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The15thSpycrab said
Tavon and Tarvin, Vincus and Vizlin, Lyah and Zaya. Why are you guys making such similar names? It's confusing the heck out of me.


Oi, I was first with Vincus, so Vizlin is not my problem ;). I came up with Ron, supposedly the only relatively normal name in the entire RP.
I'd say to heck with the background, tweak the god a little bit and act out the god's history within the RP. Surprise is by revealing things in the RP that we didn't know yet. Maybe your god's powers were locked away for a purpose, but the other's have forgotten?

As much as you don't set in stone in your background can be changed as you get to know your god better trough character development...
LordMarwain said
I did enjoy reading that. The only problem is that now I have to split up my god. Or say that this talk with Tavon and your god happened before Tavon met Lyah. I will write an answer tomorrow, I'm going to sleep right now.


I'm a little confused now. I didn't know Tavon had spoken to anyone since your introduction post. I might've misread something, but I simply assumed the other characters you were controlling weren't Tavon himself. If I must I'll edit it for continuity's sake.

LordMarwain said
Just a face in the crowd. Nothing more, nothing less. Dressed like a famer he walked among the people, enjoying the festival. If someone followed him with his eyes, he sometimes would be able to see a glimmer of gold in the man’s hair. Next to a market stall filled with sweets, he saw a man hugging a girl and a boy. The girl was wearing a golden ring and the boy was holding a goat. A man walking with the step of a hunter passed him. Someone stormed through the people next to him. A little girl accompanied by a little boy ran through an alley. For a moment the voice of a rather pompous man sounded above the music, shouting at some villagers. The old priest was still sitting high above the rest of the people. A man was drinking next to the largest pyre. This were just a few of the images of the evening. He enjoyed this festival, watching the people of this town from a distance. Walking among them, smiling with them. He wished the other ones would keep it this peaceful.


This was the post I assumed to be your most recent centered around your god.
Burzadurr said
Okay, the last changes for today have been made, tell me what you think ;)


Please read your personla messages.
Alright, I was bored, so I made this monstrosity of a post. I hope I didn't make it too big, but I really enjoyed writing it, and I hope you'll enjoy reading it.
Every party needs it’s pacesetter, every celebration needs it’s spirit. Somebody who keeps the flow of chatter and liquor going steadily. Who gives the underdogs a moment to shine and makes a fool of those too arrogant. Who encourages people to open up to one another and share themselves. Someone who brings life to the dance floor, and inspires others to join him. Who introduces the right people to each other. In short, someone who could turn a crowd into a communion.

This ‘party’ however, was not just any party. This was a great sacrificial feast! Gods would lay their eyes upon the people here, walk among the mortals. Judging not only the sacrifices, but the people. Things tended to become tense in places like this. That was why Vincus took the responsibility to keep the short lived social ecosystem of this celebration alive, not only for the sake of sacrificial celebration, but for the sake of the people’s community. Whole civilisations could be torn apart in events like these if there wasn’t someone who carefully kept everyone, of high or low standards, in the lush and blissful illusion created by their own togetherness… And perhaps their booze.

Vincus could feel the tension build up. People were getting nervous. The time for sacrifice was coming closer by the minute. It was time to loosen up the situation. Throw some spice in the mixture if you will. Looking around he spotted a group of old men. The town’s eldest it seemed. They didn’t look very happy, since their younger generations hadn’t shown any true appreciation to them yet. A shame it was, the young could learn from the elders’ experience, while the young would keep the old youthful and happy… A plan started to form in his mind.

Walking up to the old sods, he lowered his hood and showed his young, attractive face encased with long dark hair. The elder looked at him like he was a living insult. Smiling at them with his strong and beautiful body as if he were challenging them. What he said next surprised them however. “Gentlemen, I see you are men of wisdom! My name is Kaelus the bard, and I have a song that I would like to dedicate to you. I’m sure you’ll know it.” Confidently he stepped up to a bunch of men bearing instruments, currently doing nothing at all.

“What a shame that you aren’t playing my friends. What joy you could bring these people when you enlighten them with a piece of your artistry! I know what will do the job, follow my lead!” He called out to them. Then softly he told them a few things that were only meant for their ears. Their eyes brightened and they grinned at each other. A woman with a strange looking lute on her back shoved it forward so that it hung in front of her chest. With a dramatic gesture the bard put her foot onto the pile of logs next to her, and she began to play.

When she began to plan, Vincus began to sing.
Rocky road to Dublin


The crowd became slightly more silent. At first people merely started to look up as they were talking, but more and more turned around to pay close attention to the group of bards that had begun playing. Everyone… everyone, knew this song, but only a few knew it by heart. The elderly felt their hearts flutter and their minds drift off to a time long forgotten. Their youth came drifting up as Vincus’ voice inspired them to sing as well. Softly they sang along with the couplet. Vincus urged them to sing louder. A bit awkwardly they began increasing their volume, pulling the attention of the crowd towards them instead of Vincus. Their old minds struggling to remember the complex lines left them a bit uncertain.

But then the chorus kicked in. A smile appeared on the old men’s’ faces, and they laughed. A few others began to sing along as well. More and more the people’s attention turned to the singing. He could hear children ask their parents “What’s Dublin like?” And they would tell them to ask the elder themselves, since they could tell the story first hand.

Vincus sang along one more couplet as he slowly moved around, creating a small open spot of pavement within the crowd. The second chorus kicked in, and he approached a young lady. “May I have this dance?” He asked courteously, as he held out his open hand. The woman blushed and laid here hand on top of his. The two of them started to dance. Vincus could hear more and more people sing along and some even cheered. Rythmic clapping surrounded him as they swirled around in the middle. To his surprise the young woman was a great dancer, and knew the paces of a few of the most selective manoeuvres. Seeing this as a challenge, Vincus danced wilder and wilder, and his partner followed his lead.

As the song neared it’s last couplet, their dance came to an end. Even though the woman was breathing heavily and her forehead gleamed with sweat, Vincus seemed strangely unaffected. He smiled brightly at her, and handed her hand to another man at the edge of the crowd. The two of them began to dance as well, and slowly more couples, and sometimes larger groups let themselves become a part of the commotion. Flailing limbs, sparkling eyes and laughing faces surrounded Vincus. Men, women, young and old, communicating on the same level. Through music… through emotion. Vincus felt content with himself. Through his actions he had made sure this day would be remembered as a true sacrificial ‘celebration’, and not merely ceremony.

The congress reel

The first song ended, and a cacophony of cheers brought the next song. A song more fit for dance. The elder were now surrounded by young faces, each of them getting to tell their own story. The bards were being admired by the people. Everyone was singing and dancing and having a jolly time! With a grin on his face Vincus blended in with the people again, cloaking himself. All would have forgotten about him… Though not entirely. For who he was, was exactly what he had left behind.

Approaching a hooded figure he could sense was more than he made himself appear, he subtly greeted Tavon from under his own hood. “Greetings, my friend.” Saluting him briefly, he then proceeded to stand next to him. “My apologies if I have broken the peace, but I would be lying if I said I wasn’t proud of myself…” He said softly, so that only the man he knew was a god could hear him.
Burzadurr said
The idea I have right now is that he the shaper of mountains, but he no ponger posesses the powerto do so. By bringing is this way he has flaws, being not all great and powerfull. He is reawakening not a the shaper, but as the god of mining and gems, gold and pickaxes. that's what the torch is for, but I get your argument, and I will consider.mountain rams don't live inside of mountains, they don't LOVE gems.. So I thought about it, but figured that a dragon is more spot-on.The older god part... I'll take it out, I did not realize that all were there at the start :3


Ah, trying to reclaim the old glory he once had not by using his own sheer force, which he doesn't have anymore, but by extending his power through a race, a people! We then return to the idea that you should focus on the dwarven aspect of your god. I would still reccomend not making him the shaper of mountains, since the creation of the world is (in my eyes) supposed to remain a vague and uncharted section of the lore of this world that even the gods get to explore.

Maybe he became jealous of the mountains, and whoever shaped them, and attempts to equal the unkown force that created them? Iunno, just having the force (or if he 'used to have the force') to shape entire landscapes can seem somewhat all powerfull. And to be honest, the concept of the 'god of dwarves' sounds way more interesting than 'the rock titan' to me.
LordMarwain said
Every God was there at the creation, only some not in the form they are now. So there is really no meaning in calling yourself an older god.


I agree with most of the things you said as critiscism, but I just felt like mentioning that I felt like the gods did have a difference in age. My god for instance is a relatively young one compared to Ëra, Tavon and Katherin. You guys have been around before the human race really came to exist. Vincus spawned from the minds of artists and visionaires. Cre'oan Mal was probably around when the world was being created, or had only just been shaped.

I'm not nescesarily saying that your idea won't work, because the idea that gods only materialize when they find true purpose is also pretty cool, but I find the 'birth of a god' a pretty epic concept.

I know this wasn't the main post of your post, but I just felt like adressing it and putting it open to discussion. Unless you guys had already settled on this idea. I don't want to interfere or anything :/
MasterOfMetal said
Zaya turned around for a single second, smiled the loveliest smile in the world, before running on again.She led Ron to the edge of the fairground, to a place out of sight, behind a tent, next to one of the temple walls.'Be quiet' she told him 'I will show you'Zaya reached in her improvised bag and then jumped up, like she was his by lightning.Before Ron could react, Zaya sat on top of him, a sharp rock to his throat.'A sound, and you're dead' she hissed. Her eyes were squinted lines, and her smile was gone.'Give me your clothes. Now.'With clothes like his, she would blend in easily, no one would pay attention, and stealing food would be much, much easier.She tightened her grip around the boy. Pathetic.


Ron cried briefly, and then fell silent at the girls command. He was confused and scared, and felt a bit stupid for not seeing this coming. He could almost feel her heartbeat the way she had thrown herself on top of him. Even though his initial feelings were terror and fear, he also felt a little sorry for the girl. She was forced to reduce herself to this. Of course it had been an awful descision to attack him, but he still felt that she wasn't completely responsible for her actions. Maybe she was scared too?

"Allright allright! Just don't hurt me!" He whispered. Slowly he began unbuckling his belt, taking a little longer than usual because of his shaky hands. Again he cursed himself for being such a fool. But if he complied, he'd be fine. His father would buy him new clothes when he returned from the big city, and he knew his father would never get angry at him. As long as he washed himself after this emarassing and terrfying ordeal, he would be perfectly fine.
MasterOfMetal said
The girl smiled at him, her eyes big and green.'Come with me, I want to show you something' She said with a twinkle in those big eyes.She turned around and took a few steps before looking back to see if Ron was following.


Now Ron really started to worry. Who was this girl, thinking she could simply take him anywhere without even telling her name!? He felt a little offended, but his curious nature compelled him to follow the girl. Excitement and adrenaline started to pump through his veins. He was going on an adventure.

"Hey, wait up!" He called out to her as she started to move. "What's your name!"

In the meantime, the man responsible for Ron was already drunkenly exchanging stories with the other old sods in town, completely unaware that his grandson was being taken away by a notorious stray girl
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