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Need definition on the blast power of the Counterfeiting technique. Other than that, it's fine. As always, I be watching.
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Um, Fire and Wind would still work against Blood...? I count hardening to be effective, since it prevents it from being useful in the slightest.

Senjutsu, Blood Release, Vampire powers, taijutsu, genjutsu, ninjutsu and kenjutsu. Seems legit.
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Tatsua Aiisen said
Um, Fire and Wind would still work against Blood...? I count hardening to be effective, since it prevents it from being useful in the slightest.Senjutsu, Blood Release, Vampire powers, taijutsu, genjutsu, ninjutsu and kenjutsu. Seems legit.


Fair point. I am gonna try and remove stuff to make it fair.
Hardening as in when blood becomes hard in fire/wind based, blood becomes super solid and doesn't have liquid properties here. As long there is liquid content I can manipulate blood.

I am so gonna take off the Senjutsu and be more of a blood release.

EDIT: I have to thank you.
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Masaki Haruna said
EDIT: I have to thank you.


No problem, just backseat GMing to bother Innue. Plus, you're usually pretty cool, might as well help out~
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This Kirigakure lineup... So beautiful.
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@Tatsua, yup and I'll take that as praise *Tsundere mode*
@Chitanda/Amri, the way things are going, it's going to be awesome cuz we might actually start at Kiri instead of Konoha which is the usual setting... And Kiri ninjas are beast!
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I'm 'kind of' done my character, he's on the first page on my post. I feel pretty satisfied with him. So yeah...
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@Masaki - Are you done or still working?
@Jedi - I accept the character. I would like to add in that your control over the light for making thins invisible needs to be limited to the area directly around you, such as 10 feet or so. Another note, your character's rank would be different than most. Gennin graduation for Kyokujitsu is 16-18 (they go to school longer). But given the history, it could be a special inclusion and such.
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I am done and that's about it!
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@Masaki -

I do not have any particular issues with the character. I would be interested in knowing the initiation of your jutsu, such as where they are fired from, how much they take to prepare, etc. Especially for Genjutsu, knowing how one is placed under the Genjutsu is important. Taylor will have to provide his feedback.
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It works like Sasuke's enton/Gaara's sand/Gray's ice make from fairy tail but more on a limited basis like creating blood blades more on attacks and less on defense. Creating blood out of nowhere is how blood release is done, rather more like a source of blood like a bottle of blood and manipulation is formed.

Genjutsu on the other hand requires prep time, in this case Kirua must know the fears of her target and use it against them, if she doesn't know then she can't perform it.

Inb4 I control someone blood, no, I can't do it cuz I stated it and it is a fatal flaw.
Anyways, I did state all it's strengths and weaknesses on the CS.
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Masaki Haruna said
It works like Sasuke's enton/Gaara's sand/Gray's ice make from fairy tail but more on a limited basis like creating blood blades more on attacks and less on defense. Creating blood out of nowhere is how blood release is done, rather more like a source of blood like a bottle of blood and manipulation is formed.Genjutsu on the other hand requires prep time, in this case Kirua must know the fears of her target and use it against them, if she doesn't know then she can't perform it.Inb4 I control someone blood, no, I can't do it cuz I stated it and it is a fatal flaw.Anyways, I did state all it's strengths and weaknesses on the CS.


There are more than stated strengths and weaknesses. The details I asked are very important and I thank you for clarifying them.
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Those that have been accepted are advised to make an introduction post for their characters.

I'd suggest just covering some aspect of what you imagine your character would do by themselves in their spare time while out and about. That should provide others some springboards to jump in and get things going.
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Okay! I edited the Jutsu to make its current max range of only six feet and I edited the history to make him become a Genin at eleven instead of nine and bumped up his age one to make him graduate earlier but at later ages than I previously had him. I hope that is fine?

Gonna begin contemplating a second character but I won't make anything until the RP develops and builds a need for it. After seeing some characters I'm pretty excited to begin.
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And his daughter:

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Hello Masaki Haruna,

I've reviewed your character, and I have a few things to say before Kirua Chikawa can advance on the thread:

- Your personality is really conflicting. I don't know if that was intentional, but your character seems kind of bi-polar based on your description.

- Innue can back me up on this, but I really don't feel like Kirua Chikawa is Jounin level. Reason being is that the bases of your character is substance manipulation, but you've taken the same sort of techniques that can be done with earth/stone, and limited yourself to using blood. With earth, wind, water, fire (etc) manipulation, the substance is incredibly easy to harvest in your environment. Blood either has to come from yourself, containers on your person, or matter creation. As a general rule of thumb, matter creation is incredibly costly. Do you think the returns of your techniques are worth the limitations of using such a limited resource? If you do, Innue and I don't.

If I were to accept Kirua Chikawa into Kiri, I would deem her Chuunin.
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I would concur on the element thing. Gaara's manipulation abilities were a lot because he carried his element around with him.

As well as the general assessment of the power of the character.

EDIT: I can help you boost the character's power if you'd like.
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I think you should try to make your character less of a Mary Sue. You're trying to give them weaknesses that aren't actually weaknesses that are then counterbalanced by strengths that are too strong. It doesn't make for a pleasant character to play as or interact with.
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