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This OOC exists only for character development and posting for character sheets within Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation. The regularly OOC posts will be used for all other OOC. You may post here to assist others' in development, offer help and ideas or simply to post character sheets for review. After a character sheet is approved, it will be added to the IC portion of this thread and I will link it to the table of context.

Character Sheet

Name: the name of your character, any nicknames either in quotation marks between the names or listed below
Age|Gender: the age and gender of the character
Alliance: the current alliance of your character
Rank: the rank of your character
Clan: the clan of your character*
Kekkei Genkai: any kekkei genkai your character may have
Traits: any special traits your character has, can be associated with clans. e.g. Nara Clan often has high intelligence.

Appearance:picture preferred, but a short description will work.

History: the more, the better. History does not need to be prose, it may be wrote out however one likes. This is also your opportunity to impress me.

Personality: a little about your character; again an opportunity to impress me.

Combat Style: short description of combat style
Nature Release: what nature type(s) is used by your character? Only one beginning.
Jutsu List: all genin will have academy level jutsu. Aside from that, you must link all of your canon jutsu. Any custom jutsu must follow a template provided below. Only six jutsu allowed on first application. Exceptions are possible; PM details.

Weaponry: common weapons used. General shinobi tools are not necessary to count, but are not infinite. Weight is a consideration.

Miscellaneous: whatever else.

  • *I do not wish for clans to be a prominent part of this roleplay, thus even though it is allowed, it will take a more high-casual and impressive act to attain one.

  • **Custom Jutsu Script

  • Jutsu Name:
    Jutsu Type:
    Effective Range:
    Nature Type:
    Descriptions:
    Drawbacks:

  • ***Note that I would like your CS's to look nice, but the present BBCoding does not allow for noparse, thus I could not give you full scripts or underlines. Using BBCode to enhance your CS is encouraged.


Quick Note About Ranks: Jounin have been appointed their position by their current Kage and most likely earned them during the resistance. The same goes for Chuunin and Special Jounin. The ANBU do not presently exist. ALL Genin must have passed the Shinobi Academy. Even if they fought in the resistance, they would either be good enough to be a Chuunin, dead or sent through the Academy.

Quick Note About Registration Numbers: Only Academy Graduates have been assigned Registration Numbers. They are used to keep track of fresh genin, not for identification. It was considered too large of a task to register all existing shinobi, thus they were skipped. Registration numbers range from 1-100 then the fourth digit represents their 'class', starting as zero. For instance, Kino (one of my characters) is 000006. He graduated sixth in his class, and was the first, class.
Hidden 11 yrs ago Post by Marrow
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Name: Hyūga Maruki

Age|Gender: 15, male

Alliance: Konoha

Rank: Genin

Clan: Hyūga, head family/main house

Kekkei Genkai: Byakugan

Traits: uses Jûken while fighting



History: Maruki was born in the year Sai started his reign. In fear of Sai his parents moved to a small cabin hidden in the woods of the land of fire, close to Konoha. As soon as he was able to stand on his own two feet his Parents teached him all he needed to know to live off the land. Teached him which plants were edible and which were not. They teached him how to swim. Before they left on what would be their last mission they teached Maruki how to mold his chakra, how to use his Byakugan and how to use the Gentle Fist Taijutsu technique. As well as the basics of some Eight Trigram Techniques.

And then they left. Maruki was ten years old at that time and was already quite skilled for his age, given all the personal training he received from his parents. He kept training with Jūken and the Byakugan. From time to time he met travellers while he was fishing in the river or finding some food. He learned a lot from them. One of those things were how to utilize the Byakugan and making his own jutsu’s based on stories he heard of examples of these jutsu’s which he tried to copy. He learned Eight Trigrams Sixteen Palms from his parents and heard there were also 64 or even 128 palm versions.

Another thing was that his parents were no longer alive. Maruki’s parents last mission was to aid in the war against Sai after some years of training together with a lot of other shinobi. The fight lasted long and although their byakugan was a useful asset in battle it was not enough to save their lives, before they reached Sai they were killed by some of his henchmen. However their efforts were not unrewarded as other the shinobi who fought alongside them succeeded in killing Sai and thus ending his reign. Maruki reached the age of 14 at that time.

Maruki knew his parents would be looking down at him from the high heavens and vowed to make them proud. For the next year Maruki dedicated all his time to his training and a developed technique similar to Hakkeshō Kaiten as well as some other techniques who looked more like the originals. At the age of fifteen he left the little cabin in the woods, hid it and left for Konoha to attend the Academy to become a full-fledged Shinobi. He was taking in by his uncle after proving that he Indeed was Hyūga Maruki. Now that he is done with his education at the Academy and passed with flying colors he will be placed in a team with other shinobi who passed with good grades.

Personality: Maruki is a dedicated Shinobi always trying to improve himself. Although he never really had much contact with other people, you don’t recognize this of his actions. He is friendly and kind to others but can be surprisingly cold and sharp-tongued to the ones who do him, or the ones he cares about, wrong.

Combat Style: Mainly using Taijutsu (Jūken) Maruki tends to get close to his enemies. This does not mean he doesn’t use kunai and shuriken though. He knows how to use his Byakugan and utilizes this in combat. He likes to observe and analyze before diving into combat himself.

Nature Release: Suiton (water) – Not yet learned

Jutsu List: - Not yet learned
Mizu bunshin no jutsu
Suiton: Teppōdama
Suiton: Suiryūdan no jutsu
Mizu Hari

Jutsu List: - Learned
Hakke Sanjūni Shō
Hakkeshō Kaiten
Kūshō
Shōtei

And Academy jutsu:
Clone, transformation, replacement, etc.

Weaponry: Nothing particular aside form the usual Kunai, Shuriken, exploding tags, wires and soldier pills.
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Hidden 11 yrs ago Post by Prince
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Lilly and Innue, you may go ahead and post your Character Sheets in the IC. They were previously approved.
Hidden 11 yrs ago Post by Marrow
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im still waiting for it... come on... please
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Marrow, some issues.

There's essentially no way your character could be born a few years into the Reign of Sai and be fifteen. The official Reign of Sai only lasted fifteen years.

Secondly, if you're not being taught the sixty-four strikes, you won't know it. It was basically a Hiden passed down within the main Hyuga branch that Neji only succeeded in mastering because he's a plot-induced badass.

Lastly, there was no 'assassination' attempt on Sai. It was a drawn out, full-scale war inside Amegakure that lead to the destruction of an entire city that was basically a bastion.
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Gotta pause you there, Prince.

Marrow's character IS Main House, for one. For two, 64/128/Vacuum Palm aren't Hiden in any way. Rather more advanced applications of Gentle Fist that are kept out of the hands of the Branch House. Though I will agree that it would be hard even for a 15 year old Main House Genin to learn the 64-Palms. That move is REALLY potent.
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Shall I post my CS in here?
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Narutopedia said The Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms is a taijutsu that should only be passed down in the main house of the Hyūga


I'm going to classify it as basically a Hiden. It's use is not common knowledge and it has to be taught. With no examples of someone using gentle fist in Canon aside from the Hyuga, you cannot contest it.

Being Main House is fine, but the character would be 4-10 at the time, especially if his parents were part of the resistance. He's not going to be able to learn the 64, which is a Hiden, and he'd have to be a Neji-level prodigy to do so on his own.

The character's age, conveniently, should only be 11-13, which means that he still would be below Hinata based on the fact she received formal training and still was not on the level of Neji.

That said, Juken is still very powerful without the sixty-four palm. I see no reason he couldn't just do a sixteen palm variant. He could also use palm thrust and a watered-down version of the vacuum jutsu. I'm not saying he can't have the core components of the jutsu, I'm saying it isn't viable for him to have the full extent of their abilities. They were, quite obviously, used to show how Neji was a prodigy.
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Yes, Mirth.
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Hidden 11 yrs ago Post by Marrow
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is 32 palms okay?

i change assassination attempt to last stand of Sai's forces
and he was born a few years (5 five?) before Sai's Reign ended.

palm thrust? vacuum jutsu?

WILL IT BE OKAY THEN?
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So, Tuuj, before I review it, I'm going to allow the other members (Except for Beta, because I know he's biased as fuck) to do some reviews. Their opinions do not reflect mine, but I want to see what the majority says.

As Innue is your friend, s/he may also not comment.
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http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Palm_Bottom

http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Eight_Trigrams_Vacuum_Palm

32 isn't too bad. I suppose it would be fine.

The assassination change is acceptable.

If you change his birth, he would be born during the Second Great Shinobi War. If you change his age, he would be born three years into the Reign of Sai and would be 12-13.
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Prince said
(Except for Beta, because I know he's biased as fuck)


I not only won't deny this, but I wasn't even going to review it BECAUSE I already know what I'd say. No worries there.
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What would you even say about the character? They're... Actually balanced. It's strange. I'm not sure I like this. xD
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Name: Kami Rinha

Age|Gender: 15 Female

Alliance: Konoha

Rank: Chuunin

Clan: Rinha

Kekkei Genkai: The clan also possessed a Kekkei Genkai which enabled them to absorb chakra from people and create perfect clones via puppets. They were capable of absorbing the chakra both by direct physical contact or from a distance. However, throughout the years and mingling of bloods, a portion of the clan is instead able to use this technique to create clones with the same chakra as the person. This is due to the absorbed chakra.

However, Kami has trouble absorbing chakra from a distance. This takes a lot more time than absorbing by physical contact, and is a real hassle when people keep moving. The technique is pretty similar to the cloning justu. The only real difference is that the clone is a copy of someone else and as the same chakra. It's also very difficult to tell the difference between the clone and the actual person. It's basically as if Kami forced someone to create a clone of themself, but she's in control. Although, even a clone faking a stranger's personality perfectly is near impossible. She is decent at best with Kekkai Genkai and usually only uses it to prank her friends. She isn't all that interested in her inherited technique and doesn't spend much time developing it.

Traits: Like most Rinha, Kami specializes in medical ninjustu.

Appearance: The one on our right.

History: Kami is the daughter to a well-respected doctor. Kami’s mother was the kind of parent who would read her child biology textbooks instead of children’s books. From an early age, she was taught medical ninjustu and both natural and scientific medicine. The training was rigorous, and she loved every single second of it. Her mother’s strict training had a lot to do with the Resistance. Her mother was under the impression that the more medical ninja there were, the higher their chances were of winning. Kami would always follow her mother around, helping anyway she possibly could. Although the Resistance was a sad time, it made her realize that she wanted to help people. She couldn’t follow a simple ninja career; she needed to become a medical ninja.

However, Kami’s father was afraid that she wouldn’t be able to protect herself as a medical ninja. Sure, there were stories of medical ninja successfully using medical ninja to fight, but there was no way to be sure Kami would be that successful. Besides, Kami was too young to even master any offensive medical ninjustu techniques. So, he began to teach her taijustu to balance out her abilities. This enraged her mother and the two began to argue over what to teach Kami and who got to train her when. It was pretty much a custody battle. Eventually, after a lot of bickering only a married couple could manage, her parents began to compromise. Along with her mother’s knowledge of the human body and her father’s taijutu skills, Kami began to develop a fighting style similar to Dim Mak.

Like most revolutions, the Resistance soon ended. Unfortunately, Kami’s father was among the list of causalities. Her mother took his death as her opportunity to guilt Kami into continuing her education in medical ninjustu. After all, without medical ninjas, other little girls would lose their fathers. Besides, Kami’s mother had to find some way to spite her husband for dying! Winning control over her daughter’s education was the best way she could go about it. Although Kami happily studies ninjustu, she still practices taijustu. She plans on becoming a jounin and then following in her mother’s footsteps by becoming a doctor.

Personality: Sensitive. Kami is a very sensitive person despite the fact she doesn’t show it like a normal person. Instead of crying over a kicked puppy, she’s more likely to hunt down the person who kicked it. However, having been a genin during the Resistance, she has seen a lot and has a pretty stoic disposition. She knows how to stay calm and keep her heart steady. She could see someone get beaten up and not reveal any emotions. However, she would definitely express herself by defending that person. She walks a very thin line between black and white. Kami’s personal motto is: ‘Family before the village’. Her father had given her life for the village and Kami would gladly follow. But if a friend became a missing ninja, Kami would sacrifice herself to protect them. Despite her ability to remain calm, Kami is very vocal and isn’t afraid to state her opinion. Her Achilles’ heel would have to be her mother. Instead of being her normal opinionated self, Kami is more docile and quietly does whatever her mother wants.

Combat Style: Pressure Points. Kami uses her knowledge of the human body and taijustu to attack pressure points. However, this means she’s a close range fighter which isn’t too beneficial for a medical ninja. She typically only fights if there’s no other option because she knows her place as a medical ninja. She isn’t any use to other ninja if she’s injured or dead.

Nature Release: Fire, Earth, Lightning, Water, Wind. (However, she doesn't focus on these as much as her taijustu and medical ninjustu.)

Jutsu List:

Mystical Palm Technique

Poison Mist With the mist, she is able to use this to slowly slow people down. However, a person really has to breath this in to be effective. Breathing enough of the mist in can cause loss of consciousness .

Chakra Scalpel (However, Kami isn’t skilled enough to use this is battle. This is a medical ninjustu she’s only been allowed to use to dissect animals. If someone had a piece of glass in them, they probably shouldn’t ask Kami for help yet.)

Healing Technique

Current Wild Dance This justu is usually used for a quick getaway.

Weaponry: She carries about twenty senbon on her and a scalpel.

Miscellaneous: She always has a first aid kit handy.
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I'd like a bit of elaborate on the Kekkei Genaki. Is it like... some super OP shit from the Tailed Beast hunt, or is like a Kage Bushin?
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Edited. A further explanation is under the quote from the wikia.
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