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So, you want Ming to essentially be an airbending master at thirteen. No. There are twenty-six tiers to airbending and some monks don't even get close. Aang, the Avatar, was the youngest at 12, and he only got 25 tiers as well as made a new technique. The character feels like you just wanted to "Master airbending, then move on to the plot" and I'm not going to allow that. There's not a strong enough sense of culture or identity, and there's no way he mastered advanced-level techniques at such a young age.

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It's not even that Widespread in Korra. Lightning Bending, as with any form of advanced Bending, is not meant to be common, and is not something a novice or even intermediate bender can use.

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Alright guys, I'm looking for one or two creative advocates. As you can see, there are tons of characters at the moment, which is good! I don't intent on stopping the flow of them. Most people request co-GM's and whatnot, but that's not what I want. I want people who want to come in and help create plots for all these different people alongside me. This means those superfluous writers that like to imagine these big plots? Come to me! I'll see what we can do. There is one rule, though. You don't get to oversee a plot your character is in. I don't want to force everyone along some linear plot, so this is my way of offering you guys creative diversity! Just PM me if you're interested, then tell me some of your ideas. You'll overlook 2-4 characters and their plot, and work alongside me. :D

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Yep. :D

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I stressed the importance and influence of culture earlier. Earthbenders are the least spiritual because their bending style is anchored in, well, earth. They're not meant to be astral. I feel like completely countering that without a valid reason isn't sufficient. Moreover, this phrasing:

"By some very strange twist of fate, Nicias, as a infant, was brought to Wan Shi Tons Library by a Knowledge seeker. Whether or not the knowledge seeker thought he was an object of value remains uncertain but nevertheless that’s what happened. Wan Shi Ton and the knowledge seekers raised him, and even trained him from scrolls that taught earthbending. However Wan Shi Ton found several uses for Nicias as he grew. In terms of food the knowledge seekers brought him food"

That's a really weak reasoning. There's no backstory, no real logic to it. It just happened. He's age twenty. Knowledge is pointless without application and practice. I don't care if he read a thousand scrolls, he probably hasn't mastered one form of earthbending, let alone more. So far, there is only one character I would allow the title of master, and that is the Firebending Dai Li girl. Even if he's not a master, learning all of this would just make him more diluted in the fundamentals.

I feel like there is this... element to this character. This element of "this is what I want, and it's here just 'cause." It's going to take more than that. Soudai is a character that I'm sure Marc poured tons of effort into, but I didn't allow him (yet) because I didn't feel like he was completely authentic to the setting. I would take from that notion.

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Before I even finish his review, I want to point out that the FIRST thing I thought it read was "Niclas is an electric earthbender" to which I was sincerely thinking "what the fuck..."

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If you wish to be part of them, you most likely will have to create a quality OC, then flesh them out and converse with me as to how to integrate them into the White Lotus. It would be a significant amount of effort, but anything worth having normally is.

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Since Sokka never existed to piss off Wan Shi Ton is his Library still on the Physical plane

Yes, technically.

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Shila, Zara, Kalani are approved.

Marc, I read your character and I love it. Great concept, thorough application of an archetype, many personal overtones, well-written, obvious amounts of effort put into it. Exactly what I'm looking for, much like the other three. The only issue I have is the constant reference to just how high or terrible the Phoenix Kingdom taxes are. In all actually, the taxes themselves aren't that bad. If the farm had bountiful harvests, getting all the required food and whatnot would be easy. My suggestion is to create the same plot element via corrupted police force. It shouldn't be a huge alteration. honestly, just a bit of time and rewrites in the latter half of the history. You might be able to play this off as a better reason to be a rebel and have disdain for the Phoenix Kingdom Police Force.

Also, I'll reiterate this. Fire Nation Army = The badasses that come in as a last resort to fuck things up. Phoenix Kingdom Police Force = the brutal hand of the Phoenix Kingdom, half-full of punks that wanted authority and half-full of people that failed to get into the Fire Nation Army.

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Since posting her, I've noticed Kalani and a few other characters share a few similar qualities (comes from a Noble Family, Fugitive/Wanted by the law), so if you'd like for me to change these things about my character please let me know. ^^
If not, I hope she meets up to expectations!

As long as each character is unique and individual, I don't mind. As a matter of fact, having similarities like that while fighting for a similar cause can act to strengthen the plot.

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It's a give and take system. :D But, the whole world is a canvas. No point in taking away a few colors if someone can prove they can use them right. :P

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Actually, no! :D That was a secret in the canon for a long time, so I will also keep it such. I will admit that I have reworked them and do have plans for them. If you want to be integrated with them, it would take some work on your part to accomplish such.