Rewriting, Reviewing, and Then Some

[Majoraa]

This is just a random idea I had for a while, but I wanted to make it to where any one of you guys can pitch in as well. This might work out, or it might not, I dunno.

Anyways, here you can share your thoughts on certain medias and/or how you would rewrite how certain scenes would play out, or just the whole story in general. Pick ya poison.

One conditon though, im aware some of the threads in Off-Topic get derailed to being locked, so I ask that you dont butt heads with each other, respect da opinions, and remember that this is just a thread for creativity, not political debate or whatever.

That being said, just have fun, 'kay?

[Carlyle]

Let's start off with an easy one. HBO's Game of Thrones, specifically the Long Night episode.

My Hider

This whole episode is full of all sorts of problems. It looked cool, but in a military sense, especially with all the capable commanders there, it was awful. Their cavalry should've been on a flanking position or dismounted behind the walls instead of charging alone into the enemy, which in turn only feed their ranks. Same goes for the Unsullied, who probably should've manned the walls, and all those catapults/trebuchets they built. If they were pressed for time, why would they leave all that siege equipment they had to spend time building on the front lines instead of behind the walls where it would at least be safe to use until the dead breached the walls?

There was also that pitiful trench, which they could've dug deeper and spiked it with dragon glass or at least sharp sticks to slow down the enemy, but even then they could've spared some to tip the edges. Plus it would've caused more dead to burn up when the trench was lit, surely.

I'd also complain about the crypt scene, which should've honestly been left out. Yes, it's cool and adds to the horror and drama, but are you seriously going to tell me that rotting corpses that have been there for hundreds, if not thousands of years are capable of punching through thick stone? It made no logical sense.

[Majoraa]

So since this doesnt seem to be picking up much, ill just fill in the blanks with a post or two of my weird ramblings.

The ending of the Little Mermaid. Not the Disney version, the Brothers Grimm one. Where Ariel dies cause she's too much of a wuss to kill the prince. I know it seems off trying to rewrite a part of one of the well-know fairy-tales, but hey, if Didney can do it, why not?

Honestly, instead of her comitting suicide, maybe she could have been given a better motive to kill her feelings for him, AND THEN him? Or find a loophole so she can leave him alone and continue living as a human? I get that she does get a second chance in the end, but they couldve given an alternate ending, right?

Dont take this the wrong way, im just bored. '-'

[Majoraa]

Eh, probably should've made this sort of thread in the gallery...

[Spambot]

I can pose a few cases come this evening if I get to it, at least at some point in the next few days. Nothing too particular, just discussion food.

[Spambot]

Each thing will be pretty short, to be expanded if it's desired.

Game of Thrones

You saw that one coming, didn't ya.

I'm going to contradict the first reply and say that the revisions would be well suited starting at Season 7 in general, optimally retuning that starts at Season 5 and works with Season 6, but especially change up the framework at 7. It's not that I necessarily had something against the path, rather, the season being short. This was the first step to downfall, the lack of time put into the details, the handwaved movements from one region to another. Halt the season, spread it out, use the gummy goodness types of storytelling to fill in that made the first four seasons sell in the first place, continue up to the point of S8E3.

S8E3 I would remove entirely in favor of stretching it and all subsequent events over two more seasons, with the revised show ending in Season 10, taking advantage of the liberally given resources to the directors to flesh out character arcs and plot points on a fairly individual basis - giving each character something of a wrapup, even if it isn't the end of them. "The Long Night" features the greatest macguffin known to Westeros, and it was halted in a single siege on the first real battle below the wall. No. They need impact, and I would make it further down the path.

The sequences of 4-6 are their own nightmare of terrible pacing and design, and I can get into those specifically if desired. Otherwise I would neuter that entire stream of events, possibly taking a few of them and rewriting them to have a bit more plot cohesion into a much wider picture. I haven't put much thought in what an S7/8/9/10 would look like, so on elaboration I'd only be able to speak in abstracts. I'm not paid for such a revision, so I don't feel obliged to go all the way. What I do know is if I was in that position, I'd stretch out events, put a bit more focus on individual stories, perhaps explore some war weariness, and in creating outlines, attempt to construct the story by reasonable character decisions based on precedence, not by a desire to simply reach the ending. Character driven first, then see where the ending can be worked in, much to be figured out in abstract before even moving on with the seasons. At the starting point of S7, 8 should be roughly figured out and 9 in abstract, with 10 being on the radar to avoid the curse of endlessness that completely operating character first would inflict.

Starcraft 2

SC2 was very... bright, and the impact, not well supported. WoL would be reviewed and redone for better alternating branches in player decision making and less 'dur' in the portrayal of Mengsk and his media. I believe it was said that Raynor was planned to have more conflict, a drinking problem, so on that would introduce real struggle to the protagonist, something that was deliberately taken out for being too dark or something. Fuck that, did they not create SC1 and Brood War? There was a formula there that I would continue.

HotS at the very least would have adjustments to make Kerrigan appear less strictly bipolar and more legitimately conflicted, with better progression into her zerg-like attributes and perhaps an effort to have the player somewhat decide if the descent is a struggle or something she feeds at a greater cost of her humanity, with advantages and disadvantages coming from either approach. This would be complicated to implement, of course.

LOTV did an okay job, but built on roots per above that would mean a lot of its tone and details would be shifted accordingly. Among other things I've never been impressed with the Hybrid. Simply, they lack impact, and I would intend to make them straight up more threatening. Two classes - the weaker ones that are minor blends, and serious monstrosities that would individually be incredible threats... worthy of dueling a player-managed Kerrigan per the last campaign. There's a lot of potential that was unfortunately missed.

The epilogue was straight up botched, and I think the above gives some insight in how I'd approach it, though I could elaborate if desired. This is one field I have thought of extensively.

Diablo 3

Well, this one I can put simply. More competent antagonists that don't tell you all their plans and reduce the raw boundless power of the protagonist. A shameful display from a series containing D1 and even D2's tone as the standard till then. D4 seems to be taking a look back in that direction.

[Majoraa]

Wow. He actually got banned. Guess i'm going to an opera then.

Back on topic,

Any thoughts on Prodigal Son?