[OOC] Mystery World // Misery World~ (Overlord RP) [High casual/Low advanced]

[Eklispe]

Yeahp, that whats I figured, just had too many ideas. Brutally honest is fine with me especially since you aren't even that brutal so far. One thing I found useful probably both to GM and myself was copy pasting the character sheet and making notes on it in red.

[Stella]

@Turboshitter

Just wanted to give you a heads about my character (Mercuria), I've planning on adding some "anti-magic" abilities to her spell list as well as shift around stat points towards spellcasting. Hopefully this won't cause too much problems. I'll post again when the changes have been made.

Edit: Changes have been made to Mercuria's Stats, Spells and Equipment to reflect her mage-assassin role. Please let me know if anything needs to be changed around. Thanks. :3 Link: roleplayerguild.com/posts/3152540

[Owlriel]

@Stella not to sound whiney but, I don't like how you can potentially control another persons character. Isn't it a little too tempting having that skill to use it? I don't know what type of person you are personally. So I'll hold onto faith you wont use it to godmodd.

[Dead Cruiser]

@Eklispe Alright, so, after deliberating, the conclusion that @Turboshitter And I have reached is that your characters don't match the style of other characters in the RP, nor that of characters in the anime. Jörmungandr is far more egregious in this department, but neither character seems to possess the "specialization" that is inherent in RPG characters. They seem built to be "awesome at everything" rather than "awesome at something specific." There are other, lesser gripes (such as Jor's stats being nonsensical and an NPC having access to Over-Rank magic), but these can be addressed later.

Our recommendation is to refine the concepts of your characters and tailor them to be better in line with the other characters in the RP. If I can prescribe some advice, do some quick google searches for Pathfinder classes, feats and spells, and use these as inspiration for your characters' classes, skills and spells.

[Eklispe]

Acknowledged.

[Eklispe]

@Dead Cruiser@Turboshitter
Sorry about the messup on class and racial job level, fixed those to be correct. Removed a good deal of Jor's shaman skills putting him more in line with the tanky trucker that can 1v1 anything and gets stronger the longer he fights. nerfed some of his items. Not sure what you meant by wonky stats other than his class/race levels which I fixed. Perhaps you meant the special stat, the reason I have it so high is to account for his super strong racial things like tail powers and scale powers and regen powers which I thought that stat accounted for. Ditched my NPCs over-rank for now just for simplicity's sake. As far as I can see that was the only gripe with her. Figured you might have had a problem with the summon number of her so I limited each summon spell to only having 100 out at a time. Anything else? I think I got it pretty good. As always, since we're on the internet I have skin made of stone so don't worry about offending me.

Jör

Name(s):

• Jörmungandr(most commonly used and shortened to Jör, pronounced YOUR-mun-gand)
• _eRektile
• MegaSceptile
• The Wingless Dragon
• Lizard Lord

Gender:

• Male

Height:

• 250 cm.

Weight:

• 150 kg

Race:

• Lizardman

Title:

• Lizard God

Job:

• Lizard God Level 1
• (R)Scale Lord Level 10
• (R)Five Limb Fighter Level 5
• (R)Shaman 5
  Etc.

Residence:

• Guild Base

Alignment:

• Chaotic Good

Sense of Justice:

• 200

Racial level:

• 100

Job level:

• 0

Stats:

• HP: 100
• MP: 50
• PHY. ATK: 100
• PHY. DEF: 50
• AGILITY: 100
• MAG. ATK: 5
• MAG. DEF: 50
• RESIST: 100
• SPECIAL: 300

Spells:

• Message-Duh
• Return- Teleports the user to a preset location that can be altered through a small ritual.
• Perfect Frost Armour- A spell that invalidates frost damage and applies a heavy move speed and attack speed slow to any attackers or any who is attacked. Triggers off of physical and magical attacks. Only one "perfect armour" spell can be active at a time.
• Trial By Combat: Remove either player's abilities to use magic and skills, reducing the battle to passive skills, armour, and raw stats.

Skills:

Racial Skills

• Perfect Scales: A powerful lizard-man skill developed from extreme training. The user's scales become perfect, allowing them to reflect anything that would affect them. Spells are reflected, physical attacks turn against their owner, and barriers simply explode upon contact with a perfect scale. However this skill's cost increases rapidly the more times it is used, meaning that it should be used only when needed. Passively these scales grant defenses equal to most mid-high tier armor and stacks with it.
• Scale Assault: A lizard man with this skill can launch his scales at enemies like missiles, in addition perfect scales may be activated even on these detached scales. If an area without scales is attacked damage taken is doubled until they grow back, within half a minute or so.
• Heaven Bolt: An attack that involves jumping into the sky and spinning to gather force and speed. Then the user comes down in an axe kick with devastating force, alternatively the tail can be used to attack as well.
• Don't look into his eyes- If Jör makes eye contact with someone he can affect them with a crippling fear the will make less resistant enemies cower helplessly. Even high level players are forced to flinch from the sudden wave of killing intent._{Description not stolen from naruto}
• Permanent Strike- A wrenching palm strike attack with a semi-unique effect, it causes the struck target to be unable to receive healing for up to an hour.
• Awe-Inspiring Might- Jör can take such an impressive stance for such an amazing punch, that his opponent becomes rooted to the ground, unable to dodge the blow. Reputed to be strong enough to destroy mountains, it bears a day long cooldown.
• Mirage Assault- Jör can essentially attack while maintaining the illusion of doing nothing at all. He can stand in-front of an opponent with arms folded, then they can suddenly be reeling from a savage unseen kick to the stomach, all the while it looks as though he hasn't moved. Uses this most often to fool people into thinking he's some kind of mage or has telepathy.
• Strength of The Lizard God- This skill passively allow the user to mentally dominate any lizard-men as well amplifying all natural traits of a lizardman. This skill can be activated to transform into a being with nearly world-class power. The user can teleport to anything in sight at will and all parameters are tripled. Status effects do not affect him, he has every kind of sight imaginable. Shortly put, he becomes a deity for 10 seconds. After this time wears off he is knocked out and his HPs can't be raised above 1 for 24 hours. Of course he has a hideout several hundred miles underground that he teleports to at the start of the 10th second for just this purpose but still.
• Acutail- A series of five rapid strikes with his tail that paralyzes the opponent in the legs, arms, and chest, in that order.
• Furious Assault- A skill that involves attacking with all five limbs at the same time, a distinctive skill of the Five Limb Fighter class
• Power Of A Race- A skill that can only be learned after achieving certain level in racial jobs. This skill prevents both the target and the user from using class skills, simply by activating.
  
  Passive Skills
• It'll grow back- Lizard men naturally have an extraordinary ability to regenerate, allowing them to heal constantly, especially out of combat. Even in combat a missing limb can be grown back in minutes allowing them to thrive in battles of attrition.
• Burr- Lizard-men naturally take massive amounts of frost damage
• Second Eyelid- Lizard-men naturally have a high resistance to any sight-impairing effect.
• Toxin Resistance:
• Slashing Resistance:
• Water Breathing + Swift Swim:
• Lizardman Strength:
• If It Fits It Hits- Jör's tail is a powerful weapon in its own right but through intense training he has gained the ability to extend his tail at will to nearly triple its normal length of 200cm, making it a fearsome tool for attack or defense.
• 5 Limb Style- A key point of this 'class' that increases the user's AGI and PHY. ATK with every attack, the bonus gained is doubled if no limbs are used twice within five hits.
• Second Skin- Jör can shed his skin to regain 50% of his hp as while as removing any negative effects on him. This will trigger naturally if an attack would otherwise kill him.
• Back To A Wall- If Jör is below 20% hp he begins fighting with a bestial ferocity, gaining massively increased PHY. ATK and Agility. The bonus increases the further he drops below 20%
• Focus in Body and Spirit- A shaman skill that allows the holder to add his MAG. DEF and PHY. DEF to make the new total of both.

Equipment:

• Scale God's Set- A powerful set of armor that has rather unique requirements. Not only must you be a lizardmen, you can't have any class levels. In exchange each part gives powerful effects and superb stat boosts.
• Scale God's Headpiece- A tribal bone mask, it allows the user to see an opponents moves slightly before they happen, providing an invaluable assistance in combat.
• Scale God's Trappings- The chest-piece of the set, it consists of majorly bone with leather trailings and several attached trinkets. It allows the user to gain increased PHY. and MAG. DEF when they receive damage.
• Scale God's Boots- The combined legs and footwear of the set. It follows the bone theme providing a formidable looking carapace. It allows the user a sort of tremor-sense, detecting any footsteps within a large radius and permitting a small amount of control over the earth.
• Scale God's Shoulders- Bone shoulders and arm coverings. They enhance a Lizardmen's natural poison resistance to 100% and can be used to emit a powerful burst of poison that hits everything in a massive radius. The poison slows and constantly deals damage until cured. It initially deals a puny amount of damage but it doubles with every tick.
• Scale God's Tailpiece- A leathery wrapping for Jör's tail it has a fearsome spike on the end and can extend with his tail. This item nearly gives the tail sentience, allowing it to automatically respond to attacks or seize upon opportunities that even the user is unaware of.
• Scale God's Ornaments- A series of trinkets that occupy the majority of other slots granting stats for the most part. Feathers that adore the chest-piece allow him to fly at a quarter of his speed.
• Scale God's Gauntlets- Bone gloves that encompass the wearer's hands. They multiply the user's strength and grant additional attack speed and damage with every attack.

Bio:

Jör was yet another kid working his way out of highschool and feeling overwhelmed, under-prepared, and in short not good enough. Of course that was nothing new, after all he'd had to deal with that all the way up to highschool as well. Not the greatest student, not the greatest athlete. Not even that funny, but Jör was good at video games.

Ha not, he was abysmal. Others would play through puzzle games and understand it with east, naturally understand how fighting games work, create strategies easily for games like Age of Empires. Not Jör, he could only make it through with guides and walkthroughs. But hey, everyone else did it too right? Even for that, Jör sucked at multiplayer games more than he did at anything else.

Never the less he was determined to make a new start here. After looking meticulously through guide after guide, eating breathing and sleeping the wiki pages, he finally made a character. This character had a purpose, to be better than anyone. Not at everything of course, that was impossible, his goal was simply to be able to beat anyone. What he couldn't do through natural understanding he would do through thousands of theory crafted characters. His character was set up to take other characters out of their comfort zones, whether it be might or magic. To be able to take insane boss monsters by himself, to be able to beat anything. Sure they mocked him when he was level 60 with no class levels yet. They just didn't understand.

He wasn't playing for early game. He was playing for late. Finally Jör hit max level and gained the ghost class, Lizard God. His equipment and classes complete, he was ready for the world. But the world wasn't ready for him. He tore apart the PvP part of the game with ease, the highest level characters fell before him like wheat to the scythe, except for females who he didn't fight. Jör of course did the same to the PvE part as well, rumored to have even taken down a raid boss single handedly. He requested to join ToastyEnji’s guild to make a point. He didn't join a top PvP or PvE guild. Jör joined a banking guild, why? To prove he could do whatever he wanted more or less.

Other:

• Girls make him awkward.

Iladar

Name(s):

• Iladar

Gender:

• Female

Height:

• 175 cm

Weight:

• 60 kgs

Race:

• Human

Title:

• General Of The Endless Army

Job:

• Commander (5)
• Summoner (15)
• Planar Caller (15)
• Elemental Master (10)
• Enchantress (10)
  Etc.

Residence:

• Entrance

Alignment:

• Chaotic Neutural

Sense of Justice:

• -100, whatever benefits me, but if I can cause some chaos why not?

Racial level:

• 0

Job level:

• 80

Stats:

• HP: 50
• MP: EXCEEDS LIMIT
• PHY. ATK: 0
• PHY. DEF: 5
• AGILITY: 10
• MAG. ATK: 50
• MAG. DEF: 10
• RESIST: 100
• SPECIAL: 0

Spells:

• Hell Itself: Open several massive gates to the demon realm nearby that constantly spew forth demon battalions. Each battalion has a is a group of 5 tank demons, 5 physical attackers, and 5 magical attackers. The gates close at the user's command or after 1000 demons have spawned. Only 100 may be out at a time.
• Nature Itself: Call upon the land for aid. Wild beasts and plants will spawn all around the target area and obey the user's command. In addition Primal Elementals of various types will spawn periodically. Spawning stops at the user's command or after 1000 creatures have spawned. Only 100 may be out at a time.
• Heaven Itself: Divine portals open above the user, allowing angels to come down from above. They form the same group as the demons, but come with 5 healers instead of magical attackers. The portals close after 1000 angels have spawned. Only 100 may be out at a time.
• Command Tent: An ability that raises the caster up on an earth pillar, allowing them to survey an area. Any ally that views that tent gains extra stats. The caster can not take or deal damage while on the command tent. Can only remain standing when allies outnumber enemies.
• Commander's Cry: A powerful verbal spell that rallies all who hear it, granting a massive stat boosts and giving them the undying effect temporarily, allowing them to fight after their HPs reach 0.
• Shower of Life: A spell that grants healing over a massive area, both in a spurt of healing energy as well as over time, the longer the caster channels this spell the greater the healing becomes.
• Army of Doubles: An illusion spell that creates a duplicate of whatever unit the caster summons.
• Creation Itself: Summon hundreds of creatures of random types and levels between 1-80. A total of 5,000 levels of monsters can be created with this spell. Only 100 may be out at a time.
• Corpse Explosion: A spell that allows the user's summons to stay on the field once slain and when the spell is activated, they explode for damage equal to 50% of their max hp, diminishing the further away the victims are.
• Their Body, My Shield: A toggle spell, whenever the user would be hit by an attack or spell, they can instead teleport a summon to them and block the attack or spell with it for a small mana cost.
• Emergency Trick: Whenever the caster would take lethal damage this spell activates, blinding all nearby enemies, teleporting the caster up to half a mile away, and summoning a clone of the caster in front of the source of damage.
• Force of Will: A commander spell that causes all summons in an area to fly towards the target dealing damage proportional to their HPs.
• Battlefield: A powerful commander spell that creates a 'battlefield' that no enemies or allies can leave until an hour has passed, the user cancels it, or combat ceases.
• Befounding Magic: An enchantress spell that puts all nearby enemies into a trance, preventing them from moving for several minutes.
• Overpower: A powerful key enchantress spell that dominates the target's mind if they are weak enough allowing the caster to control them.
• Mistress's Wrath: An enchantress spell that causes any summoned or dominated targets to gain massively increased offense stats for a short period of time.
• Overrank Magic, The Creator Himself: An over rank spell sometimes referred to as the gift that just keeps giving. After half a hour of preparation a powerful level 101 being is summoned. Not only is it capable of fighting most parties to a standstill by itself, it also is a powerful summoner. It can summon creatures of level 100 and lower at will, generating an endless army if it chooses to. This monster will stay out for up to an hour at most before vanishing. The cooldown on this spell is one week.
• Overrank Magic, The Infinite Gate: An over rank spell that is infamous for being used to take any enemy down. As the name implies it opens a gate that summons an infinite amount of random creatures. All creatures are a minimum of level 100 and there is both a max and minimum limit of 100 creatures being out. The gate can be open for up to a day and is on cooldown for a week after the gate closes.

Skills:

• N/A

Equipment:

• Alexander's helmet: A legendary Roman helmet. It grants the wearer's summons increased Mana and grants the ability to telepathically communicate, allowing battle plans to be formed with summoned creatures rather then senseless charging.
• Army boots: Powerful legendary class boots. They increase the wielder's HP and defense stats for each nearby ally.
• Tactician's Spyglass: A relic item. It allows the user to view an enemy's current stats, buffs and debuffs, equipment, resistances and weaknesses.
• Leader's Lifegaurd: A fancy looking bejeweled chestplate rather typical of female gear that links the user's life force with nearby willing allies. Any damage taken by the user is instead taken by linked allies.
• Guardian Gloves: Leather gloves that can be launched forward at an opponent and attempt to restrain them.

Bio:

• An NPC created by Jör to be a foil and to help him become less awkward with girls. She's rather overbearing and her skill-set is also rather opposite, yet similar to his. Technically she can do absolutely nothing on her own, yet with her armies she can defeat things that even Jör would find difficult to defeat.

Other:

• ???

[Lord Zee]

Blue text if human, yellow for demihuman, red if heteromorphic.

Quick question, my guy is a human but I was told to change the text to yellow, when it says humans are blue? Sorta confused, am I like a different human from the new worlds humans or something else? Am I missing something?

[Dead Cruiser]

Alright, so, @Eklispe, you apparently didn't understand what we said. Our main issue isn't with how powerful Jor is (though it is an issue), it's that he lacks cohesion as a character. He basically resembles the prototypical munchkin/minmaxer character, only completely lacking in self-awareness. You yourself have created a ridiculously-designed character built to exploit a particular concept to the maximum extent possible, but seem completely unaware of it. If your intention was to create "a tongue-in-cheek reference to absurdly optimized RPG builds," we could accept that, but as it stands your character is only "the ultimate dude that is awesome and unbeatable."

Take note of how many skills and abilities you've written that say things like "total immunity," or "perfect defense," or "100% resistance" or even "removed everything but..." (I'm paraphrasing), and then compare that quantity to each other character. See a staggering difference? I sure do. Not to mention his absurd stat total of over 800, including his special stat which still shouldn't be over 100.

What also bugs me is the lack of thought put into the backstory. There was a perfect opportunity to work the guild deeply into Jor's backstory, but instead it was tacked on as an afterthought.

Iladar is not quite as bad but still has some glaring issues. First of all, her summoing spells need to be reduced by a few orders of magnitude. Ainz in the anime had levels as a dedicated summoner class, but never had more than two or three minions. You should probably be topping out around ten or twenty for your top-level skills. Also, it doesn't stand to reason that Jor would create an NPC to "help with girls," as YGGDRASIL did not afford actual sapience to NPCs during its activity, and any personality they may have possessed would be limited to a text box describing them.

Basically an itinerary that will help immensely: watch the anime (you'll get an idea of what player characters should actually be like quite quickly), look over the other (accepted) characters, and conceptualize your character as a character, not a list of powers and skills.

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Quick question, my guy is a human but I was told to change the text to yellow, when it says humans are blue? Sorta confused, am I like a different human from the new worlds humans or something else? Am I missing something?

@Lord Zee

Honestly, I'm as confused as you are. Good question for Turbo tomorrow afternoon.

[Eklispe]

Dang math is hard, I feel like an idiot. Sorru. Admittedly the throw in to the guild at the end was slightly pathetic, I was simply reluctant to do too much with the guild for fear of ruining things. Though I'm nearly wounded at your appraisal of my character. I thought I made a decently interesting guy who sucked at stuff and decided to pour his heart and soul into making a good character, not just a bundle of numbers and letters. As to the logic of his NPCs creation no one ever said he was smart and all his actions had to be clearly logical. A poor substitute is better than none, talking to a girl that doesn't respond is still talking to a girl, albeit more creepy. I guess it seems like a bad gimmick to make him more unique but I didn't intend it that way even if I seemed to have wrote it that way. Sorry if that last revision seemed rushed, as you said I didn't fully understand it. Mostly I overestimated our godlike-ness in general in terms of abilities and got slightlyvery carried away with theory crafting a cool character rather than an interesting one. My next revision will have some more thought I promise.

[Dead Cruiser]

Alright, glad I'm getting my point across. I apologize if I seemed harsh, but I needed to make sure that you saw the weaknesses of your character as clearly as we the GMs do.

Good luck with your next revision.

[Stella]

@Dead Cruiser@Turboshitter

Sorry to bring this up again - my character, Mercuria, was already approved and I've added some spells as per Turbo's suggestion (Link to sheet: roleplayerguild.com/posts/3152540). Would like some confirmation that the CS remains approved after these changes, I don't want to just go ahead and post it in the CS tab and unintentionally cause problems. Thanks very much.

[Dead Cruiser]

@StellaThe one thing that I recommend cutting is Globe of Invulnerability. As magic is her primary weakness (and the only way she can be harmed), I can allow active effects for her to counteract it, but passive magic resistances go too far in mitigating her weaknesses.

[Stella]

@StellaThe one thing that I recommend cutting is Globe of Invulnerability. As magic is her primary weakness (and the only way she can be harmed), I can allow active effects for her to counteract it, but passive magic resistances go too far in mitigating her weaknesses.

@Dead Cruiser

No problem, will remove it right away. With that changed, should everything with the CS be acceptable?

Personally I think Mercuria's character Bio could use some more background history about her creator. I may make improvements to it when I have the opportunity and time.

[urukhai]

@Dead Cruiser@Turboshitter

I should probably run some spells by you guys as well, especially since their over-rank. They are attached to my char sheet on the char tab, but are also in a post on the previous page (mainly for the description of the changes to the last spell)

[Turboshitter]

Hey guys! Sorry for the radio silence the last few days, I just started at my new job!

Okay, so. Approval is pending on urukhai and Stella's new content. Who is still in the process of drafting a character sheet and who still hasn't given me their skype?

[Dead Cruiser]

Alright, @Stella and @urukhai, you guys are clear for your new stuff.

I'm still working on my second NPC... Racial abilities for a Werewolf are far less straightforward than those for Vampires or Zombies...

[RedDusk]

@Turboshitter Gratz on the new job man. I wish I had one myself. (Well, I kinda do but it sucks, despite the free booze.) Anyway, how many have we got so far?

[Aka]

Should i just repost my template XD or just outright change my character picture? XD

[Eklispe]

@Turboshitter Still working on my revisions, skype name is Michael Bratton, same prof pic.

[Stella]

Just posted up my character sheet in the CS tab. Also just finished setting up (again) my Skype: Stella Yella with a red-haired cartoonish character profile pic.