Well, telling people to forget that a murder happened right in their backyard when the killer is still at large generally won't go over well.
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Red rum?
No, I said Shrek is love, Shrek is life.
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Post incoming later tonight.
So, hey. Jazzy. Mind if Meatman says hello to Killer Croc?
(Holy fuck that sounds so wrong Jesus Christ I'm sorry someone get me a gun.)
(Holy fuck that sounds so wrong Jesus Christ I'm sorry someone get me a gun.)
By all means. Any interaction is welcome.
Hey Paingodsson,
We have a few problems with your characters.
First off, he's really heavy for a person his height and muscle structure. Like, really heavy, I'd go as far as to describe him as being fat. Because he's about fifty pounds more than what I'd expect of a basketball player of his height and build to be. 160, sure, that's fine. 210+? The see you rollin'. Literally.
Second off, I still have no idea what he looks like. I'd recommend reviewing any of Allen's sheets, or one of mine as long as the character is not named Henry. I dont know what his face looks like, there's no distinguishing features about him on his face, there's nothing about facial hair, nothing about his hair style, face shape, etc. Severely lacking.
Thirdly:
"He is an outgoing person, most of the time that is. Except when he knows nobody then he becomes very introverted. But he is naturally extroverted."
He is literally the most confused person personality wise we have. Like, he doesnt even know what he is. His whole personality and appearance are pretty meh, and unfortunately if this character was accepted the way he is (which he's not, because he needs a lot of work) he would be left behind interaction wise. No one wants to interact with a boring character.
You also have two personality sections lol.
Fourth, your history lacks. There's nothing too it besides that 'lol he killed a guy' with no mental drawbacks. You cant just kill someone and walk away from it and be just fine from then on. After selecting a target, the killer often make plans. These plans take a long time to formulate; usually the killer doesn’t want to get caught, so they follow their target around and select the best time and place to strike.
Afterwards, there is guilt. Remorse. You don’t just kill a person and think nothing of it. I am not a murderer, but I can imagine what it would be like to have killed somebody. They would have nightmares about their victim(s) coming back from the dead to get them. They would be paranoid of getting caught. They would regret ending a life. The dying screams, the pleading, and the look in the eyes of the person they killed would haunt them to their dying day.
You can’t just walk up to somebody, stab them in the face, and move on.
You just can’t.
There is also the point that you dont just 'develop' tourettes. You are born with it, and you have it for the rest of your life.
Fifth, we already have a sound manipulator. Her name is Sylvia and she is bound to make your character useless because she's a bitch like that (and Allen does shit like that because he can. ily Allen <3 ).
Sixth, you cant store sound in your body and then throw it out in a punch unless you're amplifying the sound of your arm cutting through the air to the point where the sound hits harder than the punch.
Seventh and final, your character's mental illness coupled with his power makes him a danger to himself and everyone around him. In the condition the school's in right now they wouldn't accept a person who can accident badly injure or kill another person. Even if it's on accident.
We have a few problems with your characters.
First off, he's really heavy for a person his height and muscle structure. Like, really heavy, I'd go as far as to describe him as being fat. Because he's about fifty pounds more than what I'd expect of a basketball player of his height and build to be. 160, sure, that's fine. 210+? The see you rollin'. Literally.
Second off, I still have no idea what he looks like. I'd recommend reviewing any of Allen's sheets, or one of mine as long as the character is not named Henry. I dont know what his face looks like, there's no distinguishing features about him on his face, there's nothing about facial hair, nothing about his hair style, face shape, etc. Severely lacking.
Thirdly:
"He is an outgoing person, most of the time that is. Except when he knows nobody then he becomes very introverted. But he is naturally extroverted."
He is literally the most confused person personality wise we have. Like, he doesnt even know what he is. His whole personality and appearance are pretty meh, and unfortunately if this character was accepted the way he is (which he's not, because he needs a lot of work) he would be left behind interaction wise. No one wants to interact with a boring character.
You also have two personality sections lol.
Fourth, your history lacks. There's nothing too it besides that 'lol he killed a guy' with no mental drawbacks. You cant just kill someone and walk away from it and be just fine from then on. After selecting a target, the killer often make plans. These plans take a long time to formulate; usually the killer doesn’t want to get caught, so they follow their target around and select the best time and place to strike.
Afterwards, there is guilt. Remorse. You don’t just kill a person and think nothing of it. I am not a murderer, but I can imagine what it would be like to have killed somebody. They would have nightmares about their victim(s) coming back from the dead to get them. They would be paranoid of getting caught. They would regret ending a life. The dying screams, the pleading, and the look in the eyes of the person they killed would haunt them to their dying day.
You can’t just walk up to somebody, stab them in the face, and move on.
You just can’t.
There is also the point that you dont just 'develop' tourettes. You are born with it, and you have it for the rest of your life.
Fifth, we already have a sound manipulator. Her name is Sylvia and she is bound to make your character useless because she's a bitch like that (and Allen does shit like that because he can. ily Allen <3 ).
Sixth, you cant store sound in your body and then throw it out in a punch unless you're amplifying the sound of your arm cutting through the air to the point where the sound hits harder than the punch.
Seventh and final, your character's mental illness coupled with his power makes him a danger to himself and everyone around him. In the condition the school's in right now they wouldn't accept a person who can accident badly injure or kill another person. Even if it's on accident.
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So if you guys would still care to take me I can edit, I just would like to point out a few things in your post.
Point 1: I am not sure where you get your measurements but an athletic man at 6 foot 6 is suppose to be pretty heavy, I mean Michael Phelps is 6 foot 4 and weighs 194
Point 2: Also Yeah I didn't realize I had left out details on the appearance until my laptop died so i wasn't able to edit that. Now that i am at a computer I can just rewrite everything then.
Point 3: Personality wise I tried to make him as close to human as possible where he isn't constantly extroverted since that just gets annoying. But I can and will change him as you wish. Also the paragraph break was just a typo.
Point 4: . Also I can do edits then for the rest, I didn't go into too much detail but it wasn't suppose to be that he killed the guy just "took care of him" because that would be all he gives. the person, and my apologies as I can see why you got confused with how the wording was. I was wanting to leave it open for discussion on other people later on.
Just to be clear, I understand you can't develop tourettes and you are born with it, since in real life I do have tourettes, I can see why you made that mistake as the way I worded it was odd. Also I can do edits then for the rest, I didn't go into too much detail but it wasn't suppose to be that he killed the guy just "took care of him" because that would be all he gives anyone who asked, I understand though.
Point 5: My apologies I didn't see that, I was going through and looking for one but must have missed her sorry,
Point 6: I would also just like to say though to point six, that Sylvia stores sound in her body and unleashes it In her Sonic bombs.
Point 7: Okay understand I can edit if you would care to take me still.
Point 1: I am not sure where you get your measurements but an athletic man at 6 foot 6 is suppose to be pretty heavy, I mean Michael Phelps is 6 foot 4 and weighs 194
Point 2: Also Yeah I didn't realize I had left out details on the appearance until my laptop died so i wasn't able to edit that. Now that i am at a computer I can just rewrite everything then.
Point 3: Personality wise I tried to make him as close to human as possible where he isn't constantly extroverted since that just gets annoying. But I can and will change him as you wish. Also the paragraph break was just a typo.
Point 4: . Also I can do edits then for the rest, I didn't go into too much detail but it wasn't suppose to be that he killed the guy just "took care of him" because that would be all he gives. the person, and my apologies as I can see why you got confused with how the wording was. I was wanting to leave it open for discussion on other people later on.
Just to be clear, I understand you can't develop tourettes and you are born with it, since in real life I do have tourettes, I can see why you made that mistake as the way I worded it was odd. Also I can do edits then for the rest, I didn't go into too much detail but it wasn't suppose to be that he killed the guy just "took care of him" because that would be all he gives anyone who asked, I understand though.
Point 5: My apologies I didn't see that, I was going through and looking for one but must have missed her sorry,
Point 6: I would also just like to say though to point six, that Sylvia stores sound in her body and unleashes it In her Sonic bombs.
Point 7: Okay understand I can edit if you would care to take me still.
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I personally think that the sheet in general could be worded waaaaaaaaaaay differently (Or better). That's where we got most of our problems. I can help if you like. But, I'm personally tired of super muscular, super tall, people. Sooooo, tone that down a bit. He doesn't have to short, but tone that down a bit. I would also like it if you formatted the sheet (Bold the fields, indent here and there, etc, etc) like the others. It makes it easier to read. Also, you forgot to put something in your sheet, review the rules to find out what!
And instead of sound manipulation, what about vibration manipulation?
Tiddy up your sheet a bit, then we'll talk.
And instead of sound manipulation, what about vibration manipulation?
Tiddy up your sheet a bit, then we'll talk.
"I am not sure where you get your measurements but an athletic man at 6 foot 6 is suppose to be pretty heavy, I mean Michael Phelps is 6 foot 4 and ways 194."
Michael Phelps is far beyond your character in physical capabilities. He is an Olympian who is not only constantly working and is in perfect human condition, with incredibly densely packed muscles giving him that extra oomph that goes into his weight. Your character is fairly scrawny for his height based upon how you described him (hell, I'm six inches shorter and have a bicep width of 19 inches) that really doesnt come across as a person who works out to nearly the extent Michael Phelps does. So if you want to keep him at his height you're going to have a bad time.
My character, Ben, is a 6'10, 324lb man. He is huge, and his muscular structure is what gives him his weight because he really is a big guy. Take this picture for example, which is fairly close to his appearance. He's stocky, even for his size, and he really is built like a little giant. Your character lacks the muscle condition to qualify for that weight class.
Michael Phelps is far beyond your character in physical capabilities. He is an Olympian who is not only constantly working and is in perfect human condition, with incredibly densely packed muscles giving him that extra oomph that goes into his weight. Your character is fairly scrawny for his height based upon how you described him (hell, I'm six inches shorter and have a bicep width of 19 inches) that really doesnt come across as a person who works out to nearly the extent Michael Phelps does. So if you want to keep him at his height you're going to have a bad time.
My character, Ben, is a 6'10, 324lb man. He is huge, and his muscular structure is what gives him his weight because he really is a big guy. Take this picture for example, which is fairly close to his appearance. He's stocky, even for his size, and he really is built like a little giant. Your character lacks the muscle condition to qualify for that weight class.
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I read your title stating that this forum is always open, so id like to ask for an invite (without applying for it, because that would break a rule.) and could promise a CS up if I get invited (accepted). I couldnt help but notice that the teachers are vastly putnumbered (which is always fun) and would like to fill at least A spot. I can give you an idea for the 3 characters id like to apply with.
An 12 year old boy who can control blood, and comes from a tribal vackground, leading him to believe his strength is not his own, but truly that of a wrathfull demon god, who lives in the center of the planet and wants to eat him to reclaim his power. He would be very overly friendly, and poorly educated.
Another religious fellow, more specificly, an anti religious Little necromancer. They would have been exiled from their home for their practices, and flocked to the island in hopes to further their practices. Nothing about then would be TOO evil. After all, they only practice necromancy to try and bring their poor mother back. This 18 year old orphan has mommie issues, and nice hair.
The older brother of the first bloodweiver mentioned. He is the brain of the relationship and despizes his idiotic younger brother enough to attempt at their head every once in a while. He is a cold shoulder "Im too badass to talk to anybody" type, who happens to control blood, and etheral energies! Break past his tough exterior, and you will find thorns. Warming up on him is totally pointless. Just ask his father! 32 years after this kid was born, he killed his father, for hugging him without permission at a family feast!
Id pribably dump more short term characters into this, or replace a character if they die. Likely, id main with the 12 year old, and the character "Mutt" from my character dump (in sig) whom id modify to meet your criteria.
My only question is, do i need pictures for these characters? Im fine drawing them, just i have to find time first. Oh, and whats your take on spelling/ grammar errors? Im on an old, virus fulled Iphone 4s, that occassionaly turns scentences into jambled nonscence, that i later go and edit back to a reasonable state. Thats where the word "reasonable" comes into play, because instead of running a spellcheck, ill type "(spellcheck)" after words, or "(is this the right way to say that?)". I guess what im trying to say is, i should NOT be in an advanced RP if a grammar Nazi will be joining me.
On a seperate note, you should "Invite" me to post a character in your deposite, of whom i would then copy/paste into my character dump (in sig, to be filled with time.).
An 12 year old boy who can control blood, and comes from a tribal vackground, leading him to believe his strength is not his own, but truly that of a wrathfull demon god, who lives in the center of the planet and wants to eat him to reclaim his power. He would be very overly friendly, and poorly educated.
Another religious fellow, more specificly, an anti religious Little necromancer. They would have been exiled from their home for their practices, and flocked to the island in hopes to further their practices. Nothing about then would be TOO evil. After all, they only practice necromancy to try and bring their poor mother back. This 18 year old orphan has mommie issues, and nice hair.
The older brother of the first bloodweiver mentioned. He is the brain of the relationship and despizes his idiotic younger brother enough to attempt at their head every once in a while. He is a cold shoulder "Im too badass to talk to anybody" type, who happens to control blood, and etheral energies! Break past his tough exterior, and you will find thorns. Warming up on him is totally pointless. Just ask his father! 32 years after this kid was born, he killed his father, for hugging him without permission at a family feast!
Id pribably dump more short term characters into this, or replace a character if they die. Likely, id main with the 12 year old, and the character "Mutt" from my character dump (in sig) whom id modify to meet your criteria.
My only question is, do i need pictures for these characters? Im fine drawing them, just i have to find time first. Oh, and whats your take on spelling/ grammar errors? Im on an old, virus fulled Iphone 4s, that occassionaly turns scentences into jambled nonscence, that i later go and edit back to a reasonable state. Thats where the word "reasonable" comes into play, because instead of running a spellcheck, ill type "(spellcheck)" after words, or "(is this the right way to say that?)". I guess what im trying to say is, i should NOT be in an advanced RP if a grammar Nazi will be joining me.
On a seperate note, you should "Invite" me to post a character in your deposite, of whom i would then copy/paste into my character dump (in sig, to be filled with time.).
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I read your title stating that this forum is always open, so id like to ask for an invite (without applying for it, because that would break a rule.) and could promise a CS up if I get invited (accepted). I couldnt help but notice that the teachers are vastly putnumbered (which is always fun) and would like to fill at least A spot. I can give you an idea for the 3 characters id like to apply with.
An 12 year old boy who can control blood, and comes from a tribal vackground, leading him to believe his strength is not his own, but truly that of a wrathfull demon god, who lives in the center of the planet and wants to eat him to reclaim his power. He would be very overly friendly, and poorly educated.
Another religious fellow, more specificly, an anti religious Little necromancer. They would have been exiled from their home for their practices, and flocked to the island in hopes to further their practices. Nothing about then would be TOO evil. After all, they only practice necromancy to try and bring their poor mother back. This 18 year old orphan has mommie issues, and nice hair.
The older brother of the first bloodweiver mentioned. He is the brain of the relationship and despizes his idiotic younger brother enough to attempt at their head every once in a while. He is a cold shoulder "Im too badass to talk to anybody" type, who happens to control blood, and etheral energies! Break past his tough exterior, and you will find thorns. Warming up on him is totally pointless. Just ask his father! 32 years after this kid was born, he killed his father, for hugging him without permission at a family feast!
Id pribably dump more short term characters into this, or replace a character if they die. Likely, id main with the 12 year old, and the character "Mutt" from my character dump (in sig) whom id modify to meet your criteria.
My only question is, do i need pictures for these characters? Im fine drawing them, just i have to find time first. Oh, and whats your take on spelling/ grammar errors? Im on an old, virus fulled Iphone 4s, that occassionaly turns scentences into jambled nonscence, that i later go and edit back to a reasonable state. Thats where the word "reasonable" comes into play, because instead of running a spellcheck, ill type "(spellcheck)" after words, or "(is this the right way to say that?)". I guess what im trying to say is, i should NOT be in an advanced RP if a grammar Nazi will be joining me.
On a seperate note, you should "Invite" me to post a character in your deposite, of whom i would then copy/paste into my character dump (in sig, to be filled with time.).
An 12 year old boy who can control blood, and comes from a tribal vackground, leading him to believe his strength is not his own, but truly that of a wrathfull demon god, who lives in the center of the planet and wants to eat him to reclaim his power. He would be very overly friendly, and poorly educated.
Another religious fellow, more specificly, an anti religious Little necromancer. They would have been exiled from their home for their practices, and flocked to the island in hopes to further their practices. Nothing about then would be TOO evil. After all, they only practice necromancy to try and bring their poor mother back. This 18 year old orphan has mommie issues, and nice hair.
The older brother of the first bloodweiver mentioned. He is the brain of the relationship and despizes his idiotic younger brother enough to attempt at their head every once in a while. He is a cold shoulder "Im too badass to talk to anybody" type, who happens to control blood, and etheral energies! Break past his tough exterior, and you will find thorns. Warming up on him is totally pointless. Just ask his father! 32 years after this kid was born, he killed his father, for hugging him without permission at a family feast!
Id pribably dump more short term characters into this, or replace a character if they die. Likely, id main with the 12 year old, and the character "Mutt" from my character dump (in sig) whom id modify to meet your criteria.
My only question is, do i need pictures for these characters? Im fine drawing them, just i have to find time first. Oh, and whats your take on spelling/ grammar errors? Im on an old, virus fulled Iphone 4s, that occassionaly turns scentences into jambled nonscence, that i later go and edit back to a reasonable state. Thats where the word "reasonable" comes into play, because instead of running a spellcheck, ill type "(spellcheck)" after words, or "(is this the right way to say that?)". I guess what im trying to say is, i should NOT be in an advanced RP if a grammar Nazi will be joining me.
On a seperate note, you should "Invite" me to post a character in your deposite, of whom i would then copy/paste into my character dump (in sig, to be filled with time.).
I'm Jazzy, MrAllenJ, Co-GM.
Well, we can provide some leniency with grammar, but do keep in mind that good grammar is in the Advanced section's summary of things you need to have.
We tend to shy away from bloodbending. We can make an exception, but you'd have to have a pretty good set of weaknesses for Allen and I to even consider the power because of how effective and deadly it can be with so little drawbacks. We also already have a bit of a 'Wrathful demon god' who is young and doesnt know his own power.
I'll let Allen handle the necromancy. I'll let him decided how he feels about that.
We dont invite people because we dont make a promise that we will accept them. Post your characters, and we'll work woth you on them of there are problems. You DO apply to this RP, and if you make the cut after some work and talking with us you're accepted into the 218 community. Dont come into the RP with short term characters. Those tend to be forgotten pretty easily, or the person who owns them doesnt do a good job with them. You dont need a picture for your characters. But we do require a great deal of depth in the description in all aspects. I recomment looking at Allen or my own's sheets. They're on the second post in the OOC.
Well, we can provide some leniency with grammar, but do keep in mind that good grammar is in the Advanced section's summary of things you need to have.
We tend to shy away from bloodbending. We can make an exception, but you'd have to have a pretty good set of weaknesses for Allen and I to even consider the power because of how effective and deadly it can be with so little drawbacks. We also already have a bit of a 'Wrathful demon god' who is young and doesnt know his own power.
I'll let Allen handle the necromancy. I'll let him decided how he feels about that.
We dont invite people because we dont make a promise that we will accept them. Post your characters, and we'll work woth you on them of there are problems. You DO apply to this RP, and if you make the cut after some work and talking with us you're accepted into the 218 community. Dont come into the RP with short term characters. Those tend to be forgotten pretty easily, or the person who owns them doesnt do a good job with them. You dont need a picture for your characters. But we do require a great deal of depth in the description in all aspects. I recomment looking at Allen or my own's sheets. They're on the second post in the OOC.
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Thank you for expressing interest in the RP.
I will only allow bloodbending if he can't control the blood in other peoples bodies (Which is a solid 1 hit kill). If he must control other peoples blood, then he should only be able to control blood that's been exposed to air.
Necromancery...? Imma need details. Lots of them. Because like hell there's going to be an army of flesh eating zombies roaming around the school.
I will only allow bloodbending if he can't control the blood in other peoples bodies (Which is a solid 1 hit kill). If he must control other peoples blood, then he should only be able to control blood that's been exposed to air.
Necromancery...? Imma need details. Lots of them. Because like hell there's going to be an army of flesh eating zombies roaming around the school.
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I see your points and conscerns. Im happy to say that I didnt intend on going past any of the intended limits on the bloodweiver or necromancer. The necromancer's whole goal in life is to learn how to bring back a human, so that they could be with their mother again. Had they learned to bring back people, they would never have had reason to come to academy 218. I was thinking necromancy the way it is believed to work in RL, where instead of tampering with the dead, one can gain energy from the presence of the dead.
For the bloodweiver, it is a character ive used on other sites many times, and ive molded the character based on greivances. The first of which was controlling other people's blood. Instead i now have him able to control only his own blood, but if his opponent's bloodstream gets his own mixed in, he can influence, but not control them (were talking, making a melee strike more likely to miss, not blowing them up.) there were other changes that i drug the characater through, but i think ill just show you the CS when I apply.
The first OOC post says that there is no applying, you must get invited. Im sorry for comming off so cocky. (I just reread my post, and it reminded me of a know it all. Im honestly not like that, and I hope it dosnt effect what you guys think of me.) As far as grammar goes, i have pretty good grammar beyond occassionally forgetting to capitalize an "I" or two. Ill keep that in check, and double checked if necissary to be part of this RP. Im just a mediocre RP'er, trying to inch up the scale to a good RPer, and i found a familiar name. Haha yeah, hope I can keep up to par.
I feel like im raunting now, so im going to shut up, and put up. Ill get back here sometime soon with character sheets. As soon as I get a pc in my hands to type with, ill be back. Thank you for your time, consideration, and advice/ request.
For the bloodweiver, it is a character ive used on other sites many times, and ive molded the character based on greivances. The first of which was controlling other people's blood. Instead i now have him able to control only his own blood, but if his opponent's bloodstream gets his own mixed in, he can influence, but not control them (were talking, making a melee strike more likely to miss, not blowing them up.) there were other changes that i drug the characater through, but i think ill just show you the CS when I apply.
The first OOC post says that there is no applying, you must get invited. Im sorry for comming off so cocky. (I just reread my post, and it reminded me of a know it all. Im honestly not like that, and I hope it dosnt effect what you guys think of me.) As far as grammar goes, i have pretty good grammar beyond occassionally forgetting to capitalize an "I" or two. Ill keep that in check, and double checked if necissary to be part of this RP. Im just a mediocre RP'er, trying to inch up the scale to a good RPer, and i found a familiar name. Haha yeah, hope I can keep up to par.
I feel like im raunting now, so im going to shut up, and put up. Ill get back here sometime soon with character sheets. As soon as I get a pc in my hands to type with, ill be back. Thank you for your time, consideration, and advice/ request.
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