@Raijinslayer I'm just loving how Laz was contemplating which one would be his next "target" and dumbass of the year, Asahi, come strolling up, sweaty pits and all. It's like it was destined to be.

@Altered TundraYes, now all that's left is to plan on what Lazulin's going to do, hehehe. .

@Indra
You have my seconded vote too by the way.

Side Effects
A lost magic that is designed to destroy demons. Compare to its relative slayer magic; God and Dragon Slayer, it's really fickle because the longer it is used, the Devil Slayer gradually succumbs to insanity which is a long lasting side effect. Their minds gradually distort even if a demon is killed and absorbed a curse from it. Insanity Effects that of the Curse of Contradiction; Paranoia to some degree because of the magic's program to kill demons and until one day, they turn into full blown demons.

Strengths
All Slayer Magics have the power to kill what they have to slay. The Devil Slayer magic is this as well but way different because with the Akugan(Devil's Eye) allows its users to obtain information about a Demon by just observing it for a second. The eyes of the Devil Slayer will be in a different color that respectively represents their element. With the Devil's Eye they are able to see through curse related spells.

Instantaneous Flashes
A Devil Slayer who has mastered their magic can perform feats that surpasses their own element's weaknesses. This can only be achieved through training and this very feat only applies to high level spells. A Devil Slayer Secret Art totally qualifies for this.

Weaknesses
The sanity slippage is one of them but for all Slayers; they are designed for raw power. A Slayer is doomed to not have a manipulation shape on the magic itself. Even if this weakness can be bypassed through molding magic, it does not warrant perfect control due to the nature of Devil Slayer Magic.

@Leslie Hall

Here is my first character finally!

I’m surrounded by idiots.

Scar approves.

@Denny I believe @Indra and myself already gave the OK in the PM but in any case here it is again.

Accepted! 2/2

On behalf of both myself and Indra 'cause y'know we already accepted it.

Guild Membership Card

_{Armis is little... strange. His personality is very happy go lucky, but usually uses this to hide his more Aggressive and arrogant nature. It takes just a single word for him to turn to a man that would never hurt a fly, into a uncontrollable maniac, then into a very serious individual in a matter of seconds. He doesn't really do it on purpose, but that's just the way he is. He fully acknowledges this and gets a kick at messing with people who are not used to his, unique personality. So, he may occasionally "joke" around with others acting a way he doesn't actually feel.}



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Wyvern Death Armour: This Crimson colored armor was created centuries ago during the time Wyverns hunted in the skies along with Dragons. This armor is created out of the light scales of several slayed Wyvern. The armor provides Armis with power of flight. In this form his speed is immense, while still stronger than his human form, it doesn't provide nearly the amount of of protection compared to it's counter Parts. In exchange it provides to most protection to Magical attacks. Armis stands about 78 inches in this this from.

Dragon Death Armour: This midnight Black armor was the first Dragon Armor created by the Marix family. It is built out of the most legendary Dragons that once controlled the skies. The armor carries the bulky strength of the Dragon, giving Armis Immense Strength and Endurance at the cost of speed. This is truly the strongest Armour form, standing at three meters tall and having a bulky frame, the size of his fists are able to cover the average man's torso.

Chimera Death Armour: One of the newest of the three sets, this ancient armor is made by the skin of the Legendary Chimera Dragons. Just like the Chimera can grow multiple heads, this armor can regenerate the Damage to itself, usually forming stronger than last time. This Armour has the strongest Defensive capability out of the other sets, giving Armis immense Resilience at no cost to speed. This is the Armour most often used and is the easiest one to pull off. The color of this armor is a rotting brown and It's texture is cold and feel's like a chicken that was recently plucked.

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Buster Blade The same blade the Legendary Dragon hunter Legeon Marix carried. This weapon has slayed countless winged beast and is now used in combat by Armis. This blade of this weapon is almost two meters long and foot wide. The downfall to this weapon was it's ridiculous weight, but has been enchanted to be much lighter. Similar to the average Sword. Usually wielded two handed, but can also be used one handed.
Shooting star. Another heirloom to his family. The eight foot spear was specifically made to penetrate and set the chimera in flames. He even wears that same Chimera's skin to this day. The weapon was enchanted by magic long ago to cause a flame with whatever flesh the blade touches.
Dragon's fear Like his armor this ancient shield was created by the Marix family long ago. A normal steel shield coated in Dragon scales, but it has been enchanted with the ability to block or even bounce back projectile magic depending on their strength.

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Sorry I'm late for the party! Oddly enough the Hider isn't working...

@Thecrash20

Not speaking for the GM or anything but;
roleplayerguild.com/posts/4128898

@Thecrash20You need to fix the indent, then the hider should work fine.

Also, while I don'tsee anything wrong with the conceot, I feel a need to address something I noted so take this as you will. Ypur character has a lot of power in his armor and what not, yes, but this feels like it was given to him rather then earned, not to mention that I doubt the Livrarium would let a tiny family like the one you are suggesting they are keep said artifacts. Notto mention that you have too many dragon-based artifacts for a setting where they are extinct and have been for centuries, at least in my opinion. It feels a tad out of place and dismissive of theworld at large.

But that's just my opinion, so again, take it as you will

@Thecrash20

FF and FE combined?! What madness is this?

Edit: Oh, and some Natsu verse in there too, I see.

*cough*

Along with what the above two have said, Dragons are explicitly not wanted in this RP. Your character is a rather blatant attempt to get around that. And a poor one too.

Your character is far too centered around dragons to even pass, but let us put that aside to critique the rest of it.

First off, your character has too much power to be considered an A class, and as all the S class slots are filled that won't do. You have no stated weakensses, nor any details of note. Your character's personality, while an intriguing idea, boils down to "I can act however I want." More details would be nice. What are likes and dislikes? What ticks him off? What would make him flip his switch?

History is lackluster as can be. While technically passible, it suffers the same as his personality, details details details.

...and beyond that I have nothing, because there is nothing else to him. No substance.

@Thecrash20

FF and FE combined?! What madness is this?

Edit: Oh, and some Natsu verse in there too, I see.

*cough*

Along with what the above two have said, Dragons are explicitly not wanted in this RP. Your character is a rather blatant attempt to get around that. And a poor one too.

Your character is far too centered around dragons to even pass, but let us put that aside to critique the rest of it.

First off, your character has too much power to be considered an A class, and as all the S class slots are filled that won't do. You have no stated weakensses, nor any details of note. Your character's personality, while an intriguing idea, boils down to "I can act however I want." More details would be nice. What are likes and dislikes? What ticks him off? What would make him flip his switch?

History is lackluster as can be. While technically passible, it suffers the same as his personality, details details details.

...and beyond that I have nothing, because there is nothing else to him. No substance.

That was kind.

I made him forever ago, but had to work for a living so I disappeared a bit. Ran it by the Lead gm and he said it was fine that why I didn't know the whole dragon restriction. The personality I thought was valid, since I won't be jumping around acting randomly, I could of said he was kind of a joker with more words. Regardless, personality if by far the most absurd thing to claim in any RP as everyone will act however they want, cause we're human and react differently to our situation, but how of course does depend on our personality as a person when we post. Keeping the characters just in mind on how we think they would act, but can never really do it justice since we act on OUR own personality. I guess it works great if you have a multiple personality disorder.

The history is of course is very short and sweet so it may develop(if the chance ever arises, they rarely don't in these kinds of RP's unless the user goes out on the limb for it). The history was more just prior information he would have told anyone who would ask, without revealing too much.

With the Power, sure that could always be fixed, but I won't cause I'm definitely not going to be part of this RP. Apparently I don't match the skill of writing or RPing to match you or the others with my absolutely no substance character. Regardless how I was going to actually play him. I obviously don't have the ability to even try with all your recommendations on how to improve it from your "critique".

I bid you all adieu. Hope you all have a blast with Rp, it looks like a fun one and good luck!

<Snipped quote by Crimson Raven>

That was kind.

I made him forever ago, but had to work for a living so I disappeared a bit. Ran it by the Lead gm and he said it was fine that why I didn't know the whole dragon restriction. The personality I thought was valid, since I won't be jumping around acting randomly, I could of said he was kind of a joker with more words. Regardless, personality if by far the most absurd thing to claim in any RP as everyone will act however they want, cause we're human and react differently to our situation, but how of course does depend on our personality as a person when we post. Keeping the characters just in mind on how we think they would act, but can never really do it justice since we act on OUR own personality. I guess it works great if you have a multiple personality disorder.

The history is of course is very short and sweet so it may develop(if the chance ever arises, they rarely don't in these kinds of RP's unless the user goes out on the limb for it). The history was more just prior information he would have told anyone who would ask, without revealing too much.

With the Power, sure that could always be fixed, but I won't cause I'm definitely not going to be part of this RP. Apparently I don't match the skill of writing or RPing to match you or the others with my absolutely no substance character. Regardless how I was going to actually play him. I obviously don't have the ability to even try with all your recommendations on how to improve it from your "critique".

I bid you all adieu. Hope you all have a blast with Rp, it looks like a fun one and good luck!

Edit: Alright, some of my fellow RPers here feel that I was too harsh, so what you see below is an clean-up version.

And boom, like that, you fail.

Being able to lisen and learn from critique is perhaps the ultimate skill needed for a writer. Even bad critique. ESPECIALLY bad critique. (Not saying what I said was bad. I stand by it.)

You many not realize what you did, but to me, it looks like when faced with opposition you threw your arguments in my face and metaphoricaly stormed off.

That may not have been ment, but that is how it came across.

Now, onward to refute my criticism.

Lead GM: I do not know the particulars of what She told you but I do know this, Dragons, in the AU have not been around for several centuries. Therefore, it would be very very strange for a family of Dragon Hunters to still exist. Second off, Fairy Tail is not like Final Fantasy, where people can gear up and hunt dragons. Dragons are incredibly powerful beings, in perspective, the biggest Big Bad in Fairy Tail (Zerif) is scared of them. Second, the reason Dragon Slayer magic came into being was BECAUSE they could not kill them by any other method.

Now, the personality. There is a phrase for the type of character you are talking about, and it is called a self-insert. Now, these types are by no means bad. They can be done well, but my gripe is specifically with how you have described it. Skipping back a bit, self-inserts generally do not work in a roleplay because you can see everything that lies before you from a 'unbiased' point of view, thus leading to a tendency to always pick the "right" choice, leading to Mary Sue-dom (and trust me, I don't throw that out lightly, see my sig). Characters and their personalities describe and limit what you do, and are paramount to establishing a good Character. Now, what you said it true, you are limited by your own personality, which is why you need a character so you can say "Okay, here is what I would do, but what would my character do in this situation?" That takes flexibility of thinking that is only attained by practice.

Do you want to know how you gain skill? Do you want to know how you improve? You work with other people who are more skilled. You learn from others who are less skilled. You take criticism, and learn how to give it back, and how to defend your point of view.

Now, lets not turn this into a flame war, if you have more to say, then fire off a PM, and we can take it up in there.

@Crimson RavenDude. . . that wasn't necessary.

I disagree. Letting ignorance be is a crime.

@Crimson Raven
Yes, but you could've said it differently. More to the point, there is a line, and I certainly feel like you crossed it.

When you're about to shoot a man in the face, it costs nothing to be kind.

Crimson was most certainly blunt, but I do not think he was tactless or crass. But idk. Let's RP, yeah?

@Crimson Raven
Yes, but you could've said it differently. More to the point, there is a line, and I certainly feel like you crossed it.

When you're about to shoot a man in the face, it costs nothing to be kind.

Yes, you are right, but at the same time, no, you are not.

When you are correcting someone, some harshness is needed as long as it is also with kindness. Sugar coating is not beneficial for either the Shooter or the Shootiee. Firstly, as nice as it sounds, real life does not work that way. People will not always be considerate when they stomp on your feelings. Now, thta does not mean that because of that, we have an excuse to do it. Secondly, some harshness goes a long way in making the person realize "Hey, I screwed up." That's probably the hardest part, and the most abused/misunderstood.

Aside from DeS Notes. @Leslie Hall @Denny Can I work on Molding Magic notes? Or basically I will be enforcing rules of canon magic and magic you guys will make. #VoteForIndraKingofMagic2017.

I suppose there's no point in reviewing Crash's sheet now.

@Crimson Raven, your input is valuable and you're entitled to give it; but could you refrain from doing so until at least one GM has given their full review? Especially where new characters are concerned.

While nothing you said was technically wrong, it was said in a manner that does not reflect the attitude of myself and the GM team of Cloud Chasers.

And to clarify, when I said the sheet was fine (which I did), it was less of an acceptance and more of a "It's fine, go post it in the OOC for proper reviewing". I don't read through or accept sheets that have been PM'd directly to me and me alone because I'm pretty adamant about "If you want a proper opinion, put it in the OOC so I can get to it with all the rest". I apologise, I should have made that clearer.