One last thing
@Franxx, nice first post! A couple of tricks to make it easier is that we usually use first person present tense for actions, which we’ve found helps keeps the flow going. So something like
Hey, who are all of you??
*The girl with auburn hair said to the strangers in front of her*
would end up feeling more real and impactful if written like
Hey, who are all of you??
*Brushes my auburn hair behind my ear, wariness scribbled across my face*
The second example ends up bringing the character to life, and feels like we’re personally interacting with them rather than reading about what they did.
Again though, nice job hopping in!