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Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by ChickenTeriyaki
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So apparently there's John. John is a high-school student who owns a katana for some reasons you'll read about. Eventually some event sets his story into motion and he begins wandering around the Hub Planet.

I'd still buy you a Happy Meal if you don't cringe at my "OC".

PS: He is meant to be in the Hub Planet. Whatever it is called.


Edit: Changed the age, changed the theme song, changed the picture (once again)
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I only noticed this subfourm now. :|
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You're welcome! Swordsmen are cool!
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Would you need me to elaborate on the ki manipulation part?
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Refer, please, to the character sheet template. And add the numbers denoting your strength in things.
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Stuff edited:

  • Power Tiers: I used power tiers to estimate the strength/effectiveness of his techniques and equipment. Assuming that 4 is the highest power tier currently available.
  • Buffs: Added a couple of handy buffs.
  • His abilities are high-end, but his influence isn't really present in the Hub Planet's society.
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@ChickenTeriyaki
At the moment, I feel as though this character has too many Tier (4) abilities. I suggest that you lower that to one ability of choice, with the rest of the (4)s becoming Tier (3)s. If you consider something to be a "Low Tier (3)", adjust it to a rating of (2). This helps make the information a bit more concise and balanced.

For myself, until that is done, I abstain from providing approval.
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I removed Limit Break. Basically, John cannot do superhuman feats anymore.

I also nerfed John's hand-to-hand fighting techniques. Sure, his physical enhancements make him stronger, but his fighting style is still unorthodox. Would that be okay?

Besides, John was meant to be a man of technique. If you strip all of that away from him, he'd be just a regular guy in his teenage years. Sure, he can use breathing techniques as a healthy alternative for steroids, but his body still has it's fragility. If a low-tier mook were to successfully shoot him with a powerful shotgun, his entire arm would probably be blown off.
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Looks good to me.
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As I said before, until the changes I cited are made, I cannot approve those attributes. This character ranges from Tier (3) on up to Tier (5) with several inconsistencies such as marking things "low" and others "high". If that is true, please shift those numbers and overall rating.

We have already stated we are aiming for the vast majority of characters to be at Tier (3) at best with a few exceptions being Tier (4). I believe this as written goes against the intent.
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He's completely tier 3 now.

I also stopped marking items and abilities with keyword such as "low" and "medium".
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Approved.
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