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Naruto: Years of Winter - an Alternate Universe

This is going to be a very silly question I feel. Are all eye techniques kekkei genkai? I don't recall other eye techniques outside of that, apart form maybe senju modes if that counts. I wanted to create an eye technique with the theory of an insects compound eyes behind it, dividing the users vision into a smaller and smaller hexagonal grid with co-ordinates allowing greater accuracy.

I have been basing my character's family on the dragonfly (because why not, right?), but I felt that an eye kekkei genkai is somewhat cliche and was going to have extreme body control being it instead, hence the query :P

EDIT: Also the eyes seems to be a kind of... worse sharingan if they're a kekkei genkai

@McFazzer

Theoretically, dojutsu are not kekkei genkai per definition. Canonically, yes they are. And because of that, if they exist as non-kekkei genkai they are almost certainly hiden techniques. But if you want to do the compound eye thing, then that's 100% certainly a kekkei genkai, even if it is limited to 1 person and not a clan.

Eye kekkei genkai are cliché though I will agree.

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Review in red, you should be used to that

The only Kunoichi that is not Lady Hokage Mawa for nowxD

Ria Uchiha

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she got mad boobage

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Personalia

_{Information collected by the census office of Konohagakure}

“If I don't have to do it, I won't. If I have to do it, I'll make it quick.”

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Uchiha, Ria

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"Riri"
aw hell it's Rihanna

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n/a.

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Female.

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15

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Land Of Iron

Assume it will be explained how an Uchiha came from Land of Iron

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Uchiha

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Chuunin

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Psychology & History

_{"My name is Ria Uchiha"
no shit}

“Do it not for yourself and if you think it this way, you will be able to direct your sword.”

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Biography:Born into the forged code of ethics, The Land of Iron and raised in one of the most influential clans in the Hidden Village of The Leaves. The meaning behind the Jasmin Fanning Fire is set known as Ria born from Hiro Tokugawa and Mari Uchiha. Her name itself is a name that her Father and Mother thought of, a story of a Samurai and a Police Woman's love during the old days of Winter and Jasmine Flowers. I see you still like police. I'm confused about Jasmin Fanning Fire, where did that come from

As a child of a Ninja and a Samurai, Ria grew with the mindset of both Ninja and Samurai. For her life is put forth great effort in matters of learning. She learned how to read books concerning military matters, and direct her attention exclusively to the virtues of loyalty and filial piety . Furthermore the idea of a Ninja is to serve within the shadows and execute their job within the shadows and because of this Ria developed the mentality and philosophy called Dual Handed Prayer; as loyal as the samurai and as decisive as the ninja and as swift as a falcon therefore her animal motif is a falcon and jasmine. In short it means that a Falcon's scent is like Jasmine for it smells of loyalty hence allegiance to the country, the village, and the clan and it's wings fans the will of fire such as the Uchiha's affinity to fire and it's swiftness of flight which resembles resolve and sword. I'm not sure about any of this but I have to admit I like jasmin so whatever. I'm clueless about what this all means though

During her Academy Days and Early Days as a Genin, she spent most of it in a fruitful manner, applying her parents' teachings which one day would be a combined belief, dream and goal wise however is harder to apply. She learned to live in a balance way and distaste the belief of just dying for X reasons. Not to mention, she struggled during the finals of Chuunin Exams by fighting a fellow Uchiha with a developed sharingan of two swirls which she also has but the guy uses it better and had no choice but to fight dirty and throw dirt on the guy's in an opportune time. It was a hard match because it's the first time she broke two of her swords in a close range fight even though decisiveness made up for it. After the fight, she developed Tsubamegaeshi and learned Chidori from scrolls, she wanted to learn Chidori because it suited her style which was lightning and an additional cut for Tsubamegaeshi.

Personality:
Ria a competitive, subtle, passionate, hot blooded, and observant. She hates losing and is a perfectionist when called for, at the same time she is boyish due to her closeness with her father and mainly how she dresses. Ria believes that The Sword does not define the person and it's the person that defines the sword hence she applies this belief of hers on a daily basis. She also hates getting forced on things she hates and makes it quick which shows her child like personality.

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Uchiha Clan and Tokugawa Clan

One of the Founding Fathers of the Hidden Leaf in our alternate universe, the Sarutobi and Hyuga formed the village (and it was formed due to friendship and understanding, not war, unlike the Senju and Uchiha), they are recluse from anything social. They are sovereign Military Police Man Power of the Hidden Leaf. They are feared for their red eyes, the sharingan and eternal rivals with the Senju Clan. While some members harbor iniquity like hatred is power, Ria is anything but hatred.

The Tokugawa Clan is a real life Japanese clan, too So is the clan I used for my hokage, don't worry is one of the influential clans in The Land of Iron There are things different with the land of Iron too. I'll explain later, but basically a lot of people died during the winter (because the Land of Iron was already cold before the winter) and those that survived became very powerful, but also somewhat insane.. A Clan that forges their own swords and excels at the art of dual wielding. The Land Of Iron is neutral and carries a strong code of morality. Hiro Tokugawa, Ria's father is born from the clan itself and carries a neutral nature. The belief of the clan is "Forging Anything." It is believed that one cannot forge when the heart is not set into it, therefore set thy heart into forging not only skills but also character and ties.

Having been born from a Clan of Hatred and a Clan of Neutral, Ria sees herself neither an Uchiha nor a Tokugawa rather a citizen of the leaf. She also struggles of discrimination because of opposing beliefs of her clans, her father brought her to the leaf due to a strong demand of the Uchiha side. Although he sees her, it is only through birthdays of both Ria herself and her mother's because of internal family feuds, mainly Mari's side of the family.

It all happened at winter. At the age of 9, Ria stopped seeing her Father and the reason itself, she does not know, her mother on the other hand became focused on Police Work. As a result, she engrossed herself into learning whatever she can, mainly on dual wielding and her belief which is Falcon. What does her belief mean. How does one believe 'Falcon'? Do they call kami-sama falcon?

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Name: Hiro Tokugawa | Father | Age, 45 Land of Iron, Silversmith/Samurai and Master Dual Wielder. He left Ria due to family reasons.

Name: Mari Uchiha | Mother | 36, Land of Fire, Hidden Leaf, Police Force, Detective and the mother of 3. She gave birth to three children, the firstborn is a boy followed by Ria and her twin sister, Ria is the elder twin.

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When with people, it is as if as though Ria is hiding something. This is because she is afraid of expressing her true self and ideas. She is afraid of people not approving of herself and ideas and this resulted her creating a facade character. A character that cares only about herself but deep inside she just wants to share something such as her belief and her true self.

I have no dream- Says Ria herself. She couldn't care about having a dream where in reality she does. This is what makes her broken and a hypocrite. Despite having good foundations aka Jasmine Falcon Motif. Ria herself struggles internally on what does she really want in life.

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Combat Reports

_{From detailed reports from previous missions and academy sparring matches}

“A Falcon leaves no scent”

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Ria specializes in speed. Dual wielding and is a mid range fighter with the use of lightning and fire natures, lightning being her first element. She is an honorable fighter as she greets her opponent first, that it all depends on the worth, if the opponent is worthy, she'll acknowledge the name and have an intro. While she excels on the art of the sword, she also makes use of her Uchiha based skills such as using the wires, shurikenjutsu and windmill shuriken. As fast as she is, the weakest point of her is her glass cannon durability and her lack of chakra control which falls as a domino making her stamina drain faster.

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Ｋｅｋｋｅｉ ｇｅｎｋａｉ ｎａｍｅ

Sharingan

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A visual ocular jutsu, that of the uchiha clan. The power in the eyes, eyes that can see through genjutsu, able to see and predict and mimic and ninja's abilities that aren't bloodline traits. The sharingan has a multiple forms and multiple other abilities depending how far it is awaken. The normal and more common Sharingan is easy to spot out they are red eyes with three dots around the pupil with a circle that connects the three other dots.

Ｓｔｒｅｎｇｔｈｓ

Able to see through moderate genjutsu-(depending on the development of the sharingan.
Able to predict a ninja's jutsu and technique that aren't bloodline trait analyzes at great speeds. (Depends on level of opponent)
Able to see chakra and chakra natures.
Ria only have two swirls in each eye. Two tomoe? You realize that me and Hillan will probably never accept anything above three tomoe unless we have a LOT of character development, right?

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High Charka consumption
Quite a few blind spots outside the field of vision.
Further Awakened Abilities of the Sharingan does damage to the eyes.
Cannot copy other Kekkei Genkai because the sharingan only copies the basic 5 elements. Again, only Kakashi was known to be able to copy things. That's why he got the nickname copy ninja for it. If anyone could do it, he wouldn't have that nickname

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_{Jutsu names can be found here.}

Ａ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Chidori

as expected of you, lol. it's fine
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Great Dragon Fire

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Hiken: Tsubamegaeshi
Ｃ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Lightning BeastAs a mock to most Uchiha that uses the generic move, she does not have the signature move, Great Fireball. kk
Great Dragon Fire She utilizes this more with wires and anything that is oily. kk

Ｄ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

[url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url]

Ｅ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

[url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url]

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Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Hiken: Tsubamegaeshi (Sword Style: Swallowing Reverse Turn) dope name tbh, it matches the names we know from the anime itself.

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B Rank

All Ranges

Max Range of 15 meters

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

"This technique style of sword reputedly so quick and precise that it could strike down a bird in mid-flight"- Ria. It has three strikes. Striking downward from above and then instantly striking again in an upward motion from below. The third strike's from below toward the rear and then upward at an angle, like an eagle climbing again after swooping down on its prey.

As for its weakness. Despite how deadly and flashy the attack is to the eye. By all means, it is simple. Just simply it is just slashes done in multiple segments swung fast by the user by embedding their chakra. It can be blocked by anyone, swordsmaster and anyone with power and skill. At the long run, it is just a sword performing multi slashes. fair enough

This is Ria's signature technique. She developed it after her fight against her fellow clansman during the Chuunin Exams, Final Round. She noticed that swallows fly away because of the earth trembling and wind passing.

It can also be used in launching chakra slashes like the conventional Samurai. When Ria uses this technique, a pink aura oozes from the sword resembling a cherry blossom. She'd need to know the chakra blade technique for that IIRC

Repeat this form as many times as you need.

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Amatsuki(雨月, "Rainy Moon") and Karaware(雨月, "Rainy Moon")

Amaware The Sky That Rains The Cracked Moon.

Ｗｅａｐｏｎ， ｔｏｏｌ， ｏｒ ｏｂｊｅｃｔ ｔｙｐｅ

Dual Swords

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Ria's signature swords. Amatsuki is on her right and Karaware is on her left. Amatsuki is white and karaware is black. She can stream her fire and lightning chakras on to the swords too.

fine

Muramasa

Muramasa The Bloodlusted Sword

Ｗｅａｐｏｎ， ｔｏｏｌ， ｏｒ ｏｂｊｅｃｔ ｔｙｐｅ

Katana

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Ria's sword. Legends have it, the sword is a vengeful sword. Surprisingly at the hands of an Uchiha, it can be considered a sword of hatred. This is the sword that is hyped to be the sword of bloodlust. Where in reality, it's just a regular katana. Ria can stream her fire and lightning chakras into it.

fine

Repeat this form as many times as you need.

Omit any parts of the CS skeleton that you do not need - though some fields will be required.

In short: look at the comments I made, and edit it accordingly, and then let me know when you've edited it. It's a good basis, but there are some things that need clarification (I still don't get the jasmin eagle motif thing..). Overall I'm satisfied though, just needs some more detailing imho.

I humbly present my character sheet. I aimed for a female Uchiha and I was wondering to take out or add in majority of the CS. So many questions too like Chidori. Does she qualify as Chuunin? Sure

I also made a custom clan. We may collab depending on what ideas you gained for it. I am loving the concept and belief you and Hilian made. I'm a fan of world building so yeah.. is it okay if I made a custom clan? Yeah, I'm surprised at the lack of custom clans/kekkei genkai, but yes. You can make custom clans.

Chidori have so many variations. Does that mean I will only be able to use one variant. If I can use more than one like Chidori Current, does that count as a second A rank? Does Chidori variants fall under one jutsu and not another jutsu? We have talked about it in the past and we've told you that we generally want to see it as a new jutsu.

It's fine making her two swirled right or should I go for three swirls? We won't rise above 3 tomoe for now, so it's probably best to have 1 or 2 so that you can have character progression towards 3. It's your call.

I tried making her like that. As much as possible, I am refraining from making more jutsus. The user itself is the definition, not the jutsu defines the user. We've taught you well.

Overall, I focused more on the character than the jutsus itself good and looked at Chuunin examples and the best example I got was Mū, kudos to the author who made him. I let the judgement be in your hands. I have lots of questions in the tip of my tongue too so these are what I can thinkfor now.

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Uchiha vs "Hyuuga"

Not really a fair fight innit

@Masaki Haruna

Masaki, good to see your OOC commenting still makes me confused as ever.

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If a trait associated with a Kekkei Genkai is not associated with a jutsu in canon, but appears to be an 'at-will' ability, should it be counted as an innate trait or made into a technique?

@Asura

That depends. You're talking about making weapons out of bones? I'd say make it into a custom jutsu, and if it causes you to go over the limit, then I'll see it through the fingers.

@Buddha You make a good point with that but the thing is that uchiha are naturally gifted with ninjutsu and genjutsu. They usually also have fire or lightning natures. Both of which are good long range which the Hyuga aren't. Esentially it's a battle of who the better of the two actually is. Like much of naruto should have been. Not the mage anime/manga it became.

@Demous

Genjutsu is taken care of directly because Hyuga can see chakra and chakra paths and therefore can detect genjutsu. I think only the most powerful genjutsu's (aka anything Itachi pulled from his ass) couldn't be dispelled. Literally anything else was fair game.

Ninjutsu.. I mean, besides the fact that Hyuga can see chakra buildup and thus can tell when someone is preparing ninjutsu, they also can dispel it more or less by fucking around with the chakra.

Furthermore, the point I'm making here is that the Uchiha are not some badass clan of shinobi. Not everyone is Madara, Sasuke or god forbid Itachi. Most Uchiha shinobi (which only made up a small part of the clan) never even awaken their sharingan, let alone unlock two tomoe. It just seems like every Uchiha will obtain an EMS or something because Itachi killed the whole clan, making Itachi, Madara and Sasuke the only survivors. Coincidentally they are all 'geniuses'. So it seems like the Uchiha clan are OP. In reality, Kishimoto just made it look like they were.

A standard, average Uchiha wouldn't be anywhere as close to powerful as any of those three.

Hyuga have wind chakra, though, and they use it fairly often.

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The Hyuga also have Chakra natures, they just chose not to use them. Not to mention the fact that they can be easily blocked. In fact, a Hyuga like Neji could take a chunk out of the Sususan'o and dispel Amatrasu with the Gentle Fist. Think the writer chose not to explore that interaction.

@LokiLeo789

On the other hand, Neji was a genius and thus was more capable of matching Sasuke, Madara, Obito or Itachi. If we look at Hinata, who isn't a genius, it'd be a lot more iffy if she could do any of that.

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Regardless, thanks for keeping the discussion civil.

Any comparison that is made is made by characters that were geniuses. Shisui? Genius. Itachi? Genius. Sasuke? Emo, but genius (it was claimed he was anyway). Madara? Literal shinobi god. By that definition alone we can already assume the comparisons are heavily biased.

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@Hillan At that point you're entering such niche concepts that I'd say "just make it a custom kekkei genkai" though.

Naruto: Years of Winter - an Alternate Universe

@Hillan As I pointed out on Skype, this would be useless as you can already "see through obstacles" and see chakra signatures. The only time this would be useful would be when fighting a robot (Asura path, or Savato's recycled Asura path shinobi).

But we have no plans of adding either of these.

@LokiLeo789 I have always been of the opinion that the Byakugan would always win against a regular sharingan. Statistically, only a very small percentage (say 5%) will ever unlock a sharingan. For Hyuga, this is 100%.

Of those 5% only 0.001% will ever unlock a MS (most Uchiha might not even progress past two tomoe).

Byakugan? Only hard training is required.

Byakugan will statistically always win in war.

Now one on one, I argue that even then the Byakugan is stronger. Seeing tenketsu and SEALING them is extremely powerful. I'm not sure why everyone thinks that Uchiha are so super strong. It only takes a mediocre Hyuga to take down a regular Uchiha.

I honestly don't think you need additions at this point. But I'm open to your ideas.

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@Asura I prefer the rinne-bone.

B!tchfest: a healthy release for our non-roleplay annoyances.

@CrazyShadowy hate to say it but that is literally all online dating is

arguments over paranoia

like, there's nothing more. of course this is just what i think, so feel free to disregard what i think. but i think every 16 year old has been there, and i hope every 16 year old learned something from it.

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@LokiLeo789 I'm conflicted because this sounds very similar to space-time jutsu and we generally do not accept space-time jutsu because it just create plotholes everywhere. There are exceptions, but this sounds like it's just insane reflex times.

IIRC, Sharingan already has this, too. The eyes move so fast that everything appears in slow motion. Different concept, same premise.

Furthermore, I can see some hole here in the sense that this sounds like some sort of 'activated' ability. The catch is that byakugan doesn't have, say, 'jutsu' that have to do with the dojutsu (unlike the sharingan, which have a lot of jutsu). A byakugan ability is, when activated, always active. Any application of jutsu afterwards is purely done by the user, and not the dojutsu.

As a result, that would mean that when the user activates their byakugan, they would more or less.. always see in slow motion.

That sounds very annoying to me.

I'm not sure. I'll sleep a night on it, but you can bother Hillan for his opinion.

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@Hillan Bwok bwok.

Naruto: Years of Winter - an Alternate Universe

Here.

You can read some of the history already. I'll continue working on it tomorrow, when it's not 1.30 AM.