@VarockSvent I've reviewed your sheet, and I'm really not fond of the backstory. Yggdrasil had limitations that would prevent AO-rated actions from occurring, but just the idea behind the game fantasy he enacted in the Yggdrasil (with a guild, no less) squicks me out. It lays it on thick really early and I wouldn't be comfortable working with it. I'll need you to recreate his backstory.

@ShwiggityShwah

Alright, I've looked it over and found no issues with it. I'll also be sending you a PM.

@Crusader Lord

Naga :3 But I'm a little biast on reptiles myself. Imagine some kind of eyptian theme to go with it, or mayan. They could be a coatyl or something. Which is like an angel snake.

Struggling to think of a good race...would prefer demihuman or heteromorph for the sake of some fun racial levels, but for some reason I have been rather indecisive. Angel, Demon, Snakeman, etc. Almost considered if part-human demi races would be even a thing to choose from. XD

Anyone got some suggestions?

Almost missed this. Humanoid races don't breed with the demi-human or heteromorphic races, so that's a nonstarter.

I will always suggest "PLAY A FAE CREATURE" first. If not that, Dragonoids (Kobold -> Draconid) is always a great choice, too.

Almost tempting to have some player who made the obvious high power sexualized female char styled after some sexy monster girl and is now stuck in it. lol. XD

@Disciple Cain Got around to editing my sheet, let me know if it's up to standard.

@VarockSvent I've reviewed your sheet, and I'm really not fond of the backstory. Yggdrasil had limitations that would prevent AO-rated actions from occurring, but just the idea behind the game fantasy he enacted in the Yggdrasil (with a guild, no less) squicks me out. It lays it on thick really early and I wouldn't be comfortable working with it. I'll need you to recreate his backstory.

I didn't think I mentioned any AO-rated actions? The idea at this point he is ashamed and likewise repelled by his former actions. HOWEVER, I can understand and will try to think of something else.

@Ryteb Pymeroce You've still got some holdovers from the last sheet revision. The Skills and Spells section don't need to be present, so you can prune those.

There seems to be a typo in your equipment. The 'Robe of the Scoured' just suddenly trails off at the end, like you meant to add more to its description but forgot to.

Blaze never made his own NPC? You can make one for him if you want, or you can stay with the decision to go without.

I like the ability 'Lord of Flames'. Being able to boss around Elementals is thematic, though a lot of the other abilities don't seem as thematic or interactive-- a lot of number crunchy, flat bonuses, and it makes Blaze's kit appear anemic. I've also mentioned to eschew describing your basic classes. They don't do anything fancy enough to warrant mentioning most of the time, and there's a level of creative license that leaves it to be easily assumed.

'Regal Standard' in particular is a serious offender for interactivity. Declare war, 50% bonus to damage output. It's a simple sounding ability that is outrageously powerful for zero trade off. 50% more damage can easily turn a bad fight into a decisive victory, and it multiplies the power of all those in the Scoured faction. I'd remove it outright and replace it with something else.

@Disciple Cain
New backstory, less cringey.

@VarockSvent Far less cringey, though I wonder how well Heavy Metal does in 2138. Probably not bad, and metal fits with the norse theme of Yggdrasil. I mean, in ways. There's a train of thought there somewhere. If he's a musician in real life, I don't see why you give him classes to reflect this in the game and use the power of THE METAL to get work done.

On the subject of classes... a lot of this is out of the Pathfinder SRD or D&D 5e SRD, including Boots of Haste, Belt of Cloud Giant's Strength, and the Mythril Shirt. The Boots of Haste even say "Bonus Action" as part of their description, which doesn't really mean anything in the context of Yggdrasil. It doesn't seem like gear befitting a level 100 character. You'll need to spruce up the gear and divorce it from those source books.

The abilities are mostly from Pathfinder, and I'm not sure they all translate well into power owned by a level 100. Try to divorce your character's kit from Pathfinder.

Sezelrian is also Paizo's intellectual property, and on principle I cannot let in something that definitely shouldn't be in Overlord.

@Disciple Cain Done another update.

@Disciple Cain

That is generally the idea. Personally, if the massive raid on a certain guild happened in this reality, Bright_Ops wouldn't have entered the place himself. Instead he would have been supplying an army of high level, well equipped machine solders (Think Skittri from Warhammer 40k) to combat the enemy solders and an impressive array of cannons to blast apart the surface defenses.

Not because he has anything against Ainz Ooal Gown. He just believes they've created one hell of a fortress and he wants to see if he can figure out a way to defeat it. Personally, I feel like Bright would just bypass the portals completely and instead either create a machine to drill a path through Nazarick or use a combination of drilling and explosives to get the job done. Would it be a time consuming process? Yes. But it's more likely to work then being funneled into Ainz Ooal Gown's prepared murder zones.

Alright, SO, after reviewing how many character sheets are incoming, I need to make mention now that I can take at most five players at this time. I don't think I have the free time and focus to dedicate to much more than that, but we'll see after things actually get started.

I'm still formulating ideas for my CS.

Alright, SO, after reviewing how many character sheets are incoming, I need to make mention now that I can take at most five players at this time. I don't think I have the free time and focus to dedicate to much more than that, but we'll see after things actually get started.

Well...poop. But it is what it is. XD

With five people having apps up already that are being worked on, I'll just bow out then. Did get most of an app made, at least, so maybe in some future RP I can make use of it. Regardless, hope all goes well!

@Crusader Lord We will be thinking of you fondly.

I'll bow out as well.

@Bright_OpsThank you for your interest. Good hunting.

I've changed a few things over, though undecided if I'll keep or change them again but thought about getting some second opinions on what I have anyway. Still need to add equipment though that's probably a bit easier than nailing the abilities, and I'll just give some equipment to match the abilities.
I toned down the NPCs a fair bit and changed out Syleste, though if I can add more levels I'll gladly do so :P

@Lunarlord34
Shortstacks are fine.


Abilities look good, cohorts are appropriately quirky, not sure what college looks like in the crapsack future of 2138 but I won't worry too much about it.

All you've got to do is the Final Note.