[OOC] NARUTO: Road to Ninja [ARC 3] Buy it now and get a second punt free!

[Suku]

I am ready but been busy with school so cant really converse with people a lot with how to start things

[Angel Eyes]

may i still join? I havent done a naruto rp in forever. lol

[Masaki Haruna]

@Angel Eyes You still can^^ and welcome back^^

[AlteredTundra]

Jaakuna Sawada, The Sundance Kid

“Laughter is the best medicine ever.”

Jaakuna is one of those few guys out there that looks exactly how he acts and his age. He has the appearance of a sixteen year old boy and one that is rather hotheaded. His blonde hair flows past his shoulders, showing a shine within the light of the sun. With emerald green eyes, he often displays a physical attractiveness that most woman like. His height and weight are pretty ideal, as well, which are five-ten and one-hundred-and-fifty pounds respectively. His body is lean. His core is really powerful, but he surely doesn’t look it. Some have cited Jaakuna for being a guy who looked way too skinny for the amount of food that he eats.

Normally, Jaakuna could be seen wearing his forehead protector as a belt, much like that of Rock Lee, as noted in the history books of Kohona. He also wears a few other belts that hang down on the side of his black-to-dark-gray pants. He wears olive-green boots that have a stark white set of laces. He has a red hooded jacket that is always unzipped so the world can see he body. He also wears white tape around his hands that go all the way up to his elbow. The reason is unknown, though.

Jaakuna has always been one to show a love for tattoos and other expressive body art. This is evident in his many, many tattoos along his upper body. Most of his torso tats are of the tribal variety. These cover the majority of his upper-torso and back. Though they are of similar varieties, they are all of different shapes. Some are circles, some are vertical, some are diagnal, and some just don’t fall under any other size category. Even along his arms, Jaakuna has tribal-like tattoos, but these, unlike those on his chest and back, are not black. These are red and blue. They originate from his hands and flow up his arms like fire, stopping right at his elbow. He has these on both arms.

Additional Images

Happy Jaakuna
Gentleman Jaakuna

Personnel Files

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【Full Name】
Jaakuna Sawada

【Alias】
Ute撃て(The Sundance Kid)
Kohona's Resident Nekophilliac(given to him by The Great Cat Sage)
Jaakuna Matata(self-given)
The Prankster of the Leaf
【Age】
16
【Gender】
Male
【Birthplace】
Kohona
【Bloodline】
Sawada Clan
【Rank】
Chunin
【Chakra Natures】
Fire(Affinity); Lightning

Psyche Reports

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Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】

On the surface, it will appear that Jaakuna is vulgar, mean, rude, angry, and just an all-around asshole. Yeah, while that is all true, there is a deeper side to this hot-head. He does put on this front just for the pure fact that is probably afraid of letting anyone in. Maybe there’s more to just that, but Jaakuna doesn’t like to talk about feelings. He will express his real feelings with a strong overtone of sarcasm and rudeness. That being said, when he is venerable, Jaak will definitely be a different person, but that’s most likely not going to happen unless he becomes friends with someone that he really trusts, which is really rare.

Added to everything just said, Jaakuna enjoys poking fun at those who do something that will prompt it. He is a nice guy when he wants to be, but he just finds it a lot more fun to be a dick to a lot of people. He’s also quite the pervert as he will address stare at women with lewd thoughts and intentions. Some might even say that he’s addicted of sorts. He also is a bit of a disrespectful twat as he will address people as “dumbass” and “sweet cheeks”. The latter is more for women and the former is mainly how he addresses men. Of course, he will probably just give them nicknames based on his first impression of them. Yes, that’s not a very good thing to do, but again he’s a dick in every sense of the word.

The fuse of his temper is very short. Just as short as his nice-streak is, Jaakuna will probably be calm for two seconds before he loses his shit. He definitely doesn’t give a fuck about the feelings of other people; especially those who were the ones to initiate his anger. So, look out and hope that you’re not one of those people. However, when you get to know him, you’ll find out that he is exactly the same. There’s a saying: “What you see is what you get!” Yeah, that’s Jaakuna, though when he does get to know you or vice-versa, you’ll see that he is really just a joker and loves to laugh. He believes that laughter is the best medicine to avoid tackling the elephant in the room. Or you know, whatever the fuck that saying is.

To his family, Jaakuna is the same, but more restrained in his vulgarity. He loves his mother -- he would do anything for that woman. IF anyone were to fuck with her, he'd mess them up so bad. Yeah, Jaakuna is a momma's boy. He get's teased by his sister and brother about it, but it's all in fun and games, which Jaakuna is no stranger to. On the topic of his siblings, Jaakuna loves his little sister. He often gives her a hard time, but it's fair game since she's the one that does it first. They go back and forth when it with each other. About his brother, there is a hint of jealousy from JAakuna to Hideyoshi, but that's because the latter got promoted to Jounin while Jaakuna is barely getting to Chunin rank. That's a large part of their rivalry that they have going on, but underneath all of that, they love each other. JAakuna thinks of Hideyoshi as his best friend and it's definitely mutual.

【History】

Written in the history books as one of Kohona’s greatest clans, Jaakuna’s name sake, the Clan of Sawada, is one of prominence. The Sawada Clan helped with the construction of Kohona, mainly how they established themselves as one of the top Clans of Kohona. They also invested in the fighting styles of Kohona, which explained why from an early age, both Jaakuna and his brother, Hideyoshi, were exploited to rigorous, physical training. It might be why that they both excel at Taijutsu. Though, it has been noted that Hideyoshi does so more than Jaakuna, but that’s to be expected since Yoshi has been promoted to the rank of Jounin.

Jaakuna’s father was one Yoshinero Sawada, his mother, Chrome Sawada, big brother, Hideyoshi Sawada, and younger sister Aisha Sawada. Growing up, Jaakuna always felt that his achievements, no matter how huge, would always be overshadowed by father’s first and his favorite. Jaakuna never blamed Hideyoshi for this. He couldn’t. He loved his big brother, but that wasn’t the same for father. On some levels, Jaakuna probably hated the man. Or maybe he was just mad that father chose Hideyoshi to be the center of his affection and devotion and not Jaakuna himself. Maybe that’s why, during his pre-teen years, Jaakuna developed a rebellious streak. Maybe that’s why he became the way he is just because of how his father was.

And maybe that’s why it hurt when he found out about Yoshinero Sawada -- the real Yoshinero Sawada.

It was when Jaakuna had turned sixteen, maybe a little before. Yoshinero was murdered, found out about his secrets, about how sold Kohona secrets to the enemies of the leaf, and that Hideyoshi was the one that did it. At the time, Jaakuna didn’t know what shocked him more. His father was a traitor to the clan, and to the entire village or that Yoshi was the one that killed him. It didn’t make a lot of sense to Jaakuna at the time and perhaps why he was even a little distraught. Like for god’s sake, his brother killed his father. That’s simply not something that Jaakuna has ever gotten over, even on the eve of him becoming a Chunin.

【Family ties】

Jaakuna's clan, the clan of Sawada, has been one of the biggest finacial backers of Kohona due to finding wealth in the construction of Kohona. They also invested in the training styles of Kohona. Before his death, YOshinero employed a rather strict rule of the clan, wanting to ensure its succession. Granted that Hideyoshi was at the forefront of that, but Jaakuna also felt some of that attention as well.

Yoshitsune Sawada| Great Grandfather | 97, Kohonagakure, deceased. Former 8th Hokage. Honorable man that sacrificed his life to bring peace to everyone in the village.
Yoshinero Sawada | Father | 47, Konohagakure, deceased. Former head of Sawada Clan. Was killed by Hideyoshi after discovered selling Konoha secrets.
Chrome Sawada | Mother | 46, Konohagakure, Head Nurse/Retired. She works tirelessly as a nurse and quit shinobi life due to her health. Jaakuna loves her with all of his heart and will die for her.
Aisha Sawada | Sister | 6, Konohagakure, Academy Student. Jaakuna and her often tease each other. He sees her as his greatest love, aside his mother of course. He will die for either of them.
Hideyoshi Sawada | Brother | 17, Konohagakure, Jounin. Greatest friend, rival, and all around pest. Hideyoshi watches over Jaakuna constantly.

【Dreams and fears】

Jaakuna of the CLan Sawada, often called The Sundance Kid, Kohona's Resident Nekophilliac and The Prankster of the Leaf. He is all about fun. He enjoys pranking people, much like the great Naruto back in the age of the Seventh. Yes, Jaakuna exhibits many of those qualities. For the most part, he does not mind it. People have grown to adore him for it. He's definitely the life of the party. But that's not all that Jaakuna wants to be remembered for. Being adored and the life of the party is one thing, but Jaakuna secretly wishes to be respected. Even more so, he wishes one day to lead his clan. It might sound corny or even too familiar to a certain someone who lost their clan, but Jaakuna wishes to make them proud of him. He does have a fear that if he continues to be a prankster, Jaakuna will not have the respect that he oh so desires for.

Combat Reports

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Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Jaakuna is a very up-in-your face fighter. This is due to his combination of Kenjutsu and Nintaijutsu, though the former is less than the latter. His unique Cloak Techniques allow him to battle at close-quarters. Be it he uses his twin swords or his arms & feet, Jaakuna does so with such effiency that it truly makes those who doubt him see why he was able to make Chuunin rank at the age of fifteen. But Jaakuna’s close-quartered approach is not without it’s drawback. Due to the high risk approach, Jaakuna, at times, does not calculate what his opponent’s do. There’s also the fact that he’s prone to fall into traps. Now, this isn’t usually a bad thing as Jaakuna would just increase his chakra usage, but it still factors into what he’s venerable to.

Capoeira has a variety of different techniques that make use of the hands, feet, legs, arms, and head. Both kicks, punches and take downs are among the offensive movements, but the emphasis is normally on kicking. Because of the appearance of many techniques, they are often mistaken for dancing or acrobatic maneuvers. However, while Capoeira has some quite impressive, acrobatic signature moves, most of the basic techniques are similar to those found in other martial arts. It’s a fast and versatile martial art which is historically focused on fighting outnumbered or in technological disadvantages.

The Stance of Capoeira is heavily focused in a constant motion rather than an actual position. The iconic motion is known as the ginga, the constant movement from one foot to another. The ginga keeps the artist center of gravity from remaining in one place, allowing for an attack from any spot, and making critical strikes increasingly difficult, forcing them to rely on glancing blows where their power is cut in half not nearly as effecting for fear of a swift counter if they miscalculate. The movement also allows the artist to force their opponent to remain vigilant and not get comfortable. The constant motion, feints, bobbing, and weaving prohibits and discourages attacks and strikes of considerable power. It also does a fantastic job of hiding where a possible attack could originate from.

The brunt of offensive Capoeira attacks are completely centered around swinging ticks and rasterias(sweeping kicks). These kicks are significantly different than most modern martial arts styles. Capoeira kicks allow the user to attack from multiple different angles and can be managed while doing handstands and other various forms such as jumping, swinging, and ripping. What makes capoeira especially tricky is the user’s ability to hide attacks of capoeira within the actual dance, giving false reads of what is an attack and what is not. Capoeira relies on feints, misdirection and impatience of its enemies to coerce one into attack too soon or too late, or make them hesitate their attacks and leave themselves open. Capoeira’s fluid and dancing style movements and unpredictability make for a dangerous style against more convential fighters. To those that never have witnessed the style often remark it as Break Dancing Style, remarking it is much like break dancing during a fight. Capoeira artists have been known to use their elbows, head and fist, but this is not a primary offensive attack within the offense.

The defense is based on the principle of non-resistance, meaning avoiding an attack using agile evasive moves instead of blocking it. Avoids are called esquivas, these avoids can be formed in ducking, cartwheels, handstands and flips. Relying mostly constant motion of the ginga to allow the artist to avoid blows rather than block. Capoeira artist are taught the importance of using esquivas for defense. Stating it gives the artist an advantage because they don't have to waste time trying to recover from the block, they can easily jump back into the fight with a counter of their own and attacks from a varying angle.

【Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit】
Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit
Seiton/Star Release/Heaven Style
Description:

Star Release (星遁, Seiton; Viz "Heaven Style") is a Kekkai Genkai which is created by combining the fire, lightning, and yin natures. Due to the fact that the three natures used in its formation have no definitive shape or form, the energy that is created through the process of mixing them is completely unstable. While unstable the energy is mostly akin to manipulating charged particles which allows the user to form; light, heat, electrons, and plasma. The energy can also be stabilized through the use of Shape Manipulation this allows the user to enhance their physical capabilities by wrapping the energy around themselves, to create solid constructs for varying uses, allows them to create a field of energy, and even a shield. Since they are still unstable by a bit, wind and water can still weaken and fully destabilize seiton. Especially depending on the jutsu.

【Ninja techniques】

Chakra Flow(Katon only)

A rank techniques:

Name of Technique; Katon Kage Bushin no Jutsu(Fire Release Shadow Clone Jutsu)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu; Bushinjutsu
Class: Offensive; Supplementary
Rank: A
Chakra Nature: Katon
Description: This technique allows the user to make a shadow clone out of fire. Because it is a shadow clone, it is able to perform jutsu and interact with the environment due to it having a physical substance. If the clone is injured, it will revert to its natural fire state, burning what it is touching. The clone is only able to use fire release and will dissipate if it is hit by water.

Weakness: Chakra cost is high and Jaakuna can only create a maximum of three clones. The allotted time that each clone can stay, if not hit within that allotted time, is two minutes.

B rank techniques:

Name of Technique: Ryusei 星遁: 流星 (Meteor)
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei Tota; Nintaijutsu; Chakra Flow
Class: Defensive; Supplementary
Chakra Nature: Seiton
Rank: B
Range: Short
Hand Signs: TigeràDragonàDog
Description: Jaakuna wraps his body in a layer of stabilized energy, allowing him to move through the air at incredible speeds. Even if someone could detect his trajectory, it’s hard to catch him. The technique speeds up neural synapses to react faster to danger and to push physical prowess 25% more than normal, which is more than one would expect. His strength, while not as strong as Chakra Enhanced Strength would give him, it’s definitely close. Unlike the Lightning Release Armor, Jaakuna is able to maneuver and remain suspended whilst in mid-air.
Weakness: Jaakuna definitely feels the pressure on his body after using this technique. He can only maintain it for one minute(2 and half posts) due to the fact that it’s so demanding of his physical body as well as his Chakra reserves. There's also the fact that each second that he keeps up Ryusei puts extra strain on his body.

Name of Technique; Hono no Odori(炎の踊り Dance of the Flames)
Type of Jutsu: Nintaijutsu
Class: Offensive
Rank: B
Chakra Nature: Katon
Hand Signs: Tiger
Description: In combination with his Capoeira fighting style, The dance-like movements that Jaakuna makes with his body expels fire chakra almost instantly. Each arm thrust, a stream of fire follows, each lick, a sicle of flame chakra is released. Any movement he does be it a flip or whatever, his entire body becomes the conduit in which his fire chakra flows through and becomes a force to be reckoned with to anybody in close-ranged combat with Jaakuna
Weakness: As to be expected, there are a few side-backs to this technique. One of the main ones is obviously the chakra cost. Despite him having control over his body when using the Capoeira style, Jaakuna cannot control the flames themselves, which could very well pose serious harm to his person. Another is that he may not be able to precisely land direct hits. In a resulted outcome of that, the accuracy and hit rate are below sixty percent. While that is still a good rate of hit succession, it still poses some worries for Jaakuna.

C rank techniques:

Name of Technique: Katon: Gokakyu no Jutsu (火遁・豪火球の術 Fire Release: Great Fireball Jutsu)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Class: Offensive
Chakra Nature: Katon
Rank: C
Hand Signs: Tiger(weakened version); Snake → Ram → Monkey → Boar → Horse → Tiger(full-powered version)
Description: A jutsu where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire and expelled from the mouth either as a massive orb of roaring flame or as a continuous flamethrower. The scope of the attack is altered by the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released flames will engulf their target and leave a crater on the ground’s surface.

Weakness: This technique apparently requires more than average chakra reserves and most genin shold not be able to use this tech. Furthermore, due to it’s linear scope, it is easily dodgable.

Name of Technique: Higaitou no Jutsu (火遁・火外套 FLame Cloak Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Nintaijutsu;
Class: Supplementary
Chakra Nature: Katon
Rank: C
Range: Short Range
Hand Signs: Tiger
Description: A technique that, while it appears to be in a similar way that of Lightning Release Armor, it is not the case. For one, it only surrounds Jaakuna in a thin layer of fire chakra. It's form similar to an outward aura. It enhances the usage of Katon jutsu by ten percent and enhances his strength and endurance by eight percent. It has a burning touch aspect, but that's on a minimal scale.
Weakness: This technique has a two minute(2-3 posts) maximum usage time. Any more after that and the effects start to fade down. Each minute, two percent is removed from maximum potency. In a span of four minutes(roughly 4 posts), the jutsu will no longer be active and there is a one post cool down period before Jaakuna could use it again. Of course, there is no guarentee that Jaakuna would even want to, so that should also be taken into account.

Name of Technique: Kuchiyose no Jutsu(????? Summoning Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Offensive; Defensive; Supplementary
Class: Ninjutsu; Space-Time Ninjutsu
Chakra Nature: None
Rank: C
Range: All Ranges
Hand Signs: Boar->Dog->Bird->Monkey->Ramx2
Description: The Summoning Technique is a space-time ninjutsu that allows the summoner to transport animals or people across long distances instantly via blood. Before an animal summoning can be performed, a prospective summoner must first sign a contract with a given species. The contract comes in the form of a scroll, on which the contractor uses their own blood to sign their name and place their fingerprints. Once signed, it is valid even after the contractors death as long as the contract itself remains in tact. After this, they need only offer an additional donation of blood on the hand they signed the contract with, mold their chakra with hand seals, and then plant the hand they signed the contract with on the location they wish to summon the creature.
Weakness: The amount of chakra used determines how powerful a summon could be. High chakra cost means a colossal-sized summon. Low chakra costs mean a pet-sized summon.

D-E rank techniques:

All basic techniques

【Summon(s)】

Name of Summon: Flarea, The Flame Cat

Description: Being a cat of medium size, Flarea appears to be the size of a full-grown lynx with him having similar traits as that breed of cats. Though he is only of fifteen years of age, ironically as old as Jaakuna is, he does not lack the strength or cunning of most cats because, the age of fifteen for summons is not that old. Most cat summons, on average, live to be eighty years old. His entire body is composed of an ever-flowing flame that, to those that he finds a threat, will burn to the touch. However, due to the fact that he sees Jaakuna as his rightful master, the aspect of burning does not apply to him. His height is about at Jaakuna’s waist and weight is somewhere in the two hundred pounds area.

Personality:

Flarea is hot-headed, much like his master. The way he acts sometimes is almost in a rude manner, but there’s also a softer side to him. It’s mainly deeply rooted in his loyalty to not only Jaakuna, but the Sawada Clan as a whole. Anybody who bears the Sawada name is automatically given not only Flarea’s respect, but his undying loyalty. It’s probably because the oldest Cat from the Cat Kingdom was once the personal summon of the founder of the Sawada Clan. The will of fire also flows within Flarea. Jaakuna has often joked that maybe that’s why he has a fiery form. Whichever the case, those same ideals that the Third Hokage instilled within each shinobi of that generation also flows within Flarea.

When battle comes, Flarea is focused. He never let’s anything distract him. He also shares Jaakuna’s method of fighting of the high risk. It usually pays off for them. When it does, it’s in a big way. When it doesn’t, it affects them in a big way. Flarea isn’t really that bright when it comes to fighting. He usually goes on impulse alone. That is probably why he and Jaakuna make such a great fit. It’s cause of their likeness in personality and the way they fight that makes them so compatible in every way.

Skills:
Average Chakra reserves
Nintaijutsu specialist

Chakra Nature(s): Katon

Known Jutsu:

Name of Technique: Flame Charge
Type of Jutsu: Nintaijutsu
Class: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Nature: Katon
Description: A good amount of Flarea’s chakra flows outward, mixing with his already fiery form. After a few seconds pass, the flames of his body flow outward, burn hotter. Flarea then takes charge as he leaps into the air, tackling whoever he wants to harm. The overload of fire will severely burn whoever it struck by his overheated body.
Weakness: Due to the overload of fire, a Suiton technique of equal or more strength can easily negate this jutsu.

Weapons:
Standard Shinobi Tools:
Exploding Tags - 10
Kunai - 10
Shiraken - 25

Additional Info/Databook Entries
JAakuna has a cat named Nekoneko(see appearance picture for cat)
REst to be filled out later.

[Angel Eyes]

still working on an app. its just taking longer than expected.

[AlteredTundra]

Who is that in your sigspace,@Angel Eyes

[Savato]

@Reflection Alright, we can offer two teleports per fight. Above that it'll have nasty side effects. The fact that you're basing your arsenal around Swift release does make things problematic. Your call.

Also wires are still out. o;

Edit: Refer to Partisan's premature review. I'm still denying wires.

J8 accepted.

Don't have a problem with yours, Ken.

[Partisan]

ok quick question can I create another char? wont be a prodigy or anything like that but rather a secondary char

@Suku

I have numerous NPC characters that I intend on playing (lightly) but that do not have a jutsu list therefore will not interact in heavy combat of the sorts (and I more or less intend my jonin to stay out of combat as best as she can - this is about the chunin after all)

As such I can say it's allowed to make similar characters who don't have a jutsu list but we need the character spaces for people that are interested in joining us in full. Does that make sense?

So while I wait for everything to fall into place, are people already starting to plan for things?

@Crimmy

Yeah, you're actually missing a lot in Skype chat. I've got Yamato linked to several characters as well as his younger sister being linked.. hrm, there hasn't been much planning for subplots related to characters yet that I know of but I think that usually starts during the RP. That aside the main plot is also being discussed in Skype.

@j8cob Accepted as far as I am concerned but I've got a question relating the crystal armor - how strong do you imagine it to be? Can it be shattered physically? Especially considering in the anime it was done by a jonin+ level nin and you're a chunin. But it's accepted anyway. Enjoy.

@Reflection time to be the famed asshole with a hard-ass that I was made out to be on skype.

Some are able to travel miles with this technique in a second, while others are less so. Senso possesses a middle ground, due to his natural skill.

Okay, all fair and just but 'middle ground' doesn't give me any info relating to how much he can actually do. I get that this is writing still, but since others travel miles and others 'less so' (that also doesn't tell me anything) I guesstimate from that that he's between 0 miles and 1 mile. Probably incorrect in your vision hence why I bring it up. Doesn't really actually do anything because outside of combat this wouldn't matter much and inside of combat you're mostly gonna be using your jutsu.

Strengths:
Swift Release is the ultimate form of movement jutsu. It allows the user the ability to easily avoid attacks. Some would say that a user of the Swift Release can attack and retreat with minimal risk to themselves.
Weaknesses:
Swift Release is still just a movement ability. The user is vulnerable to abilities that hamper movement. Whether this be some kind of gel or tight spaces.

Okay. Here's my issue with this.

1. There's no real limit to how much he can use it. Technically he can just dodge all attacks if I'm reading this correct. Meaning he can also attack without ever getting hit.
2. If he's vulnerable to abilities that hamper movement or such (you list gel and tight spaces, tight spaces not being an ability but I get what you're saying) then that means that, using the strength of never getting hit, he can just endlessly avoid these abilities? For example a gel user that slows you down would need to hit your character before it'd take impact. And because he has the ability to never be hit that's kind of useless. I think that's a rational thing to remark on this.

Shadowless flight

Okay, this technique illustrates my issue with this technique. From the wiki: uses this technique to move at instantaneous speeds, rapidly striking his opponents at various angles while avoiding any opposition regardless of the opponent's speed or strength. Main issue being avoiding any opposition. He's basically invincible using this technique because he won't get hit, and since there's no limit on Swift release he can just kind of spam this all day.

The other canon jutsu you listed (the pillar of light and the string jutsu) seemed fine to me.

Jutsu name:
Swift Release: Imperial Dragon

Interesting technique. Kind of contradictory to say the focus of light is the only warning they get and then listing the obviousness of it as a weakness, but then again most shinobi will probably notice a white flash light thing on a thing that gets thrown at them. I think it's a bit too strong in it's effects (obliteration) because what happens if a human being gets hit by it? Will they splash away in body parts or will they just suffer some serious damage?

Jutsu name:
Swift Release: Explosive Entrance

Okay, I have to admit I like this technique. It's funny. With shell I guess you meant the user since that's the thing mentioned before - essentially you exploded yourself and your swift chakra to explode something. I guess it's an obvious technique but since it's paired with shadowless flight that means that even though it's obvious there's not much you can do against the user except jump away? If so that's kind of unfair - I'll be forced to watch you and I can't counter you in anyway if you understand me. Feel free to correct me on this if I'm wrong. Never saw swift release in the anime so I might not understand it 100%. I guess the moment you pop up from the jutsu (your 'entrance') I can just ram you in the face as there'd be a brief moment between appearance and explosion?

Jutsu name:
Swift Release: Paralyzing Touch

No comments, I'm a fan of paralyzing jutsu. Might want to add a weakness to this technique but I guess that would amount to 'dont get hit by the shining white chakra emanating blade'

Weapons are cool and I dig the wire spool launchers.

In summary I can say the biggest issue is just with limits of the swift release and looking at the jutsu, limiting swift release would make your jutsu more than useless. My proposal would be to limit the use of swift release jutsu in total to 6-7 per day, so that he really has to think about when to use them. That way you'd overcome the weaknesses (enemies would be unable to really DO anything but dodge, but since the techniques have such a limit it's more or less okay) while keeping the power of the jutsu.

Can't say I'm sure about this swift release stuff. Not particularily fond of it, but eh, your character and I'm just here to grade. Hope you don't mind too much about what I said, it's nothing personal. Besides that, I hope you're happy with yourself. You caused a riot in the skype group of people agreeing with the swift release or being very against it. I like seeing them argue over stupid stuff :^)

@Angel Eyes Yes you may. Lovely avatar and signature by the way. I can dig.

@Altered Tundra

Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit
Seiton/Star Release/Heaven Style

So yeah I'm gonna be that guy. I trust you to uphold common sense and I hope you realize I'm not trying to fuck you over but I don't see a strengths/weaknesses aspect. Kal-El told you about the weaknesses but it'd help if everyone else could see them as well. Simply saying 'Yeah but I know the weaknesses' doesn't really cut it in that regard.

Fire shadow clone is good.

Name of Technique: Ryusei 星遁: 流星 (Meteor)
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei Tota; Nintaijutsu; Chakra Flow

Alright so given the fact that I know the weaknesses mentioned above as well I can accept this as long as we actually enforce the strain on the body. Meaning no flying around 24/7.

Name of Technique; Hono no Odori(炎の踊り Dance of the Flames)
Type of Jutsu: Nintaijutsu

If this entails the same weakness as mentioned above it's a pass.

Name of Technique: Higaitou no Jutsu (火遁・火外套 FLame Cloak Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Nintaijutsu

So essentially lightning armor thing that Bee uses? If so: nope, this is definetely not C rank and I don't neccesarily even agree with the stated B rank of it on Narutopedia. We said no to lightning chakra armor stuff before, why should we have this? If not the same, explain how it's different.

[Crimmy]

Ah, Skype chats. Any chance you could add me to it?

I go by flightofcrimson.

[Partisan]

I would but you'd need to accept my request then. :p

[j8cob]

Fuk, I should elaborate the durability. I'll do it when I wake up.

[AlteredTundra]

@Partisan

As dicsussed on skype, edits made and such.

[Crimmy]

@Partisan That's strange. I haven't received anything. Could I try requesting you instead?

[Partisan]

Add Vurige_Vos.

[Partisan]

Check the IC, lads.

[Angel Eyes]

Still working on my character sheet. And the person in my sig and avi is Griffith from Berserk. I love the series and Griffith is just bad ass. You can watch the first movie of Berserk on netflix.

[Partisan]

I played a mount and blade mod of that once.. it was.. crazy?

[Empath]

Go for the char bin.

@Partisan

To the char bin!

Also nice posts guys ^^

[Partisan]

Yes.

Now post.

[Weird Tales]

Can I join?