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inb4 she gets zombified
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"I TOLD YOU, I FORESAW THIS! BUT NO ONE EVER LISTENS TO THE FUCKING MAD BOMBER"
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"I TOLD YOU, I FORESAW THIS! BUT NO ONE EVER LISTENS TO THE FUCKING MAD BOMBER"


Try being less suicidal next time, homeboy
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Is there a slot open?
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Yes, but not for you, @sandman9913. You have a record of suddenly disappearing for years without communication. I cannot let you join and have you drop out right after.
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That's fair, and I respect your decision.
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This looks like barrels of fun. Could I make an application for this RP?
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This looks like barrels of fun. Could I make an application for this RP?


You can. Show us you what you got.
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Got it. I'll have a CS up as soon as possible.
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@Lucius Cypher, my co-GMs and I reviewing your sheet right now. We'll get back to you ASAP.
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@Lucius Cypher, thanks for your patience. You have made a great character, with solid background, believable personality and a lot of details in his capabilities and inventory. I believe he will provide a lot to our RP, and I'm excited to see your character develop. With that said, there's a few things you need to tweak before we accept the character.

  • Is his name Ograh or Ogran? You seem to be flipping between the two throughout your sheet. Pick one and make it consistent.
  • What are the names of his parents and grandfather? Why did his family settle in the Imperial City, despite them piratically living with their legion units? How did his grandfather retain so many Orcish traditions when he's been living in Cyrodiil since the Great War?
  • Ograh/Ogran has lockpicks but no lockpicking skills. I understand that he can build locks through his smithing skill, but taking them apart on the fly is a separate skill. Consider replacing the lockpicks with a wax or soft and moldable key.
  • While it is totally possible to learn a spell without experience in the corresponding magic skill, you run the risk of failing during casting. Make sure you put a note about how Ograh/Ogran's familiar fizzles out at times.
  • Where does he get his skooma? Any dealer of note? Does Ograh/Ogran try his hand at brewing his own?


You are clear to drop the sheet in the characters tab after making these tweaks. Welcome to FoC!
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Working on a CS at the moment, hoping to have it finished today if I can.

Quick question, the group will be/are in Jehanna soon? I can write this into Athere's backstory so she can come across the group there when they arrive :)

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Here's some visualization for Jehanna.





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Good to have you back, @Stormflyx!

We just arrived in Jehanna. The IC time is Last Seed 10.
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@Gcold

Copy that. When I'm at my computer I'll make the edits and additions, let you check em over once they're done.
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@Gcold

Sorry for the double posting, but I made the edits. A quick list of em in order for your convenience:

His name is Ograh. Like Ogre but with an "rah" sound at the end instead of an "ger".

His father is named Gorshok, his mother is Orchid, grandfather is Urk, and I also introduced his grandmother Dushnia. It's not mentioned in the CS, but she died before he was born. Urk fought in the great war, but then traveled around the world to help his old friends back in the Legion. That's how he got to Skyrim, met Dushnia, and got interested in learning more about his people. he would continue to travel to learn, taking Dushnia with him, and later after amassing money from his friends settle down in the Imperial City to raise a family in relative safety, as well as making sure his son has an opportunity to join the Legion.

I replaced the lockpicks with a prybar. Not as light as a lockpick, but fits his brute force style better. He keeps it in his backpack.

Made the note that his spell often fizzles or shortens out early. He thinks it's because he's not a good mage and thus has bad control over his familiar.

It was mentioned at the very bottom but I expanded more of it the relationship section, but Kat gets his Skooma from the Khajiit caravans. Right now he's actually traveling with one towards Skyrim. The leader of the Caravan, Do'Morath, is a friend from the 114th who first gave Ograh skooma to deal with his traumatic experiences. They both left around the same time and Ograh helped Do'Morath between his own business, and decided to tag along with him as extra muscle as well as have access to a ready supply of Skooma (As long as he works for it of course). I may or may not have Ograh let his greed get the better of him and try to have him swipe some Skooma from Do'Morath is he starts getting more reliant on Skooma, or whatever would be more interesting at the given moment.
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Awesome, @Lucius Cypher. Ograh is aproved; you can move him to the characters tab now.
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Here's my CS, I realise the last two paragraphs of his background are extremely scant on detail but in all honesty I was just desperate to get what I had uploaded so that it could be critiqued. I plan to flesh out the latter part of his story tomorrow but that is the general gist of it.


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Be advised, the skill list has been revamped. Details are below and updated in the first OOC post. You may (and should) adjust your character's skills if they are affected by the update.

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