[OOC] Final Fantasy: Awakened Souls

[Muttonhawk]

Ayleth said
Honest opinion: How is my post length and quality? CC wanted/welcome.

Too late, you're going to be criticized >:) . I don't have any Canadian Club on me, but I'll say that your posts haven't been too bad as far as I've seen.

It's a little difficult to recommend things for you to do because most of what I can think of might conflict with what you had in mind for your character. So, yeah, let me know if I'm saying something wrong. I'll just stick to a couple of small tips.

I understand it might just be part of your character's personality, but Laecora's come off as very calm despite the weird circumstances that our characters have been thrown into. It might just be your character being quiet in the first place though. If you would like a little extra substance, try getting her to try some more subtle body language. Facial expressions, shifts in stance, eyes, mouth, hands, that kind of thing. Try throwing in a splash of detail in how your character's tone of voice is as well. It'll help to understand what your character is thinking and feeling without an internal monologue, (though those aren't bad either). If you're unsure, put yourself in her shoes and think of how you would move and talk, then try to get into your character's mindset think of what she would do.

Honestly, I don't think you need to worry about your post length. Most of the detail you've given has been on par with everyone else, and I've not felt that any of your posts were too dense either. You might get away with a leetle more in the way of your character's reaction to certain things, but other than that, it's fine. To most people, the amount of detail in a post is down to personal preference anyway.

Closing statement: Good jorb.

(Just tell me if I write something silly or if I'm using commas too much and we'll call it even.)

EDIT: It looks like I've been ninja'd by BlazeGamma. His post is on the previous page if anyone missed it.

[Shurikai]

Muttonhawk said
EDIT: It looks like I've been ninja'd by BlazeGamma. His post is on the previous page if anyone missed it.

I see nothing of this.

I don't see what's wrong with the strikes text. Maybe a bit of rewording is all it needs.
Or replace it with the body language Muttonhawk was talking about. Its up to you.

[CrimsonWarrior55]

I'm thinking about starting my very first RP. The idea I have is roughly something like this:

Hundreds of years ago, there was a massive battle. Not one warrior or civilian involved survived. However, every person who died had their soul imprisoned inside an object. Doesn't matter what the object was, from pieces of armor to swords to children's toys to simple rocks. These Artifacts ended up scattered about the globe. Every so often, one is discovered and eventually awakened. When awoken, they bind themselves to the nearest person and grant them various abilities. These can range from psychokinesis to flight to super strength. The downside is that if an Artifact is destroyed, so is the Host. These powers and abilities are used at the discretion of the Host, no matter how the Artifact feels about it. (Huh? Oh, right, the Artifacts are sentient. They can talk to their Host and each other). This tends to bring out the best... and worst in the Host.

There's some other stuff involved, but I can work it out if I decide to go through with it. Right now, I just want some feedback. I know it kinda sucks, but I made the whole thing up on a walk around the block. It all started with the idea of a Psychic Blind Swordsman inspired by Kenshi from Mortal Kombat.

[Blaze Gamma]

You have plenty of time to fine tune it, but I suggest you work on stepping up your worldbuilding/GMing chops before you start it up.

[CrimsonWarrior55]

Defiantly my GM chops, but I'm getting some world-building tips from a fellow RPer on another RP I'm in.

[Silver Carrot]

I've always wanted to start my own RP. I can GM, but I can't worldbuild.

I actually started a free RP on the old guild years ago. It didn't last very long.

[Little_ninja]

I am thinking of starting my own RP too actually, but not right now, when I have a bit more time.

I get world building is, although I am probably no good at it, but what is a GM chop?

[Muttonhawk]

If you've got <any activity> chops, you know your stuff with that activity.

[Little_ninja]

So, it just means, you know what you are doing as a GM in this case? Like know your role, and what you need to do?

[CrimsonWarrior55]

Exactly. I'm not what you'd call the leadership type, so that's what I've got to work on. But if I get inspired, I take off like a Bullet.

[Muttonhawk]

Do Krinos or BlazeGamma have anything brewing, or should I just post?

[Krinos Solstice]

I have nothing brewing for a post at the moment, so I'm good with you posting, not sure what's up with Blaze though.

[Muttonhawk]

Mkay, I have a couple of questions for you, Blazey. Firstly, what is BlizzardCharge? And when are we going to be meeting up with everyone else?

[CrimsonWarrior55]

I know I'm not Blaze, but BlizzardCharge would imbue your weapon with Blizzard (I think), and I know the answer to the last question, but I don't know if it's a spoiler or not.

[Shurikai]

It imbues the weapon with the ice element, and yes, thats a spoiler.

[CrimsonWarrior55]

According to Blazey, we handled that perfectly, Shurikai.

[Shurikai]

Lol.

[Little_ninja]

Guys, just something to say. I will be away for a couple of days. Exams. T.T

[Little_ninja]

I am back at the moment.
It seems almost nothing happened except one post by Mutton happened while I was gone, and I am still post blocked.

[Muttonhawk]

Well, BlazeGamma mentioned that he'll have more reliable computer access in a couple of days. Shurikai is probably waiting for others. Don't know about Crim, Krinos, or Silver Carrot.