Salenea

Microfiction & poetry contest #11 - voting and feedback

wind #1: joyful and frivolous. It's a little happy dance of a poem. ^_^

the wind doesn't whistle, it talks: an epic but ultimately sad story that rhymes as well! Good job!

wind #2: beautiful and bittersweet, a poem that makes you feel a whole lot of emotions, wonderful!

the hanged man: dark and ghastly. Short poem but there is nothing that needed adding, well done!

I had the hardest time casting a vote for this contest. I loved all the entries. The one that lingered the most for me, the one I thought about the most after reading them all was: The Hanged Man.
So that one gets my vote.

RPGC#37 - The Royal Life (voting and feedback)

I vote for The Starless Kingdom. It is a quite an adventure, a well written and complete story in limited words, I didn't feel anything was missing besides cutting some corners. The transition from a havoc creating nuiscance, loathed by the staff to a friendly rescuer and love interest was a bit sudden, but for the length of the story it worked.

As for the other stories:
The royal life is a sweet but short romantic story. I would have loved to read more of the story and not keep me hanging on that cliff hanger. ^_^ The characters are very diverse and interesting to read how they look.
It is a downside that the entire story it started with Crystal, Crystal, The king, Crystal, Crystal, She, Crystal, Ember. A little variation in starting the senteces would improve the story.

King Sebastian is a well written story, the two scenes are detailed and read easy. I would have loved to learn more about King Sebastian, about what was going on, what happened in the 23 years, tie the two scenes a bit more together. There are a lot questions to be answered.

Microfiction & Poetry contest #10 - voting and feedback

I vote for Guiding Lights

Beautifully written while using the poem structure correctly.

RPGC#35 - There's no camp like... (voting and feedback)

My vote goes too: Visits, Tea and Mysteries.

I really enjoyed reading and getting pulled into the enviroment, it was described very nicely. I'd love to hang around at that camp spot and learn more about that mystery.

stew

Besides a witch's stew beats a soldier's stew any day

MFP#6 - colours (voting & feedback)

I vote for: a world of colour

I love the lighthearted nature of the poem, simple but managed to paint a pretty picture with words. It made me smile when reading it.

TDAC#4 - Voting and Feedback

My vote goes to: Purple. By far the best entry, in my humble opinion.

That purple jellyfish is magnificently done, with a great background. I love it. Good job!!

Beyond the Borders of the Universe (Salenea&SporkoBug)

Jill grinned when Fer'a said to coil around Ash to keep them to the bed. She started to like the weird magic-creature thing.

"We won, it only cost all the life on the planet." Jill said with a short humourless chuckle.
At least Ash was starting to sound more like themself.

She wasn't prepared for Ash asking for a hug. She wasn't sure if she should, if she could. Could she cross the professional border and could she keep professional distance if she would.
Jill was too reliefed that Ash was fine to not give a hug. She leaned in to give a hug. "I'm glad you are alright Ash, don't scare me like that again," she whispered before she straightend again.

It was time she'd check on the rest of the crew.

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Treghor looked genuinly confused when Alice spoke about eating. Slowly the alien concept of 'eating' made form in his head and he realised he should indeed eat soon. He was starting to get hungry and regular meals were improtant.

But when Alice asked about what he was doing he shoved it back to a corner of his mind again and looked around. He didn't know what to show first and he walked from pile to pile. "W-well, eh," he stopped shortly by the data from the rpobe he send into the solar wind wave. Than he started reaching for a specimen he took from the planet they just left, but he recalled the information about the planet they were heading too and walked over there instead. "Well, I-I've been looking up eh information about our next destination. Y-you know, the m-moons there are much more interesting than the planet." He started to get enthusiast and began a disquisition about mineral depostis and geological formations, not stammering once while he was talking about the subjects he loves.

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Althea stretched her wings as far as she could before she got up and walked up and down for a bit. While the auto-pilot was working she knew Jillian preffered someone being close to the console just incase an emergency would emerge.

She opened a Comlink with the kitchen,. "Avia are you there?"

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Alan was too swift on his feet for Gnol to be able to land many blows but Gnol on the other hand often could easily duck and roll away. His blows were a lot harder than Alan's, resulting in Alan being pushed back significantly when they hit.
Neither of them was willing to give in slowly their training started to get more serious.

Hidden Claws [1x1 Salenea and Sporko]

"I'm ready," she said, she wanted to stroke Hunter's back but she refrained from doing it. It was a familiarity she didn't want to give in to yet. Afterall Hunter still was a practical stranger if she'd look at it objectively. Subjectively it felt like she knew him forever. How could it be that every time he was near her she turned to him like a sunflower turned to the sun. On the way back to the village Marigold was lost in her thoughts. Instictively she held on as she wasn't really paying attention to her surroundings nor her riding on wolfback.

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The red daze of bloodlust slowly subsided as April's words came through. It had been a while since she got carried away like that.
Hazel transformed back to her human shape. "I'm calm," she stated before she looked for a place to sit. Her inner harpy was still stirring but more subdued. With interest she followed April's movement. "Will it take effect right away or will it be slow process that takes regular doses of the potion?"

Hidden Claws [1x1 Salenea and Sporko]

Marigold smiled gratefully because of the kind words of everyone. It made her feel better instantly.
She reached with her hand to spot but couldn't feel anything, of course, but the remnants of the little burning sensation.
"Thank you Gaia," Marigold whispered emotionally.

Marigold would lie if she said she wasn't excited to ride on wolf back again. The anticipation already sent a familiar shiver of excitement down her spine.
"Drop me off near the edge, I'll walk the rest," she said as she climbed on, more nimble every time. She was starting to get good at climbing on Hunters back and make herself comfortable enough.

She was glad that the satchel had survived the running and all and she didn't lose her ingredients. Staying away for that long and return empty-handed would raise some serious questions.

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Hazel took the knife and placed herself in the ideal position. She glanced at Fay, "Don't worry, it's a sharp knife, April will hardly feel a thing." As she spoke she quickly went over the soft flesh, making the cut deep enough to bleed lightly but not making too deep of a wound.

"Harpy dander coming up," Hazel said just before she transformed to the full harpy. With a loud cry, she shook herself vigorously. Her eyes rested on Fay and her blood started to boil. She was ready to find that witch and shred her with her talons. It took all of her human side to keep her more feral, harpy side under control and stay put.

"Anything else you need?" Like the heart of the witch, the liver of her daughters or her daughter's daughters Hazel put a stop to the train of thoughts that was dragging her focus away from the here and now.

Beyond the Borders of the Universe (Salenea&SporkoBug)

Jillian felt a weight being dropped off her shoulders when she saw Ash awake, so relieved she almost giggled as she heard Ash talking like a drunk. That was so unlike Ash, she didn't believe she ever saw him drunk, but she could contain herself suppress her amusement to focus on the severity of the situation, Ash was still recovering and not drunk, even though it seemingly looked like it. She knew fatigue could look the same.

"Thank you Fer'a," she said before she walked to Ash and knelt down. "Ash, I'm glad you're awake but you should rest a bit more. You're no good to anyone if you don't take your time to heal. Captains orders are to rest, eat and get well before assuming any of your duties. And if you don't listen to me I'll have Seb give likewise doctor's orders." she said kindly but firm.

she glanced at Fer'a, "Good luck letting him rest."

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Gnol and Alan went to the practice room and grabbed some protective clothes and took some blunted weapons. Circling each other, makes some fake moves and testing each other they practised with a few weapons

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Treghor fell off his chair, startled, as he heard the unexpected knock on the door. He opened the door and saw Alice. "Y-yes?" he asked "C-come i-in" he added politely. He hurried back to his desk and tried to quickly organise the mess of papers, pads and equipment lying scattered around. "Eh, let me grab you a chair." he brushed off some books from the nearest chair and pulled it back a bit.
"W-w-what can I d-do for you?"