[OOC] Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of the Void

[KaBling]

Don't be offended, but would you mind if we helped you with your English? You know, now only would it benefit you here, but in the outside world as well.

Post no... 1001.

[Lugia]

And here comes post number 1002.
Uh... wait, is everyone waiting on me again?

[KaBling]

I think so.

[Evanist]

Kabling, I was editing from ipad this morning, and I was rushing to write down my post last time...

And seriously, it is really hard for me to be perfect with english. So ya.... It takes time.

[KaBling]

That's not what I mean.

You're gonna be here for the next year or so, so why not? It's a good time to practice.

[Evanist]

I guess... still.... it will take time to get use to... it is not something easy to perfect.

[a00000000000]

-Horrible App was deleted-

[Lugia]

I dunno... that bio is a little short and not very descriptive. Sure, it's a level one pokemon....
but... I dunno... I'd have to be convinced to accept this app by Kabling, and I'm somewhat sure he wouldn't like this app either.

[a00000000000]

I apologize if I'm not to good at this, I've only been doing Free Roleplayes, and I decided to try to give a Casual Roleplay a try.
I edit it, though

[KaBling]

So, you want to appeal to my slime fetish to get in?

(I'm kidding about that... right?)

Anyway... denied. Because, technically, your character is EVERY Pokemon species permanently, even legendaries for goodness sake (which will just get worse, considering the character [REDACTED] is a [REDACTED]). This also probably copies move sets as well.

Bio is pretty short, and appearance is rather confusing (every colour = rainbow). Level is pretty low, despite the fact that your character can shapeshift into stronger Pokemon. Name also sounds generic, although that in itself should not be able to deny your app. There's also an inconsistency in your bio and differences section; it states in the bio that he could memorise lower-level Pokemon, whereas higher-level Pokemon are remembered in the differences section.

[a00000000000]

well, shiz

Can I make a new app?

[KaBling]

Who said you couldn't?

[a00000000000]

I don't know

[Lugia]

Huh. I still don't think that's quite acceptable...
one attack from a minimum-leveled beedril should be enough to one-shot a level one ditto. Basically, you wouldn't be walking away from that.

[a00000000000]

-deleted denied app-

[Sumable]

I'm not either of the people that accept apps, but i know that that bio is still a little too short. If you remove the spaces to separate paragraphs...

Tyrone was born and raised in the Grasslands. Tyrone lived in a village with all his fellow drowzee, and he loved it. But one day, their leader became corrupted with power. He turned the village into a prison, and Tyrone hated it. Their leader was named Buz, and he was a power-hungry Hypno. The power of leading the entire village overtook him, and he became corrupted. He started hitting everybody and starving them, while he sat in his hut, eating away at piles of dreams. Some people tried to rebel against Buz, but he would quickly hypnotize them. During hunts, Tyrone was sometimes able to keep some dreams for himself, so that he wouldn't starve to death. He was careful, though. If Buz caught him, he would probably be killed. One night, Tyrone was up late thinking. He thought to himself, and in the morning he decided he was going to run away to a city and join a guild. He told his parents and they were upset, but they knew that he should do it while he still could. So, while Buz was off in a hunt, he hid and stayed home, and he left the village forever. When he left the village and got far enough away where Buz wouldn't be able to catch up to him, he felt regret, but he presisted, and marched on towards the city.

it's shorter than your previous bio.

Bobby's life started one day when a Ditto decided to create another Ditto. So it began multiplying it's cells, until Bobby was created and detached from the Ditto. When Blobby detached from the Ditto, Blobby smiled at life. It was a nice place. Blobby started jiggling around, and almost walked straight into an angry Treecko. Over the next few weeks of it's life, the Ditto decided to stay and raise Blobby, at least until he could make it on his own. A few days into life, Blobby was taking a walk through the forst, getting to know the place, when he came upon a Beedrill. It was out and about, but seemed angry. Mad at something. He wiggled over to the Beedrill. "Hello! You seem upset." he said to it. The Beedrill thought Blobby was a threat, so it turned around and started stabbing him. "Ok, then. I see you are too upset to talk, right now. Byebye." So Blobby started jiggling away, with beedrill stabbing at him. The Ditto that was raising him found him being stabbed by the Beedrill, so the Ditto Transformed into the Beedrill and scared it off. The stabs hurt, but Blobby was content. One day, while sitting and staring at the sun, a Caterpie had come up to him and told him that in the city, they had things called 'guilds' and once the Caterpee told Blobby what guilds were, Blobby started thinking. This thinking made him decided that he wanted to go to a city and join a guild. So, he told the Ditto, and they said their goodbyes. Blobby walked out of the woods, and began searching for the nearest city.

[Lugia]

Come on, you could at least try to give a longer bio. Not just longer, but more descriptive, as well. Heck, I pretty much wrote an entire paragraph (one that's about as long as either of your current app's bios) about one day in Spruce's bio... I'm sure you can pull off making a decent app.

[KaBling]

Currently in a Lugia-type situation.

...

LEAVE ME ALONE WITH MY SPACE PIRATES AND ZOMBIES!

Anyway... now to assess the new app: Okay. Denied once more, because not only your character WILL die as a level 1 Pokemon, but your previous bio was longer, there's an awful lot of moves for a level 1 Drowzee (even if he is partially a ghost-type), and you cannot just make him a ghost-type Drowzee without even explaining it.

So anyway, since my earlier problem of imagination wasn't solved earlier, I still can't post IC. Are you really sure you want to reserve an entire floor for mission boards? That's pretty inefficient, even in the PMD world.

[Lugia]

Unfortunately, that's how it is in the games. There are usually a lot of teams gathered around the boards, and there is also usually some sort of pokemon that will allow you to call on other teammates (function removed, as there's no use... teams aren't restricted to four pokemon while entering dungeons in this RP.)

[Sumable]

Yeah, when I saw that pretty much every sentence was a paragraph I kinda wanted to see how long it really was.