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Name: Caalgen
Age: 36
Species: Human
Appearance: Caalgan isn’t overly tall, he stands at 5’10 and weighs around 175 pounds. He has black hair with streaks gray peppered throughout. His hair is kept long and unruly, he's often seen with a beard. He has dark brown eyes, and usually wears gray jedi robes. At a glance he looks as if he was homeless.
Abilities/Skills:
  • Lightsaber: An excellent wielder of the single lightsaber
  • Pilot: Can pilot fighters on an adept level.
  • Force: Weak in the control of the force. Comparable to that of an average padawan.

Equipment:
  • Green lightsaber
  • WESTAR-34 blaster pistol
  • Communicator

Personality/Motivation: Caalgen is a broken man, who constantly lives on the run. He views himself as prideless and weak. He often only stays on a planet for a week at most two. He seeks to join the Rebellion so that he can regain some of his honor and atone for past mistakes.

Biography:
Caalgen was first picked up by the jedi order when he was just eight. He trained under Jedi Knight Qutoro,where he learned the basics of force use and lightsaber combat. Qutoro was a difficult teacher often pushing Caalgen way past his limits. While accompanying Qutoro on a mission
he had suffered a serious injury. Qutoro was verbally reprimanded by the jedi council. After the reprimand Qutoro began to interact with Caalgan less and less. Qutoro’s actions stunted Caalgan’s ability to wield the force. Even at a young age he knew that it would hinder his chances of becoming a knight. He often sought out other Jedi for training, but couldn’t find any of the help he needed or was punished by his master for doing so. Qutoro grew to hate Caalgen, and often saw him as a nuisance. Due to the lack of training in the ways of the force he practiced his saber techniques to make up for his weakness. In time he became excellent in the use of the saber.

He often found help from Sora Bulq when ever he had time to teach him about the lightsaber. Later Qutoro was removed as his master and exiled for other more dubios activities and he then studied under Jedi Knight Tihiln. Tihiln attempted to retrain Caalgen but by this time, he had become “stuck” in his ways. Often Tihiln threatened to have him become a chronicler. They often fought with each other, causing Caalgen’s training to suffer more. He fought in the clone wars, and had fought in battles on many occasions. The council refused to see any of his feats worthy of the moniker jedi knight, insisting that his lack of ability in the force would stunt him as a jedi. This blow to his ego was devastating. He was often envious of other padawans, because of their bond with their masters and the rate at which they made knight. The Jedi council was on the fence with Caalgen in the end getting ready to exile him from the order. He began to beg and pleaded to just be allowed to take the trail just once. At this time he was twenty eight one of the oldest padawans. The masters debated for sometime, and eventually agreed to allow him to go to the trials.

The Trials took him three times as long as most other padawans, but he had successfully completed them. He was knighted and soon sent on his first mission, to help eliminate any pockets of separatist resistance. . Order 66 was given before he could start his mission, his troopers fired upon him wounding him severely. He managed to force leap and escape into a river below. He stowed onto a civilian frigate and escaped. He fled the system and now lives traveling in the outer rim. Constantly being hounded by imperials he lives his life a broken man. Many times he left those in need, to save his own life. He became a Jedi only in name. He often does favors for people in exchange for food or passage to another planet.

Secrets: Caalgen sees himself as a coward due fleeing the jedi order, and leaving friends and family to die. He’s watched as countless civilians were killed trying to flush him out. Every time he closes his eyes, he can see each of their faces. Every day that drags on it wears his soul down a little.

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Name: Caalgen
Age: 36
Species: Human
Appearance: Caalgan isn’t overly tall, he stands at 5’10 and weighs around 175 pounds. He has black hair with streaks gray peppered throughout. His hair is kept long and unruly, he's often seen with a beard. He has dark brown eyes, and usually wears gray jedi robes. At a glance he looks like he’s homeless and has been living on the streets.
Abilities/Skills:

  • Lightsaber: An excellent wielder of the single lightsaber
  • Pilot: Can pilot fighters on an adept level.
  • Force: Weak in the control of the force. Comparable to that of an average padawan.

Equipment:

  • Green lightsaber
  • WESTAR-34 blaster pistol
  • Communicator

Personality/Motivation: Caalgen is a broken man, who constantly lives on the run. He views himself as prideless and weak. He often only stays on a planet for a week at most two. He seeks to join the Rebellion so that he can regain some of his honor and atone for past mistakes.

Biography:
Caalgen was first picked up by the jedi order when he was just eight. He trained under Jedi Knight Qutoro,where he learned the basics of force use and lightsaber combat. Qutoro was a difficult teacher often pushing Caalgen way past his limits. While accompanying Qutoro on a mission
he had suffered a serious injury. Qutoro was verbally reprimanded by the jedi council. After the reprimand Qutoro began to interact with Caalgan less and less. Qutoro’s actions stunted Caalgan’s ability to wield the force. Even at a young age he knew that it would hinder his chances of becoming a knight. He often sought out other Jedi for training, but couldn’t find any of the help he needed or was punished by his master for doing so. Qutoro grew to hate Caalgen, and often saw him as a nuisance. Due to the lack of training in the ways of the force he practiced his saber techniques to make up for his weakness.

He often found help from Sora Bulq when ever he had time to teach him about the lightsaber. Later Qutoro was removed as his master and exiled for other more dubios activities and he then studied under Jedi Knight Tihiln. Tihiln attempted to retrain Caalgen but by this time, he had become “stuck” in his ways. Often Tihiln threatened to have him become a chronicler. They often fought with each other, causing Caalgen’s training to suffer more. He fought in the clone wars, and had fought in battles on many occasions. The council refused to see any of his feats worthy of the moniker jedi knight, insisting that his lack of ability in the force would stunt him as a jedi. This blow to his ego was devastating. He was often envious of other padawans, because of their bond with their masters and the rate at which they made knight. The Jedi council was on the fence with Caalgen in the end getting ready to exile him from the order. He began to beg and pleaded to just be allowed to take the trail just once. At this time he was twenty eight one of the oldest padawans. The masters debated for sometime, and eventually agreed to allow him to go to the trials.

The Trials took him three times as long as most other padawans, but he had successfully completed them. He was knighted and soon sent on his first mission, to help eliminate any pockets of separatist resistance. . Order 66 was given before he could start his mission, his troopers fired upon him wounding him severely. He managed to force leap and escape into a river below. He stowed onto a civilian frigate and escaped. He fled the system and now lives traveling in the outer rim. Constantly being hounded by imperials he lives his life a broken man. Many times he left those in need, to save his own life. He became a Jedi only in name. He often does favors for people in exchange for food or passage to another planet.

Secrets: Caalgen sees himself as a coward due fleeing the jedi order, and leaving friends and family to die. He’s watched as countless civilians were killed trying to flush him out. Every time he closes his eyes, he can see each of their faces. Every day that drags on it wears his soul down a little.

Relations:
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1) Jedi were most often younger than eight when picked up by the Jedi Order.
2) Incorrect, Younglings were only trained in one on one scenarios in exceptional circumstances such as a Jedi Knight finding a Force Sensitive child on a planet where they were unable to leave.
3) Younglings do not leave the temple to go on missions, other than the Gathering, until they are older and have passed the Initiate Trials to become a fully fledged Padawan learner.
4) If this was one on one training, how could he have been trained with little interaction? Contradiction.
5) How did this halt his progress, or damage it?
6) Why was he punished for looking for help? Why did he need to seek out Jedi? The temple is full of Jedi all of whom are willing to help Padawans and Younglings.
7) Qutoro would not hate, he was a Jedi Knight who had not fallen to the Dark Side.
8) Only one Jedi Knight could help him?
9) So, is he a padawan by the time Quotoro is removed?
10) Jedi making threats to other Jed?
11) Jedi fighting within another, master against apprentice.

I am stopping here. I am sorry to be so blunt, but it's kinda who I am but this sheet is not getting accepted and any potential Jedi I am giving one shot, and that was said shot. Which is why in the PM I asked if you were ready for review. You seem to not fully understand what it is to be a Jedi or their inner workings either that or you want to make a unique character which is kind of pointless when in this RP he truly is unique.

You are more than welcome to apply for another role.
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Thats fine.
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Thats fine.


I am sorry if I seem harsh, it's just due to the nature of a Jedi in this kind of RP I'm being very picky. I'd be hesitant to take the role up myself.
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Forgive me for my quite short first post. I don't like to "fluff" my posts much. If you want me to flesh it out more I will be more than happy to though.
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So would Vale have informed Keer of the ISB agents arrival? I need to know for my post
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So would Vale have informed Keer of the ISB agents arrival? I need to know for my post


She wouldn't tell him who was coming but, she would tell him that more important business came up then a silly parade. Given that it is an ISB agent and they're usually hush hush she would not really tell anyone that didn't need to know. Conversely, since Tucker is a captain she would be leaving him in charge of the perimeter defenses with the other lieutenants to lord over. Remember that only extrenious circumstances will outside guards be allowed into the palace so Vale will expect Tucker to do a bang up job making sure that dosen't happen.
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She wouldn't tell him who was coming but, she would tell him that more important business came up then a silly parade. Given that it is an ISB agent and they're usually hush hush she would not really tell anyone that didn't need to know. Conversely, since Tucker is a captain she would be leaving him in charge of the perimeter defenses with the other lieutenants to lord over. Remember that only extrenious circumstances will outside guards be allowed into the palace so Vale will expect Tucker to do a bang up job making sure that dosen't happen.


So Tucker will have known to the extent of letting the shuttle land and not shooting Loretta, basically @agentmanatee :P
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And Lieutenant Thule Mac'Don is in. I will admit it might not be the grandest of openings, but it works.
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And Lieutenant Thule Mac'Don is in. I will admit it might not be the grandest of openings, but it works.


and it was glorious!
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YhoBhois, where you at?
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Patiently waiting for more posts.
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Patiently waiting for more posts.


Which reminds me, prepare your outpost for an influx of mysterious supplies.
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Which reminds me, prepare your outpost for an influx of mysterious supplies.


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Roger-roger


If you want to do that first, Loretta will be arriving later.
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@Frizan I posted to re-iterate that the crates will be headed your way. Do with them what you will, but they will be guarded by two of the most secretiv Stormies you will ever meet. They'll likely stay at the shuttle as trusted men take the crates inside.
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And Thule continues his duties like the good little solder he is. He even sent an update to Captain Tucker. Boonta is such a peaceful, Imperial system after all; Why should he have to worry about anything going wrong? :P
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And Thule continues his duties like the good little solder he is. He even sent an update to Captain Tucker. Boonta is such a peaceful, Imperial system after all; Why should he have to worry about anything going wrong? :P


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@Sep

Honestly, I'm just waiting for the rebels to make a move. I can't help but feel that they are currently plotting something out in a PM currently and I'm just waiting for the storm to hit.
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I'm the Rebels :P

Which is why I closed Empire Apps because it's currently the "Sep Rebellion" :P
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