[OOC] Naruto : The Rise of The New Generations

[AlterNathan]

Mr. Nim, what D-ranked jutsu are likely to take as a kirigakure genin? Ill make the C-ranked custom (hidden)

[Mr Nim]

Nathan, just look at the Naruto wiki for ideas or at other genin CS's. There could be plenty of D ranked jutsus, and right now, I cannot think of any ;^^

So sorry, but just think about basic jutsus which could relate to the nature you chose, or just be basic jutsus.

[ChromeHound]

Just as a heads up, Nicias also has a Kiri genin with Ice Release. Not saying don't make one or anything, just wanted you to know that there is at least one person here who has it. :)

But I am very happy that Kiri is getting more interest! ^^

[Shadowcatcher]

ChromeHound said
Just as a heads up, Nicias also has a Kiri genin with Ice Release. Not saying don't make one or anything, just wanted you to know that there is at least one person here who has it. :)But I am very happy that Kiri is getting more interest! ^^

Haru: I told you its cuz of me!

me: If you say that one more time, your going to get it!


Haru: bring it on you Sakura wannabe. your pathetic. even dyed your hair the wrong color pink.

me: how could you say such a thing!?

[Mr Nim]

Guess I was mistaken xD

Glad Chrome is around :3

[Shadowcatcher]

*pokes nims cheek* hai!

[Mr Nim]

*is being poked by shadow*
*Looks at Shadow*
Hai.

[AlterNathan]

well fuck...

still uploading it
*begins writing background and looks for theme song*
almost done

[Shadowcatcher]

*nosebleeds* ah... nim looked at me :3

[Little Alice]

So, That was my usual amount of out the group chat spam. ._.

[Shadowcatcher]

sowie Alice...i get bored. *smiles sweetly* but you can totally blame it on Nathan and Nim. ^^

[AlterNathan]

Name: Takeshi Fujiwara
Nickname/Alias: Fuyuno Kodomo (the child of winter/snow)
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 6th of november
Age Appearance: 16
Sexuality: Straight

Parents: Unkown but taken in by Kyo and Mizuri Aniru (deceased)
Length and build 6,2 ft athletic build
Weight 165 lbs
Favorite weather and season a humid but warm spring day

Village: Kirigakure (the hidden mist)
Birthplace: Kirigakure (the hidden mist)
Organization Kirigakure Shinobi forces.

Clan/Bloodline: Fujiwara

Rank: Genin

Chakra Nature: Suiton (water) & Fuuton (wind) ---> yukiton (Ice release)

Appearance: stupid photo bucket not showing my img's

Personality:
Takeshi is the typical strong silent type. A man of little words. However Takeshi is extremely bright, probably one of the most intelligent people you’ll ever meet. Takeshi tends to talk through hand motions rather than words. He is kind but often does not let it show other than not being mean. Very friendly and often popular with the ladies due to his looks and cool attitude.

History:
Takeshi grew up in the fairly small Fujiwara clan living in Kirigakure. His clan consists of only 56 people. Despite being a small clan the Fujiwara felt superior to the other clans due to their KG and many feared them because of that. Even the current Mizukage saw them as a threat and ordered their extinction. The Tall and proud Fujiwara put up a good fight but could not fight off the army the Mizukage sent after them and were defeated, captured and executed.

Takeshi's parents were to be married in order to keep the clan bloodline pure and keep their KG from those who feared them, even though the marriage was arranged his parents grew to love each other. They soon brought their son Takeshi into the world, living in an average cottage while they made average income off their small fishing business. His parents were average in personality but that didn't stop the attack on their clan and thus, Takeshi lost his parents as a small infant who was taken in by his cousin.

After the attack on his clan, Takeshi lived with his cousin and the young woman he loved where they taught him to walk as well as to speak. Due to his mother figure being in the same clan as he was before the attack, they had to move around a lot and keep to themselves to avoid anyone asking unwanted questions. While both of them were very calm people, they also made sure that he followed the rules which he did with no problems in doing so. He also learned basic Jutsu as a way to defend himself and didn't need to learn of his KG quite yet.

Then one day something terrible happened. The Mizukage found out about the betrayal of Takeshi’s cousin and although they tried to stay under the radar, the mizukages assassins found their house. Takeshi hid just in time for not being found. The girl got killed in front of him. Takeshi ran away in fear. In the meantime him cousin came home and found his love killed. He killed the mizukages assassin and searched for Takeshi, he could not find him and took his own life because he could not bear the loss of his love and cousin.

Later, Takeshi came home and all he found were the dead bodies. He searched the house for stuff to help him survive. Really everything he took were the small amount of money they had, a bedroll and some jutsu scrolls. The next nine years Takeshi lived as a nomad in kirigakure and eventually, when he believed the hatred and fear of the Fujiwara died down, joined the Academy.

Now that he had graduated at the age of 16, mainly on base of his skills in jutsu. He is appointed a genin in team Tora, ready and eager to set out on his first mission with his new team.

Theme Song:


Weapons/Items ;

Name of Weapon or Item:
Basic Shinobi weaponry like; Kunai, Shuriken, Wires, Exploding tags, etc. etc.

Skills/Abilities
* high chakra reserve
* average stamina
* below average chakra control
* below average strength
* below average endurance

Special Traits
Very keen, sharp eyes.
very intelligent
quick learned
brilliant strategist
- bad in taijutsu

Kekkei Genkai:

Name of Kekkei Genkai: Kousetsu (snowfall)
Clan: Fujiwara
Description:
It starts to snow, powering up snow and ice jutsu and powering down fire jutsu. This ninjutsu also forms the base for some of Takeshi’s more advanced jutsu’s. The area in which it will snow has a maximum range of a mile, since its chakra infused it won't melt right away when its warm but will of course melt away faster in hot areas than in areas with a slightly more balanced environment. For the rest it works just like a regular snowfall.

Jutsu:

Academy jutsu:
Clone, transformation, replacement, etc.

Mizu bushin no jutsu (water clones)
Suiton: teppodama (water release: gunshot)

Custom Jutsu

Name of Technique:
Yukiton: Yukino Haka (ice release: snow tomb)
Type of Jutsu:
offensive
Rank:
C
Range:
short to long (1ft to 400 ft (30cm to 100m))
Nature Type:
Snow
Handseals:
Dragon, Bird, tiger
Description:
A large amount of snow poured from Takeshi's and or the skies and engulfed his enemy, doing little damage on impact and slowing them down before they dig themselves out
Weakness:
Consumes quite some chakra
(when used for a distance above 200ft. the jutsu consumes more chakra)

Name of Technique:
Yukiton: Koorino Kabe (ice release: ice wall)
Type of Jutsu:
defensive
Rank:
D
Range:
10 feet
Nature Type:
Ice
Handseals:
Monkey, dog, hare
Description:
Creates a 6.6 feet (2m) tall wall in front of Takeshi, protecting him
Weakness:
Only one direction, can be easily broken down (its only 6 inch thick)

Name of Technique:
Fuuton: Toppuu (Wind release: gust)
Type of Jutsu:
defensive
Rank:
D
Range:
short to mid
Nature Type:
Wind
Handseals:
boar, snake, ox, dragon
Description:
Takeshi shoots a vlast of air out of his hands, whipping up loose snow/sand form the ground and let it fly at his target
Weakness:
It does no damage and will online temporarily slow down or distracts his opponent, this also an easy to counter technique

Summons

Name:
Jinfu
Species:
Bashou Kajiki (Sailfish)
Size: small
Unique Traits: super fast swimming, high and far jumps, diving, understands an speaks human language
Jutsu:
henge (transformation) no jutsu (katana)

[Fieryfly]

@Nathan:

First of all your KG is not a KG, it is a jutsu. Your KG should only state the basic power you have, which in this case is making snow and then Snow release: Avalanche would be in your jutsu list. Though I find that an extremely strong jutsu for a Genin so if you want to use it I suggest you tone it down for now.

Kousetsu (snowfall): does this require constant chakra to keep it snowing? Either way I would rank it D, not E.

I'm not okay with * very good chakra control. and * Large chakra reserve, The general rule is that you can't have both especially not as a Genin because it will mean that you burn to your Large chakra reserves very slowly.

I would nag about the fact that we already had a Fujiwara clan in the RP, but since that guy left, its fine.

Oh and your appearance isn't working for me, but that could also be me.

[AlterNathan]

Fieryfly said
@Nathan:First of all your KG is not a KG, it is a jutsu. Your KG should only state the basic power you have, which in this case is making snow and then Snow release: Avalanche would be in your jutsu list. Though I find that an extremely strong jutsu for a Genin so if you want to use it I suggest you tone it down for now.Kousetsu (snowfall): does this require constant chakra to keep it snowing? Either way I would rank it D, not E.I'm not okay with * very good chakra control. and * Large chakra reserve, The general rule is that you can't have both especially not as a Genin because it will mean that you burn to your Large chakra reserves very slowly.I would nag about the fact that we already had a Fujiwara clan in the RP, but since that guy left, its fine. Oh and your appearance isn't working for me, but that could also be me.

changing Kousetsu to be the KG - fix'd

putting Nadare in my 'to-be-learned' list - fix'd

Making a weaker version of Nadare as jutsu - fix'd

*didnt know of the other Fujiwara*

hmm, I did that taking it into consideration by lowering his speed and taijutsu skills
before drastically changing ill await the other GM's opinion. - okay okay

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[Little Alice]

@Nathan

I am one with Fiery. The general (unwritten) rule is that you can't have a Large chakra reserve and a good chakra control. Certainly not] a very good one. I also advise to listen better. Fiery told you on a very polite manner that you can't have it. She states its a rule, so I recommend to read a review better. Cause it will look badly on you if you will not listen or follow the rules. Though I know you don't mean it in a bad way, but to be blunt : It will make you look like an ass.

So here is my review.

1. You said he has Suiton and later one has Snow KG. You need to fill in the Chakra natures also if there is an elemental KG. So please fix that.

2. I noticed in your last post that you do this as well : Not long after Takeshi birth the Amekage ordered the mercenary Aniru clan to dispatch of the Fujiwara for reasons unknown. The Fujiwara clan was completely annihilated but only Takeshi survived. The pregnant Mizuri Aniru could not bear to kill such a young and innocent child. As she was about to pick up the child, A last attempt of his biological mother to protect him caused the loss of Mizuri’s own child. Mourning over the unborn child did Mizure not and it made it easier to explain the young Takeshi she brought back with her.

I advise (highly advise) not to just change history. Which Amekage was it? Did Fox agree with that ( he overviews and keeps Ame's history, like it stated in the thread he made)? Keep the actions away from personal characters etc. and else ask if they accepted that. It will be better or else people will be less inclined to work together with you, cause they don't want to be end up badly in that bad habit.

3. The traits are waay overpowered for a genin. I have no idea how much it has been said, but am growing steadily tired of it to explain it. Genins are the weakest rank. They can't have a very good chakra control, good chakra control at max. Next to that, they need to be better toned down, as they can't have large chakra reserves. So change that too. Also, high endurance on a genin is something I won't accept either together with a high stamina. That will make him just taken beats and keep on running etc. So no to that.

4. Fix your links to your jutsu.

- Fuantei na ashiba (unstable footing)
A jutsu that covers a battle area? That is C ranked. I think its pretty clear that its impressive that a genin alone can change a field to his advantage with a technique.

-Koorino hana no jutsu (ice flower no jutsu)
I see where you got this. I say B ranked, due the range and the effect of the jutsu. I would say that there are more weaknesses to the technique, as I can already figure several ways how to beat the technique, but will not indulge on that.

5. Genins are only allowed to start with small summonings.

Also, I would like to review your Cs's in the future if the links to the techniques are in English (as everybody uses that) and it is less of a pain to look them back up. Next to that, that is all for now.

[AlterNathan]

Little Alice said
@Nathan
1. You said he has Suiton and later one has Snow KG. You need to fill in the Chakra natures also if there is an elemental KG. So please fix that.
2. I noticed in your last post that you do this as well : Not long after Takeshi birth the mercenary Aniru clan to dispatch of the Fujiwara for reasons unknown. The Fujiwara clan was completely annihilated but only Takeshi survived. The pregnant Mizuri Aniru could not bear to kill such a young and innocent child. As she was about to pick up the child, A last attempt of his biological mother to protect him caused the loss of Mizuri’s own child. Mourning over the unborn child did Mizure not and it made it easier to explain the young Takeshi she brought back with her.I advise (highly advise) not to just change history. Which Amekage was it? Did Fox agree with that ( he overviews and keeps Ame's history, like it stated in the thread he made)? Keep the actions away from personal characters etc. and else ask if they accepted that. It will be better or else people will be less inclined to work together with you, cause they don't want to be end up badly in that bad habit.
3. The traits are waay overpowered for a genin. I have no idea how much it has been said, but am growing steadily tired of it to explain it. Genins are the weakest rank. They can't have a very good chakra control, good chakra control at max. Next to that, they need to be better toned down, as they can't have large chakra reserves. So change that too. Also, high endurance on a genin is something I won't accept either together with a high stamina. That will make him just taken beats and keep on running etc. So no to that.
4. Fix your links to your jutsu. - Fuantei na ashiba (unstable footing)A jutsu that covers a battle area? That is C ranked. I think its pretty clear that its impressive that a genin alone can change a field to his advantage with a technique.-Koorino hana no jutsu (ice flower no jutsu)I see where you got this. I say B ranked, due the range and the effect of the jutsu. I would say that there are more weaknesses to the technique, as I can already figure several ways how to beat the technique, but will not indulge on that.5. Genins are only allowed to start with small summonings.Also, I would like to review your Cs's in the future if the links to the techniques are in English (as everybody uses that) and it is less of a pain to look them back up. Next to that, that is all for now.

1. Done
2. Ill sent fox a pm - but then again hes away for about another 7 weeks
3. fix'd
4. Im working on that (already asked Gero for help)

[Gamer geek]

I graduate today so I will try to post after if not to tired.

[Shadowcatcher]

hey i have a question.

ITS REALLY IMPORTANT!

you know how when Kakashi goes all awesome mode and has his sharingan eye open and his normal eye closed? what would happen if during a fight with someone, he got some dirt in there....that would hurt like hell right? would the eye be affected at all or would he just be like...

-.o *unaffected*

cuz really if i had Gaara's powers and i had to face Kakashi, i'd just aim my sand at his beastly eye.

yeah i know its a silly question, but sombody had to ask it.

[Little Alice]

Shadow,

If somebody gets dirt in their eye, it will mess the eye up. Temporary, but will blind them. Having something as sand or such in your eye hurts, no matter what kind of dojutsu you have. ;3

[AlterNathan]

anyone wants to help me fix Takeshi's jutsu?
im either getting completely useless ones or too many high ranked for a genin...