Holy shit people, a brief 6 hour nap and you guys are all everywhere. I like that, its good! anywho! Down to business!
The character looks great and all, if you could remove the Bio, then its accepted. As for why I'm requesting you remove the bio, everyone is entering in this with their past concealed, and that includes even on their character sheet. Hold onto it, save it somewhere, whatever works for you, your characters past will gradually be unraveled as we go along. Approved and added if the changes are met.
Once you add an appearance to your character, as well as explain what kind of faunus she is, its pretty much approved. Also, about the semblance, if the clone were to be left with some of Coral's aura, then it would make more sense as to why its on a cooldown and why the clone has an aura of its own.
Remove the bio and replace it with what their personality, and its pretty much approved. As I said earlier, if it needs to be said again, everyone is entering in this with their past concealed. From what I understand of your weapon, its pretty close to ranged while not costing ammunition. As long as it can do some form of ranged, even if its limited, it can be accepted. But there's also the Semblance that I have a problem with. I'm just going to flat out reject that Semblance and request you create one that better suits your character. PM me if you want tips or help
Looks nice so far, but a lack of melee combat does seem pretty bad. However, correct use of your semblance could make up for it.Speaking of which...
Semblance: QuickTime. To her, time appears to have slowed down, but she can still move as normal, allowing her to respond to multiple events quickly. Max intensity is 30 seconds in QuickTime for every one second in real time.
30 seconds quick time for one second in real time... In other words, 30 times faster than normal speed. If you're going to stick with it, I'm unfortunately going to nerf it to a ratio of 10/1 instead of an insane 30/1. Understand that if you were to use QuickTime, you yourself would also be slowed like everyone else, only your eyes and mind would be able to be unaffected, allowing for near flawless reaction timing, which I think is something that balances your character's lack of melee. If you're not all right with somethin, PM me so we can figure this out.
Bio: Lee childhood what much like both children, for a short time that is. Lee grew up in a family of well renowned hunters. The Zhao family have bin around since the beginning of the Great War an participated in the war. But the Zhao family was no like many hunters, with their gun sythes or shot gun gauntlets. No the Zhao were simple Hunters, Lee Chang Zhao , created a style of martial arts only known to the Zhao family, and some other family spread throughout the kingdom. To accompany there new fighting style, he created special gauntlets and shoes, infused with red dust. At the age of 10, Lee was trained by his father, Zin Zhao, to become a hunter. Lee graduated at the top of his class in the weapon schools. Lee is now attending Beacon in order to continue and honor his family line of hunters.
Weapon: (Rajin)
Semblance:The user can change the magnitude and direction (vector) of an object to maneuver it in the desired way, regardless of preexisting vectors. This also applies to static or non-moving objects, technically speaking, the object still has momentum as it is moving through space. Since nearly everything in existence has vectors, manipulation of them can essentially grant the user an "Absolute Defense" that prevents the user from harm, among many other possibilities.(I WIN)
Strength/Weakness: Lee excells in close combat situations, so no matter what, if you try to run at Lee and fight him head to head, you will most likely lose.Lee his horrible at long range combat, so snipers or anything gun related used against Lee if not dodged correctly, can hinder Lee in battle.
Social: Lee is a calm and clever man, keeping a level head in even the worst of situations. Always optimistic, but will get serious when the time is right.
Wow, only one I've had major issues with so far... Please remove bio and replace with personality. Though I haven't mentioned it until now, sorry for that, I will be having our characters currently withholding their pasts. As for your weapon, be more specific. Insanely more specific. you literally have just one word and thats it. As for your semblance, rejected. For starters, it seems genuinely broken. It also doesn't seem like a good match for your character, but thats a minor point. The main one is its over powered. Please change it. if you need help with a Semblance, PM me for help.
Well, remove the bio, there is a reason for that. Only problem so far is with your weapon, which is kinda confusing. The bayonet of ice, is it something that stays there for a while, or does he fire an actual knife like a bullet? As for your semblance, I would greatly prefer if you used something else, time control like that is just too confusing at this point. Plus it seems a little overpowered, or you could even just use superhuman speed, like Ruby. But, if you are going to go with superhuman speed, I'll only allow it be movement speed, not have insanely fast and dexterous hands.
Good god people... Try some originality with your semblances. We got what, two people that have a form of time control, three that have a form of velocity control, is there anyone that actually chose a Semblance thats not a Godlike power?? Please, please,
PLEASE have something unique and not along the lines of "time control, gravity control, all element control, future premonition". I am honestly baffled by some of the unoriginality here. If you need help coming up with other ideas for Semblances, let me know.
As for why I'm requesting you all to remove the bio, everyone is entering in this with their past concealed, and that includes even on their character sheet. Hold onto it, save it somewhere, whatever works for you, your characters past will gradually be unraveled as we go along.
