Bah. Missed the bus. I'll give it a look while I wait for the next one.
kapuchu said
Alrght, well one thing jumps at me almost immediately: His appearance. You're writing his Appearance as if he's an Elf or somethin along those lines, but he can't be. The Mythics flat out refused to fight for the Humans and Earth, but offered to "awaken" their own magic (via the Shifter Process) to give them a fighting chance. Sindri is a human, not an elf. So he doesn't have elfine ears or stuff like that. Secondly is that you only have one Shifter form. That's one of the differences between this one, and Shifting Worlds. One "form" only. And his powers... At least his Glamour Power is basically mind control, and while such things might exist to an extent, I feels a bit too powerful with how they can't do anything to resist if they've fallen for it. I know that you said that it won't work on all Shifters, but I'd still like if you at least added that it isn't an instant win button against those who doesn't automatically resist it. You don't have to tone it down so much as make it clear that you can't just make everyone commit suicide without effort.Anywho, the next bus is coming soon so I'll stop here. I'll read the Background and Personality when I get home.Oh, and one more thing, can you make the "Background" "Personality" "Powers" etc bold? The [ b][/b] thing (without the space in the first one). It makes it much easier to read and see where something ends and begins.
and can be sometimes simply brushed aside by adept Fae.
kapuchu said
Alright... slightly fucked up, but interesting character to be sure. I assume his strange view of reality and his morals is a result of obsession with the Otherworld and the Fae, mixed with the sadness/semi-depression of his Parents' deaths? He's not so much out of line that the Academy will kick him out. At least, he stays in line because he saw the scary side of the otherwise kind Sylphide (she's in some ways similar to Sindri, in that she is kind and gentle, but she, like any other, is capable of getting angry... and people should know never to piss off one of the Fae). There are two, relatively minor, things that I took notice of. One is his sharpened teeth. I looked it up and I couldn't really find anything about such things occurring naturally, at least not to If, however, it's just somewhat larger canines, or filed teeth, then it's alright. The most I've been able to find about naturally sharp/jagged teeth is . Aside from that, I'd say he's pretty much approved. There is, however, one last thing which I assume is a typo.You mean "Shifter" not "Fae" right? Because not all Fae use powers similar to his, and others such as Demons (or Spirits) might even use stuff similar to that. The will of the target (and their perception of "true reality") is what should determine if they can break it. Not their magic and powers.
kapuchu said
So the teeth are filed down? Alright. As for the whole Sylphide thing... Yeah. She pretty much waved her hand and, as you so eloquently put it, swept it a side in "Ain't got time for this bullshit" kinda way :p Also, check your PM. Sent you a message. I'll have him added to the Approved list in a moment.
Frenetic Raptor said
Don't forget me just yet. Just know I am really, really, trying to hurry with Felicia's character sheet. This may get messy, so do stay clear, as I can't guarantee that the background won't be completely shredded to pieces by the time I am done.
Bweoti said
So, five accepted characters. Do we have any others in the works? How many do you intend on having before we start the IC?
kapuchu said
That reminds me... You guys notice the "Legends became reality, and now we fight" line in the top of the first post? I considered writing "A Whole New World"
Monochromatic Rainbow said