@Iatos Okay, so.
First off, there are a bunch of spelling and grammar mistakes, which I don't really mind too much as I can understand what you're saying, just try to keep them limited.
Secondly, I don't really like her personality. And how can her original name be "long forgotten" when she's only fifteen?
The character isn't bad, just finish her and change her personality.
First off, there are a bunch of spelling and grammar mistakes, which I don't really mind too much as I can understand what you're saying, just try to keep them limited.
Secondly, I don't really like her personality. And how can her original name be "long forgotten" when she's only fifteen?
The character isn't bad, just finish her and change her personality.