[OOC] Myriad Reality

[Zeal]

LegendBegins said
Because David drinks one type of tea regularly. =P

Okie then.

[Host]

Zeal said
Okie then.

It's too late to think.

Ps. Makoda Magica is weird.

[LegendBegins]

Sorry, was eating.

[Heroic]

Ollo

[whizzball1]

Think you could look this over? http://www.fimfiction.net/chapter/619942 It's not done, obviously, but still. Clunky language is easier to find in shorter intervals. If anything seems unrealistic, if language is boring, you know, normal editing stuff.

EDIT: BTW, the unpublished view password is PerfectlyNormalKnife.

[whizzball1]

Heroic said
Ollo

hiiiii

[Host]

Heroic said
Ollo

Hiya.

whizzball1 said
Think you could look this over? It's not done, obviously, but still. Clunky language is easier to find in shorter intervals. If anything seems unrealistic, if language is boring, you know, normal editing stuff.EDIT: BTW, the unpublished view password is PerfectlyNormalKnife.

Why that password?

[Host]

Okay. So there was a typo. "The look on DIamond's face" as opposed to "Diamond's."
And I felt that the second "mind was muddled" was a little redundant. Although, It wasn't really clear how the knife played to the magic, and I can only assume the dark magic was the cause of the attitude.

[whizzball1]

Host said
Okay. So there was a typo. "The look on DIamond's face" as opposed to "Diamond's."And I felt that the second "mind was muddled" was a little redundant. Although, It wasn't really clear how the knife played to the magic, and I can only assume the dark magic was the cause of the attitude.

It wasn't dark magic, actually.

but ah may have accidentally mixed myself up and put the stuff for an aura colour changer too.”

Which attitude? What do you mean by the knife played to the magic?

[Host]

whizzball1 said
It wasn't dark magic, actually.Which attitude? What do you mean by the knife played to the magic?

The story makes it seem like the knife changed something, and I thought what Applebloom said was a bluff. And she seemed really disrespectful.

[whizzball1]

Host said
The story makes it seem like the knife changed something, and I thought what Applebloom said was a bluff. And she seemed really disrespectful.

I'm not trying to project the image that the knife is changing anything, though. I guess I'll have to change a few responses. What quotes seemed disrespectful?

[Host]

whizzball1 said
I'm not trying to project the image that the knife is changing anything, though. I guess I'll have to change a few responses. What quotes seemed disrespectful?

Her talking to Cheerilee?

[whizzball1]

Host said
Her talking to Cheerilee?

The only thing AB said to Cheerilee was why Sweetie's magic aura was black.

[Host]

whizzball1 said
The only thing AB said to Cheerilee was why Sweetie's magic aura was black.

No, what Scootaloo said.

[whizzball1]

Host said
No, what Scootaloo said.

Oh, that was to Sweetie Belle. Terrible at magic. The blunt way she said it is normal to the way I've seen her act in the show. What do you think?

[Host]

whizzball1 said
Oh, that was to Sweetie Belle. Terrible at magic. The blunt way she said it is normal to the way I've seen her act in the show. What do you think?

Oh, alright. It's was pretty well written.

[whizzball1]

Host said
Oh, alright. It's was pretty well written.

:D I had a lot of experience back when I was pony roleplaying. Eventually I decided to try my hand at actual writing (which as it turns out is obviously nearly exactly the same).

[Host]

whizzball1 said
:D I had a lot of experience back when I was pony roleplaying. Eventually I decided to try my hand at actual writing (which as it turns out is obviously nearly exactly the same).

Well I would hope so.

[whizzball1]

Host said
Well I would hope so.

Heh, yeah. So I'll be writing more soon.

[Host]

whizzball1 said
Heh, yeah. So I'll be writing more soon.

Alright. At least you enjoy that.