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@wxps350 Also her aura sensing doesn't seem much less of an aura sensing and more of apart of her abstraction. Mainly because you make no mention of auras. Also Change that god damn purple color to something i can see and she's accepted.

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LIMITS ⫻ David's abstraction has no on or off button unlike most Abstractions, so if there's something that he would rather not see he gets to see it all in its vivid detail. Fortunately, he's not limited by the Extra-Normal's innate resistance to each other.

WEAKNESSES ⫻ Of course since he cannot turn off the abstraction if he's caught seeing something he wouldn't want to see he has no choice but to observe it. The act of seeing into the past has an effect on David's mind that will affect him down the line. He'll eventually lose the ability to tell past memories from his own the more he sees. His abstraction will place him into these situations that he was never apart of and make him lose track of himself and who he is.
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@Stitches at first I thought you submitted like seven characters at once and was about to say fuck yes no.

I was skeptical of a 16-year-old character but she's really well written and I like her. Also, you gave her actual plot hooks. My only complaint is that you added NPCs in her relationship table. Which you can do but it's for relations with PCs and NPC relations can be explored IC.

LIMITS ⫻ Because Abigail cannot change her aura or clothes, certain Abstractions will completely bypass her disguise. Other than that her abstraction has no limits and she can maintain a disguise for hours.

WEAKNESSES ⫻ Because of the lower-powered nature of the abstraction it has no weaknesses. However, it comes with an identity loss side-effect; the longer Abigail stays in one form the more these people's features will start to appear on her true self. It'll start with her nose changing a bit to her skin color completely changing. And she could even end up a different gender. The only way to off-set this is not to use her abstraction.
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Everbody is always sceptical of the age thing until I like...actually put consequences into it, dw. Like there's plenty to play with, which is why I gave you all the NPCs - she's on school registrations, she's got foster carers who are keeping tabs on her, she's definitely NOT going to be as strong/smart/composed as a regular adult would be. I didn't know I shouldn't put NPCs in there but I thought it was a good way to establish Abi's connection to them for you

Also for the identity loss, just how much use of her power are we talking here before effects start to be extended/permanent?

(and does that mean I'm accepted?)
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@Stitches she's Accepted yeah. I was thinking it escalates, like starts with small stuff and gets worse as it goes along. But I was thinking round the midpoint she notices it.
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Also, the theme of the RP is now officially Family.
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@Drag worst character ever, rejected

LIMITS ⫻ Like most Extra-Normal beings, they are far more resistant to his sound-based attacks and he cannot freely manipulate their sound. Terry's abstraction has a range of around fourteen feet but he closer he is the more control he has over his ability. The ability has a limit on how much he can use it, or a charge, so to speak. The second he uses his abstraction it'll gradually start to weaken until he is powerful (along with another effect in the weakness section). He'll have to wait up to an hour for his abstraction to come back but long as he doesn't go all out he won't lose his entire abstraction.

WEAKNESSES ⫻ Terry's body doesn't really react to well to sound being altered and all of that echolocation. Using his ability causing nausea and disorients him for a period of time - at worst he can be profusely vomiting and have no sense of balance. Terry's sound blasts also come with a recoil effect that'd throw him off balance for a few seconds - or if he's not careful to knock him directly onto his ass. Also, as he loses his ability his voice and hearing are also supernaturally lost, and if he cuts loose he won't be able to speak or hear. It's almost as if it's a barrier that stops sound from leaving or coming in.

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@wxps350 also pretty gay

LIMITS ⫻ The Extra-Normal are far more durable against the spirit, to being able to destroy the spirit with their own extra-normal abilities. They also hamper his ability to place curses, as Tristian can place curses on the Blind from any range. To place a curse on the extra-normal he has to be within five miles of the person. Tristian also needs to be aware of the person's appearance to place the curse on them, all he needs to do is see the person just one time for him to place the curse. When he curses somebody, he can create up to three spirits at a time and if they are destroyed the spirit is gone forever so it only has one chance. The spirits have a range of around the city limits of Araminta. The Spirits also have a time limit; if they do not kill their target within a day they will turn their sights on Tristan for revenge and he'll have to destroy them.

WEAKNESSES ⫻ Tristan's puts a part of his soul into his abstraction and while his spirits are active he's physically much weaker. He won't be as strong, won't be able to run as fast, and his stamina will tank. The more spirits are created the weaker Tristan will be. If a spirit is defeated he'll be weaker for about twenty munutes.
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Okay so I made an oppsie with the Awakened: I forgot all about their sigils which are an important part of them. When you get the chance, edit your sheets and add a sigil and a location to your Awakened characters like I did with mine.
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Done done baby
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@Ghost NoteAppreciate the feedback.

I was really looking forward to playing this character and I fully intended to submit him here.

However, with that said, if you haven't already guessed, I will withdraw from consideration.

Thank you for your time.
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@silvermist1116 I find it weird that you put "Jewish & White" in his ethnicity section. Given one is an ethnic group and another is a skin color... when you could have gotten away with just white - but that's just me. Also, I know Asta is a nickname but it's kinda weird that you call him Elias in some sections of his sheet but Asta is the other. It's just confusing to read.

Now, onto the meat: his abstraction. I think it needs to be better explained for a number of reasons. For starters, it could be better explained that Elle is the Apparition that's affixed to him. Because that section is a liiiil' weird. Also, if he's Affixed then he wouldn't receive any powers beyond maybe aura reading, so it wouldn't be him that uses it, but instead, Ellie that can do all this stuff. You say that he can manipulate emotions but you don't really elaborate on that part, but personally I think you should make the main abstraction Ellie's creative defense and just say he can understand emotions through aura reading. Namely, because I think Creative Defense is the cooler ability and you won't get a lot of usage out of emotional manipulation.

Powerful attacks can take it out and send Elle back Asta


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Abscised: The Abscised are Aberrants whose bodies have been possessed by an Apparition of some kind. Unlike Adjoined, there is no dual mind, only the Aberrant having control of the body. An Abscised can be created in a variety of different ways; mainly an Apparition can possess a body of the recently deceased. Upon doing so all wounds will instantly be healed and the Apparition has full control of the body. Another way an Abscised can be created is if an Apparition fools a human into giving them their body, or if an Adjoined, Affixed, or Agent is taken over by the Apparition they are attached to. An Apparition inside of the body of a human does not have to worry about belief and can still use their personal abstraction much like an Awakened can. However, an Abscised is cut off from the abilities inherent to Apparitions such as being nearly impossible to kill, being invisible, or changing their form. However, not all Abscised are Apparitions; if an Extra-Normal being has their body switched they are also known as Abscised. This can be accomplished through the usage of certain abstractions, or Apparitions (A person can be cursed to inhabit a different body). Since most Abstractions are linked to the soul, their Abstraction comes with them. It's possible for an Abscised to switch bodies with someone from a different dimension.
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Oof, plot's moving fast. Sorry I haven't posted yet, I'll try to have it done in a few hours.
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