Oi lads, then who's up for a collab? Maybe someone meets up with ze northerner on the way to Silverwick?

@MegaOscarPwnMaybe you should meet up with all the other injured people :p

A 'hiking is dangerous' support group.

I have a problem. I've been staring at this page, refreshing it for the past couple hours, hoping to see a new post. x.x

@WhoamiHah.

What kind of person would do that.

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(but srs tho I've become too invested in this too haha)

@Isotope

It's very lucky there's a surgeon at Silverwick lol

@Silver Carrot Gwynne might need her services :P

@WhoamiBTW dood, really liking your posts and character. Looking forward to seeing more of them!

@WhoamiBTW dood, really liking your posts and character. Looking forward to seeing more of them!

I'm glad my writing is being enjoyed! ^.^

@Luin Angia So I have a good amount of mixed feedback for you (and an apology for taking over 24 hours for a CS review). Branwyn I think is pretty good. While my own leanings think she has an unrealistically high tolerance and probably would have snapped sooner, I do like her. Being blind I think is a really interesting aspect to the character however it comes with the same kind of concern I had about Matty. I don't want to see a character who's a drag on the party. The party's job isn't to babysit so she needs to be able to cut it with the rest of them (and trust me, there's gonna be a nice wave of enemies thrown at them real soon) in at least some capacity. To that end, I think the character's power level is currently insufficient, but I'll get to that.

Tollame however gets some less glowing feedback. I think he feels kind of flat, especially compared to how believably well done Branwyn's motivations are. (I suspect in writing the sheet you got to him and the creativity just burned out.) He's also where I think the power level problems come in. His illusion ability I think is quite cool, but ultimately is not going to win you any fights (and avoiding fighting will not always be an option). As I said above, I think the power level actually needs to get dialed up somewhat (either that or convince me that they have some alternate role they can serve which doesn't require upping their strengths).

There's two more-specific things that I need to specifically address too. You said that Tollame was killed almost a year before the other Legionnaires ... but per the already-existing history no one in Avalon can claim the feat of slaying a Legionnaire. Yes they were defeated and captured at the Nexus, but they essentially committed mass suicide in the process of forging the prophecy which guarantees their return. The other has to do with the null soul concept. It's possible I'm horribly misreading it but I get this impression that, at the battle of the Nexus one of two things should have happened given this: either Tollame is completely immune to the aetheric detonation in which case there's no reason they should have lost, or the surge would have destroyed him. The construct seems at odds with the notion that the souls of the Legionnaires survived half a millennium after their demise and I don't think it's a sufficiently worthwhile gimmick to potentially cause so many complications. In other words, it should either be clarified, expanded upon, and made more relevant, or you should consider dropping it. I think Branwyn is interesting enough even without considering that so don't feel bad about leaving it behind.

I don't particularly like to rip on a CS, particularly on someone new to the site, but I do want to see a revision pass before I will approve her.

For everyone else regarding posting orders ...

I don't really do that even when we get to combat. Now I generally want everyone to maintain similar posting frequencies so we may get to times where we need to hold up for a person, lest they get too far behind (and I will be stricter with this when the party is embroiled in battle). However I will never say that we must go in X order. That's too rigid and inflexible for the inherently dynamic availability of players and causes a large number of avoidable holdups.

I'm glad things have slowed down a bit, as it gives me some breathing room to work ... and I'm about to run out too. For anyone who doesn't know (which should be everyone here because I've never said it), I am interviewing for an internship over summer this Friday and if I get it, that's 30 hours a week I'm working plus a long commute. Also in terms of my time availability I'm kind of a night-owl (as many programming majors are) so I may be GMT-5, but you can effectively treat me as if I'm a few hours behind that, GMT-7/8.

Yayyyyy you're effectively in my time zone.

:p

Also @Drunken Conquistador I figure we'll just say we arrived together in any future posts and collabs. I don't think we need to rp actually arriving.

On that note, are we waiting for a 'hey you're here' @Sierra? Is there an event to take place once all are assembled?

@Isotope I figure I'll let everyone get into the same place, and once everyone has settled in and gotten cozy I'll throw a monkey wrench many sharp objects into the mix.

@Sierra So will you be posting before then? Or does everybody need to rendezvous before your next post?

I might, but only as another character. I will not be donning the GM hat to advance the story further until we've gathered everyone. That is a prerequisite for how I plan to advance the story since things are going to start moving along pretty steadily at that point.

@Sierra Welp, thats some thorough critique and i thank you for the time and thought you've put into it. I'm more than happy to revise the application, and don't feel bad about ripping into it, I know I'm rusty and was going for something a bit weird. I'll try and adress every concern with the rewrite.

Is someone against Rägnar reaching Silverwick and seeing Gabriel and Meera in there? Or do ya two wanna collab with lil' old me?@Drunken Conquistador @Isotope

Is someone against Rägnar reaching Silverwick and seeing Gabriel and Meera in there? Or do ya two wanna collab with lil' old me?@Drunken Conquistador @Isotope

I would be Fine with a collab, tomorrow I have most of the day free

Noice, PMs or just some kind of collab maker?

Noice, PMs or just some kind of collab maker?

PMs, Google docs, discord. Whatever you prefer.

Of course, we will need Isotope too. Unless you wanna Skip ahead and have our guys interact already in the city

We'll wait for the lad, but I think Discord would work!