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Yeah, here's a question: who has submitted CSes, so far?
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Well, going solely by the previous page's list...

Servant Submissions:
Saber: Kaithas
Archer: Fish of Oblivion (Accepted)
Lancer: SevenStormStyle
Rider: Psyker
Caster: A Cute Angel (Accepted)
Assassin: Zombehs

Not-yet-sent:
Berserker, Crimson Raven?

Master Submissions:
A Cute Angel (Accepted)
Ashifili
vFear

Not-yet-sent:
Animus
Krayzikk

Literally everyone else.
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I'll get mine up 2moroz.

Just finished exam period.
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True Name: Muramasa Senji

Class: Berserker

Gender: Male

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Multiple swords

Birth and Death Dates: Unknown, sometime in the 14th to 16th centuries.

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Personality: He is odd in more ways than one. He can suffer violent mood swings, but for the most part, he is a selfish, grouchy, ill-tempered, ill-mannered, sarcastic, sadistic, wise-ass that hates pretty much everyone and everything.

Bio: History remembers him as "a most skillful smith but with a violent and ill-balanced mind verging on madness." That is but part of the truth. However, little else is known about him, but a great many legends and stories live on. The difficulty is in separating fact from fiction.

Weapon: Infinite number of katana

Parameters:

Strength: A
Swordsmithing for a living would give him a lot of strength.

Endurance: B
As a smith, he must be able to work and endure long periods of hard and often painful work.
Agility: A
A smith has to have absolute control and be precise with his movements and coordination.
Mana: C
Due to his instabilities, he can have trouble focusing.
Luck: A+
He must have a lot of luck, due to his cursed blades he has often forged.

Class Skills:

Various sword techniques

Bladecreator: He can summon swords (katanas) in nearly any size or shape (A)
Muramasa was a renowned swordsmith.

Fire magic(B): He can produce, control and has a high immunity to fire and heat.
A smith always works with fire, and must be able to withstand high tempatures.

Brutal slayer (passive)(C): He drains small amounts of mana from those he cut with his swords.
His swords were said to drain the will of those around them.

Personal Skills:

Cursed Demon Blades(A): His swords are supernaturally sharp and unbreakable, as such, they can only be blocked by armor or weapons of a similar rank, if a lower rank tries, then the sword with cut right through it. However each sword causes him to slowly descend into a mindless rage the more of them he uses this gradually increases his overall stats except for luck in exchange for madness. The effect is reversible. It also deceases his luck by a small amount.
It has also been told that once drawn, a Muramasa blade has to draw blood before it can be returned to its scabbard, even to the point of forcing its wielder to wound himself or commit suicide. Thus, it is thought of as a demonic cursed blade that creates bloodlust in those who wield it.

God Speed(B+): He has god-like speed and reflexes, allowing him the chance to evade any physical skill of that rank or lower, and a smaller chance of skills one rank above.
Any smith needs to be quick and precise to forge a weapon.

Master Swordsman(C): As it says, his power and defense is increased while wielding a blade.
He would have to have knowledge of swordsmanship to judged the quality of his weapons well.

Noble Phantasm(s):

Name: Amakakeru Ryū no Hirameki

Title: Flash of the Heavenly Soaring Dragon

Rank: A+ to EX

NP Type: Anti-fortress

Range: Within eyesight

Maximum Number of Targets: 1(But has an AoE)

Description: Weilding the most powerful sword he has ever forged, his namesake, the demon blade Muramasa, he preforms a powerful two-step draw, that takes place instantly with no warning, swung with beyond god-like speed and all the strength and skill of a master swordsman, wielding an incredibly sharp demon blade. The slice can cut anything, even the very fabric of reality and cut through dimensions. After the initial cut it then creates a blackhole-like vacuum that draws in and decimates everything, except the user. Unfortunately the user has to be in a certain state of mind to correctly perform this technique, if not, a flawed, less powerful form happens.

His swords were known for being able to cut anything, but true swordsmanship must come from the heart.
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@Black Alice

CS finally up. Tell me what you think.
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So.

Did you never ever actually watch or play or read Fate?
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So.

Did you never ever actually watch or play or read Fate?


=.=

...'Course I have.

Edit: I admit I took some liberties with the char because there really isn't much to go on. But that is fine with the series, sheash, they made 'King Arthur' a cross-dressing female despite the terrible logic behind that.
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True Name: Muramasa Senji


Okay, so I'm not a GM, but-

1- S-Rank isn't a thing. If you want a Rank above A, use A+. If you really want to make this guy the luckiest fucker alive, use A++ or EX.

2- Those aren't actual Class Skills or Personal Skills. I don't make a habit of recommending the wiki, but here's a compendium of existing skills.

3- Setting aside the issue of True Magic, EX- is not a thing. EX is for stuff that's unable to be properly quantified on the ranking scale, so applying modifiers to it is pointless.

EDIT: Also, like Ashifili pointed out, the whole point of Berserker is Mad Enhancement, so it's... pretty strange that you've excluded it.
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=.=

...'Course I have.


No you haven't. If you have, why does your Berserker not have Mad Enhancement? Why does he have a stat that is S rank? Why does he have sword summoning magics in his Class Skills section? Why does he have no proper Personal Skills? Why does his Noble Phantasm do all that stuff, when it doesn't relate at all to the legend the Muramasa swords are associated with?

It has also been told that once drawn, a Muramasa blade has to draw blood before it can be returned to its scabbard, even to the point of forcing its wielder to wound himself or commit suicide.[5] Thus, it is thought of as a demonic cursed blade that creates bloodlust in those who wield it.


More importantly, why is a SWORDSMITH good at SWORDFIGHTING? Being a blacksmith doesn't make you a skilled knight, so why do you have him as a master swordsman with godly reflexes, when he never even actually fought anyone? I mean, I'm just going off the Wikipedia article, so if you have any better sources, please link them.
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Okay, so I'm not a GM, but-

1- S-Rank isn't a thing. If you want a Rank above A, use A+. If you really want to make this guy the luckiest fucker alive, use A++ or EX.

2- Those aren't actual Class Skills or Personal Skills. I don't make a habit of recommending the wiki, but here's a compendium of existing skills.

3- Setting aside the issue of True Magic, EX- is not a thing. EX is for stuff that's unable to be properly quantified on the ranking scale, so applying modifiers to it is pointless.

EDIT: Also, like Ashifili pointed out, the whole point of Berserker is Mad Enhancement, so it's... pretty strange that you've excluded it.


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No you haven't. If you have, why does your Berserker not have Mad Enhancement? Why does he have a stat that is S rank? Why does he have sword summoning magics in his Class Skills section? Why does he have no proper Personal Skills? Why does his Noble Phantasm do all that stuff, when it doesn't relate at all to the legend the Muramasa swords are associated with?

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More importantly, why is a SWORDSMITH good at SWORDFIGHTING? Being a blacksmith doesn't make you a skilled knight, so why do you have him as a master swordsman with godly reflexes, when he never even actually fought anyone? I mean, I'm just going off the Wikipedia article, so if you have any better sources, please link them.


Whoh, my understanding was the mad enhancement was optional. For example, Lancelot had it because his master, Kariya wasn't trained as a full fledged mage, so he needed a power boost. Heracles had it because it made him more submissive.

On top of that, the idea of the multiple katanas was because he was a blacksmith that created swords. Master sword man, 'cause, why not? He could have trained with his swords.

The legends of the muramasa swords are really varied, but one things stuck out to me: His swords where renowned for their quality. So I took that a step futher, and made a skill that essentially cut anything.

The I honestly wasn't sure what to do with the class skills, as the ones there...eh, I just don't like them much.

In summary, I did take a lot of freedom with the whole design, but it still lines with the legends. I didn't, say, make him a girl or anything.

Edit: I had a few other ideas so if it is a problem I can rework it.
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Whoh, my understanding was the mad enhancement was optional. For example, Lancelot had it because his master, Kariya wasn't trained as a full fledged mage, so he needed a power boost. Heracles had it because it made him more submissive.


Uh, you might be misunderstanding that whole situation- it's possible to turn Mad Enhancement off, but it'll still exist as a skill that the Servant and Master have access to. It's a mandatory skill as a Berserker, it can just be toggled depending on whether the Master wants an attack dog or someone capable of rational thought outside of necessary situations.

In summary, I did take a lot of freedom with the whole design, but it still lines with the legends. I didn't, say, make him a girl or anything.


Please do not bully the Seiba. She's tiny and strong and hungry.
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don't suppose yall need another? ^-^
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Well, I changed the class skills a little, I figure, as a blacksmith, he would have fire magic of somesort.
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Yeah, Black Alice shot me down for having lower average stats than yours. Might wanna be careful.

After two rounds of edits, pending a third:

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@Kaithas

Beowulf was one I was considering for mine, glad I didn't use him. :}

If he is shot down, I will edit as necessary.


Edit: Speaking of that, I have mulled over the comments, and drawing a little inspiration from Kaithas, I made a huge edit to his skills.
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At the request of the Tentacle GM-chan, I'm doing a thing.

Alright, let's do our best!

*Ahem*

@Crimson Raven

Alright, hello hello~

Now then, is everyone properly seated~? Rise, bow, sit. "Good morning~"

Ah, ah, sorry, I'm not making much sense, am I?

You'll have to forgive me for that. It's not my fault, is it? After all, this is the point of collapse to stagnation, where logic stops being self-consistent, riiiiiiiiight~?

Eh? You don't know what I'm talking about? Keh, useless. Hilariously, incomprehensibly useless.

Well then, let's cut the trash and get to the trash.

It's worth noting that, because of edits made to this CS and the fact that I'm not tearing into the raw, uncensored meat of it, I'm only able to exercise 70% of my power. Regardless, I hope you enjoy, you shameless dog~

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I'm disregarding GO because info on Servants is incomplete and it will be until we get Grand Order Materials, just for the record.

There are a lot of information already out on that thou, no?
GO Servants(Ignoring their appearance in other titles for this) with A-Rank strength:
Saber Alter
Saber addict Gaius Julius Caesar
Le Chevalier d'Eon
Arash
Musashibou Benkei
Prototype Chulainn
Lancelot(Berserker)
Spartacus
Vlad III
Darius III
Unrelated Note: Kiyohime Waifu has only E rank? Poor Berserker ;w;

The good Grand Order wiki has no information on Sakata Kintoki or Euryale. Obviously, most Berserkers have a higher strength than A(+ or ++)

Source: Grand Order Wiki
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I have somewhere in the ballpark of fifteen games I've helped staff. I was, for a while, so snarky about it that the word "Snark" made it into my username, and for some people, it stuck. I once ran someone out of a topic with a detailed analysis of why what they were doing was incorrect.

That was a whole order of magnitude above that

Jesus

I'm just gonna go back to working on my CS and keeping my head down
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There are a lot of information already out on that thou, no?
GO Servants(Ignoring their appearance in other titles for this) with A-Rank strength:
Saber Alter
Saber addict Gaius Julius Caesar
Le Chevalier d'Eon
Arash
Musashibou Benkei
Prototype Chulainn
Lancelot(Berserker)
Spartacus
Vlad III
Darius III
Unrelated Note: Kiyohime Waifu has only E rank? Poor Berserker ;w;

The good Grand Order wiki has no information on Sakata Kintoki or Euryale. Obviously, most Berserkers have a higher strength than A(+ or ++)

Source: Grand Order Wiki


The Zerkers stats are likely shown with ME, as was the case with Herc and friends; further, Vlad has his Dracula NP constantly on in GO.

Alteria is just Seiba with NP spam, so yeah. I don't consider them distinct HSs in that regard.

Arash is from Fragments, so I'll be waiting for parameters from there. Either way, his legend is pretty solid on that front, since his arrow is now a meteor.

As for Proto Cu, Benkei, d'Eon, and Caesar, like I said, I don't consider GO complete. We still don't know particulars of FATE outside data mined stuff, and the game's largely considered to be in "beta" at the moment on account of how often things are getting changed. So yeah.

I'm withholding formal analysis of GO until Materials come out and we have full info on everything. You're free to value it in your decisions, I just won't.

Anyway, I need to sign off for the night. You all have fun~
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Mmmm... Too far. Whether or not the profile is bad aside, that crosses from constructive criticism to needless brutalization. While skillfully done, I'll admit, that's not going to do anything besides hurt the poster and maybe lose the RP a player, rather than help him improve his original post.

Trust me, I know from experience. I nearly swore off RPing forever in a similar situation.
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