@LordDeadpool Deepest apologies about the delay, life happened, things needed doing. To start, I'd like to verify your familiarity with the template we've provided for character sheets. You also seem to be making a lot of assumptions about Dwarves, and of the lore behind Arkangrad as well. I urge you to examine the first OOC post and to adjust your character to reflect what is written there. Based on what I've seen, this will likely not be the full extent of necessary changes to get Dendrin to fit.
Yes I have used that cch (character creation sheet) and adapted it to fit my character a bit better. As for me makeing assumptions, its in no small part me not knowing the lore, far from it, I have looked it over and turned it 360* so I can get as much info as I can, but the thing is that there is not much info for me to go of off, the races most of all. The bit regarding the Dwarves is wage at best and dos not give me enough information to make a better assumption then the one I have. And my final point: This is why I kept nagging you guys to check my cc and to give me more info and/or to tell me to piss off
@LordDeadpool I take it, then, that Dendrin does not have any magical ability whatsoever? According to a for-some-reason-not-mentioned-in-the-OOC communique, 400 is considered 'really old' for a dwarf, and Dendrin is downright decrepit, by that metric. Other errors of note: Arkangrad has only existed for 50 years, give or take a couple months. We already have an instructor for such things as combat. His name is Glynn, and he is played by none other than Cruallassar The 30 or so spelling and grammar errors. We aren't asking for perfection, but, come on, man.
@LordDeadpool I take it, then, that Dendrin does not have any magical ability whatsoever? According to a for-some-reason-not-mentioned-in-the-OOC communique, 400 is considered 'really old' for a dwarf, and Dendrin is downright decrepit, by that metric. Other errors of note: Arkangrad has only existed for 50 years, give or take a couple months. We already have an instructor for such things as combat. His name is Glynn, and he is played by none other than Cruallassar The 30 or so spelling and grammar errors. We aren't asking for perfection, but, come on, man.
Yes he is a no magic character and as for the age thing I was going to set it at 300 something, but be cos there is no specific info on how long a dwarf can live I just thought in the ball park of 600 to 700 years old. As for the years of how long Arkangrad has bin around, thats a mistake on my end. Sense the CQC of my guy is a no go are the other two classes a go go? And the grammar stuff is a small problem that most of the people that know me ( I.E neo, crull and electra to name some) can get around with no problem cos it only happens whit specific words and to add to this english is my second language
"You get fooled to easely lad. You remind me of an ifrit I met ones. He got suckered in to binding him self to a lamp!"Dark red
Name: Professor Dendrin Blackiron Dark red
Race: Dwarf
Gender: Male
Age: 460 years old
Appearance: His face <Snipped quote>
Dendrin stands at 1.4m tall which is about average for a dwarf. His hear was ones a dark brown, but do to age and stress its has become lighter in color, his beard is near complete white save for his mustache and the corners of hie beard. His eyes are dark green and full of steel. His skin tone is a slightly darker as he has spent a lot more time on the Surface then most dwarfs. He is rather muscular and fast for his size
Skills: Dendrin, like most dwarfs, is a master craftsmen and smith, tell him to make a dozen recurved sword in 3 weeks, he'll do it in two and make every one of them like it was a work of art, tho his preferred line of craft is wood working. On top of this and his age, he has a grate deal of combat experience as he has bin a part of men battles and wars, the last war included
Personality: Do to his long life, Dendrin has seen a good deal of good and bad in the world, do to this he is a bit cynical and a good deal grouchy. He tends to talk a good bit when he picks up a train of thought or a topic, often times going off the topic that was actually going on. He can, and has, chewed some ones ear off when he starts to berate some one for doing something stupid, tho he dos this not out of anger but out of good intentions
Bio: Dendrin, unlike most of his race was a traveler, as where his parents, as a matter of fact, he was born on one of the trips his parents where takeing. His clan, the Blackiron dwarfs, where one of the lucky ones, in the sense that there stronghold was nod destroyed, do to its specific location deep under the alps. At the start of the war, the blackiron clan was one of the first dwarf clans to come out fully out hideing and give aid to the humans, do this the blackiron dwarfs have one of, if not, the strongest relationship with humans. Be cos of his long life and good deal of traveling amidst humans, he has seen a lot, both good and bad, tho he dos not resent it. In the early years of his life he had plied his trade as a smith and craftsmen form his mother and father be for seting off in to the world on his own to see it and to find more things to learn. Over the next 200 years he had seen a loot happen in the world of men,the rise and fall of empires, wars for freedom,the genocide of an entire people, and meeting other beings thought as myth, hell he even fought in some of the wars in the last 300 years. As of the last 60 years he has bin in the employ of Arkangrad as a professor of Gymnastics/ hand to hand combat and Workshop
@LordDeadpool After some thought and discussion it has been decided that Dendrin is to be rejected. I apologize Lord_Deadpool but the spelling and grammar is simply not something we can look past. Unfortunately, since all our contact is over the written word your small problem is unfortunately anything but. I really like Dendrin I can not deny, but sadly in this space spelling is key and while a few misspellings or awkward sentences can be overlooked, your quality of writing simply does not do DP.
@LordDeadpool After some thought and discussion it has been decided that Dendrin is to be rejected. I apologize Lord_Deadpool but the spelling and grammar is simply not something we can look past. Unfortunately, since all our contact is over the written word your small problem is unfortunately anything but. I really like Dendrin I can not deny, but sadly in this space spelling is key and while a few misspellings or awkward sentences can be overlooked, your quality of writing simply does not do DP.
I still want in and I still want to use my guy, so what the hell do I need to do to get in. As it stands the ONLY problem you seem to bring up is my spelling, Myr had pointed out that I did a lot of geuss work regarding the lore of the dwarfs,the reason for that is the lack of info on them, the info that is there is waaay to vage. SO, to summarize: you ar not leting me in do to my spelling and I want to know what I need time do to get in. And ľd like an answer in the next week not in the next century
I still want in and I still want to use my guy, so what the hell do I need to do to get in. As it stands the ONLY problem you seem to bring up is my spelling, Myr had pointed out that I did a lot of geuss work regarding the lore of the dwarfs,the reason for that is the lack of info on them, the info that is there is waaay to vage. SO, to summarize: you ar not leting me in do to my spelling and I want to know what I need time do to get in. And ľd like an answer in the next week not in the next century
I've not consulted the other GMs on the matter quite yet, but I suspect I am the voice of generosity on the matter, and will speak for all of us until informed otherwise, since you are so desperate for an answer.
There are two conditions for entry. Firstly: You will please retain a modicum of respect for the GMs, their decisions, and their real lives. We are far longer-lived beings than you and possess the patience gained over such a time, as such, we have no need to keep to your schedule. Be honored that we considered your application for as long as we did instead of rejecting it outright due to the previously mentioned mistakes.
Secondly: You may be granted a total of ten strikes on both spelling and punctuation combined. This starts with your character application and will continue throughout the RP. We GMs will keep council and tally over your posts so as to keep a reasonable line of what is acceptable and what is a strike, that way you don't have to deal with my perhaps overly strict definition without assurance that others spoke in moderation of such. The moment you reach that ten strike limit is the moment your character is...removed. And be advised that this is over the course of the entire RP, not over any single post.
Now, with the understanding that this is a premature verdict and has not yet been discussed with my fellow GMs, you may consider re-submitting your character app if you find these conditions acceptable. If you would like to refrain from re-submitting it until we have a more unified voice, this is indeed recommended...however, you may find it useful to use that time for your edits. Rest further assured that I will acquire a final verdict within at most the span of a decade.
Signed: Your local GM who knows you and can get around your misspelled words with no problems, -Cruallassar
I've not consulted the other GMs on the matter quite yet, but I suspect I am the voice of generosity on the matter, and will speak for all of us until informed otherwise, since you are so desperate for an answer.
There are two conditions for entry. Firstly: You will please retain a modicum of respect for the GMs, their decisions, and their real lives. We are far longer-lived beings than you and possess the patience gained over such a time, as such, we have no need to keep to your schedule. Be honored that we considered your application for as long as we did instead of rejecting it outright due to the previously mentioned mistakes.
Secondly: You may be granted a total of ten strikes on both spelling and punctuation combined. This starts with your character application and will continue throughout the RP. We GMs will keep council and tally over your posts so as to keep a reasonable line of what is acceptable and what is a strike, that way you don't have to deal with my perhaps overly strict definition without assurance that others spoke in moderation of such. The moment you reach that ten strike limit is the moment your character is...removed. And be advised that this is over the course of the entire RP, not over any single post.
Now, with the understanding that this is a premature verdict and has not yet been discussed with my fellow GMs, you may consider re-submitting your character app if you find these conditions acceptable. If you would like to refrain from re-submitting it until we have a more unified voice, this is indeed recommended...however, you may find it useful to use that time for your edits. Rest further assured that I will acquire a final verdict within at most the span of a decade.
Signed: Your local GM who knows you and can get around your misspelled words with no problems, -Cruallassar
Regarding condition 1: The reason I have bin nagging you guys this much is cos I have had a lot of BS going on at work and other wise, which compounds in to me being very cranky and irritable and cos I am to used to massivecrafts forum speed of reply, which is relatively fast
Regarding condition 2: I am just gona take a shot in the dark and guess that this means my spelling/grammar as a whole if I am accepted and that If I make more then 10 mistakes regarding spelling/grammar I am out? If I am wrong do correct me on this
My point 3: If I ma going to make any edit regarding my guy I will need some more info on the dwarfs then there is atm (unless neo added it in the mean time then I will just go and take another look)
Final point: Its a small thing but, the way you formatted this reply sounds, at least to me, like you are talking down to me which irritates to no end. So I will kindly as you to not speak to me like that if it was intentional (If its not then I am sorry for writing this bit) and just speak to me normally like you would usually do
And thanks for a quick reply
Of note: Do you like tabletop games by any chance?
Regarding condition 1: The reason I have bin nagging you guys this much is cos I have had a lot of BS going on at work and other wise, which compounds in to me being very cranky and irritable and cos I am to used to massivecrafts forum speed of reply, which is relatively fast
Regarding condition 2: I am just gona take a shot in the dark and guess that this means my spelling/grammar as a whole if I am accepted and that If I make more then 10 mistakes regarding spelling/grammar I am out? If I am wrong do correct me on this
My point 3: If I ma going to make any edit regarding my guy I will need some more info on the dwarfs then there is atm (unless neo added it in the mean time then I will just go and take another look)
Final point: Its a small thing but, the way you formatted this reply sounds, at least to me, like you are talking down to me which irritates to no end. So I will kindly as you to not speak to me like that if it was intentional (If its not then I am sorry for writing this bit) and just speak to me normally like you would usually do
And thanks for a quick reply
Of note: Do you like tabletop games by any chance?
We know exactly why you've been nagging us. Not to sound insensitive...even though I am...but we don't care. If you have some real life things going on that may prove an interference, that is fine, feel free to tell us...but the mark of a mature RPer, which we know you should be by now, is that they can separate real life from the roleplay. Don't bring the irritation from your real life problems here. Please.
Your assumption is essentially correct.
Dwarf lore is up to my colleague to add, but I would recommend considering removing a few details from your backstory instead of replacing them. That way you give the impression you want without actually creating any conflicts with existing lore. If you don't want to do that, that's fine of course, it is your app...but such a thing is a skill that can be quite useful.
Finally, I was talking down to you, however this is normal when someone has irritated me. You don't irritate me, I won't irritate you, how does that sound?
We know exactly why you've been nagging us. Not to sound insensitive...even though I am...but we don't care. If you have some real life things going on that may prove an interference, that is fine, feel free to tell us...but the mark of a mature RPer, which we know you should be by now, is that they can separate real life from the roleplay. Don't bring the irritation from your real life problems here. Please.
Your assumption is essentially correct.
Dwarf lore is up to my colleague to add, but I would recommend considering removing a few details from your backstory instead of replacing them. That way you give the impression you want without actually creating any conflicts with existing lore. If you don't want to do that, that's fine of course, it is your app...but such a thing is a skill that can be quite useful.
Finally, I was talking down to you, however this is normal when someone has irritated me. You don't irritate me, I won't irritate you, how does that sound?
Also, yes.
Well I will give it a wack or two of the hammer of editing to change (or remove) some stuff as even I who have made the app can tell that there are things that I have not added and need to remove
As for me asking if you liked tabletop games, hear is a link to something like it, you may or may not like it, if you dont feel free to bash me on the head with it fabletop.com
(And neo I know you are there, so give me some more info on them dwarfs as there is not enough in what you posted in the races tab)
Name: He calls him self Tartarus, though this is not his true name. He keeps his true name hidden for reasons known only to him
Race: Vampire
Gender: Male
Age: 847 years
Appearance: Tartarus stands at 1.95m in height, his hear is shoulder length and is a jet black color and is always in a pony tail. His eyes, due to him being a vampire, are a shade of red and are cat like in appearance, due to this he always has black sunglasses on, be it in or out side. Physically he appears rather slender do to his height, though this can be misleading as he is rather strong, his skin is ghostly pale. He can be seen at all times wearing black pants, black shoes, a red vest with a cross hanging off it, black shirt with a red tie, and over all of this he wears a black coat with a red handkerchief neatly sticking out of the left pocket on the coat and a pair of black leather gloves, along with this ensemble he always has a silvery cane that has a cobra shaped handle at the top (If you don't want to read throw all of this just look at the pic bellow)
Technique: Due to his vampiric nature and having centuries of time, he was able to perfect his skills to a razors edge. His most preferred tools are that of the spirit and the mind, though he is well versed with lightning as well. His preference for the magics of spirit and mind stem from his nature as a vampire, as vampires are more likely to create illusions and tricks of the mind then anything else. The centuries of time he has had, he has used well; he can walk among a crowd of people, with out them even releasing that he is there, even if they do come in contact with him physically, they will not see him but someone else a man, woman or child or otherwise. Though should you buy some unknown reason ever be able to see past the illusions, the only thing you will remember is that you where knocked down buy some one passing buy and continue on your way, though you might also find a small burn hear and there from something that looked like tiny hands, though you would not know if they where tiny hands
Abilities: Because of his nature as a vampire he has grate strength, speed and agility that is only matched buy the elves. Along with this he is able to transform in to a number of animals, ranging from hawk's and owls to wolfs and cats, though he prefers to transform in to wolfs and owls. Though due to being a vampire he is highly susceptible to the sun as all vampires are, adding to this he is also week to silver, the myth that holy water can damage and even kill a vampire is just a story made by the Christian church, the most it will do is annoy them at best
Skills: Tartarus is a phenomenal violinist, as he finds it to be an elegant instrument that takes grate heart to play, or in his case a lack of a beating heart. He is also an expert on fine vines
Bio: Vampires, vampir (slavic pronunciation), sanguine, night horrors... they have bin called by many names but are best known as vampires. Vampires have bin hiding among men for as long as they have existed, walking side by side with them, using them as both food and as servants. Vampires are one of the rare races that have meddled in the affairs of men, influencing some of the events from history from the shadows. The darkest time for vampires was the aptly named Dark ages, where both witches, heretics and everything else they could get there hands on was hunted, tried and killed... though some times just hunted and killed. It was during this time period that vampires started to recede back into the shadows from where they could quietly observe and influence events and not be exposed to direct prosecution, and that's how it remained till the divine war. In the time be for the war, a council of six grate vampire clans was made to lead them all, and on the head of that council where twelve ancient vampire, of the twelve ancients, only six remain. Buy the start of the divine war, the vampire population was at half a billion strong, buy the end of the war, it numbered barely four million total globally. And where was Tartarus in all of this? Well, he was a part of one of the six grate clans that made up the council, though there are only two of the six grate clans left, his clan was the first one to be destroyed in the war, though some how Tartarus was able to survive the slaughter with a handful of others and hide. It was at the end of the war that he met Arthur Wick and learned of his plans. From that time on, Tartarus has bin acting as the professor of illusion and spiritual magic at the school. And what of his past? Well he dos admit him self that he dos not really recall all of it or from where exactly he is from, though he dos recall that he is from somewhere in Europe.
(As it stands, I opted to make a new character and drop Dendrin as I do not STILL have enough info on the dwarf race, you are free to use him as you will. I opted to do this cos I new I would have a bid more leeway to work with. Hears hoping this one gos throw. I might add some stuff later if this app gos throw tho)
Before we actually get to the character concept itself, you have reached 10 errors on the mispelled words "though" (Which you spell tho) and "due" (which you spell do, which is incorrect in this usage) alone. I am willing to grant you as many retries on the application as you like, or you may edit it to fit, but I thought you should know where you stand there.
By the way, those are just the most prolific of errors, you make more than just those. I recommend having a native English speaker proof-read your work, if one is available.
Before we actually get to the character concept itself, you have reached 10 errors on the mispelled words "though" (Which you spell tho) and "due" (which you spell do, which is incorrect in this usage) alone. I am willing to grant you as many retries on the application as you like, or you may edit it to fit, but I thought you should know where you stand there.
By the way, those are just the most prolific of errors, you make more than just those. I recommend having a native English speaker proof-read your work, if one is available.
1. To avoid the you-are-not-in-cos-of-spelling thing, I have edited the parts that needed to be editied
2. The only way I can have some one proof-read what I have set down is if I have some one online thats a native english speaker help me, as I have NO ONE thats a native english speaker liveing any were near me
1. To avoid the you-are-not-in-cos-of-spelling thing, I have edited the parts that needed to be editied
2. The only way I can have some one proof-read what I have set down is if I have some one online thats a native english speaker help me, as I have NO ONE thats a native english speaker liveing any were near me
1: You have edited the parts that I've mentioned, but not actually everything. Thought I'd point that out.
2: Or you could probably also type it into a word processor that tells you when words are spelled incorrectly...but it seems that is certainly a problem for you, isn't it?
3: I'd say I'd be happy to, but I don't have anywhere near that kind of time. And also wouldn't.
1: You have edited the parts that I've mentioned, but not actually everything. Thought I'd point that out.
2: Or you could probably also type it into a word processor that tells you when words are spelled incorrectly...but it seems that is certainly a problem for you, isn't it?
3: I'd say I'd be happy to, but I don't have anywhere near that kind of time. And also wouldn't.
Other then what you pointed out that needed spellchecking, I ran everything else throw google translate to be absolutely sure that it was correct, and regarding you not wanting to help me proof-read this app, I guess I will have to ask some one else then
Other then what you pointed out that needed spellchecking, I ran everything else throw google translate to be absolutely sure that it was correct, and regarding you not wanting to help me proof-read this app, I guess I will have to ask some one else then
Ok...here is a bit of advice. There are a great many words in the English language that may sound the same as another word, but mean a different thing. For example, in this post here...
Throw: To make an object depart from you with significant momentum, i.e., to throw a rock at something or to throw a game of something, synonyms might be to cast or to propel something.
Through: To put something into and out of a place or system, i.e., to run everything else through google translate.
Another thing I notice is that you often separate what would normally be compound words. I don't usually count these as errors per say since they are technically correct either way, but for example, "to ask some one else then" might be made "to ask someone else then".
Fix that first and I bet you will be 80% of the way to being as good an English writer as you are an English speaker...and judging from the fact that you used the word "ensemble", correctly, that is actually pretty good.
As crull has given me his, some what, verdict ( even though he really did not say whether or not he would approve it), and a bit of help as well, I would like to get a statement from the other two game overlords, @Myr and @neogreggory (with out pointing out the spelling as crull has already did that)
I asked for an opinion and/or verdict, not who else is a GM Myr. Regardless, give me your input on my new guy Myr, and if Rune shows up as well, hers too @Myr@Rune_Alchemist@neogreggory
Hi-diddly-i, just wondering if this is still open for folks to join up? I've put a character sheet down below but if you're full up then no worries!
"Before you ask, no, I can't get you his autograph." Name: Edmier Silverbirch Race: Half-elf (Human) Gender: Male Appearance: Edmier's appearance is largely what one would expect of a teenage boy, he is around 5'6 with a slim frame and softly defined facial features punctuated by intense blue eyes. His hair is odd, an often unkempt mix of silver and black, telling of his mixed heritage, it often covers the majority of his pointed ears but the tips usually poke out and are visible. He is prone to wearing dark coats, jackets and jeans, even in summer time and is never seen without a pair of goggles handy.
Technique: Edmier's grasp of air is largely focused around the usage of air to move himself around, blasting off with air burst then creating them against the ground to cushion his falling, bolstering and manipulating strong gusts to carry himself around or creating spinning vortexes to allow himself to hover and drift over obstacles and perform a clumsy approximation of flight. He is also able to create thin focused streams of air to cut at things like an invisible knife, though this is something he has yet to refine and develop precision with. The rest of his techniques are rather simple manipulations of other magical areas which he hopes to improve at the academy.
Skills: Climbing and running are two things the half-elf enjoys and is good at, often having combined the two with his magic to develop his owns style of parkour. Aside from this, he has some level of competency with baking having learnt more than a few recipes from his mother. Edmier is also rather good at disguising his emotions through his facial expressions, able to play it cool with a melancholic poker face should it be needed, in fact overreacting with a melancholic approach is something he does quite frequently.
Bio: Edmier's story begins with his parents, more specifically his father, Gregory Silverbirch being one of the more well known and regarded city elf actors always had a troubled relationship with the rest of his race, even before the war. In the aftermath of the devastation, capitalising on the mysterious appeal his status as an elf held, he was able to quickly build up a reputation as an advocate of integration and union between Humans and Elves as well as a competent performer. He entered a highly publicised relationship with a Human woman from Canada, Cassandra Lee, which was still fairly new at that point, his popularity only rose as the pair announced they would be having a child. For a time, Gregory managed to land himself a rather cushy and well off position as part of the Hollywood elite before the novelty wore off and he slid down to being the B-list actor he is known as today, in part due to Cassandra wishing that their relationship with the media be drastically reduced following the birth of Edmier and the passing of time giving rise to new stories and celebrities.
His time as a baby couldn't be kept out of the media spotlight but gradually his parents were able to better seclude and isolate him from the attention, his time growing up was largely spent moving around with Cassandra and her family in Canada to avoid the press and attending school there. While Gregory supported and loved his son dearly, most of his side of the family were traditionalist Elvish folk who strongly condemned his career and choice of partner, few would even meet young Edmier let alone visit frequently and the pressure of his job along with efforts to reconcile and encourage his kin to adapt to the Human world meant he spent long periods away. As a young boy, Edmier took an interest in magic after being taught about father's life before acting, while Gregory was by no means a competent mana user he at least had a few party tricks that he recalled from his own youth.
Eventually the question was raised about where he would go on to study and his mother and father agreed to let Edmier decide between furthering his magical interest or remaining in the Canadian school system, for a young man facing a decision between maths and magic there was only one conceivable answer and so his application went off to Arkangrad and he eagerly awaited a response.
Name: He calls him self Tartarus, though this is not his true name. He keeps his true name hidden for reasons known only to him
Race: Vampire
Gender: Male
Age: 847 years
Appearance: Tartarus stands at 1.95m in height, his hear is shoulder length and is a jet black color and is always in a pony tail. His eyes, due to him being a vampire, are a shade of red and are cat like in appearance, due to this he always has black sunglasses on, be it in or out side. Physically he appears rather slender do to his height, though this can be misleading as he is rather strong, his skin is ghostly pale. He can be seen at all times wearing black pants, black shoes, a red vest with a cross hanging off it, black shirt with a red tie, and over all of this he wears a black coat with a red handkerchief neatly sticking out of the left pocket on the coat and a pair of black leather gloves, along with this ensemble he always has a silvery cane that has a cobra shaped handle at the top (If you don't want to read throw all of this just look at the pic bellow)
Technique: Due to his vampiric nature and having centuries of time, he was able to perfect his skills to a razors edge. His most preferred tools are that of the spirit and the mind, though he is well versed with lightning as well. His preference for the magics of spirit and mind stem from his nature as a vampire, as vampires are more likely to create illusions and tricks of the mind then anything else. The centuries of time he has had, he has used well; he can walk among a crowd of people, with out them even releasing that he is there, even if they do come in contact with him physically, they will not see him but someone else a man, woman or child or otherwise. Though should you buy some unknown reason ever be able to see past the illusions, the only thing you will remember is that you where knocked down buy some one passing buy and continue on your way, though you might also find a small burn hear and there from something that looked like tiny hands, though you would not know if they where tiny hands
Abilities: Because of his nature as a vampire he has grate strength, speed and agility that is only matched buy the elves. Along with this he is able to transform in to a number of animals, ranging from hawk's and owls to wolfs and cats, though he prefers to transform in to wolfs and owls. Though due to being a vampire he is highly susceptible to the sun as all vampires are, adding to this he is also week to silver, the myth that holy water can damage and even kill a vampire is just a story made by the Christian church, the most it will do is annoy them at best
Skills: Tartarus is a phenomenal violinist, as he finds it to be an elegant instrument that takes grate heart to play, or in his case a lack of a beating heart. He is also an expert on fine vines
Bio: Vampires, vampir (slavic pronunciation), sanguine, night horrors... they have bin called by many names but are best known as vampires. Vampires have bin hiding among men for as long as they have existed, walking side by side with them, using them as both food and as servants. Vampires are one of the rare races that have meddled in the affairs of men, influencing some of the events from history from the shadows. The darkest time for vampires was the aptly named Dark ages, where both witches, heretics and everything else they could get there hands on was hunted, tried and killed... though some times just hunted and killed. It was during this time period that vampires started to recede back into the shadows from where they could quietly observe and influence events and not be exposed to direct prosecution, and that's how it remained till the divine war. In the time be for the war, a council of six grate vampire clans was made to lead them all, and on the head of that council where twelve ancient vampire, of the twelve ancients, only six remain. Buy the start of the divine war, the vampire population was at half a billion strong, buy the end of the war, it numbered barely four million total globally. And where was Tartarus in all of this? Well, he was a part of one of the six grate clans that made up the council, though there are only two of the six grate clans left, his clan was the first one to be destroyed in the war, though some how Tartarus was able to survive the slaughter with a handful of others and hide. It was at the end of the war that he met Arthur Wick and learned of his plans. From that time on, Tartarus has bin acting as the professor of illusion and spiritual magic at the school. And what of his past? Well he dos admit him self that he dos not really recall all of it or from where exactly he is from, though he dos recall that he is from somewhere in Europe.
(As it stands, I opted to make a new character and drop Dendrin as I do not STILL have enough info on the dwarf race, you are free to use him as you will. I opted to do this cos I new I would have a bid more leeway to work with. Hears hoping this one gos throw. I might add some stuff later if this app gos throw tho)
I see no evident problem with Tartarus. I admit that I wish his magic was a bit more unique, I have this fancy magic system specifically so that people can blend things and come up with interesting new takes on magic but I won't fault Tartarus for sticking with the classics. That said, I would ask you refrain from being rude to Myr, as he was just giving you information. Never be rude to someone who is trying to help you, frankly refrain from such things in general, but especially refrain from being rude to those who gift you with knowledge.
Anyways, I am not very good at examining and judging things, especially characters so while Tartarus does have the okay in my book I would hear from my three Co-GMs their thoughts on the matter.