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medical team under the Twin Souls Program that provides medical care to Shifters injured in battle.
They have Mythics capable of bringing you back from the brink of death (almost). Doctors and nurses aren't necessary.
Out of necessity, it didn't take long for the Program to be perfected. In five years time, there were so many volunteers and so many compatible humans that Earth had its own army of magic wielding beings. More and more young adults were tested and infused with Mythic Essence.
Please change the wording of this a bit. It makes it sound like it took five years for the project to be completed (when it only took 6 months). Just a minor nitpick. Aside from these two, there is only one thing that "grinds my gears" so to speak, and that is how her flames can someone rid people of illusory attacks. One thing that I need to make clear here is that illusions are (most often) targeted directly at the victim's mind, meaning that the Caster is affecting the brain itself, and all of the senses (most often it's only vision). Flames and fire are physical, and as such can't reach the mind, and because of that can't dispell illusions. As for the fire cyclones... Sorry, but even for a Fae that's overdoing it. A ~1,2 kilometre tall cyclone? Moving over 400 kilometres an hour? While I like the idea of a rotating thing of fire and death, this is just too much. Make it ~200, or so, metres tall, and move at max 100 kilometres an hour. It'll be quick enough to catch Demons, but in return it would also be a bit slow when it comes to changing direction. A tornado doesn't just change from going forward to suddenly turning 90 degrees and continuing without pause. Also, may I suggest that you don't just stick with fire tornados? Fire is her element and she can do a lot more with it. Like a Napalm, for example. You don't have to write down a thousand examples of how she can use her fire, but just one or two more to make it seem like she has a bit of diversity. That... should be all :)
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[quote=kapuchu]
Napalm
I approve of where this is going.
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Alrighty. Will edit soon.
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Editing done. ^_^ Additional powers added. Comments please so I may refine if I need to. Thanks for the patience, guys. ^_^
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Editing done. ^_^ Additional powers added. Comments please so I may refine if I need to. Thanks for the patience, guys. ^_^
Fair warning: She's a Fae, so getting close to the enemy (trailing the tail across the ground thingie) is a bad idea. She's likely to get knocked out immediately. Not saying you can't do it, but I advice against it. Also, her blue flames still can't unravel illusions. Please remove it.
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Oh, right. I thought I edited that part. Getting on it now. I'd still like to keep the ring of fire power there, if you don't mind. ^_^ I'll keep in mind your warning though. :)
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You have full right to keep the power, I'm just warning you that, if it ever comes to combat, you will probably be knocked away :P
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Alright, Kyrisse, not bad. There is, however, a small thing. First of, no dragon is immune to fire. They have a very high defensive power, and are tough to hurt, but they can be hurt by anything so long as there's enough power behind it. Now, a Phoenix would be resistant to fire, but not immune: You are not exactly made of it. An Ifrit, however, (fire elemental: A Djinn made of fire) would be immune since their entire body is made of it. Also, no way in a million years would a Fae be able to hurt a Titan with physical attacks. The Fae are magical powerhouses, but their physical power is laughable. It'll be a bit of work, but please re-write your post to match this :) Oh, and on another note, Dragons (and all other Titans by extension) are not "magic users." They are physical powerhouses which walk around and kill everything with raw, physical power. A Dragon would bite, claw, swing with the tail, step on stuff, etc. Their breath attack wouldn't be their primary weapon.
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Also, if you're not sure whether something is okay or not, just ask Kapu if it'll fly to save yourself the trouble of rewrites.
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Okay. Will rewrite tomorrow. Have lots to do at the moment.
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Hi guys. I've been having problems with my skype for the past few days. So I'm posting here in the meantime. Anyway, i've a question... How do you guys do that post where two or three characters talk in a single post? Do one person control all the other characters in that single post? Sorry, I had to ask to be sure.
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Hi guys. I've been having problems with my skype for the past few days. So I'm posting here in the meantime. Anyway, i've a question... How do you guys do that post where two or three characters talk in a single post? Do one person control all the other characters in that single post? Sorry, I had to ask to be sure.
What we do is schedule a time when all the people whose characters are taking part are online (at times it's quite difficult...) and open a google doc and just do a collaboration in real time. So those posts with multiple characters from different people had multiple authors working on them.
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Hi guys. I've been having problems with my skype for the past few days. So I'm posting here in the meantime. Anyway, i've a question... How do you guys do that post where two or three characters talk in a single post? Do one person control all the other characters in that single post? Sorry, I had to ask to be sure.
We do a collab together by using Google Documents, we've found it works better than doing extended individual posts as it comes across more realistic and takes less time.
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Hi guys. I've been having problems with my skype for the past few days. So I'm posting here in the meantime. Anyway, i've a question... How do you guys do that post where two or three characters talk in a single post? Do one person control all the other characters in that single post? Sorry, I had to ask to be sure.
Or what Eldritch said.
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You are all welcome to continue with the festival.
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Do we still continue with this roleplay?
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We do, but things are stalling a bit because someone *cough*Eldritch*cough* hasn't been willing to do stuff.
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We do, but things are stalling a bit because someone *cough*Eldritch*cough* hasn't been willing to do stuff.


Don't shift the blame onto me, you're free to do whatever you want, I'm not holding you back on anything.

And I might be a bit more interested if this was actually a more interesting RP, there is only so many times I can write about the internal conflicts of my main character without having any means of pushing forward a resolution, and don't tell me this is a free moving situation, by its very nature it isn't.
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And here I was, making a joke...
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Evening! Is this mayhaps still open? *peers*
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