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Grinder




It had been such a nice slumber too...

Simply casually sleeping away, only a little buried, so all the little things above ground created soothing vibrations now and then...

There was a period where greater vibrations came, but nothing that would warrant awakening, nothing that posed a direct threat, it was even soothing after a while, like something had built a subtly vibrating bed-shell around him to make his rest even more comfortable...

He might well have been one of the most peaceful monsters that was contained...

Then it came.

He felt the precursors of the vibrations before they actually hit him, not quite a problem yet, but on a scale of such grant magnitude that his body didn't dare let him stay asleep.

Slowly, those massive eyes drifted open... slowly, lazily... His mind quickly picking up on the signals of every little thing around him, so many tiny things scurrying around, too small to be snacks, but so many. then there was the shell of shivers all around him, varied sources of vibrations gave him an astoundingly thorough vision of the facility that had been built around him, such tiny tunnels that could only be for these scurrying tiny things... though they seemed to be quickly vibrating harder... He very calm and lazily watched the little things running around, even as the strange red things started blinking and they began scurrying 'away' as hard as they could go...

Well that was understandable, tiny things didn't stay near big things that weren't asleep, but that meant his nearer distraction was gone so he raised his muzzle up and his jaw wide, a great yawn rumbling from his maw...

that was when it finally hit, the sonic wave that would cause such chaos around the world hit his senses and full, and everything went red!

His eyes shut tight, seeing red as his brain filled with confusion and pain from the intensity of what followed! It was like the whole world shook and his poor ears and nose were hit with all of it at the same time!

Immediately he surged up from his sleeping curl, raw strength shredding the containment that had been meant to hold him, a broad swing cleaved a great swath from the walls and anything else around him before both of those claws went to cover the pain in his head, several moments of wanton thrashing following before Instinct took hold!

Then he fled under-ground, the containment room filling with dirt and debris from metal and stone that were either cleaved through or wrenched out by raw strength if it didn't cut so well, and In moments the titan had vanished from the facility... oddly, leaving most of it intact and a fading rumble behind as he blindly dug in the direction of gravity!

He'd continued nearly a mile under-ground by the time the lingering effects of... 'whatever' that was wore off enough for him to settle down and focus... He couldn't fathom what had caused it, nothing had ever caused such a tremendous reaction from his senses, some part of him feared that the world had to have split in two for him to sense such a thing!

And yet, it had faded, there was no persistent after-effect that told him of some great predator or cataclysm that had seen fit to wake him so viciously, only the far more subtle and harmless noise of the shivering cradle he'd clawed his way out from.

Suddenly, a new sound met his ears, one from within, a low instinctive rumble that told him one thing...

'I hunger...'

Immediately he filtered out the lesser vibrations of the tiny things and their tunnels, and began tunneling back towards the surface, seeking the cues of walking 'snacks' in the distance...




Some few dozen miles away, there was a little group of humans grumbling in agitation as their jeep had stopped running, some of the world's rapidly dwindling number of people who had no idea that titans were rising to wreak havoc upon the world. They'd merely been observing the local wild-life before the engine, radio, phones, and even satellite phones had died on them... the camera didn't even work.

Thing's suddenly grew more tense when the ground began to tremble, various wild-life in view panicking and fleeing the area, but not fast enough... With astounding timing, just as things began to run again, the ground split open barely fifth meters away, 'just' far enough for them to neither be threatened by the wild-life... 'or' the giant beast that had just surged out of the ground like a shark cresting the waves!

The bloody thing hadn't even left the ground entirely, it was still mostly buried, but it's maw had burst through the surface and swallowed an elephant whole! 6 tons of meat gone in an instant with little more than a sickening crunch, but it's massive claws had also swept across the ground once it's shoulder's were above ground, clumsily pinning together several more members of the now desperately fleeing herd...

They certainly had no idea that it was awakening to ravenous hunger after unknown millennia of sleep... nor that the sun beating down on it's hide and the shining crystals protruding from it produced a sense of bliss it hadn't felt in ages.

They couldn't even drive away, as while it's appearance had missed them by enough to leave them safe, it had torn up the ground enough to trap the tires... they could only watch in morbid horror as it proceeded to gorge itself on some of man-kind's largest known mammals... and listen to the blissful purr it was producing, even if it sounded more like a hungry growl to them.



Oh, cool, there's a discord server... not everyone saw it while they were still making their sheets XD
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I agree with what is said here.

For a mole kaiju of his stature, I also feel like he should be smaller.
And I also agree with the mineral shaping and long range attacks.

I'm also VERY curious as to what his "One Secret Crippling weakness" is. You might wanna run it by us GMs just to be sure it'll be fair.

Awwww, I can down his height some >n> I just liked the 'big lumbering' theme to it, and thought it fit his image XD Honestly, considering the sheer 'mass' of some monsters that are at a lower height, his body design needed the extra height to stand up in strength XD though I guess I could just lower his height and make him a bit more agile than I'd been planning for his previous size.

The rest I already changed XD And I can mention that 'one big weakness' in PM I guess, though it's ironically both obvious and an uncommon thing to consider at the same time, at least I think so ;3

For Gaia...

I'm just going to say this right now but... I'm not a fan of the MLP design of the character. It wouldn't fit with the grittiness of this RP - one based off the Monsterverse and other classic kaiju series. I strongly advice in changing his design just so it can fit with the RP. Unless you want to heavily specify that the pic above doesn't necessarily represent the cartoonish design.

Other then that, Gaia seems fine for now. However this character would be better fit for a future arc. Might wanna keep it in storage in the mean time.

I didn't think it was particularly 'mlp designed' xD just less 'monstery' in theme... I actually thought it kindof fit a japanese artistic style somewhat, at least compared to some I've seen before. Although! Even if it is MLP-like, I'd treat it like I treat MLP stuff, 'artistic license' and when applied to a setting with more realistic appearances, apply some imagination to it for what it could 'actually' look like... In this sense, the image is more a general shape for it, it might not be as 'frightful' in appearance as other monsters, but it 'is' still a looming creature with a habit of being onfire... Given it's malleable body, it could also follow a theme of being less 'intimidating' normally, but then tweaking things to be more monstrous when a fight breaks out...

... I also had an exorbitant ammount of trouble finding a quadrupedal image of what I was thinking about that wasn't either obscenely fugly, unfitting for the idea I had, or 'too' elemental for Arc 1 by a much farther margin.

although bluh... I even tried toning him down for Arc 1 levels XD you should've seen what I had for his previous incarnation XD I just really liked his concept and wanted to find some way to run with it while it was 'fresh'. @x@
Thanks for the input :D lemme read it!

Hey Shoryu! So, as for your characters, I was going to wait until we got the history to add my input but I'm not sure when that'll come in so I'll just tell you what I'm seeing now.

As far as Grinder goes, I really like the concept but there a just a few issues.
  • He's very large, 140 meters when not hunched over is a bit much. 100 meters when standing straight would be more appropriate.
  • Mineral Shaping is fine as far as when the crystals are on his body, however flinging them through the air and shaping them seems pretty unrealistic. If he could just shape them on his body to become sharp armor that may make more sense.
  • If you're still looking for a long range attack, you could extend the range of the beam he has. Also, an explanation on how he varies the beam's power could be a great addition.

-Large was my idea for him XD and I saw something that said the upper limit was around 150 or so, and in terms of over-all mass there's a couple other monsters around here that are much bigger despite being technically shorter, or at least one I saw, since he's 'mostly' vertical with less length involved, though I 'could' still knock some off.
-I can remove the 'disconnected' shaping, sure, and restrict it to 'connected' shaping or 'only while in contact' at least. ^.^
-If removing ranged mineral shaping is involved, I could easily increase the range of the beam, And I was trying to expand the explanation compared to what i originally had, but I can go a little farther, sure.

As far as Gaia is concerned, I only have one small issue:
  • So, for the shaping of its body, making a shield or blade out of the metal coating doesn't make as much sense as the other attributes you included for the shaping. Making spikes form all over its frame, or upping the durability of the parts it uses to stomp/beat the other kaijus could be a good alternative.


That's all I've got to add!


-that's a good suggestion actually, I'll give that one a roll ^.^

Edit: Changes made! I can tweak the height too if that's still an issue after my explanation

Also, unfortunately, I also don't know when I'll manage the histories... I may have to settle for leaving them 'mysterious' until I can work up the mind-set for backstory... I can do 'here and now' easy enough right now, but with frequently being interupted to help with hospice care in the house, It's hard to maintain a mood for actual 'backstory' planning for them TxT
I'll hopefully get to work on my opening post later tonight.

@Lmpkio I've been meaning to ask this: does the kaiju genre exist in this universe? Or did it never happen (like George Romero movies didn't exist in TWD universe)?


This is actually also a great question :D I too am curious
The first post is finally up! This is currently the prelude to introduce your monsters and characters into the spotlight.


Is there anything I need to change to make things acceptable? aside from actually filling out some history info of course.
I unfortunately woke up to being stuck with a job for a few hours, but once I'm free today I'm going to be doing that anyway, and figured I should see if there's any other problems I need to fix while I'm at it.
At last, I bring you... The Maulwurf!... I'll worry about cleaning things up and tweaking any issues when I'm fresh in the morning, every day's been a tiring day this past week, and I wanted to go ahead and get it posted. TxT

... also, I likely have a second one in the works that I also want to get posted before I focus on refinements.



Edit: Speaking of that other one.
I understand if it doesn't fit the ARC 1 theme and needs tweaking or 'delaying' until a later arc. XD

I'm almost done, just waiting on one more reply from GM to finish something off, I'll drop a CS sometime tomorrow finally! It's been very busy with so much family visiting since dad got stuck in that bed TxT
Welp, I have returned for now! I can finally finish up a CS, hopefully before I'm stuck sleeping in the hospital again. >x<
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