[OOC] Fate/Crimson Dusk

[vancexentan]

@Parallel Hearts I honestly forgot he already finished his master, and servant if he wants to swap go ahead, and no. I cut out a whole section with Leon which leads us to the meeting room with the Director. Leon's part is skippable but the room part still needs to be added in. I'm waiting for everyone to be set up before I finalize the IC.

[ItMeGritty]

Yeah I'm free to swap with whoever.

[Parallel Hearts]

Yeah I'm free to swap with whoever.

@ItMeGritty

If you wish to, we can do it.

[ItMeGritty]

The pact has been sealed.

Asura'a star shall surely burn brightly tonight.@Parallel Hearts

[vancexentan]

@ManyThings@Parallel Hearts@ItMeGritty Alright I decided that I'll just set up the IC you can start the IC responses if you desire.

@King Cosmos@Reflection@floodtalon All three of you still have no listed masters in the character section, or haven't made them please do so soon.

[Flood]

The Dark Word

Name: Asmar Sharir
Nicknames: The Dark Word
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Master of: Assassin
Command Seal Location: Back of Right Hand
Origin: Stare

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Personality: To call Asmar cruel would be inaccurate, yet only just slightly off the mark. The best word one could use to describe him would be efficient, it just so happens that sometimes efficiency and cruelty go hand in hand. He cares not for other humans and their petty problems, all that matters is his path to Akasha and the unlimited knowledge within.

Biography: Asmar was born to the Sharir family, the Second Owners of Riyadh, the capital city of Saudi Arabia. As such he had no want for money nor any of the mundanities that humanity has so desperately clawed after, focusing his efforts solely on the development of the family Magecraft of Curses and Blessings. At some point in his life he realized that to hole himself up in a workshop was inefficient to his work, so he began to travel the world to further develop his skills on those the Clocktower deemed heretics. This was the beginning of his career as a professional Enforcer, the youngest to achieve such a position in many years.

This brings us to today, where the Clocktower has placed Sealing Designations on the entire Grey family and ordered Asmar to annihilate them with prejudice. Simply another bloody job, one which he will use to get ever closer to Akasha.

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Magecraft Section:

School of Magecraft: Curses and Blessings

Skills/Spells List: Evil Eye: A curse from merely staring at another with ill intent, this curse has enough mana poured into it to cause physical harm and induce madness.

Curse of the Shayatin 5/day: Let the Shayatin embrace you, obscuring your journey and drawing you ever further into Jahannam. A simple point towards the target binds them for up to five seconds, snakes of red flame manifesting around them and preventing movement.

Blessing of the Wind 3/day: With the wind at your back, may your journey be ever swift. Increases the Agility of target by one rank for up to two minutes.

Blessing of the Djinn 3/day: With the mighty djinn at your call, may your journey be ever fortunate. Increases the Luck of target by one rank for up to two minutes.

Blessing of the Sands 3/day: Let your body be as stalwart and boundless as the sands, let no illness claim you. Increases the Endurance of target by one rank for up to two minutes.

Blessing of the Ahriman 3/day: Let the great demon Ahriman bless you with unending strength to crush your foes beneath your heel. Increases the Strength of target by one rank for up to two minutes.

Evil Tongue 1/day: There is great power in one's words, to verbally wish death upon someone is one of the greatest sins one can commit. Should the target hear these evil words, their heart shall surely stop. Requires a Luck check to circumvent, however most humans don't even possess the base E ranked luck that Servants have.

Amount of Magecraft Mana: B

[vancexentan]

@floodtalon I've been very lenient when it comes to characters so far however one paragraph for a character is too small. It needs more details on his past. Feats, his story up onto this point, and hardships are examples if it helps.

[ItMeGritty]

Their biography is around the same length as my master's.

If the backstory fit you must acquit.

[vancexentan]

I'm also the GM and I can reassert myself and make you write more too. This isn't about Talon in specific I've been much easier than I usually am on people but at this point I feel like people are putting less in than usual. Reflection, Manythings, and Cosmo can all tell you I've made players do much more. The personality I'm putting section in the back seat but I haven't always done that and bios allow me to assess how to work a character, and judge a person's writing level. Leon was written in a single day and has only seen minor edited for changes in plots he's been in.

[Parallel Hearts]

Not that I'm trying to discuss the way you do things or anything like this but, writing in a concise way—using only as many words as needed—requires far more skill than you are giving us credit for.

Even on this same franchise, which isn't known for being brief (or simple), almost always everything you need to know about a character that's not related to their abilities—backstory, personality, etc.—can be summed in a single paragraph as we see across the many entries of it.

It's only natural that some people would try to write in a way that feels like the source material we are all sharing, is it not?

[Flood]

@vancexentan

You say its not about me in specific but you've also put the most attention on me throughout my entire application process despite the fact that I've made an absolute C tier Servant. You complained about the fact that I wrote out a full bio for Arsene when you just wanted me to post a Wikipedia link to his page and now you're complaining that I'm not writing enough and then alluding to this idea that I have to write a full 6 paragraphs about a character just to be worthy of your RP?

I'm not entirely sure what you're problem is with me specifically, but my character's backstory is fine. What you're asking me to do is write three paragraphs of fluff about a character who doesn't have an important past or legendary deeds whispered about through the Clocktower. They're just an above average Enforcer who's doing their job. This is the defining moment for said character. This is the legendary deed that will be whispered about throughout the Clocktower. Forgive me if I don't have a lot to say about this character's backstory, they don't really have one. They're a guy who was born in a rich family, got bored of sitting around all day and decided to test their work in the field. That's the backstory. Honestly, this is more backstory then most actual Maguses in the Fate universe even get, they're all mostly the same. They're just a bunch of researchers who live ordinary lives, not every Magus has some extra tragic backstory or life event defining who they are.

Listen man, I'm not trying to be obtuse or frustrated, but it's getting hard to not be frustrated when at every turn of the application process you've made it abundantly clear that you don't like any of my ideas. Maybe you want me to leave and that's why you're being so passive aggressive, I genuinely have no idea, I'm not a mind reader. But I'm not writing 3 paragraphs of fluff about what my Magus eats for breakfast.

[vancexentan]

I'm not intending to be passive aggressive if that's what you think it is. If Gritty, Reflection, or anyone else in this roleplay was in your spot I would've given them the same response. The servants link is what I wanted from everyone, and my gm'ing has been spotty. Reflection seems to be vouching for your again, and so is parallel, and gritty. So I'll concede that I may be in the wrong here and pass the character on merit that I feel I may being unfair to you. I will apologize for the way I've apparently been treating you specifically. I sincerely do. I do not mean to now, or ever, single out a person to slight them. It is up to if you even care to accept my apology and stay, or if you wish to leave because of my attitude towards you unintentional though it may be.

This is, and has always meant to be a high casual roleplay. I don't play advanced because I don't always consistently pop two paragraphs out per post. All I want is effort to be put into characters that is all.

[Reflection]

Santa Claus is Coming to Town

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Name: Vladimir Moroz
Nicknames: The Count of Russia
Age: 45
Gender: Male
Master of: Caster
Command Seal Location: His left Hand
Origin: Love
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Personality: Obsession. A blinding obsession boarding on an addiction. It is a flaw, brutal, and unfixed. It is a kind of mentality that has a man turn to a single point, and chase it, ignoring the hypocrisy, or the much better options around him. But such a man is not heartless. Just obsessive, and through that, self-destructive. His tendency to get lost in his work has ruined his personal relationships with others, and it is difficult for him to open up to others.
Outside of his obsessions though, he is a relatively kind, if cruel man. He is ruthless in his efficiency, and sees little reason to spare others pain and suffering if they defy him. It is not evil, it is just the way the world works. People must suffer if they transgress their boundaries for that is the way of things. Yes, even him.

Biography: Ded Moroz, the man the Russians may know as 'Father Christmas.' Sometimes referred to as a demon, long before the word meant something sour. Something evil. He was a hero who fought Baba Yaga, healed the sick, and created a granddaughter from snow. That is the story, and the legend of the Moroz family.
The family lives in Veliky Ustyug, the homeplace of Ded Moroz. He was a wizard of the winter times, who would trek through the snow to bring gifts on the day of New Years. His legend is ingrained into Slavic folktales, and his descendents have followed suit. For some of them, they keep the tradition alive. Putting on a red suit, and traveling out into the cold winters. Placing gifts down chimneys, and leaving before they can be found. Some over the generations have even made claim to using their magic to keep the hag Baba Yaga trapped in her home. Performing the ritual required once a month.
But Vladimir, the latest in a long line of Moroz’s is an addict to the old ways. As if it’s an addiction, and he drinks from it regularly.
A member of the mage association, he was heralded as a genius at a young age. He proved his talents in early competitions, and married at the age of 23. If you looked at him from the outside you’d say he was an example of a perfect man. Loved, talented, and ingenious. Even teaching the next generation of mages. But, that is an outsider’s perspective.
In reality, his research became a dead end. And his obsession to solve the problem cost him everything. There would be weeks, approaching months where he wouldn’t leave his workshop. Ignoring his wife and child who became aware of his growing instability. In a shocking turn, they left him, leaving him to his obsession and his ever growing madness. He became cruel to his students, ruthless, and eventually, he left his role as a teacher, so that he could focus entirely on his dead end work.
It seems... Even a man on the end of his ropes can find something to hope for. In this Grail War.

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Magecraft Section:

School of Magecraft: Russian Witchcraft

Skills/Spells List:
- Snegurochka 1: The original, if it can be called that. A doll of snow that is without a doubt, one made by Dez Moroz, but may not be the true original spoken of in stories. This snow girl has been passed from member to member of the Moroz family, and is considered without a doubt the most powerful doll of its kind. It can transform it’s limbs and body into razor sharp blades, that slice through stone and rock like a knife through butter. Or to move around like fine snow. This creation is one of the greatest mystic codes of the Moroz family, and some claim it was made using snow from the ice age. A mystery that makes it nigh invulnerable to anything but the strongest of fires. As it is not a traditional spell, but rather a construct, it can be considered to have 'unlimited uses.' Due to this though, the mana required to help maintain the snowdoll in active combat makes it impossible to use any other spell in the process.
- Russian Alchemy: An alchemy that finds itself less in the making of precious metals, and more in the making of life. An alchemy more fundamental in creating homunculi, or poisonous cocktails than in turning coal to gold. Poisons, acids, things that kill. Liquids that preserve the body, or are designed to undo pain.
- Golem Craft: An advancement of the knowledge gathered through familiarcraft. It is the basis of the Snegurochka, and thus the basis of his greatest strength. It is the understanding of Golemcraft that allowed his ancestor Dez Moroz to create the original Snegurochka. It is possible for other golems to be made using other materials, but there is a clear preference for those of the Snegurochka.

Amount of Magecraft Mana: C

Other: His magic is primarily about creating and using items. As such, his only offensive magic tends to be his snowdoll. Which is an autonomous doll. So spell slots would be useless.

[vancexentan]

Alright I don't see any issues with the character. The mage association may find it an issue that he had an history of addiction but he's got enough talent for them to overlook it.

[vancexentan]

Alright since no one really has anything to say since that squabble happened besides Reflection how about I ask if anyone's going to be posting their opening soon?

[ManyThings]

Yeah, on my way.

[Reflection]

I'll post my openner soon.

[vancexentan]

Alright good to know. Hopefully we can get past the first fight this time. I'm splitting Anderson off from the group (for the first fight). I can also throw Monica into Anderson's group as well.

[ManyThings]

Smaller groups are good, I think. You almost never see an entire faction all running right alongside each other.

[vancexentan]

True enough but after last time I feel like Anderson, and his berserker to some extent but Nightengale was the resident healer, made the fight feel too clustered.