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Inspired by the award winning author Yumi Tamura and her equally award winning manga 7 Seeds about the eventual end of humanity and the few survivors continue to battle against the forces of nature I present to you, dear reader, my story, the 13 Colonies. The 13 Colonies follows the same premise as that of the amazing manga that i used as inspiration.



This RP is reserved for FiroIV and Raid, and their characters, members of Team Georgia.
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Team Georgia Arc 1 - Texas Swamp Forest.

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Happy fourth of July. Hope you enjoyed the holiday..if ya celebrate of course.
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thanks, not really happy, but thanks.

Anyway i could get to working on this this weekend because of personal issues, but it'll be Monday again tomorrow so il start back with normal sched again.
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No worries. Hopefully everything smooths out for you.
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I finished with the initial post, but im looking over it now to check for errors. I'll have it up tonight.
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POSTED

For now I"ll stick mostly to Maddie since she still has to explain stuff.

So team blue includes, Maddie, Deepti, Simon, and Saito, team red include's Alex, Cherry, Arrios, and Summer.
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Got it. I'll have a post up in before the weekend. :) Looking forward to finally getting this off the ground.
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Coolio, just a reminder none of them still has no idea of what's happened to them unless they've been told by their parents moments before being taken away.
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Sounds like a fun challenge! :)
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Well. I posted. I hope the added details like the shirts and dress is acceptable. Are they going to just drift to land? Does Maddie know where they landed?
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Maddie knows that their team was designates to land just south of the Texas shoreline so she knows that their best bet is to go north west. Using this knowledge they will head in that direction and reach land. In the event that they don't they will still reach land one way or the other because local winds that come from the main land create winds that make wind waves that allow for anything that floats to wash up in the coastline, and even further ocean currents naturally go along most great land masses that even if their raft gets carried away by one they'll be close enough to paddle to shore.

As for where in the map exactly they'll land you can pick a place in map I made for the Texas. For this first story arc our goal is to get them to non swampy area, in other words, mainland. Realistically speaking walking from the coast of Texas, let's say, Corpus Christi to San Antonio (both line up in the map of Texas i have up there) would take two and a half days without stop. i did the math and If we factor in the fact that there's no road, they have to make stops, unfamiliar territory, and external variables it will take them possibly a week before they can leave the swamp area, which should be a good enough time for one arc.

By the way there are oars on each side of the raft, but i forgot about it in my last post. As for the look of their raft it looks kind of likethis, but around this thing's size albeit shorter. All of it is made of made of a colored plastic rubber like synthetic material that's both durable, solid, but light and allows them to float on the sea's effortlessly. Surrounding the entire thing and underneath the raft are rope floats that keep the raft steady and floating, and the same goes for the rope that keeps the two rafts together.
Honestly, I think i should have worked on a better way for them to get started in the world. I don't mean the intro, but with the whole aircraft shuttle thing, but it was either that or have them asleep underwater in some kind of rising machine, which would have limited all teams to start by the coast and make their way inland, but that would have limited exploration and environment types. What do you think? Is the whole aircraft shuttle thing and being in space kind of dorky? I mean we're not gonna change it, but coming from a reader's perspective what do you think?

Sorry about the above I've just been organizing my writing and that thinking came up.
EDIT: So I jut finished reading you post. Lovely and already in character, I'm jealous, it usually takes a good few pots before I get the hang of my guys. Also the fact that they're wearing Georigia shots kind of make me happy.

Also they all have their own rooms with one bed for privacy. If that's not what it read like from when I wrote it I apologize. Basically the dome has an external shell which is thin and acts as a cover,and inside is a smaller dome that's cut four ways like a pizza. Each room has one skewing pod and there stuff. If I wasn't clear anout it when then I'm vey sorry. It's all my fault. Don't worry though you don't need to change anything it's just for the future since theyll be spending some time in this rather large raft. All this really means is that I still need to work on my writing.
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I agree with the time line; it's realistic. (I have a tendency to get riled up when people think hiking is super easy and doing 25 miles in one day takes only a few hours--a lot of t.v shows/movies have a tendency to do this.)

Don't worry about the lack of description with the raft! It's hard to avoid information dumps sometimes, but you've been balancing your writing well. (So, the pods are inside the dome, btw?) Besides this is a test run, anyways. Things will work themselves out.

As for having the survivors in space, I think it makes sense. Because the scientists might not be able to predict everything that will occur when the meteors hit earth, so they would want to put the teams in a place where they would be the most secure and stable. Thus in orbit. Something to consider, though is maybe the guide not waking the other occupants up until they're closer to land? But that's just something for a later time/group to worry about. It helps cut out the random floating time and allows the characters to be distracted by other things rather then themselves in a boat in the open sea. Ya get what I mean?

Happy you like the t-shirt touch. :) It's amazing what getting matching t-shirt for a group will do! Have you ever heard of character interrogation? It's essentially what you did in the CS where you had the questions for the characters to answer. I find doing a few sessions of just dialogue like that really helps me understand my characters and flesh them out without having to add a shit ton to their history or something like that.

Happy writing. :)
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Thanks for the kind words.
My weekends tend to be busy so I tend to not be able to post, but thankfully it's over. Tomorrow is Monday again so I'll be glad to begin working again.
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It sounds as if you don't like weekends. And sounds cool. I look forward to your post.
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I really don't. During the weekends my whole family is here and while I love them it becomes suffocating when everyone's here all the time.
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Yupp. Family has a tendency to do that. I have a pretty large one and they don't really understand the whole writing thing. I tend not to get any writing done when they're around because they make me feel so damned guilty about it.
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I'm the same.
Anyway I posted for Simon. Summer and alex are both coming next in the same post. Simon and Maddie are easier for me to understand since I'm the logical and patient type, but Alex and Summer aren't really like that so It's kind of hard for me to move them quickly.

By the way as you can see Simon is a total sap.
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