@KatherinWinter I've put pointing out particular typo's by the wayside, because I usually get the intended point and figure you'll go through it eventually and fix them if you find them. I'll only point them out in future, if I don't get the intention. Hopefully that's okay and beneficial to us both?
"She swallowed nervously when Bastian chose to Dad and them."
What was that sentence supposed to be? (Dead end? Defend? Assuming maybe it was done through text to speech or something.)
I'm starting on my reply, just as I type this, so you should be able to read that by the end of tonight. ^-^