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To hopefully make the detaching more clear along with her love for her brother I went back and just did some minor editing to a few parts. I'll bold and make them in color so you can see what I changed easier.

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Thank you! :)
Now how should I go about jumping in to the middle of this when everyone else already has relations built up and interactions going?
@Surtr Inc Angel very much cared that her brother died. Just grief is different for everyone and referring back to the fact that her father prevented her from seeing her brother, '. It became so much she couldn't even visit her own brother in the hospital, something she would come to resent her father for.' That's where her anger stemmed from. Detachment wise I can see how you may not think it fits but I was going for a different take on detachment. She's detaching herself from everything she has known and is keeping herself detached from other people as she doesn't want to get hurt by them.
Okay, I've made a character that I think is unique and I hope she works! Let me know if there is anything I can improve on or change!


@Surtr Inc I fixed everything that you wanted fixed, hopefully she is better now. Sorry about before.
@Surtr Inc I totally get all those issues. I was a bit iffy about the backstory but I thought it would fit with her abstraction but I will rewrite it and also fix the fact that it doesn't show her connection to farmer hill. I thought I had that but I must of completely blanked out. Also I just forgot to fix the part where i said she was there her whole life.
Okay, I've made a character that I think is unique and I hope she works! Let me know if there is anything I can improve on or change!
Interacting/Mentioning Sam @2plus2isnot5 and Elizabeth @Legion02



"I see it Sam. I see it. Unfortunately they have every right to be there. Max huffed out as she glared at the boat. Very unproffesional words churning in her head as she stared it down.

Then gunshots rang out from the boat and for a moment Max was no longer standing on the dock. Fear, anxiety, and adrenaline began to build up within the brunette as non-existent gunshots and explosions rang in her ears. It wasn't until she heard a whine followed by a light bite on her hand then licking from Duke that she was brought back to reality.

Breathing heavily, Max kneeled down and placed her forehead against Duke's while scratching his ears, thanking him silently for his help. She then stood back up refocusing on the boat. She needed to go let them know that shooting is not allowed around here. Especially not into the water with all the animals around.

"Duke gun." Duke ran off to get her gun soon returning with it in its holster. Max strapped the holster to herself before hopping into the boat and starting the engine. After untying the boat, she took off in their small boat towards the large one. Reaching the big ship she idled the engine and stood up, yelling as loud as she could. "Hey! Who the fuck just fired a gun! You can stay here off the coast of the island but fire a gun again and action will have to be taken." She glared at one of the workers of the yacht who was peering down at her, "Bring me your boss. You all aren't worth talking to this about."

Crossing her arms, Max waited for Elizabeth to make an appearance. In the meantime she looked around at the ocean and her eyes locked onto red water. "Screw it. You all caused a bigger problem" Max growled under her breath as she restarted the engine just enough to slowly make her way closer. When she was close enough, she took off her holster and walkie as she anchored the small boat. Then she dove in. Opening her eyes underwater she swam closer not bothered by the sting of the salt in the water anymore. Seeing the body of a bottlenose dolphin at the bottom was heartbreaking, but what made it worse was the baby dolphin nudging its mother. Max quickly swam to the top and grabbed ahold of the edge of the boat, reaching in she grabbed her walkie and held down on the button. "This is Max. I need people to meet me at the dock asap. We have a new resident I'm bringing in. I'll explain the circumstances when we meet at the dock. Just know its a scared baby dolphin, bottlenose I believe. Anyone who can help, please meet at the dock. Over."

Diving back under, Max safely caught the baby dolphin and brought it back to the boat in the way she was taught. Once the safety and wellbeing of the baby was ensured, she brought the anchor up and quickly took the boat back to the dock. Needing to hand off the baby before she goes and finds the one responsible on that woman's boat.
I may be interested in being a new scrub if you'll have me.
Hey guys sorry that I won't be able to post til thursday. I'm currently at a cabin visiting my parents and the service is awful so I will be a bit hard to do anything until Thursday. Just wanted to let yall know!

Also @The Muse Kalanie is wearing a cloak so her clothing is hidden from view. It probably got lost in my post haha
Hey guys sorry that I won't be able to post til thursday. I'm currently at a cabin visiting my parents and the service is awful so I will be a bit hard to do anything until Thursday. Just wanted to let yall know!
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