Vongola_Hasayo

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@Roseletta Actually wrong character, Phoebe uses a form of light magic. Your thinking of Kindred's character~

@TheHangedMan How dare you laugh at my pain...I had a bunch cool new spells all thought up too...

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@Masaki Haruna Alright, first damn you, you beat to making a light dragon slayer. Second, I don't think she should have White Drive given what you've established; she doesn't like to fight so training to obtain something like White Drive seems out of character and the fact that she's not a conventional slayer in terms of combat style, being more strategic and resourceful as opposed to assault oriented, makes it out of place in her skill set. Lastly, her history is a little hard to follow in terms of a timeline. If you could add in how many years she spent with her dragon, how many she spent on her own as a writer, and how long she's been a member of Harpy.

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@pkken Whoops, didn't notice that. Usually when I see parentheses in the name part I just assume it's an alternative name so I glanced over it. In that case, fix the coloring and he's good to go~

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@pkken Two minor concerns; I think you should hold off on Divine Force and have that be something he gets later. As stated in the OP the player S-Class chars are quite new, having only very recently attained the rank. So, while I can see him being not too far off from achieving Divine Force given his training and determination, I think it's a little much to have at the start. Second, please use the lighter shade of red for everything you've colored in the CS. The darker one hard to read. Had to highlight the spells just to read them XD

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@LostDestiny Don't worry about it. I can understand your frustration.

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@Kal-El Go ahead and submit a CS, no need to for affirmation to do so. If you feel you need to run your ideas by me feel free.

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@Rune_Alchemist Thanks.

@LostDestiny Like Rune said the magic conflicts too much with Golem's philosophy. "The wizard powers the magic, not the magic powering the wizard." Takeover is just one of those magics that it's impossible to look past the fact that the magic isn't enhancing the natural ability/skills but imparting those things onto the wizard. You'd either have to put her in Harpy or change her magic, whichever feels better for you.

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@LostDestiny Let's see, there really isn't any glaring flaws...I'm not sure about her being in Golem's Hand due to her using Takeover magic. I'll have to consult my Co-GM's about that. Besides that I would like a little more of her history; key experiences she had while on her own, how she came to learn her magic, and her reasoning behind joining Golem over Harpy.

@pkken Hmm...that's tricky. In my opinion slayer magic is powerful and versatile enough on it's own, especially when comes to RP where you have the license to evolve the magic in a different than the original. I think it would be better to add it later as the character progresses.

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@Roseletta In that case she's good to go. Off to the char tab she goes~

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For others debating what rank to give your char, I added criteria for that in the CS template. Rank represents a level of skill and proficiency in terms of combat, job completion, and mastery of one's own magic. Though remember not to fret too much about rank. This RP is more about the stories we can tell with our chars and how they develop rather "who's stronger than who".