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@fantasyfan28 Could you put that in a hider please?

As for the actual CS you're going to need to add on content on personality, history and dreams and fears.

Besides ignoring the CS skeleton's coding (not a huge problem, I suppose) I think that

Trained in the use of the scimiter since he was five, a competent archer, both on horseback and on foot. He is well versed in brawling and several types of fighting the peoples of Ib-Wahad Sultanate have perfected.
might be a bit over the top, considering he already has a large amount of skills.

His style is unorthodox, it can be seen as reckless, with his two weapons fighting style Ebn is more focused on attack than defense, his strikes are all lightning fast and he is extremely nimble, the use of flips, kicks and rolls are usually added to aid him,

This sounds like something I'm trying to avoid (flips and rolls are.. not plausible mid battle in a battlefield, and somewhat more possible, but still not really that realistic even in a 1 on 1 duel.) and at the moment he sounds more like an assassin who also knows how to be a soldier than.. anything else.

At the moment this looks like a low-casual level character, and I'm looking for something with a bit more depth. I hope you can understand that you'll need to either add on, or rework on a new character?
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I have already written out the History, Dreams etc and Personality.

You snipped my writing off on the parts in regards to his fighting style. I did actually say that his acrobatics etc would be detrimental to fighting in formation etc, and that Ebn would be able to adapt quickly to the need for more orthodox methods of fighting.

I dont see how he can be too strong if he has lived as a nomad and has had to learn these skills to survive, but I will bow to your wishes to re-write that part.

Is it just the lack of information that I have not supplied, in terms of how in depth I have gone, that you mentioned this would only be seen as a low-level casual character. If you want me to write more I will do but how much is too much?

Also, I have never used hiders before so could you explain how to use them please.
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I'm not saying that you haven't written them, I am saying they need to have more in them. If you look at the character tab where you found the CS and look down at my character you'll see what I want to see minimally, and if possible you can always add more.

I snipped it on purpose to point out the part that I was referring to. And I don't want to see people doing frontflips over the battlefield like they are the resurrection of Ezio Auditore. I get the appeal of these characters but I simply see to many of them and have gotten bored of 'extreme arobatics, but merciless killer' characters so much that I feel like I need to not accept them.

Doing frontflips over the battlefield is never an acceptable battle tactic.
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I will see what I can do.
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I'm working on a character too ;)
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I'll have my character posted either tonight, or early tomorrow!
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@dreamingflowers @Valhalla Looking forward to both!
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Before I continue I have a couple of questions.
Would a character with little to no fighting ability be suitable for where we are going with this roleplay. I was looking to fill the role of a camp follower because that looks incredibly fun :)
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'tis the main reason I added that in after all. I suppose it is possible, although you probably won't be directly involved in the bloody task of murder.

Or perhaps you will. Doesn't take much skill to stab someone with a knife!
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Also cooking up a character. But might change it to balance the roster.
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Edited my sheet, hopefully everything is in order.
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@Eschatologist

Looks good! But I'd like either a picture to complete this or a bigger appearance section.
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I am going to have to withdraw from the roleplay. I don't have the time I thought I would have to dedicate.
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I can understand, no hard feelings.
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[Moved to CS Tab]
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Very nice character! My compliments.

@AtomicNut@OneEyedChurro@Eschatologist You guys are free to drop the CS's in the character bin, by the way.
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If you're struggling with the codes, you're missing a [/i] on family and you miss a [ on birthplace.
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So when do you think the IC will start for this game, GM?
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