Athinar

Northome (Near future/sci-fi Mafia RP)

@Vilhelm@sakurasan@Sovi3t
Sweet. Seems to be enough people to start, at least. I'll have the OOC up by tomorrow, at least.

Falling Skies: In our Final Hour

@Athinar I'll be completely honest with you: I'm not incredibly enthused about this character...

The Things

Maybe its the whole celebrity thing, but something about this character just screams "I'm the main character!" which is very much not something I'm looking for. I'm looking for an average joe soldier, with character depth and room for development to make him/her unique and engaging, but not the constant center of attention.

His personality is a vague, sorta humble, sorta I-get-along-with-everyone kinda deal, and while there is nothing wrong with being humble or amicable, his personality just seems kinda... 2-dimensional. Half of the personality blurb is just exposition from the viewpoint of another character, and while I appreciate the cleverness of making the 'psychological analysis' look like an analysis made by a doctor, there's just not enough substance in it for me to get a good picture of Michael's personality other than sorta humble, sorta agreeable.

Same goes for his background information- again, the whole logged conversation thing is very clever and in character with the idea of a soldier's dossier, there's no meat in it. He was born, he did this, he joined the army, he was good at the army, now he's here. There's no substance to the tiny paragraph dedicated to his actual background. He was born on earth to a wealthy family? Cool, who is this wealthy family? what sort of power or pull do they have in the UEE? How did he become interested in acting? How did his career take off like it did? Why did he go enlisted instead of Officer Corps? How did he prove himself as a soldier? I have none of the answers to these questions, just the fact that "he did the thing" - as my longtime Falling Skies players like to say.

In short, this character has no real depth to him.

@vietmyke

Ah, poo. Oh well. I'll keep some ideas, but nix the celebrity status and ad some more depth. Be back in a bit.

Falling Skies: In our Final Hour

The Celebrity

Michael McCallahan

Age

24

Gender

Male

Nickname

Prettyboy (Because of his looks, and his celebrity status.)

Rank

Private First Class (Scouting/Infiltration/Stealth)

Psychological Analysis

When you would first read Michael's name on a personnel list, you would assume that he's just another one of those actors who join the military to gain prestige, and nothing else. However, while he was forced into joining the military by the IEN (Imperial Entertainment Network, who had purchased his contract from his former employers, UE (Universal Entertainment,) he has not demonstrated any desire for promotion, any "glory hounding", nor any problems with authority, like most other young and popular actors who join. He was already a sociable person before joining, and he has, so far, gotten along with most of the squad he has been stationed with. Currently, the network is considering making a show based on his experiences, which would be both extremely popular and good for civilian morale, although we are currently unable to know how Michael himself would react. -Dr. Junko Thomas, Military Psychologist for the UEE

Military Record

<19:32 02.24.95>
/BEGIN LOG/
19:32 :<Maj. ------- ------->: I don't see why any of this is necessary.

19:32 :<------ ---->: Answer the question, Major.

19:32 :<Maj. ------->: Ugh... fine. My assessment of the young Michael is that he's a decent young man, and decent soldier, not unfit for combat. Can I go back to my work, now?

19:32 :<------>: No. View this, and give a revised assessment.

/TRANSCRIPT 615-ALPHA/
...Michael himself came from a wealthy family, born on Terra himself, and was always interested in acting, getting a leading role on a popular show at age twelve, and from there, made several movies. He trained under some of the best physical instructors on his own time, and thus, has had the physicality necessary for the military, breezing through Basic. He got a little bit of a hard time from the other soldiers in his battalion for being an actor, but he proved himself through repeated exemplary examples in soldiery, squad tactics, and his overall affable personality. Overall....

19:34 :<------>: Do you have anything to say about this?

19:34 :<Maj. ------->: Not really? It's a bit on the boy by the news. A bit too much like propaganda, but it seems harmless.

19:34 :<------>: It's setting up the boy as a hero of the Empire.

19:34 :<Maj. ------->: That's not my concern. What matters is if he can do his duty or not. Now can I please go to my work?

19:34 :<------>: I suppose. I'll be seeing you later, Major.

/LOG ENDED/

Equipment

- KraftWorks Cybernetic Eye with telescopic, thermal, night-vision, and motion-tracking enhancements.
- Standard combat exoskeleton (Painted in a black stealth polymer and lighter armor for quicker movement).
- The Scud Booster, a rocket pack that lets Michael move incredibly quickly. Unfortunately, this pack requires him to ditch half of his ammunition, so it is not used in standard deployments, only when he is specifically on a forward scouting mission.
- ACS Rifle in SpecOps Carbine mode.
- Twin Silenced SN-1 Machine Pistols.
- Four Electron Grenades.
- 1'6" Plasma-Edged Machete.

Finished.

Falling Skies: In our Final Hour

I think you guys will enjoy my addition. I'm still working on him, but I think he's a pretty solid concept,

Create-A-Hero: A Superhero RPG (Closed)

@Dedonus "Punishment." Riiiiiiiight.

Create-A-Hero: A Superhero RPG (Closed)

@Dedonus Really. REAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAALLLY. I recall you like locking some of us in small, enclosed spaces. :3

Create-A-Hero: A Superhero RPG (Closed)

<Snipped quote by ghastlyInc>

I'll ease your mind a bit if you don't mind.

1. From my experience, CAH is a good rp to shake off the rust. Namely all the players are dirty perverts that it's less concern and more fun. If you were ever going to join an Adv, I recommend this one.

@Fallenreaper

Fixed that.

I'm back with a vengeance, baby! >:3

@KaiserElectric

Oh nooooooooooooooooooooooo :D

Northome (Near future/sci-fi Mafia RP)

Bump :(

Create-A-Hero: A Superhero RPG (Closed)

@Fallenreaper That was a fine nibble. Thank'ee kindly.

Create-A-Hero: A Superhero RPG (Closed)

I like to bite. :3