

...

You wouldn't.

<Snipped quote by idlehands>

Finch just stole bad literature and they can't even prove it. :^)


Oh, he stole The Lusty Argonian Maid? Your bio said something else entirely.
Hidden 9 yrs ago 9 yrs ago Post by Hellis
Raw
Avatar of Hellis

Hellis Cᴀɴɴɪʙᴀʟɪsᴛɪᴄ Yᴇᴛ Cʟᴀssʏ

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

@Lo Pellegrino

I have absolutely no qualms with this critique. I am already restructuring and beefing things up as we speak. I often try to limit my backstory to not reveal to much, swamp people with details. But I also tend to grow complacent with my writing. Thank you for the honest and excellent critique!
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by DearTrickster
Raw
Avatar of DearTrickster

DearTrickster

Member Seen 11 mos ago

@Lo Pellegrino

I have absolutely no qualms with this critique. I am already restructuring and beefing things up as we speak. I often try to limit my backstory to not reveal to much, swamp people with details. But I also tend to grow complacent with my writing. Thank you for the honest and excellent critique!


You can do it Hellis, you've got 20 mins left! :D
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Spoopy Scary
Raw
Avatar of Spoopy Scary

Spoopy Scary ☠️🌸soft grunge🌸☠️

Member Seen 15 days ago

@ConstableWalrus

...

You wouldn't.

<Snipped quote by Spoopy Scary>

Oh, he stole The Lusty Argonian Maid? Your bio said something else entirely.


I said bad literature, don't you dare insult that masterpiece.
1x Laugh Laugh
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by ConstableWalrus
Raw
Avatar of ConstableWalrus

ConstableWalrus

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

@Dervish Oh I would... You Task me Dervish. You task me and I shall have your hide!
3x Laugh Laugh
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Dervish
Raw
GM
Avatar of Dervish

Dervish Let's get volatile

Member Seen 1 mo ago

DEADLINE HAS ARRIVED, PUT DOWN YOUR PENCILS CLASS BECAUSE IT'S TIME TO GET GRADED


This means anything edited/ submitted past this post is not going to be taken into consideration thanks to the several people who are up in my grill with their applications.

I've just got a few more critiques to go, and with them, the fated 8!
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Hellis
Raw
Avatar of Hellis

Hellis Cᴀɴɴɪʙᴀʟɪsᴛɪᴄ Yᴇᴛ Cʟᴀssʏ

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

Stares intently at the thread while wearing a tinfoil hat.
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by POOHEAD189
Raw
Avatar of POOHEAD189

POOHEAD189 The Abmin

Admin Seen 35 min ago

@idlehandsxD. I meant for something that didn't directly effect the Count or a high ranking officer. Pardon.
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by idlehands
Raw
Avatar of idlehands

idlehands heartless

Member Seen 1 yr ago

Now I'll be taking frequent bathroom breaks to check the status on my phone.
1x Like Like
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Dervish
Raw
GM
Avatar of Dervish

Dervish Let's get volatile

Member Seen 1 mo ago

Now I'll be taking frequent bathroom breaks to check the status on my phone.


Try not to strain your butt too much; this might take a few hours, depending how much of a magpie I am today when it comes to distract-



FUCK


Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by POOHEAD189
Raw
Avatar of POOHEAD189

POOHEAD189 The Abmin

Admin Seen 35 min ago

DEADLINE HAS ARRIVED, PUT DOWN YOUR PENCILS CLASS BECAUSE IT'S TIME TO GET GRADED


This means anything edited/ submitted past this post is not going to be taken into consideration thanks to the several people who are up in my grill with their applications.

I've just got a few more critiques to go, and with them, the fated 8!

You're not the boss of me
Have mercy!
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Hellis
Raw
Avatar of Hellis

Hellis Cᴀɴɴɪʙᴀʟɪsᴛɪᴄ Yᴇᴛ Cʟᴀssʏ

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

@Dervish

I THOUGHT YOU WERE A INSECT NOT A BIRD!?!
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by DearTrickster
Raw
Avatar of DearTrickster

DearTrickster

Member Seen 11 mos ago

@Hellis Dervs is most definitely a birb.
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Dervish
Raw
GM
Avatar of Dervish

Dervish Let's get volatile

Member Seen 1 mo ago

@Dervish

I THOUGHT YOU WERE A INSECT NOT A BIRD!?!


Uh, check your privilege. Rude.
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Hellis
Raw
Avatar of Hellis

Hellis Cᴀɴɴɪʙᴀʟɪsᴛɪᴄ Yᴇᴛ Cʟᴀssʏ

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

As a Snake, I feel threatened.
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by idlehands
Raw
Avatar of idlehands

idlehands heartless

Member Seen 1 yr ago

<Snipped quote by idlehands>

Try not to strain your butt too much; this might take a few hours, depending how much of a magpie I am today when it comes to distract-



FUCK

O_o
Ohh shiny.

Good luck!
1x Like Like
Hidden 9 yrs ago Post by Cayce
Raw
Avatar of Cayce

Cayce coolhunter

Member Seen 8 yrs ago

Welp, I requested that my character be moved directly into the reserves, but good luck to everyone else. Had a ton of fun reading the CS's.
1x Like Like 1x Thank Thank
Hidden 9 yrs ago 9 yrs ago Post by Dervish
Raw
GM
Avatar of Dervish

Dervish Let's get volatile

Member Seen 1 mo ago



THE TIME YOU HAVE ALL BEEN PATIENTLY WAITING FOR/ RIOTING OVER IS HERE!

I want to thank all of you who applied! It’s always touching and inspirational to see people take interest in these games, and there’s definitely some great applications, and I am thankful for all the effort you guys put in!

If you don’t make the initial 8, I do want to stress that A) it’s nothing personal!, B) It was still in all likelihood a character Shaft and I would accept without hesitation, but we do have to stay within our limit so we’re not getting crushed, and C) If you would like and it’s not otherwise stated there’s some major things that need to be resolved in the sheet before we would accept it, please feel free to let us know if you want to be kept on a Reserve roster where if we have a drop out, we will message you and see if you’re still interested!

And please, don’t take any of my critiques as anything more than constructive criticism that is in no way meant to be sharp tongued or insulting, the reason I put a lot of time and effort into critiquing each and every sheet is because even if you don’t make it in the game, it will give you an idea of what can be improved upon and help you out as players down the road by giving you some hopefully helpful feedback.

Now, enough of the foreplay, it’s go time!


























1x Like Like 5x Thank Thank
Hidden 9 yrs ago 9 yrs ago Post by Hellis
Raw
Avatar of Hellis

Hellis Cᴀɴɴɪʙᴀʟɪsᴛɪᴄ Yᴇᴛ Cʟᴀssʏ

Member Seen 3 yrs ago

AWw..


Those are very fair points all around. Sad to not have made the cut, but I tried and I got some good critique out of it. Good luck to you accepted lot! You are in good hands. I'mma change my profile with the stuff pointed out and keep it around for future use if nothing else!
2x Like Like 1x Thank Thank
↑ Top
© 2007-2024
BBCode Cheatsheet