Callthecops said
I just wanted to let you all know, post should be coming up tomorrow which will throw Charon right into position so that the plot can be moved forward. Don't mean to be holding anything up, I just have a very active social life and plenty of work at university so there are certain weeks my RPing has to take a hit.

HellHoundWoof said
Hello, I'd very much like to apply. I believe I have a character that will be perfect for this, I dont want to post my application and take up space unless you guys are cool with it.

Zran said
Dark when you get back from your sleep. There is a couple people with sheets in the compendium that haven't posted yet.

HellHoundWoof said
Hello, I'd very much like to apply. I believe I have a character that will be perfect for this, I dont want to post my application and take up space unless you guys are cool with it.

Kiddo said
I see you helped yourself to the Compendium, anyway... suppose I'll go take a look.Edit: Alright, read. And while I'm not the GM, you might want to take what I have to say into consideration since the GM won't be around for another few hours:I'm going to be a bit mean since you went ahead and posted in the Compendium without any confirmation that we wanted you to do so. The Compendium is for characters, not for random people to dive-bomb with silliness that might not be acceptable in this game. And you nearly had to trip over my and the GM's posts complaining about and acknowledging that such behavior is not proper.First; I'm unsure if you should be trying to take part in an advanced RP. You seem incapable of using a spellchecker and re-reading your work before submitting it, and the first of these is definitely required for "advanced" RPing.Second; for future reference, please place more spacing between long sections of your bio: right now, it is very hard to tell the difference between the personality and background sectionsThird; if a barebones CS is included for an RP, you are expected to use it, this is a premade character (as this one obviously is). It's not that hard to copy and paste into the correct sections (for instance, height, clothing, and appearance should all go in the appearance part of the CS)Alright, and now that meta stuff is out of the way, time to look at what you've got here:Taurae is not a thing in this world. When you're converting a premade character, you have to fit them into the world you're at, and if there is no land called Taurae (and all the lands are, as they are in this case, named) then your character simply can't come from there.Actually, a lot of the problems I see with this character arise from this: this is obviously a premade character that you did not modify to actually fit the world. Another example of this is the fact that you make absolutely zero mention of magic, though there is a whole spot on the CS for such things (you would have noticed this had you used the CS provided like you are supposed to) and that elves are, in this world, on the more-magical end of the spectrum. Also your character assumes invasion from water (which doesn't make much sense unless you're being invaded from the Ju'ra islands), and you seem to disregard the fact that elves are a long-living species (more on this later)Your CS is a little everywhere. Elite swordsman/bowman/politician/torturer/philanthropist/drunkard is... weird. I've said it a thousand times before (I really should just make a "Kiddo's Guide to Cohesive Character Creation!"), but you need to distill your character down to a more specific fantasy so that he's not so all-over-the-place.You need to expand the appearance and personality sections of your bio extensively. Take a look at the other (accepted) entries in the Compendium, you'll see the amount of information that we expect.And about age: elves live at least twice as long (very conservative guess) as humans, so having a 31-year-old politician would be like having a 15-year-old one in human society. Nobody respects the opinions of/trusts with important tasks people who are so young.One thing in the history doesn't make sense any way: how did he escape by boat when they were being attacked from the sea?Tada, that's what I have to say on this subject. I would personally be very surprised if this character made it through as it is right now.

Callthecops said
I just wanted to let you all know, post should be coming up tomorrow which will throw Charon right into position so that the plot can be moved forward. Don't mean to be holding anything up, I just have a very active social life and plenty of work at university so there are certain weeks my RPing has to take a hit.

Zran said
Oh wow didn't see the edit until now. Very good assessment though. HellHound, after some revision on your sheet I'm guessing Dark would still accept you (maybe on probation) but as Kiddo said, as of now it just does not fit at all. If you care to and feel you can actually write up to standard (4 Detailed paragraphs min I think it was) I will help you through your CS if you like. And if we can manage to be on at the same time. Shoot me a PM if you want to.Should we make an IRC for the times the guild is shitty?

Zran said
I created a channel but couldn't work out how to link directly to it lol.We never stop think we're the worst, just get better without realizing. I remember my first Advanced RP it was Brovo's original LoR... So no small task, I got kicked out for not meeting standards despite trying my hardest. I was so pissed and felt like all my effort was for nothing. Then I tried again and now I'm awesome(Okay maybe we do realize it but we never stop trying to grow, as writers and people.)Edit: And we still need to edit for spelling.Also Dark, you are the WORST why would I ever RP with you!

Zran said
Sherlock is that really you? You gotta stop bulling the kids, it's just mean.

Darkmatter said
Ah stop *inserts aforementioned meanness*

Darkmatter said
It's ok.See the complete list of achievements.