[OOC] Bloody Roar [Fighting Game-Style RP - Always Accepting!]

Defenders of the Legacy (Game Theme)

This role play is a fandom of the Bloody Roar series. No you do not have to have played Bloody Roar in order to join this game. There is a timeline posted in this opening post, so be sure to read it when you get there. Bloody Roar was a very old-school Playstation fighting game. Likewise, in tribute to the fighting game genre, this role play will have fighting game elements such as: a fighter who can take out an entire S.W.A.T. team with just their fists (more like claws); the old wandering warrior; X-Force style groups; GM-events; and of course, actual tournaments to be held in the arena for those characters who like to duke it out. The character design will also be similarly themed. Instead of powers, you will be listing fighting abilities and techniques. You will also choose a martial art that your character follows. It can even be a made-up martial art such as a family martial art passed down from generation to generation. Now in this game, the fighters had a second form, which was their true form. Their true form was a beast form very were-like in appearance. I am only allowing writers to choose actual animals for their beast form (no mythical creatures). What about dinosaurs? Dinosaurs are not mythical, so yes, you can theme them after a dinosaur. When you show interest in this game, please be sure to mention what animal you would like. This allows me to keep track of animal trends, so I can put a plug on any animal that is overused as a beast form. I do not want 10 tiger players in this game. So please, be sure to mention what animal you would like. I will be checking to see if you even read this conveniently underlined/last few lines in this paragraph. There is no excuse why you miss reading this.

Timeline.

This timeline details events from the video games. I am presenting them as a summary to the overall timeline. This role play will only be using original characters and not canon characters from the series, but read this section as familiarization to the overall RP. You will read later what this game's story line will be, and these corporations, groups, etc. are only introduced in this section of the OP. I am only posting summaries of Bloody Roar 1-3 because the games after that trilogy were shit and not worth mentioning. I know, I use the opening of primary fury as a promo for the game, but don't worry about that. Those games are trash!

Bloody Roar

"The unrelenting call of the wild courses through my body. The tremble of these fingers cannot be stopped. The real me...The facade of a man crumbles and my true self awakens with a primal scream."

Summary 1

People exist known as Zoanthropes that have the ability to transform into animal hybrids at will. Tylon, a bio-corporation, captures and experiments on Zoanthropes in an attempt to turn them into a weapon that can be used for war. The industrial giant uses its creations as advance troops in global military invasions.

Yugo, a wolf zoanthrope, Tries to avenge his father, who was previously killed in a war against the multinational organization. He meets Gado, an old comrade in arms. Together they promise to destroy Tylon and liberate all the hostages and put an end to Tylon's brutal experiments.

However, it's not counting Uriko, The Chimera, A secret weapon of Tylon. The battle against Uriko was not easy but Yugo was supported by Gado and Alice, and young hostages who knew Uriko before her brainwashing by Tylon. Together they restore Uriko's conscience. Tylon is annihilated, the zoanthropes are no longer endangered and the story goes on.

Bloody Roar 2

Summary 2

"Zoanthropes... Beings possessed of animal strength and human intellect. Their existence has been the stuff of legend since the dawn of human history. As technology advances, genetic scientists gain the ability to awaken the beast-like powers that lie dormant in human genes. The giant multinational Tylon corporation secretly plots to reap huge profits by exploiting these superhuman abilities. Opposing Tylon is a group of renegade zoanthropes fighting for the dignity of their kind. This fierce struggle shocks the world.
Although they succeed in thwarting the evil plans of Tylon, the zoanthropes unwittingly withdraw worldwide attention to their existence and their amazing abilities. Fear and envy among ordinary humans soon lead to prejudice and oppression against zoanthropes. Thus persecuted, the zoanthropes look for hope in a newly formed underground organization: The Zoanthrope Liberation Frontor (ZLF). ZLF followers, claiming to fight for zoanthrope rights, use their exceptional combat skills as zoanthropes to overwhelm the forces of the human world. However... The world learns too late that the ZLF is actually a terrorist organization convinced of zoanthrope superiority and advocating global rule by zoanthropes. Indiscriminate violence claims the lives of many innocent people. The ZLF even targets its supposed brethren, punishing or abducting zoanthropes who refuse to collaborate. As the rift between human and zoanthrope widens, total chaos and destruction seem inevitable. Now, more than ever, the world needs new leaders to bridge the gap, heal the wounds, and create a new era of peace."

Five years have passed since the collapse of the Tylon Corporation. The Zoanthropes' mutiny in the original Bloody Roar destroyed the powerful multi-national organization. But the Zoanthropes' inhuman dealings with their victims caused worldwide revolt. The Zoanthropes rightfully earned their name as "enemies of the human race".
Hostilities beween humans and Zoanthropes exploded. Reports of Zoanthrope hunts and their toll in human life flooded the news. Reacting to the bloodshed, a group emerged that supported the Zoanthropes. They called themselves the "Zoanthrope Liberation Front " (ZLF) and declared war on the hunters. But the Front's terrorist tactics raised suspicion. Rumors began leaking out that the Front secretly kidnapped Zoanthropes and held them hostage.

Shina, a leopard zoanthropes and Gado's adopted daughter, persuades herself that her foster father is the ZLF leader, or the "Alpha", behind this conspiration. They finally understand the true ZLF leader is Shenlong, Long's clone created by the mad scientist Busuzima. After multiple fights and a Long intervention, Shenlong discovers his true nature and dissolves the Zoanthrope Liberation Front before he dismembers himself.

Bloody Roar 3

Summary 3

"The sign of the beast... A symbol shining with an eerie light, it appears without warning and to those it marks, it brings ultimate power and mysterious death.
The sign only appears on the beastmen, human with the power to assume bestial form, and through them it sends ripples of terror and unrest throughout the civilized world.
When those powerful beastmen, who fought for both their future and that of mankind, found this mark on their bodies, they set out on a quest.

Each with their own dreams and their own ambitions... They sought the one whose will lurks behind the Sign and its source of power....'"

Game Starting Date: December 2025

The world is in a high state of tension with the Zoanthrope Libration Front (ZLF) giving those good Zoanthropes who desire only to live in harmony among the humans a bad name. The ZLF believe that the Zoanthropes are at the top of the food chain and that humans are a byproduct of a failure to evolve. The ZLF had once been established to free the Zoanthropes victim to Tylon Corporation brainwashing and experimentation. Once the Tylon Corporation fell, the group lost purpose, and after the humans finding their liberating actions to be more like terrorism, the ZLF as well as all Zoanthropes were permanently branded as enemies to human kind.

Fear became widespread throughout the world. How could they tell the Zoanthropes from humans? Anyone could be a Zoanthrope terrorist waiting to harm humans at any moment. To address these concerns, the U.S. Department of Defense was the first to revive the Tylon Corporation. The Tylon Corporation’s new name was Neo Corp. The Neo Corp’s mission was to develop technology that exposed a Zoanthrope in his or her human guise. Zoanthropes were exposed, captured, and carted off to special prisons designed to contain them. They were packed away like animals in a zoo. The treatment of the Zoanthropes touched the hearts of several humanitarians and protests began to sprout throughout the world.

The United Nations got together to discuss the treatment of the Zoanthropes. It was ruled that the Zoanthropes would be set free on one condition. They were to surrender their identities to a special online registry called the Online Zoanthrope Data Bank, OZDB or “Oz” (as it is most commonly called), and they were to receive a special microchip that law enforcement and special detectors will be able to use to identify them. Those Zoanthropes not registered in Oz or bearing a chip will be considered terrorists, and they will be arrested.

While majority of the Zoanthropes have submitted to the chip and registration, there still exist those Zoanthropes in violent neighborhoods or areas of the world who rebel against it. The main organization that violently rebels against The Great and All Powerful Oz is the ZLF. The Zoanthropes who have submitted to Oz have been allowed to join certain military around the world as special task forces. The Zoanthrope task forces’s missions are to go after ZLF terrorists to include Zoanthropes who aren’t terrorists but who don’t bear the chip either.

The chipped Zoanthrope resume their lives, living harmoniously among the humans (to an extent for racism still exists) and can mostly make a normal life for themselves. Neo Corp still continues to develop new technology, but they also have secretly gone rogue in their research and once again started to experiment on abducted Zoanthropes, creating abominations in their mission to design the ultimate soldier.



There are many back stories that can be created for your character:

• The Original Tylon Abductees – These were the first Zoanthropes who were abducted by the Tylon Corporation when it used to be called the Tylon Corporation. These Zoanthropes have escaped since and there’s a possibility that they know or are acquainted with each other.
• Zoanthrope Liberation Front Member – These Zoanthropes desire a world solely for their kind. While they are initially merciful to fellow Zoanthropes, those Zoanthropes who are considered subjects of human domination will be treated like the enemy. This group is an infamous terrorist group that have cells worldwide. The leader position is open to any writer who wishes to accept the role, otherwise it will be a NPC.
• Zoanthrope Citizen – Your Zoanthrope has submitted to Oz and the chip. This Zoanthrope mostly lives a normal life, but racism still exists in the world, and it may be something he or she may never escape.
• Zoanthrope Rogue – Your Zoanthrope is not apart of the ZLF and refuses to submit to Oz. These Zoanthropes live in special parts of the world where the governments can’t touch them. Their communities are also considered refuges for ZLF units. These communities are persecuted by Zoanthrope Task Groups. Other names for these types of Zoanthropes are “Ferals” or “Strays.”
• Zoanthrope Task Groups – The task groups’ missions are to protect human and Zoanthrope society from terrorism and rogue Zoanthropes. They seek and destroy human and ZLF terrorist cells in their respective countries, sometimes joining together in large coalitions such as the European Coalition, Asia Coalition, Africa Coalition, and the Southern Coalition (Australia and New Zealand), etc. While their missions seem just several humanitarians reveal these units in the media often committing atrocities similar to the terrorists they vow to capture.

The paths a character can take are very broad. Use the information in this game so far to just create whatever back story you want for your character. I encourage writers to interact so if you want to create characters who are siblings, good friends, rivals, etc. Then you can. I will try to make sure that all characters are somewhat familiar with each other. Not all the characters know each other, but at least one other writer will know another writer’s character.

I will be dropping GM events throughout the game, so this game will run in a sandbox manner with a guided SL. Do not worry. There isn’t a game that I currently GM where I didn’t do my job as a GM and give you guys something interesting to deal with. As the GM, my role is to guide the story and manage the characters let into it. I cannot make you have a good time; I cannot make you interact with other writers; I cannot make you have endless inspiration; and I cannot make you stay in the game. So please bring something interesting to the table. My most successful RPs have been with writers who interact with each other, get to know each other, communicate, and treat each other fairly, respectfully, and equally. I would like for this game to be that game. Now I digress. Let’s get onto character creation!

I encourage you to design this CS, however you want. It shows love and dedication when you do. Be sure to keep images scaled down if you use them and feel free to add youtube videos for character themes or whatever you want. Saying it now. The beast you choose does not determine if a character is stronger than another. Just because Apes are super strong IRL does not mean an ape will beat everyone. Your character's strength is solely determined by how well you play him or her in combat.

Character Sheet Code

Be sure to write your character's name here. You can use 1001fonts.com for fancy fonts you can link as an image code. You can also either provide an image or not provide an image of the character. I prefer anime or digital art no real life photos.
[b]Alias[/b]: If your character has a nickname, codename, or reputable name about a community.
[b]Age[/b]: No infants or toddlers. The youngest I'll allow characters is 12+.
[b]Current Residence[/b]: Where do they reside currently (in case they are a wanderer)
[b]Birth Place[/b]: Somewhere on planet earth.
[b]Hometown[/b]:
[b]Gender[/b]:
[b]Beast[/b]: What animal are they?
[b]Beast Mark[/b]: In Summary 3 for the timeline, you see an example of a mark that exists on a Zoanthropes's body. The mark resembles the beast they can transform into. There are many on Google if you type in Bloody Roar Logo. You can also type in Animal Tribal Tattoos. Pick a design and link it here or describe it.
[b]Mark Location[/b]: Where is it located on their body?
[b]Registered[/b]: Yes/No (Pick one and only write the one answer. It's Yes or No.)
[b]Role[/b]: What is your Zoanthropes day-to-day job. It can be anything. The roles mentioned above are examples.

[b]Height[/b]:
[b]Z-Height[/b]: (Zoanthrope Height)
[b]Weight[/b]:
[b]Z-Weight[/b]: (Zoanthrope Weight)
[b]Build[/b]: Human build.
[b]Hair[/b]:
[b]Eyes[/b]:
[b]Basic Description[/b]: Summarizing written appearance. This can be for their human and Zoanthrope appearance.
[b]Notable Scars:[/b] Describe.
[b]Tattoos:[/b] Describe.

[b]Outfit[/b]: What the character normally wears. Details.

[b]Most Prized Possession (Material Value)[/b]: If your character doesn't have one, then write "N/A"
[b]Most Prized Possession (Emotional Value)[/b]: If your character doesn't have one, then write "N/A"

[b]Likes[/b]:
[b]Dislikes[/b]:
[b]Goals[/b]:
[b]Life's Ambition ( Single greatest goal )[/b]:
[b]Fears[/b]:

[b]Vernacular[/b]: Accent?
[b]Mannerisms[/b]: Basically personality.
[b]Psychological Condition[/b]: Any mental problems?
[b]Superstitions[/b]:
[b]Morals[/b]: (Good, Bad, or Neutral)

[b]Relationships[/b]: (Spouse would go here)
[b]Family[/b]: (Parents or Children)
[b]Relatives[/b]: (Siblings)
[b]Friends[/b]:
[b]Acquaintances[/b]: This will probably filled out throughout the adventure. Same for rivals but if you have some already who are NPCs, then feel free to fill this out.
[b]Rivals[/b]:

[b]Favorite Sayings[/b]: These are character quotes.

[b]Back Story[/b]: This is where the whole character comes to life. Make it count.

[b]Current Story[/b]: What is your character doing now?

Fighting Abilities & Techniques
In this section, you are listing your character's notable fighting abilities and techniques.
[b]Fighting Style[/b]: Summarize your character's fighting style.

If your character uses a weapon, then use this format to detail it. Characters are only allowed 1 weapon. 2 weapons if the weapons are dual weapons such as butterfly knives, escrima sticks, or pistols.

[Weapon Name]
Source: How did you acquire the weapon?
Description: What does it look like, how big is it, heavy, etc. Any fancy symbols or engravings on it.

These are fighting abilities. Think Street Fighter. These are not superhuman abilities like you would see in Marvel or DC. This is a fighting game so think fighting game. You are allowed as many as you can think of. If I find some abilities to be redundant, I'm going to tell you to get rid of them. Try to center these abilities around a character archetype or theme. If I see you trying to go Mary Sue with it, I WILL let you know about it, and if it persists, then you're out.

[Ability Name] (Name of the ability)
Description:
Weakness:

1. Do not come to this game to argue. If you read over this recruitment thread, and saw something that you didn't like, then move on.
2. Whatever the GM says goes. I try to be fair to the best of my ability. However, I do not try to please the world nor do I care to. If we discuss an issue and we can't seem to come to an agreement, then it is best that the issue is dropped.
3. Do not whine if you see "x" amount of players choosing this species, job, fighting style, country, weapon, etc. I am regulating the character trends. If you want to bitch about it, then you can take it somewhere else. This is a No Bitch Zone (NBZ). Anyone who sees a player doing this, please be sure to remind them. All complaining does is make writers afraid to choose the character they want, and then they get all scared, and then THEY start whining, and then I have a whiny OOC. Don't do it. Let the GM do the GM's job.
4. Images. Be mindful of the size of your images. If it is too big for the screen, then put a hider around it or make it a url.
5. Read my Game. I did not write this for my health. I wrote this mostly for you than for me. The number one way to get on my shit list is to show me that you didn't read my game. The best way you do this is by frequently asking me questions that are answered in the damn OP. If I suspect you're not thoroughly reading this OP, then I'm going to stop caring and you're not going to be allowed in this game. Why would I allow a person whose hand I would have to hold throughout the game because they don't want to read a freakin' text role play game on a text role play site?
6. GM questions. If you ask a question, mention me. If you're talking to me, mention me. If you want my attention mention me because that is what that button is for. If it looks like I ignored you, 99.9% of the time it is because you didn't mention me and I lost your comment or question in the OOC flood. Mention me. Mention me. Mention me. I have to repeat this because people don't do it.
7. Be open and friendly. I am very big on character interaction. It is often overlooked in games. Please collaborate with other writers in this game. This game will become way more interesting if you do.
8. Romance. I like romance. Some of us do. But if you plan on walking the borderline of the Guild rules, then take it into PMs. Take it where no one can ever see it.
9. Text Color Discipline. Some of you like to use obnoxiously neon-bright colors and ridiculously dark colors. If you are one of those people who like to color their posts, please find a decent color median. No one wants to be blinded by your post and no one wants to have to adjust the brightness levels on their computers in order to read your post. If this sounds too difficult, then just use the default color.
10. COMMUNICATION! Do not bring your real-life drama into the OOC. This RP is not a therapy room. No one will coddle you. If you have to go away for a significant time, then just let the GM know by mentioning me. You do not have to tell me your business. You can just say, "I have an emergency" or "I am going to be on vacation from this time to this time." Or the infamous: "Sorry my crap computer burned out like everybody elses!" You can even let me know if you need to go on hiatus to take a break from the game. You can take a break from this game and return when the muse is up and running again. OMG! Did a GM really say this? Yes, I did. You just have to let me know. I will put a reminder in the character thread. I plan for this game to be long-term. We can only make it such together. Any player who is absent for 30 days without telling me where they are, will be dropped from this game.
11. Have fun. There is only so much I can do as a GM. I cannot make you have fun. I cannot make you enjoy the character that you created. I cannot make you seek out writers to collaborate with. All I do is guide the game and make sure everything goes forward and not backwards. You have to do the rest. So please make the most of this game.


Beasts reserved by players will be listed here. Once a reservation is made, writers have 7 days to submit a CS. After 7 days, the reservation will be dropped.

@astralGemini - Fox
@Eggs - Grasshopper
@Dynamo Frokane - Lizard
@Holy Soldier - Hornet
@The Harbinger of Ferocity - Tiger

[Holy Soldier]

Reference 1

Age: 31
Current Residence: Kyoto, Japan
Birth Place: Sopron, Hungary
Hometown: Sopron
Gender: Male
Beast: Giant Hornet
Beast Mark:

Mark Location: Left pectoral
Registered: Yes
Role: Zoanthrope Task Force Operator, European Coalition

Height: 5'10"
Z-Height: 7'5" (feet to tip of antennae)
Weight: 172 lbs.
Z-Weight: 255 lbs.
Build: Lean and athletic.
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Brown
Basic Description:

Human: Csaba is a man with feathered brown hair, longer on top of his head than it is on the side. The sides are military-cut short, and often lead down to a five o’clock shadow. He bears a carefree expression majority of the time that can become rather stern on a second notice. His human skin is creamy in complexion with scars from knives, claws, teeth - you name it. In prison, there were no rules. His muscles are lean like a Crossfitter. As a soldier for one of many Zoanthrope Task Forces, Csaba wears: this. He doesn’t wear too heavy an armor for it makes transforming a pain in the rear (not to mention the equipment he has to replace every time).

Zoanthrope: Csaba is a giant hornet. His Zoanthrope form resembles a Guyver in appearance: reference. His chitin is dark yellow with black sections of his natural armor. His stingers exist beneath his forearms like two swords that he can retract. The length of his stingers are two-feet and nearly hidden by his fisted strikes. Csaba has five eyes total - three red and small ones between his two main large ones. His wings are five-feet long and fold down his back. When in flight, the sound of his wings rapidly beating tends to terrify his enemies.

Tattoos: N/A

Outfit: When not wearing his coalition uniform, Csaba dresses like any average human would. He wears a white wifebeater, with light-blue jeans, and old sneakers.

Most Prized Possession (Material Value): Z-Scanner - it's the device he uses to scan Zoanthropes to see if they're registered or not. It's a small device about the size of a key fob. A thin green laser shoots out of it that expands up and down the person, scanning them from the feet to the head.
Most Prized Possession (Emotional Value): Memory Book - it's a day-timer, scrap book, just a small notebook with a camo-patterned cover that he uses to keep any information that he feels needs to be remembered inside because he doesn't have the best memory.

Likes: Sweet things - soda, dessert, candy, etc. He also likes meat protein (steaks, burgers, chicken, etc.). He likes being in charge of his life, and he has yet to have that opportunity.
Dislikes: Secondhand smoke, ZLF and other terrorists, Neo Corp, and his military employers.
Goals: Finish his duty on the task force so he can hopefully retire with his past crimes forgiven.
Life's Ambition ( Single greatest goal ): Live his own life as a free man.
Fears: Being sent back to death row or to work for Neo Corp.

Vernacular: Hungarian
Mannerisms: Csaba is down-to-earth but because of the circumstances he currently faces with his employers, he puts his duty before himself. If ordered to kill, he will kill no matter if the person were guilty or innocent. He is selfish and thinks only about his well-being. The world is cruel. It's a reality everyone should accept. When off-duty, others may find Csaba pretty likable. If you're an unregistered Zoanthrope, there's a high chance he already knows. He can be quite a deceiver.
Psychological Condition: Distrust, paranoia, pessimism, and poor memory.
Superstitions: N/A, he doesn't believe in much.
Morals: Neutral, leaning towards bad.

Relationships: Open
Family:

• Fulop Kiss - Father - Alive
• Darda Kiss - Mother - Alive

Relatives:

• Lilika Kiss - Younger Sister - Alive

Friends: Open
Acquaintances: Open
Rivals: Open

Favorite Sayings:




Back Story: Csaba was born to Fulop and Darda Kiss. At the time of his disappearance, Darda was pregnant with his sister Lilika. Csaba was five-years-old and was playing on a playground with other children when his parents didn’t notice the woman that walked off with their child. Her name was Jess de Silva. She was an agent of the Tylon Corporation and having been dressed like a kindergarten teacher, no other parents had suspected the woman. Csaba grew up in the corporation and was exposed to countless amounts of drugs and tests. The drugs messed with his memory, and he no longer remembers ever having a family. De Silva sympathized with him one day, and instead of referring to him as Experiment 4E8A (Four-Echo-Eight-Alpha), she secretly called him by his real name Csaba Kiss. “Don’t you ever forget your real name,” she had told him.

"Nice of you to show up."

When Csaba was sixteen-years-old, there was a breakout. He didn’t know who started it or how it had happened (later he would learn about the ZLF), but Csaba was determined to be set free. He revolted against his handlers, stinging them to death. A S.W.A.T. unit swarmed the building, killing any Zoanthropes who showed hostility. They found Csaba standing in a test room of swollen and ruptured corpses, victims who had died from anaphylaxis from his stings. He was taken and imprisoned along with many disgruntled beastmen. Zoanthropes were like humans, but worse when it came to institutionalization. Their animalistic instincts came out when kept in captivity for long-term. The carnivores ate the herbivores, there were Alpha matches. Csaba was forced to fight for his life even when he thought minding his business would have protected him. It was while in prison Csaba learned to fight. It was kill or be killed for the human prison guards did nothing to break up the battles. They didn’t care if the Zoanthropes killed or harmed each other. Their job was just to keep them locked up.

It wasn’t until Csaba was twenty-three-years-old that Zoanthrope Task Force groups became a thing. Csaba was given the option to join the task force or to remain in prison for life. Of Course, Csaba joined the task force, and he has been a member ever since.

Current Story: Csaba is part of the Zoanthrope Task Force, European Coalition Group. He has earned the code name “Sting” for his lethality in combat. He was sent to Japan to assist and train one of the Asia Coalition units—and that’s not at all. He has special orders to find any members and accomplices working for the ZLF. Any unregistered Zoanthropes he finds, even if innocent, are to be captured for questioning and receive forced registration or imprisonment. Rumor has it that the Yakuza have been cooperating with the ZLF.

Fighting Style: Jeet Kune Do – Csaba does not fight traditionally with forms or stances. He developed his own form of martial arts under the oppression of the Zoanthrope prison system. While in prison, Csaba was forced to fight to survive, to not be shamed, and defend whatever dignity he had left. He fought and murdered several Zoanthropes, confronting him with various styles whose moves he’s borrowed. He wanted only the most practical moves to be implemented in his techniques, and so those martial artists trained to a specific art find his motions to be unpredictable and confusing. Csaba’s formless stance appears cocky, but he maximizes any effort and any exertion of force into either a single or multiple short and effective strikes. He strikes to break bones, dislocate limbs, and takedown opponents swiftly and effectively. He will often strike to counter another strike, striking swiftly when his opponent attempts to. For grapplers, getting Csaba on the ground is the biggest challenge. He is light on his feet and because he conserves energy with his techniques, he can go for quite the long time. He will choke opponents, gouge out their eyes, and hit them where it hurts. There were no rules in prison and similarly, he believes there are no rules when one’s life is on the line.

In Zoanthrope form, Csaba’s strikes are extremely lethal. If his fist connects with an opponent, his stinger will dart out to deliver a painful sting to his enemy along with a dose of dangerous venom. Too many stings will cause an enemy to suffer anaphylactic shock, cardiac arrest, and multiple organ failure. Csaba will snatch enemies off the ground and carry them into the air where they are helpless to gravity. He has been known to do this to merely have them fall to their deaths. On the battlefield, Csaba in his true form is a nightmare. The helicopter-like buzzing from his wings have struck fear into the bowels of many terrorists.

Bowie Knife (with cord)
Source: Csaba acquired the knife when he joined the Zoanthrope Task Force.
Description: Csaba’s bowie knife is a foot long, black, with a blood groove, line cutter, and serrated spine. The hilt is wrapped in a 550 cord weave and bares a lanyard hole on the pummel where he has tied a durable zip cord. The cord allows him to whip the knife at an enemy and retrieve it. It also makes for a handy choking device for when he needs to strangle someone. If an enemy ever takes a stabbing from this knife, its best he or she leave it in because ripping it out is the worst think you could do. Csaba mostly uses this knife for utility purposes or when performing stealth operations.

Switcheroo
Description: Whether he starts with his left fist or right fist, or left leg or right leg, in either a jab or a kick, Csaba uses the first motion to draw his opponent’s eyes to the moving limb. His opposite fist, or leg, becomes the one delivering the punch or kick as the opponent realizes that the initial movement was a feint all too late.
Weakness: If the feint is performed too much, then it becomes predictable.

Counter Kick
Description: Csaba will swiftly execute a kick that just may counter an opponent’s kick, knee, or jab. The kick is a short burst of strength designed to disarm an enemy or send a shock through their appendages.
Weakness: The counter requires careful timing and enough distance between he and his opponent to successfully execute.

Throat Jab
Description: Csaba will lock his arm about the extended arm of his opponent, this is in the case his opponent performs a long punch. His hand will cup beneath his opponent’s elbow, pushing upwards, and putting pressure on the limb. His other fist will then proceed to jab the opponent in the throat, three consecutive times before he snaps the limb and releases him or her.
Weakness: Csaba takes a risk grabbing an opponent and putting himself in close proximity for an opponent can always attempt to resist and not allow him to perform the strikes.

Rib Smash
Description: Csaba catches an opponent’s fist and slams the forearm of his opposite hand rapidly against his opponent’s chest seven times. If an opponent isn’t wearing protective equipment, then their ribs could face serious harm.
Weakness: Proper protective equipment (PPE) could make this move useless.

Gut Wrench
Description: Csaba will harshly knock aside an opponent’s attempted jab and follow up with a swift punch to his opponent’s gut.
Weakness: PPE can make this blow less effective.

Leg Sweep
Description: Csaba twists and drops into a crouch, his left or his right will then swing around to violently strike his opponent’s ankles, knocking their feet out from under them.
Weakness: Can be jumped over, avoided completely, or jumped on if his opponent anticipates it.

Rising Kick
Description: A combo after performing Leg Sweep, Csaba follows the momentum through, performing a complete 360. As soon as his leg joins his other leg, he pushes through his feet, extending either his left or right leg, and springing in a rising kick toward his opponent’s face.
Weakness: Can be avoided if anticipated, but the move is meant to catch an opponent who manages to avoid Leg Sweep, off-guard. It can be suspected the next time he performs Leg Sweep.

Block
Description: Basic blocking.
Weakness: If he’s wearing PPE, then this method can be effective. Otherwise, not so much.

Bob and Weave
Description: A defensive move where Csaba will sacrifice his offense to bob and weave around his opponent’s strikes.
Weakness: While performing Bob and Weave, Csaba is not attacking thus it could lead to him being on the defensive for a prolonged amount of time and thus prolonging a fight.

Knife Throw
Description: Csaba will try to catch his opponent off-guard by throwing his bowie knife at them for a deadly stab.
Weakness: It can miss and there is a cord on the end that can be cut.

Whirl Blade
Description: Csaba will grab his knife by the cord and whirl it at his opponent to rapidly cut them.
Weakness: With the right protective equipment, the blade could be kicked or deflected back at him.

Lethal Ambush
Description: Csaba drops from above onto his opponent’s shoulders and attempts to strangle them with the cord of his knife.
Weakness: If an enemy is prepared, the cord can be cut with a sharp object.

Stinger (Zoanthrope)
Description: Csaba’s rapid punches have stingers hidden beneath them to inject his enemies full of venom.
Weakness: With proper armor or special PPE, his stingers and venom can be avoided.

Airlift (Zoanthrope)
Description: Csaba ambushes an opponent, snatching them into the air and carrying them high into the sky to drop them from a great height.
Weakness: Avian Zoanthropes can survive this or a prepared Zoanthrope in their human guise.

100 Hornets (Zoantrhope – Ultimate)
Description: Csaba snatches an opponent off the ground and tosses him or her into the air. As the opponent falls, Csaba catches him or her on his stingers and proceeds to rapidly jab them into the opponent’s body. After 100 consecutive hits, he drops them on the ground and drops from the sky on top of them in an explosive stomp.
Weakness: Avian Zoanthropes can avoid the ultimate by flying away before they land on Csaba’s stingers. A sturdy opponent who survives the ultimate may have the advantage for Csaba reverts back to his humanoid form after the completed attack.

[The Harbinger of Ferocity]

Mark Theron

Alias: Theron
Age: 26
Current Residence: Kyoto, Japan
Birth Place: Waipahu, Hawaii
Hometown: Hilo, Hawaii
Gender: Male
Beast: South China Tiger
Beast Mark:
Mark Location: Upper left arm at the shoulder.
Registered: Yes (Need to Know Only)
Role: Mark is a security contractor for the Independent Security Agency, a private company that operates in corporate protection. They specialize in countering terrorism leveled against their clients by the Zoanthrope Liberation Front or human rebels, at times working with the Z-Task Force when opportune. When possible, they recruit rogue zoanthropes and mingle them among their predominantly human membership as a sort of added insurance. Because of their special registration process, they are "need-to-know" only and hidden in plain sight.

Height: 6'0"
Z-Height: 7'1"
Weight: 189 lbs
Z-Weight: 398 lbs
Build: Athletic, mixed build.
Hair: Black, short and cropped.
Eyes: Amber
Basic Description: The human form of Mark Theron is most distinct in its combination of Chinese, Korean and American attributes, all originating from his mixed bloodline. He bears the better of their qualities, such as his height and build, of which have been refined by a natural athleticism and penchant for finding his way into unarmed combat; an amalgam of balanced musculature that is slightly more pronounced in the upper body. While relatively pale for a person of Asian heritage, born from his father's Caucasian influences, he's not for lack of sun - having lived much of his life in near tropical environments - and bears a faint but persistent tan. Other notable features of his person are that he wears his hair close and to a military point, keeps his face clean shaven, has eyes that edge closer to amber than they do rich brown, and is extensively tattooed above the elbow to the middle of his back.

When in zoanthrope form, Mark Theron's combined heritage manifests most clearly, providing him with a powerful build that is an extension of his human one's. Not only a foot taller and several hundred pounds heavier, he bears the ferocious strength and speed of a tiger, as well as its endurance. Unlike with other tiger zoanthropes, Theron's incarnation of the beast is much more vivid and vibrant in fur and marking; a brighter orange, more yellowed white, and banded by very dark, pointed, narrow stripes. The relative thinness of this fur additionally gives him a sleeker, more defined appearance, distinct among others who are of such lineage.
Notable Scars: The left forearm bears several long healed scars born from claws, as does the right inner thigh. While healed, they are the most distinct of his marring.
Tattoos: The upper arms beyond the elbow and to the back are mingled with urban tribal tattoos, of which were built around disguising his Beast Mark. The right arm bears a mirror tattoo of the mark, further obscuring his nature as a zoanthrope in his human form.

Outfit: The majority of what Theron wears is practical in terms of occupation, most often grey or black cargo pants with a rigger's belt, tactical boots, and a plain shirt of similar color. As with all other Independent Security Agency members, when armed and working, Mark additionally wears a plate carrier vest and leg harness. However, outside of his occupation, Theron wears little more than loose fitting cargo shorts and a belt, not being fond of jewelry or other additions.

Most Prized Possession (Material Value): The nearest firearm - it is the safest way to not reveal one's nature as a zoanthrope.
Most Prized Possession (Emotional Value): The alternate form, as there's ample reason to believe it to be a reflection of one's true self - there's no other time and place to really be one's self.

Likes: Soju, sake, life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness.
Dislikes: Government agents, competing organizations, terrorists (of any form), cellphones, and the rain.
Goals: To ensure that those responsible for making zoanthropes a threat to themselves and humanity are held accountable for their actions.
Life's Ambition ( Single greatest goal ): To live in a world where man and beast can again live side by side. If that is even possible anymore.
Fears: Being made out as the public enemy and becoming just another target.

Vernacular: No matter the language Mark Theron is speaking in, it has distinct Americanisms in it and a sense of urgency, if at times also being a bit snide. His accent strongly suggests he is not wholly familiar with the Japanese he speaks, being far more fluent in Chinese, English, and Korean.
Mannerisms: Mark, more often called "Theron", does little to embody how the general public imagine mercenaries to be; in fact, he even resents the term and goes so far as to argue the differences, seeing himself as a better alternative to the world's governments and their authority. While he is partial to drinking, he's neither an alcoholic or drunk, always sober enough to do the job and more just a man whose life consists of nothing but an uphill battle. This, as well as having no father in the younger years of his life, leave him to be a cynical sort that is never lacking in comment or critique, although there's a strong effort to blend it with humor. When left to his own devices, out of sight and out of mind, he spends the majority of his time in his alternate form, believing it to help tame the beast within and, in a bizarre sense, makes him more grounded and perhaps even human. There's no shortage of review on his other half then.
Psychological Condition: N/A
Superstitions: Bad Moon Rising, or the notion that zoanthropes tend to make their true selves violently known under the cover of night and during stronger phases of the moon. There are few other times he or others more on edge.
Morals: Neutral

Relationships: Single
Family: While now familiar to his zoanthrope father, a military member who had a one night fling with his human mother, he keeps few tabs on either of them. The former, now retired, lives somewhere in Florida of the United States, and the latter still in Hawaii.
Relatives: None known.
Friends: To be determined.
Acquaintances: To be determined.
Rivals: To be determined.

Favorite Sayings:
"I tried being nice once. It was awful."
"You really brought this on yourself."
"My life is a cage. Sometimes I am let out, other times I let people in."

Back Story: Before Theron was a "soldier for hire", a term the general public has taken a liking to in the wake of the Zoanthrope Liberation Front's terror, Mark Theron was a child born into a single parent family. It was clear from the beginning he was never to have been in the picture, but life has a way of changing suddenly when two young adults take more than just a passing liking to one another during a night out on the town. Unfortunately, by the time his mother realized this, Mark's father had long since returned to the mainland and she was left raising a son alone.

This made early life complicated for Mark, having no real direction and a strange inner strength. It gave him ample trouble both in the classroom and in the schoolyard where, without too much provocation, the youth would see himself into brawls against the other students. This repeated for some time until he made the mistake of going for something a little bigger than his peers; a few grades above. While reasonably outmatched, he held his own with a ferocious determination well beyond anything expected from a child. Left with few other options, his mother privately schooled him from thereon out, but sent him off to an associate the rest of the time.

It was only then Mark learned how to actually fight, becoming a student within a local academy that focused upon the Chinese martial arts; specifically, the Five Animals style. Learning an amalgam of Fu Jow Pai and Heihuquan, the intervention proved to give him the discipline and focus he needed in a life without; strength and courage alone would not see him through. It was this understanding of kung fu at an elementary level that later led to his adoption of some other incarnations of wushu, such as Korean taekwondo. Having no shortage of time and devotion to these philosophies, Mark pursued them up until early adulthood when it was clear he had nowhere to go in life but forward and alone.

The connections he had established however, were what led him to discover his zoanthrope heritage, that of which was passed on to him from his father. The motions he had put himself through, both hard and soft, external and internal, had allowed him to control that which wished to be uncontrolled; his mentors could in part see what the previously young Mark could not, even if they themselves did not wholly understand what was to come. Realizing now who and what he was, he quickly obscured this truth by applying for a number of security agencies. While this fell through initially, leaving him to work as a drifter doing odd jobs for a few years, mainly as muscle for various bars or entertainment companies, the Independent Security Agency contacted him years later. Willing to waive his minor criminal offenses that would otherwise disqualify him, they acknowledged they held a special interest in martial artists who had informal "street combat" experience.

While reasonably suspicious, Mark soon discovered it was his father who referred them to him, having been observing his son from a distance. Aware his child was a tiger, just as he, he wished to protect the man he had never known as a boy; the Independent Security Agency being one of the ways to do so. The company paid not only for the obscuring of his Beast Mark, his military style training, and his deployment to Japan, but incentivized him further by providing a cover that he was any other contractor referred to them by their military contacts. Not one to look the other way from a gift, he agreed and spent the following years working. Business however, boomed far more than Mark or anyone else imagined as terrorists - both zoanthropes and humans - began holding open conflicts across the world.

Realizing they jeopardized anyone who was a zoanthrope even further, Mark began taking off the record work as well; not because he believes himself to be anything remotely heroic, but out of pure necessity for those alike him - or so goes the rationale. He certainly hasn't settled on where he stands in this new, changing world.

Current Story: Now sent to Kyoto, Mark Theron is walking the dangerous line between terrorist and counter-terrorist himself. While on the payroll for both official and "unofficial" operations of the Independent Security Agency, Mark has ceased working for profit and need alone; the occupation and cover of safety it provides has become essential to his personal objective to see the clandestine war to an end. When not conducting escorts, convoys, or security, Theron is employed in "grey operations" paid for by the government of Japan through his workplace to help subdue the unrest, be it civil or criminal, at times aiding the Z-Task Force directly. More often than not, it is little more than the sort of muscle work he had been doing before.

Fighting Abilities & Techniques

Fighting Style: The fighting styles Theron conscribes to are all predominantly external, hard martial techniques that focus little on internalization, something he is only just recently beginning to understand with time. They are characterized most by their open hand strikes, palm strikes, curled fingers, and elbow attacks, complimented by immensely powerful kicks designed to break down hand to hand defenses and or strike high on an opponent. While experienced in Fu Jow Pai and Heihuquan, his added ability originates from Han Mu Do taekwondo, but is defined by the ruthlessness he displays from years of dirty fighting. While not a dishonorable fighter, Theron's attacks are designed to break an opponent and render them injured or incapacitated; killing is a last resort.

Lacking in versatility, his combat strength in the unarmed arena relies upon speed, strength and violence of action with attacks that rip, tear, claw and grasp; designed to land a few critical blows and a finishing strike following that to end the fight. His low set base when performing techniques makes him difficult to grapple and take down, as does his long reach. This makes Theron an excellent direct fighter, but vulnerable to opponents who are much faster, more dexterous, and throw flurries of simple combo strikes without slowing or those that have exceedingly complex and difficult to defend against techniques.

Roaring Palm
Description: A strong forward palm strike designed to breakthrough a conventional guard or shunt an opponent off of balance. Aimed at the face, it strikes at the nose. This technique is often the means to an opening after a series of conventional strikes, designed to create a weak point.
Weakness: Predictable means of breaking a guard and relies heavily upon an opponent having a weak or weakened defense.

Deflecting Hand Defense
Description: The open hand defenses of the style allows for the deflection of attacks, which is preferred to conventional blocking. Allows a superior initiation of a counter-attack or opportunity a grapple.
Weakness: A steady barrage of regular strikes preoccupies the defense, preventing regular offense.

Red Fang Hand
Description: A powerful yet fast open hand strike made with fingers curled to mimic claws which are then slashed horizontally against an exposed area and are raked to open a wound. This technique ends a combo and exploits a weak or undefended area, often the face or neck.
Weakness: Requires a vulnerable soft flesh point to be exposed and virtually ineffective against a well armored or defended target.

Brutal Slash
Description: A fast elbow slash made across the body at the face or throat of a target. Rather than focusing on the impact, it focuses on the point of the elbow. It doubles as a break attempt from a clinch or an attack in a grab.
Weakness: A niche attack or counterattack that is extremely close range. Relies heavily upon an opponent intentionally trying to be in close.

Sweeping Blade Strike
Description: A snap based knife-hand attack made from the leading side to sweep a defense at the wrists and forearms as well as strike at the side of the neck. It then proceeds into a reverse hand grab to the neck for a body throw.
Weakness: A telegraphed attack, it is more easily avoided due to framing the body to the side and dropping the non-attacking hand while twisting at the core.

Hidden Double-Palm Technique
Description: A power maneuver derived of the system, it is designed to disable, topple, throw, and create distance by striking both tiger palms to the chest of the target just below the collar bone. The thumbs are then driven in to strike a pressure point, the fingers grasp in and rake, while the palms initiate the throw.
Weakness: Exclusively limited to following up a finishing strike in order to create distance. Cannot exploit the desired pressure point on a well armored target.

Disabling Touch Technique
Description: A speed and technique attack delivered by hand at the point where the target's neck and chest meet, just between the clavicle. Driving in and downward blow with fingers to the soft flesh, while grabbing with the palm, this pressure point disables and disorients, usually causing numbing in the body and breathlessness. The maneuver ends with the defender being grabbed.
Weakness: Not effective on an armored target and relies on an opponent having no real defense or guard.

Blackout Counter
Description: A maiming attack designed to capture a forward punch such as a jab or cross, wrapping the capturing arm around it, then extending the captured arm so as to strike the exposed, hyper-extended elbow with a support side palm. Generates tremendous amounts of pain through injury and excels at disarming armed opponents.
Weakness: Reliant on opponent using basic attacks or a melee weapon and having some sort of timing delay in place of speed.

Forced Rolling Throw
Description: A hybrid technique that captures an extended arm or foot aimed high and rolling the attacker's body over in the opposite direction violently, twisting the captured limb and throwing the target to the ground. Both joint manipulation and a throw, it forces a decision to either move with the throw or risk serious injury to the joint.
Weakness: An attacker who moves with, not against, the momentum can roll through it and avoid the intended joint manipulation, as can a swift counter-attacker move into the grab to prevent being thrown.

Rear-Foot Sacrifice Throw
Description: A capturing attack that grapples an opponent's outstretched arm, places a kick to the chest and rolls back to throw the opponent over while hyper-extending the controlled limb. This combination of attacking forward momentum and reverse defensive momentum slams the enemy into the ground behind the defender.
Weakness: Exploits a difference in size, agile and light opponents or those who go limp can easily roll with impact. Ends with both attacker and defender to the ground on their backs.

Fierce Impact Kick
Description: An immensely powerful roundhouse kick aimed at the ribs of the target, just below the pit of the arm and striking with the shin. Designed to break down an opponent's defense and stun them to open them up for a devastating follow up.
Weakness: The twist of the body to generate power is distinct and any delay before allows for interruption of the kick through a block while a delay after allows the leg to be caught by the defender.

High Blocking Kick
Description: A combination kick that is thrown vertically high to the target's head whilst blocking low across the body with the leading hand and covering the side with support hand.
Weakness: A technique that relies upon its speed to actually connect and puts the supporting leg far back.

Far Push Kick
Description: A strong forward kick aimed at center mass which is designed to create distance and force a target into defensive fighting. Pushes an opponent back and highly unbalanced targets might be toppled over.
Weakness: Can be readily blocked to absorb impact and loses effect the more evenly matched in size the attacker and defender are.

Black Claw Finish
Description: A lightning fast snap kick delivered by the foot to the groin, striking with the toes back and ball of foot forward. Lacking in penetrating power, it disorients and delays the target by generating pain. The striking foot is then placed as the leading foot and a tiger palm strike is delivered to the exposed neck with intent to overpower such as by incapacitating or potentially killing.
Weakness: A life or death simple combo relying on surprise and cheapness of shot, any target not affected by the kick can easily defend against the secondary attack.

Feigned Throat Finish
Description: The hands and arms are turned over one another in a circular motion as part of a change in footing, ending with the new leading hand feigning a delayed strike. Meant to encourage a capture of that hand, the actual strike is delivered by the other hand to the exposed neck. Inflicting a combination of injuries to the throat, it relies on pain compliance or incapacitating.
Weakness: Leads into no finish if the attacker does not take the feigned attack and does not have desired effect if the throat cannot be struck.

Unleashed Rage
Description: A frenzy of wildly mixed Tiger Claw System strikes delivered in extremely rapid succession only in zoanthrope form that tears through defenses and inflicts deep wounds. The attacks are delivered as part of a relentless advance meant to deny escape to a target that defends rather than withdraws. It is most successful when the defender is cornered and cannot fade out of reach. Such speed and violent force burns away the drive to sustain the beast form, causing it to end when the flurry does.
Weakness: The assault relies upon an opponent weathering it, such as by blocking, rather than fading out of reach until the frenzy subsides. Significantly less effective if the target cannot be cornered or somehow forced to endure the blows. Ends the zoanthrope form automatically.

Equipment

M4A1 Carbine
Source: Occupational (Place of Work Only)
Description: The M4A1 is a light weight, gas operated, magazine fed, semi-automatic or automatic, air cooled, shoulder fired rifle used extensively by the United States' special operations forces and is chambered in the 5.56mm. A variant of the M4 Carbine, it is the regular issue weapon of the Independent Security Agency used day to day and is finished in standard black and equipped with a reflex sight. Its ability to be fired in an automatic configuration is designed to help deter would-be attackers from acting by volume of fire, particularly the large and difficult to stop Zoanthrope Liberation Front fighters and beast forms.

Here is the revised version, @Holy Soldier. It includes added research and maneuvers from the associated primary school as well as the requested corrections.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of FerocityI didn't see at all any corrections. Instead, I see you added more moves and overcomplicate the description for each move, which will become a major issue in the main game if that is how you plan to describe your character fighting. I am not in a position to sit and highlight the problem areas at the moment, but I will when I return to my room.

[Holy Soldier]

Mark Theron Ability List Review

Tiger Claw System
Description: A series of fast combination strikes that heavily favor the jab, cross, and hook, all of which can be made from either the normal fighting stance or a mirrored stance. (Mirrored, are you implying him copying another person's fighting stance, therefore, mirroring the other person or using opposite foot or arm, such as changing the leading foot? You want to avoid terms like these. You say this as though everyone is just going to "magically" know what you're talking about, and if I have to ask you to write up a nomenclature, specifically for your interpretation of words and phrases that's a NO GO. You should be able to easily say, this is what this move does in the most basic sense that anyone reading it will understand. I've participated in many, many, and I mean many text-fighting RPs to the point that I have "grown" out of it. The biggest issue that leads to people arguing is when one person cannot understand what the other person wrote, and instead of being humble about it, and explaining what he or she meant to that person, they refuse to. I don't want to find out that when you start fighting someone and that person gets confused that it's because you were overcomplicating simple actions and motions or making generic statements like the one you made here to describe what you "think" was obvious to the reader. I also don't want to see someone who goes off their own interpretation of your writing, writing something that had nothing to do with the actions your character had made because again he or she didn't understand what you wrote. Again, keep it simple.) They are notable for being open hand blows with the fingers curled inward and striking with the more dangerous palm rather than the knuckles. Because they are open hand strikes, they are extremely effective at deflecting or grabbing.
Weakness: A conventional string of combos, they have only the most basic variance and rely upon their speed, rather than power, to create openings for heavier blows. Because they can be interchanged for deflection and are favored over blocking, a consistent assault can deny counter-attacks.

Roaring Palm
Description: A forward palm strike from the strong side (I already talked to you about this one. I wouldn't even mention it because all it does is bring a person's attention to these words "strong side." Just don't even mention it because it really isn't important. You may think it is, but it's not, especially since I didn't add the "Handiness" section to the CS. Also, I doubt you're going to have your character ever attack with his "weak side" any way. Another reason why it's pointless.) with fingers curled inward designed to breakthrough a conventional guard or shunt an opponent off of balance. Aimed at the face, it strikes at the nose. This technique is often the means to an opening after a series of conventional strikes, designed to create a weak point. The attack is generated from whichever side has the leg to the rear in order to create tremendous power.
Weakness: Predictable means of breaking a guard and relies heavily upon an opponent having a weak or weakened defense.

Red Fang Hand
Description: A powerful yet fast open hand strike made with fingers slightly splayed then flexed and fixed (Was "fingers curled like claws" really that hard to write? This is an example of overcomplicating simple actions. What you wrote didn't put any imagery in my head. It did nothing to explain what you were describing. The only way I knew what you were writing about was when you mentioned your character "slashing horizontally." That's when I thought claw-shape. It has to be.) which are slashed horizontally against an exposed area and are raked to open a wound. This technique ends a combo and exploits a weak or undefended area, often the face or neck.
Weakness: Requires a vulnerable soft flesh point to be exposed and virtually ineffective against a well armored or defended target.

Rending Point
Description: A vicious blade-like strike of the elbow made as a slash rather than an impact due to lightning speed. (An elbow is not going to cut anybody. Unless you got a blade on the end or something sharp, it's not going to cut. Now, if you're trying to use friction. Friction still isn't cutting. Friction can generate heat, which heat will break bonds, but that's burning and still not cutting.) Generated upward in direction, and coming from the entirety of the core, it can tear at flesh as easily as attacks like those of the tiger palm by using the natural point of the elbow. It doubles as a break attempt from a clinch or an attack in a grab which can allow for a counter-grab.
Weakness: A niche attack or counterattack that is extremely close range. Relies heavily upon an opponent intentionally trying to grapple a difficult to wrestle target or staying in a grapple.

Sweeping Blade Strike
Description: A snap based knife-hand attack made from the leading side to sweep a defense at the wrists and forearms as well as strike at the side of the neck. It then proceeds into a reverse hand grab to the neck for a body throw or elbow to the face. (This ability has like two abilities in it that could be separated. The ability should do one thing. This ability is either going to be a throw or it's going to be an elbow to the face. If you have to make a second ability for either, then do so.)
Weakness: Characterized by telegraphing of squaring up to one side and dropping the support hand to help generate momentum at the core. ("squaring up" explain this. Don't explain it to me. Just write out exactly what's happening. Again, keep it simple. Dropping the support hand to generate momentum at the core...to do what? Finish the incomplete thought.)

Hidden Double-Palm Technique
Description: A power maneuver derived of the system, it is designed to disable, topple, throw, and create distance by striking both tiger palms to the chest of the target just below the collar bone, driving the thumbs in to hit a pressure point, and rasping the body with the fingers while pushing to tear and throw. (If you are pushing the target back, then you can't be grasping them at the same time. If you are tearing at their flesh, then you are tearing at their flesh. If you are tearing at their flesh, and then grabbing them again to execute the throw, then this needs to be clearly stated in the description.)
Weakness: Exclusively limited to following up a finishing strike in order to create distance. Cannot exploit the desired pressure point on a well armored target.

Blackout Counter (No Issue)
Description: A maiming attack designed to capture a forward punch such as a jab or cross, wrapping the capturing arm around it, then extending the captured arm so as to strike the exposed, hyper-extended elbow with a support side palm. Generates tremendous amounts of pain through injury and excels at disarming armed opponents.
Weakness: Reliant on opponent using basic attacks or a melee weapon and having some sort of timing delay in place of speed.

Forced Rolling Throw (No Issue)
Description: A hybrid technique that captures an extended arm or foot aimed high and rolling the attacker's body over in the opposite direction violently, twisting the captured limb and throwing the target to the ground. Both joint manipulation and a throw, it forces a decision to either move with the throw or risk serious injury to the joint.
Weakness: An attacker who moves with, not against, the momentum can roll through it and avoid the intended joint manipulation, as can a swift counter-attacker move into the grab to prevent being thrown.

Rear-Foot Sacrifice Throw (No Issue)
Description: A capturing attack that grapples an opponent's outstretched arm, places a kick to the chest and rolls back to throw the opponent over while hyper-extending the controlled limb. This combination of attacking forward momentum and reverse defensive momentum slams the enemy into the ground behind the defender.
Weakness: Exploits a difference in size, agile and light opponents or those who go limp can easily roll with impact. Ends with both attacker and defender to the ground on their backs.

Fierce Impact Kick (No Issue)
Description: An immensely powerful roundhouse kick aimed at the ribs of the target, just below the pit of the arm and striking with the shin. Designed to break down an opponent's defense and stun them to open them up for a devastating follow up.
Weakness: The twist of the body to generate power is distinct and any delay before allows for interruption of the kick through a block while a delay after allows the leg to be caught by the defender.

High-Low Block Kick
Description: A combination kick that is thrown high to the target's head whilst blocking low across the body with the strong hand and to the side with support hand. Unique in its execution due to the fact it appears to leave the balance on the support leg; a catch of the first leg allows the second leg to be thrown in sacrifice to the now exposed defender to free the leg if the attacker desires. (Is your character intending to attack with the second leg after the first one has been captured? If so, it needs to be stated. Throwing your only un-captured leg just throws your character's balance otherwise.)
Weakness: A technique that relies upon its speed to actually connect to its target or, alternatively, the opponent falling for the feigned opening to occupy their hands. (It seems like you're also hoping for the opponent to catch the first leg. Otherwise, it seems like this technique would never happen since that was its main purpose. Oh, did you write that?)

Black Claw Finish
Description: A lightning fast snap kick delivered by the foot to the groin, striking with the toes back and ball of foot forward. Lacking in deep power, it is designed to disorient and delay through pain by speed. (Huh? I would rewrite this. It just reads very ugly.) The striking foot is then placed as the leading foot and a tiger palm strike is delivered full force to the exposed neck with the strong hand, incapacitating or potentially killing.
Weakness: A life or death simple combo relying on surprise and cheapness of shot, any target not affected by the kick can easily defend against the secondary attack.

Feigned Throat Finish
Description: An attack led by the turning over of hands, it leads into a palm strike with the forward foot while moving. (This reads very ugly. Please fix it. There is a simple way to write this. I know there is.) Encouraging an attacker to grasp the outstretched hand which has rolled over, it quickly evolves into one of several finishing blows meant to connect with the neck. All from the strong side that is not captured, the weakest of the trio, scaling in severity, is a simple palm strike to injure, a palm up spear-hand jab to disorient and cause pain compliance, or an inward hammer fist to the side of the neck or skull which can render unconscious or even kill through a mixture of nerve, blood, and oxygen interruption. (So...you're trying to be "selective" about what kind of ability this ability will be based on the situation? This finisher makes no sense. It's like you're trying to say, "If Bob does this, then I'll do that. But if he does this instead, then I'll do that." You can't put multiple abilities based on a case-by-case basis in one move. Otherwise, why does the abilities section even exist?)
Weakness: Leads into no finish if the attacker does not take the feigned attack and has scaling severity; most effective against inexperience melee combatants or life and death situations.

Unleashed Rage
Description: A frenzy of wildly mixed horizontal and vertical hooking slashes delivered only in zoanthrope form that tear through defenses. The attacks are delivered as part of a relentless advance, usually to corner or carve through a target foolish enough to stand (does it matter if they were standing, crouching, sitting, or lying down? Or is it only effective against standing characters?) and allow a finishing strike. Such speed and violent force burns away the drive to sustain the beast form, causing it to end when the flurry does.
Weakness: The assault relies upon an opponent attempting to weather it, rather than simply fading out until the frenzy subsides. Significantly less effective if the target cannot be cornered or somehow forced to endure the blows. Ends the zoanthrope form automatically. (Based on what you wrote, it seems like a character can simply crouch and avoid the entire string of moves all together.)

@The Harbinger of Ferocity

[The Harbinger of Ferocity]

@Holy Soldier, I have made those changes and attempted to simplify them more throughout. Some were renamed as I replaced them altogether to make them more conventional and less complex.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of Ferocity1. Tiger Claw System needs to have a definied purpose. As I said, it can't be a move, in the case of this move, in the case of that move. If you're going to do that, then make another move specifically for grab/throw and let Tiger System be strikes.

2. Brutal Slash; you use the word "paint." What does painting the face or throat with an elbow even do? Why are you even using the verb "to paint?"

3. Why is this move significally less effective if the opponent is dazed or incapacitated? I would think this would kill them?

These are the comments I have.

[The Harbinger of Ferocity]

@Holy Soldier, is it fair then to assume because that is the school of martial arts, to include its basic techniques and attributes, of Fu Jow Pai and Heihuquan that I then do not need to list its typical attributes under "Fighting Abilities and Techniques"? At this point that seems to be my understanding. It was there to describe an atypical and unusual fighting style that is certainly not common in the Western world, let alone outside China. Either way, I removed it all.

As for the phrase "to paint", it was an informal term I was familiar to with the tactic itself and I dropped the other referenced line because if that was how it was being read, then that certainly is counter to the intent.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of FerocityYou're forgetting that this is a fighting game. When you play fighting games, they have a move set and those move sets do that ONE thing. One move set is not going to do "if he does this, it'll do that or that or that or if he does this it'll do that instead." It will straight up do that one combo. So this is different from if you were just in the arena and TB battling someone where you can basically have your character anticipate whatever BS you want. If you need some help designing moves just look at any move list for any fighting game and watch how they're executed.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of FerocityAlso my goal was not to have you shred your ideas. I just wanted you to clean them up. If you are good with your CS, then you can add it to the CS thread.

[The Harbinger of Ferocity]

I had understood it as a sort of fighting game, not a fighting game, so that was likely my disconnect, @Holy Soldier. I will probably go and lift a set of abilities from the game and match them at a one-to-one ratio to populate the rest of the entire move set for Theron. As for my character sheet, I had assumed you were not trying to be belligerent, controlling or the like. I figured it was par for course.

[Eggs]

@Holy Soldier Here's Hiro with a couple new moves.

Hiro

Alias: Masked Justice
Age: 52
Current Residence: Kyoto, Japan
Birth Place: Arita, Japan
Hometown: Arita
Gender: Male
Beast: Grasshopper
Beast Mark:

Mark Location: Right wrist
Registered: No
Role: At day, deliveryman and noodle shop owner. At night, Zoanthrope Rogue and vigilante.

Height: 5'6"
Z-Height: 6'6"
Weight: 185 lbs
Z-Weight: 240 lbs
Build: Muscular, but slightly overweight.
Hair: Black, greying.
Eyes: Dark brown.
Basic Description: In his human form, Hiro is a stout older man of Japanese ethnicity. He has a build that reflects his younger years as a martial artist, muscular and strong, but age and his love for food have softened him up, especially around the midsection. His skin is a shade of medium brown, emphasized by a healthy tan. In terms of facial features, he has a strong jaw and forehead, with some notable wrinkles around his eyes and mouth. His eyebrows are large and bushy, and he keeps his facial hair in a well-groomed chinstrap beard and mustache. He has short hair with a receding hairline, heavily greyed on the sideburns.

In his Zoanthrope form, Hiro is much taller and more lithe in build. His 'skin' consists of deep green chitin plates that cover greenish-brown leathery skin between the plates. His limbs are proportionally long, with his arms about 1/3rd longer than human proportions and his legs in a digitigrade shape. Beneath his main arms, he has a pair of smaller limbs normally tucked below his chest that aren't as strong as his main arms, but are fully dextrous. Brown stripes go down his legs and his chitin fades to yellow on his forearms. His head is rounded with large, red compound eyes and a complex set of mandibles, as well as long antennae that go back over his head. On his back, he has insectoid wings normally covered by a pair of protective plates.
Notable Scars: Hiro has scars that appear to be from a whip on his back.
Tattoos: Multiple floral tattoo designs on his right forearm to help mask his Beast Mark.

Outfit: Hiro typically dresses very casually. Khaki pants, a polo shirt, and when at work, a pocketed apron are his typical daily wear. He prefers to stay out of the limelight when possible. In colder weather, he puts on a brown leather coat.

Most Prized Possession (Material Value): His noodle shop. It's his source of income.
Most Prized Possession (Emotional Value): His noodle shop. He prides himself on being able to feed his community and create a healthy, happy environment for the people who live there, and his work helps give him purpose.

Likes: Soba, pork, cooking for others, conversing with friends, teaching others, motorcycles.
Dislikes: Police, the government, Zoanthrope terrorists, criminals, street punks, trouble.
Goals: To maintain a safe neighborhood free of influence from either criminals or government surveillance, to live peacefully for the remainder of his years, to see a day where humans and Zoanthropes can live peacefully without conflict.
Life's Ambition ( Single greatest goal ): To see the dissolution of Oz. He wants a world where everyone is free to live in peace without being treated as an 'other' or a weapon by the government.
Fears: Having his identity revealed, losing his way in life, and failing those he seeks to protect from danger.

Vernacular: In human form, Hiro speaks with an intentionally put on voice that makes him sound meek, slightly frail, and unammusingly friendly. In Zoanthrope form, he allows his true voice to come out, which is a few octaves deeper and tends to roll his R sounds.
Mannerisms: Hiro is a kindly older man who likes to think of himself as a teacher for the youth and the lost of his community. He seeks to make the world a better place, and failing that, to keep his community safe and free of conflict for human and Zoanthrope alike. While he understands the need for law in society, he despises those that are unjust to people who face discrimination and troubles, and sees those who willingly uphold them to be just as bad as the criminals they're supposed to suppress. He lives to help others with anything from the mundane to the dangerous, living up to his reputation as a moral paragon.
Psychological Condition: N/A
Superstitions: N/A
Morals: Good

Relationships: Single
Family: His mother and father live in Arita. He visits them when possible.
Relatives: [To be filled out in case of future characters]
Friends: Mitsumori Abe, a local truck driver that delivers ingredients to Hiro's shop.
Acquaintances: [To be filled out]
Rivals: [To be filled out]

Favorite Sayings:
"Justice for all!"
"Henshin!"
"Freedom will not be taken from anyone!"

Back Story: Hiro comes from a family of martial artists who use a specialized version of Kickboxing. They lived humbly as teachers of their art, and while they had never attained any sort of fame, they were confident in their skills. Hiro began training in the martial art from a young age, at the time going by a different shortening of his name, Yuki. He was a confident, strong-willed child for whom martial arts were an ideal pastime. He sought strength to protect people and skills to gain his family fame, honor, and wealth.

Through his teenage years, he trained more intensely, pushing himself to become the strongest he could possibly be. His determination was nearly unmatched in his quest to become strong, but he was sure to utilize his skills and strengths in human form only. He had been taught that using his Zoanthrope form against a human would not only be dangerous to all of them, but highly immoral. Due to this belief, he refused to fight while transformed, and refused to transform at all for a long while. It kept the family's identity as Zoanthropes secret, and helped him turn even his human form into a powerful fighter.

At the age of 20, he enrolled in a fighting tournament, the grand prize being almost 500,000 yen. It was a chance to make himself known and help his family financially, as well as possibly inspiring others to learn their martial art. With the intensity of his training and a strong motivation, Hiro entered the tournament and fought his way to the top, defeating many opponents on his way towards the finals. He gained some local fame, as he represented his family's community, and was treated like a small-town celebrity for a time.

He won the tournament when the finals came, besting his opponent and bringing home the prize for his family. It seemed like the perfect end result, opening up the possibility of traveling around Japan as a big-name fighter, but his opponent had taken notice of an identifying mark on Hiro's wrist that branded him as a Zoanthrope. About a month after the tournament had ended and his family had moved into a new home, he was attacked by the loser of the finals and some anti-Zoanthrope thugs, who dragged him into an alleyway and viciously beat him. He tried to fight back, but was overwhelmed by the weapon-using criminals, who proceeded to violently scar him with a whip after he had been bested.

In his pain and rage, Hiro gave in and transformed to save himself from the thugs, none of which had shown any intention of ceasing the torture. He fought savagely and broke bones, something he had once promised to never do to someone intentionally. In the midst of the battle, he went a step too far and snapped the neck of the one who had led the attack, killing him. The others who were not too broken to move ran away, and while it had been in self-defense, the revelation of a Zoanthrope killing someone in the town would have brought danger to his family. He returned home, apologized profusely to his parents, and ran away that night.

Over the next part of his life, he wandered Japan aimlessly, breaking up fights when they started around him and drifting from place to place in the hopes of finding something, anything, he could do. He stopped using both his family name and his old nickname out of shame, instead going by "Hiro." Years were spent moving from place to place, scrounging up money where he could by doing simple jobs, until he eventually found himself in Kyoto.

Trouble caught up to him in the form of a gang of punks. They claimed ownership of the territory he was taking refuge in, and he was attacked after refusing to leave. While he made sure to contain himself, he fought them off and successfully drove them away, though they swore vengeance during their escape. Hiro never saw them again. Injured and tired, he intended to return to the alley he was sleeping at, but he was stopped by a worker of a noodle shop that had seen the altercation.

The shop's staff were thankful for him standing up to the thugs, who had been plaguing the area with petty crime and intimidation tactics. They got to know him, particularly the shop's owner, an elderly woman named Kyoko. She offered him free meals and a place to stay if he continued to keep the neighborhood safe, a deal to which he happily agreed. A few other petty gangs were pushed out of the area as they tried to establish territory in the previous gang's absence, driven off by Hiro's fighting skills. During this point, Hiro also got tattoos to hide his Beast Mark, which was kept a secret by the shop's staff.

When the gangs eventually stopped coming altogether, Hiro began to feel like his worth had run out. Though he was fully prepared to be sent away now that the gangs were gone, the shop's owner instead gave him a job as a chef. He wasn't great at it to begin with, as he was unskilled in the kitchen and found himself unhappy with his results. But with time and effort, Kyoko taught him how to cook properly, assuring him that he could help people in ways that didn't involve fighting. With the neighborhood now substantially safer, the shop became more lively, and the people who came to it were happy.

For years, Hiro worked at the shop, using his check to help pay rent so he could continue to live in the apartment above it. His physical skills were used for deliveries, and on many occasions, he's hand-delivered freshly cooked meals to people's doors on foot, aided by his athletic prowess. As he aged, life seemed like it could finally be peaceful again, though Kyoko passed away of age about 15 years after he had first come to the shop. Hiro became the new owner of the shop, and he's run it well to this day.

But not all could remain easy, and various human-Zoanthrope conflicts have caused tensions throughout the world to rise. The neighborhood Hiro lives in is out of the way and tightly knit, and some Zoanthropes have used it as a safe haven from the government. Some less-than-moral Zoanthropes, such as members of the ZLF, have recently been causing trouble the likes of which the community has never seen before. While at first reluctant, Hiro has once again taken it upon himself to fight for the safety of the neighborhood.

Current Story: Hiro now owns a small, but well-regarded noodle shop in an urban Kyoto neighborhood. During the day, he runs it as a normal shop where people can come for food, conversation, and friendly company. At night, he acts as a vigilante in his Zoanthrope form, fighting both criminals and corrupt police who put down others of his kind. He has made sure to keep his identities as separate as possible, and essentially lives a secret double life. He has sometimes considered becoming registered, but feels it would restrict his freedom and prevent him from protecting the people he cares for.

Fighting Abilities & Techniques

Fighting Style: Hiro's fighting style is a very professional, strategic close-combat style that emphasizes kicking in particular. He fights with a graceful, but powerful movement that is very well-aimed despite the quickness at which he can move, and though he uses kicks for his most powerful strikes, he also uses a variety of punches, chops, and elbow strikes for close combat as well, aiming to defeat and incapacitate enemies without leaving permanent damage to their bodies. While he can break limbs when he needs to, he much prefers to avoid leaving those sorts of debilitating injuries. There are a few grappling techniques, generally focused around tripping or leg-locking opponents.

Hiro carries no particular weapon of his own, but due to their prevalence in street gang crimes, he has become quite skilled at using pipes as makeshift clubs. He doesn't keep them after a fight ends, preferring to take them to a recycling plant for a few extra dollars the next day.

[Fighting Abilities]
[Spinning Axe Kick]
Description: Hiro jumps and does a vertical downward heel strike. In Zoanthrope form, he can hover and strike up to three times.
Weakness: No horizontal range at all, long recovery if missed.

[Roundhouse Thrust Kick]
Description: Hiro spins as if to do a roundhouse, then does a powerful thrusting forward kick instead. Range increases in Zoanthrope form.
Weakness: Shorter range, no vertical or horizontal range.

[Hover]
Description: In Zoanthrope form, Hiro uses his wings to hover above the ground and create a unique stance for fighting.
Weakness: Can't be used in human form.

[Flying Arrow Kick]
Description: Hiro jumps and kicks forward, launching a kick at an enemy with his full weight behind it. Speed and range increases in Zoanthrope form, especially if done from a hover.
Weakness: Heavy effectiveness drop in human form unless wallrunning or higher ground is used.

[Rapid Strike Fists]
Description: Hiro gets in close and punches the enemy rapidly in the torso and head. In Zoanthrope form, he uses all four arms and has more force due to chitin skin.
Weakness: There is a long recovery time after the move due to the amount of exertion it requires. If his first impact misses or is blocked, the attack is interrupted.

[Lightning Kicks]
Description: Hiro kicks very rapidly, up to twelve times in the span of a couple seconds. In Zoanthrope form, the range is increased due to his longer legs, and he finishes with a stronger kick to send the enemy flying away.
Weakness: Long recovery time after. Hiro switches legs to kick halfway through, at which point the move can be interrupted through a counter or block.

[Bullet Kick]
Description: With a single strong, forceful kick, Hiro sends the enemy flying away to put space between them. Does extra damage if enemy impacts a wall. Works identically in either form.
Weakness: The distance the move puts between Hiro and the enemy can put him at a disadvantage if they have ranged attack options, as Hiro cannot attack them from so far away.

[Locust Swarm]
Description: Hiro's Beast Drive. With an upwards kick, Hiro launches his enemy into the air, then jumps after them. Keeping himself aloft with his wings, he performs a series of rapid bicycle kicks and uppercuts to keep them aloft, then finishes with a kick similar to his Flying Arrow Kick to slam them into the ground.
Weakness: Hiro returns to human form after performing this move. If an enemy can manage to get out of range or block the bicycle kicks, it won't finish its combo.

[Holy Soldier]

@Eggs1. The weakness of Lightning Kicks needs to be better. If you are having him kick an enemy 12 times with no grapple or stun factors involved, then after the first few kicks, I am certain the enemy has a chance to avoid any further kicks.

2. Bullet Kicks weakness you could have said to all other attacks. How is a ranged weapon specifically relevant to this ability?

3. Can you rewrite the weakness of Rapid Strike Fists? It reads funny.

Those are all my comments.

[Eggs]

@Holy Soldier I'll touch those up right now.

[Holy Soldier]

@EggsHiro is approved. Sorry this took so long. I passed out asleep last night.

I'm going to go check on the Fox and Lizard to see if they're planning on finishing their CSes and moving them over.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of FerocityWhen you've made the edits, let me know and I'll look at your CS again to see if we can get it approved.

[Eggs]

@Holy Soldier Sick, thanks!

[The Harbinger of Ferocity]

@Holy Soldier, it has been edited.

[Holy Soldier]

@The Harbinger of FerocityHe's approved you can move him over.

So the Lizard and Fox are struggling with the CS because of it being "advanced" but they should have their CSes up by the end of your weekend, since my weekend is already over.

[Holy Soldier]

@EggsI plan to start Csaba off visiting Hiro's ramen shop.

[Eggs]

@Holy Soldier Sounds like a good first meetup!